2027届高考英语 读后续写通关 人与动物类（学生版+教师版）

读后续写通关·人与动物类 二轮复习讲义（教师版·含范文与讲评） 使用说明 本讲义适用高三年级二轮复习，按两课时安排：第一课时讲结构与语言，第二课时写变式并当堂讲评。五色标注：红字为关键句型、易错点与需要改掉的写法，紫字为长难句，绿字为衔接手段与改好的写法，蓝字为小标题与表格标签，灰字为副标题与参考答案等辅助信息。续写要求 150 词左右，一般以 130 至 180 词为宜，不必硬凑。范文后标注的词数含题目给出的两段段首句，段首句在考场上要照抄，同样计词；本讲两篇范文一律按 170 词写，其中自己写的正文约 145 词。 母题取自原卷 Passage 1（2024·九省联考），Passage 2（2024·浙江省北斗星盟高三阶段性考试）作同题变式，每篇后附续写范文、用词与长难句解析。 本讲另出学生版一份：方法、两篇原文与写作区、自查表都在学生版里；范文、好在哪、用词、长难句与衔接的讲评只放在本版。 一、考情速览与 2027 命题研判 人与动物类的续写，考的是人有没有读懂眼前那只动物。原文给的总是这样一个人：他以为眼前这只动物在捣乱、在添麻烦、在跟他作对，其实动物在做另一件事；两段之内，人要读懂这件事，动物也要回应这个读懂：第一段写人看懂了什么，第二段写人为此做了什么。 近三年的这类考题集中在四类：饲育与救助（水箱、收容所、救助站）、野生相遇（湿地、山林、海边）、家养相处（宠物、农场、导盲犬）、生态守护（候鸟、江豚、鱼群）。原卷 Passage 1 落在第一类，是水箱里的海豚；Passage 2 落在第二类的边上，写的是自家院子里的鸽子。 2027 年的四个变化 ① 从“萌”转向“责任”。过去的题常落在“它好可爱，我很开心”；现在要问的是“我做了什么，它才留下来”。只写喜欢，这一段就空。 ② 动物的一个动作成为线索。原文里总有重复出现的动作，比如顶鼻子、叼东西、盯着一个方向。这样的动作至少接住一次；另起一个新的，前面就白读了。 ③ 段首句的主语从“我”换成“它”。段首句可能只是一句动物的反应。这时候第一句先写它的动作，再写人的判断；先人后它，读起来就是一个人对着空气说话。 ④ 结尾从“我懂了”转向“我改了什么”。阅卷看得见的是做法：换了一种饲料、撤掉一段渔网、把一湾水让出来。一句“人类要保护动物”抵不上一个动作。 四类里最容易写偏的是第二类。野生相遇的题，学生一心想着“救”，于是写成一把抱住；其实阅卷看的是分寸：怎么靠近、靠近到什么距离、什么时候退开。分寸写对了，文章就有东西可看。 二、通关一·结构：两段各走一步 续写最容易写成的样子是：第一段“我很心疼，很想帮它”，第二段“它终于好了，我很开心”。两段都在抒情，动物一步没动。合适的分工是：第一段把人看懂的那个动作用白话说清，第二段写人因此改了哪一件事；要改的那件事，原文里通常已经埋好了。 段落 任务 必写内容 可以省 第一段 接住段首句，写“看懂了” 一个动物动作＋一样物件＋一句点破 大段回忆、心里独白 第二段 人改做法，动物回应 一次改变＋一个可见结果＋一句收束 新增人物、第二只动物 下面三节按这两段拆开讲：第一句怎么接段首句，结尾怎么收，两组错例怎么改。 例句基本取自本讲两篇材料的原文与范文，个别句子按同一路子另写，作示范用；原文见“通关三·母题与变式”，读到时可对着看。 1. 段首句怎么接 复述式：段首句已经把结果说完，就从结果之后的那一秒接。段首句是 “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. 第一句不要再笑一次，直接写她做了什么：She did not explain at once. She knelt down and laid the things out in a line. 转场式：段首句给的是判断，就从判断之后的第一眼接。段首句是 Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 第一句就换成她的视线：She looked at the tank, then at Hilda's wet sleeves. 补白式：段首句里有一个引号包着的词，第一段就要把这个词说成看得见的东西。“secret”是什么，不能等到第二段才交代。 2. 结尾三种收法 时间式：From that week on, the last thing each day was to open the tray behind the filter box. 用“从那时起”把改变固定下来，不必写“我明白了”。 物件式：The candy wrapper was taped to the wall above the rota. 道歉的话说一遍就旧了，贴在墙上的东西天天有人看见。 他人式：The next volunteer was told the story on her first morning. 变化由别人看见，这比自己夸自己可信。 3. 错例怎么改：两组对照 下面两句是二轮练习里常见的写法，毛病不在语法，在读者看不见。 ❌ The dove looked very sad and I felt sorry for it. It seemed to say thank you to me. ✅ I put the shoebox on the sill and stood back two steps. The dove turned its head, once, and did not move. 改法：前一句全是判断，读者不知道鸟在做什么。先给一个位置（on the sill），再给一个距离（two steps），最后只写一个动作。 ❌ The bird was very grateful. Animals are our friends, so we should protect them. ✅ For three days they carried twigs back to the tree, and each time the wind took them. On the fourth morning I moved the box within reach of the leaves. 改法：原句把“感恩”和“保护口号”一起塞进结尾，两样都是评价。改成几天里重复的动作，再补一个自己做的决定；“感激”让读者自己看出来。 三、通关二·语言：选词—迁移—衔接 这一类的语言问题，多半出在把动物写成了人。学生爱写 it was sad、it seemed to thank me，读者眼前却没有任何一只动物。下面三步：先把形容词换成动作，然后把一句“动物是我们的朋友”改成一件具体的事，最后用动作和物件把两段串起来。 1. 选词：从“可爱”到动作 同一句话，“它很害怕”是评价，“它贴着水箱的角落不动”是动作。续写要的是后一种。 意思 多数学生写 得体 精当 害怕 it was scared it backed away it pressed itself into the corner of the tank 受伤 it was hurt its wing was hurt one wing hung lower than the other 亲近 it liked me it came to me it pushed its nose into my palm 高兴 it was happy it looked happy it turned in a circle, twice, and lay down 饿 it was hungry it wanted food it worked the lid with its nose 四条原则：动物只做动作，不发表感想；一个动作配一样东西；同一个动作可以在第二段再出现一次；写完一句问自己“摄影机拍得到吗”，拍不到就重写。 2. 迁移：一句“动物是我们的朋友”怎么改成一件具体的事 拿一句套话改一遍。原句： Animals are our friends and we should protect them. 问题有三：friends 是评价，读者看不见朋友是什么样子；we 把责任推给所有人，等于谁都没做；protect 没有对象，也没有动作。改成： Now I carry a pair of scissors and two cloth bags in my schoolbag, and on Sundays I walk that bank. 改完以后全篇没有 protect，读者却知道这个人此后每个星期天在做什么。办法是把“应该”换成“我在哪一天做了什么”。 3. 衔接：靠动作、物件、时间 两段之间不靠 However、Therefore 往前推。常用的有四样，一篇用上两三样就够：动物的同一个动作再出现一次，原文的物件再出现一次，时间往前走一步，末尾再用一句短的把话刹住。 手段 作用 例子 动作复现 证明还是那只动物 put her nose behind the box → the last thing each day: open the tray 物件复现 让读者认出还是那件事 candy wrapper → taped to the wall, above the rota 时间推进 把两段排成一条线 That afternoon … From that week on … 短句收束 先收一句，再展开 She did not explain at once. 物件复现是这一类最省力的衔接。原文里的糖果纸、梳子、那扇玻璃，第二段再拿出来用一次，读者立刻知道“还是那件事”，不必解释。 四、通关三·母题与变式：水箱里的秘密，院子里的鸟 前面三节讲的是办法，这一节把办法放回真题里走一遍。原卷这篇先精讲，后面那篇作同题变式，两篇的落点不同，用的却是同一套分工。 （原卷 Passage 1） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 （2024·九省联考） 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 阅读材料 Last summer, Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park. Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items. However, one day after cleaning, one of the dolphins, Maya, presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank. When Katherine, the trainer, saw this, she blamed Hilda for her carelessness. Upset but not discouraged by this event, Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya. The next morning, Hilda arrived at the park early. She put on her scuba gear (水下呼吸器) and jumped into the tank for her usual, underwater sweep. Finding nothing in the tank, she climbed out of the water just in time to see Katherine jumping in on the other side. After what happened yesterday, Hilda knew what she was doing. She watched as Katherine performed her underwater search, but Hilda wasn't surprised when she surfaced empty-handed. During the tank sweeps, Maya had been swimming playfully, but now the dolphin stopped suddenly and swam to the back part of the tank where the filter (过滤) box was located. She stuck her nose down behind the box and then swam away. What was Maya doing back there? Hilda wondered. She jumped back into the water and swam over to take a look behind the box, and her question was answered. Hilda then swam across the tank following Maya's path and emerged from the water to find Katherine removing her scuba gear. As Katherine turned around, her mouth dropped open. There was Maya at the edge of the tank with a comb (梳子) in her mouth waiting for her treat. “Maya! Where did you get that?” demanded Katherine, taking the comb and throwing her a fish. “I know where she got it,” declared Hilda, climbing out of the tank with a handful of items still wet from their watery resting place. “What's all this?” Katherine asked, obviously confused. 两段段首句： “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 原文信息梳理 项目 内容 卡在哪一步 Hilda 被当成粗心的人；她要证明水箱里另有一个“藏东西的” 可用的物件 candy wrapper、comb、filter box、a handful of items、fish（treat） 段首句①管什么 只给“她要解释”，不给内容；第一段必须把 secret 说成一件看得见的事 段首句②管什么 视角转到 Katherine；第二段只能写她的反应与做法，不能再写 Hilda 的委屈 范文（170 词，含段首句） “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. She did not explain at once. She knelt down and laid the things out in a line: a candy wrapper, a bottle cap, a hair band and the comb. “All of them were behind the filter box,” she said. “She has been keeping them there and bringing one up when she wants a fish.” Katherine turned the comb over twice. “She has been training us,” she said, and laughed — a short, surprised laugh that Hilda had never heard before. Now Katherine realized what had been going on. She looked at the tank, then at Hilda's wet sleeves. “I blamed you for something you did not do. I'm sorry.” That afternoon they went down together and set a shallow tray behind the filter box for her things. Maya hung at the glass, watching them work. From that week on, the last thing each day was to open the tray, and the candy wrapper was taped to the wall above the rota. 好在哪 第一段没有一句“她很委屈”。跪下来、把湿东西一件件排开、报出四样名字。委屈由这些动作替她说。“She has been training us”这一句是从 Katherine 嘴里出来的，误会的方向由被误会的人自己翻过来，比 Hilda 喊冤有力。 第二段道歉只用一句直接引语，说完就去办一件事：给 Maya 在过滤箱后放一块浅盘，让它有地方放东西。道歉没有停在嘴上，落在两件后来每周都做的事上：开一次盘子，看一眼箱后。 用词 lay … out：一件件摆开。比 put 多一层“排给谁看”的意思，正合她要把证据摆给 Katherine 看的场面。 turn … over twice：翻看两下。这个小动作说明 Katherine 也没见过这东西背后的门道，她不是不肯认错，是还没想通。 rota：值班表（英式）。海洋公园、医院、餐厅都用这个词，比 timetable 更贴岗位。这个词在课标外，读范文认得即可；自己写的时候用 duty list 一样成立。 长难句 ① She has been keeping them there and bringing one up when she wants a fish. 现在完成进行时，说明“藏东西”是从过去一直持续到现在的事，正好对上 Katherine 前一天那句责怪：她怪 Hilda 粗心，实际上这件事已经进行很久了。when she wants a fish 用一般现在时，写的是这只海豚一贯的做法，不是某一次。 衔接 两段靠两样东西扣住。一是物件：第一段的糖果纸、梳子，第二段一个贴上墙、一个进了盘子；二是动作：Maya 把鼻子顶在过滤箱后面，第二段变成“每天最后一件事是开一次盘子”。时间上用 That afternoon 与 From that week on 一段一段往前推，没有用一个 then。 同题变式　Passage 2：给它一个风到不了的地方 这一篇与海豚那篇骨架相同：第一段写人动手做一件事，第二段写鸟接受这件事、人因此变了。区别在于原文的落点不是误会，而是“它们不肯放弃”这件事本身；续写要接住的是这股劲，不是可怜它们。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 （2024·浙江省北斗星盟高三阶段性考试） 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 阅读材料 I sat in the breakfast corner with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. I was still recovering from a surgery. I hoped for strength and happiness. But the future seemed so hopeless. Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to the sliding door. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated on a rubber tree. It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. I'd never seen one in our neighborhood before. When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time it was with a mate carrying twigs (嫩枝). “Look, Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They're going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on the top of the rubber tree. Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he'd run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door, talking to the birds while they worked. As much as I was grieving (感到悲伤), I couldn't help but look forward to the doves' visits too. We watched their progress as if it were a real-life soap opera unfolding before us. Gradually, my pain disappeared, replaced by joy. Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree's broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew through, throwing the doves' nest to the ground. I heard the twigs break apart. Nothing good ever lasts. I wouldn't blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest. They started again from scratch, though the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they renewed their efforts, as if nothing had happened. 两段段首句： I knew I had to do something for the poor creatures. “The birds were back!” Matthew announced. 原文信息梳理 项目 内容 卡在哪一步 一夜强风把巢掀到地上，嫩枝断成几截；人要给它一个风到不了的位置 可用的物件 rubber tree、twigs、the sliding door、Matthew 的位置、作者的病 段首句①管什么 “do something”必须先变成一样具体的东西，不能停在“我想帮它们” 段首句②管什么 儿子报信；第二段要写鸟接受了新地方，以及人身上的变化 范文（170 词，含段首句） I knew I had to do something for the poor creatures. In the garage I found a piece of shelving and an old plastic crate, and Matthew helped me carry them out. We fixed the shelf to the wall beside the rubber tree, low enough to sit under the leaves, where the wind could not reach it. I lined the crate with dry grass from the yard and tied it down with two lengths of garden wire. Then we went back inside and waited, and Matthew would not leave the door. “The birds were back!” Matthew announced. They came in the afternoon, circled the courtyard twice, and landed on the crate. The female stepped in, turned once, and sat down. For three days they carried twigs to the new place, and on the fourth morning I saw a pale blue egg. Matthew counted their trips out loud from the window until I told him to stop. My stomach still ached in the evenings, but I had stopped counting the days. 好在哪 第一段全是动作：找板子、搬箱子、钉上墙、铺干草、绑铁丝，一句“我想帮它们”也没有。位置写得准：low enough to sit under the leaves, where the wind could not reach it。这一句是整段的支点，说明她看懂了风从哪里来。 第二段不写“它们很感激”，写鸟的动作：绕两圈、落下来、转一次身、坐下。第四天早晨出现一枚蛋，是结局的证据。收尾落回自己身上：“我不再数日子了。”这一句与原文开头 hoped for strength 接得上，也没有替读者下“我振作起来了”的结论。 用词 shelving：搁板（材料名）。a piece of wood 是笼统说法，shelving 指那种成型的板子，读者一看就知道是从车库里拆下来的旧件。 line … with：给……铺衬。line the crate with dry grass，一个动词交代了垫什么、垫在哪。 tie down：绑牢。风大，只放上去不够，必须绑，这个词把“防风”这层意思带出来。 长难句 ① We fixed the shelf to the wall beside the rubber tree, low enough to sit under the leaves, where the wind could not reach it. 主句只有 We fixed the shelf to the wall，后面两个成分一层层限定位置：low enough to sit under the leaves 说高度，where the wind could not reach it 说为什么选这里。修饰语挂在后面一层层加，句子跟着动作慢下来。 衔接 两段靠筑巢材料扣住：第一段“我”从院子里收来干草铺箱子，第二段鸟把自己衔的嫩枝搬进新家，两样东西都在做同一件事。儿子这条线也在走：第一段他守着门不肯走，第二段他大声数鸟来回的次数，孩子的兴奋一路没断。 五、通关检测 写完对照下表逐项打勾。这一类最容易被扣的是第一段：动物写了一堆，人看懂了什么却没说清，自查时重点看“看懂”这一栏。 检查项 达标标准 段首句 第一句接住段首句的动作或情绪，没有另起一件事 看懂 第一段说清了这只动物在做什么，不是只写它可怜 动作 至少三处动物的动作，每一处都拍得到 分寸 野生题材写清了距离与退让，没有一把抱住 改变 第二段有一个具体做法：换饲料、撤网、让水、钉板子 回应 动物在第二段有回应，人也被别人看见 衔接 原文的物件或动作至少复现一次 词数 含两段段首句合计 170 词左右，不少于 150 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 读后续写通关·人与动物类 二轮复习讲义（学生版） 使用说明 本讲义适用高三年级二轮复习，按两课时安排：第一课时讲结构与语言，第二课时写变式并当堂讲评。五色标注：红字为关键句型、易错点与需要改掉的写法，绿字为衔接手段与改好的写法，蓝字为小标题与表格标签，灰字为辅助信息；紫字标注的长难句与范文都在教师版。续写官方要求 150 词左右；题面上的两段段首句要照抄，同样计词，照抄之后自己要写约一百五十词，两段合计 170 词上下。 母题取自原卷 Passage 1（2024·九省联考），Passage 2（2024·浙江省北斗星盟高三阶段性考试）作同题变式，两篇的原文全文与两段段首句都保留，题后留写作区；范文、批注与参考答案见教师版。 动笔前记住三条 一、原文设定不许改。原文写 no one goes into the water，续写里就不能跳下去把它抱起来，人只能站在岸上想办法。 二、只用课标词。范文里的 rota 这类课标外的词，认得就行；自己写的时候用 duty list 一样成立。 三、结尾不喊口号。用一个做法、一件东西或者一条规矩收住，不写“我终于明白了保护动物的重要”。 一、考情速览与 2027 命题研判 人与动物类的续写，考的是人有没有读懂眼前那只动物。原文给的总是这样一个人：他以为眼前这只动物在捣乱、在添麻烦、在跟他作对，其实动物在做另一件事；两段之内，人要读懂这件事，动物也要回应这个读懂：第一段写人看懂了什么，第二段写人为此做了什么。 近三年的这类考题集中在四类：饲育与救助（水箱、收容所、救助站）、野生相遇（湿地、山林、海边）、家养相处（宠物、农场、导盲犬）、生态守护（候鸟、江豚、鱼群）。原卷 Passage 1 落在第一类，是水箱里的海豚；Passage 2 落在第二类的边上，写的是自家院子里的鸽子。 2027 年的四个变化 ① 从“萌”转向“责任”。过去的题常落在“它好可爱，我很开心”；现在要问的是“我做了什么，它才留下来”。只写喜欢，这一段就空。 ② 动物的一个动作成为线索。原文里总有重复出现的动作，比如顶鼻子、叼东西、盯着一个方向。这样的动作至少接住一次；另起一个新的，前面就白读了。 ③ 段首句的主语从“我”换成“它”。段首句可能只是一句动物的反应。这时候第一句先写它的动作，再写人的判断；先人后它，读起来就是一个人对着空气说话。 ④ 结尾从“我懂了”转向“我改了什么”。阅卷看得见的是做法：换了一种饲料、撤掉一段渔网、把一湾水让出来。一句“人类要保护动物”抵不上一个动作。 四类里最容易写偏的是第二类。野生相遇的题，学生一心想着“救”，于是写成一把抱住；其实阅卷看的是分寸：怎么靠近、靠近到什么距离、什么时候退开。分寸写对了，文章就有东西可看。 二、通关一·结构：两段各走一步 续写最容易写成的样子是：第一段“我很心疼，很想帮它”，第二段“它终于好了，我很开心”。两段都在抒情，动物一步没动。合适的分工是：第一段把人看懂的那个动作用白话说清，第二段写人因此改了哪一件事；要改的那件事，原文里通常已经埋好了。 段落 任务 必写内容 可以省 第一段 接住段首句，写“看懂了” 一个动物动作＋一样物件＋一句点破 大段回忆、心里独白 第二段 人改做法，动物回应 一次改变＋一个可见结果＋一句收束 新增人物、第二只动物 下面两节按这两段拆开讲：第一句怎么接段首句，结尾怎么收。 例句基本取自本讲两篇材料的原文与范文，个别句子按同一路子另写，作示范用；原文见“通关三·母题与变式”，读到时可对着看。 1. 段首句怎么接 复述式：段首句已经把结果说完，就从结果之后的那一秒接。段首句是 “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. 第一句不要再笑一次，直接写她做了什么：She did not explain at once. She knelt down and laid the things out in a line. 转场式：段首句给的是判断，就从判断之后的第一眼接。段首句是 Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 第一句就换成她的视线：She looked at the tank, then at Hilda's wet sleeves. 补白式：段首句里有一个引号包着的词，第一段就要把这个词说成看得见的东西。“secret”是什么，不能等到第二段才交代。 2. 结尾三种收法 时间式：From that week on, the last thing each day was to open the tray behind the filter box. 用“从那时起”把改变固定下来，不必写“我明白了”。 物件式：The candy wrapper was taped to the wall above the rota. 道歉的话说一遍就旧了，贴在墙上的东西天天有人看见。 他人式：The next volunteer was told the story on her first morning. 变化由别人看见，这比自己夸自己可信。 三、通关二·语言：选词—迁移—衔接 这一类的语言问题，多半出在把动物写成了人。学生爱写 it was sad、it seemed to thank me，读者眼前却没有任何一只动物。下面三步：先把形容词换成动作，然后把一句“动物是我们的朋友”改成一件具体的事，最后用动作和物件把两段串起来。 1. 选词：从“可爱”到动作 同一句话，“它很害怕”是评价，“它贴着水箱的角落不动”是动作。续写要的是后一种。 意思 多数学生写 得体 精当 害怕 it was scared it backed away it pressed itself into the corner of the tank 受伤 it was hurt its wing was hurt one wing hung lower than the other 亲近 it liked me it came to me it pushed its nose into my palm 高兴 it was happy it looked happy it turned in a circle, twice, and lay down 饿 it was hungry it wanted food it worked the lid with its nose 四条原则：动物只做动作，不发表感想；一个动作配一样东西；同一个动作可以在第二段再出现一次；写完一句问自己“摄影机拍得到吗”，拍不到就重写。 2. 迁移：一句“动物是我们的朋友”怎么改成一件具体的事 拿一句套话改一遍。原句： Animals are our friends and we should protect them. 问题有三：friends 是评价，读者看不见朋友是什么样子；we 把责任推给所有人，等于谁都没做；protect 没有对象，也没有动作。改成： Now I carry a pair of scissors and two cloth bags in my schoolbag, and on Sundays I walk that bank. 改完以后全篇没有 protect，读者却知道这个人此后每个星期天在做什么。办法是把“应该”换成“我在哪一天做了什么”。 3. 衔接：靠动作、物件、时间 两段之间不靠 However、Therefore 往前推。常用的有四样，一篇用上两三样就够：动物的同一个动作再出现一次，原文的物件再出现一次，时间往前走一步，末尾再用一句短的把话刹住。 手段 作用 例子 动作复现 证明还是那只动物 put her nose behind the box → the last thing each day: open the tray 物件复现 让读者认出还是那件事 candy wrapper → taped to the wall, above the rota 时间推进 把两段排成一条线 That afternoon … From that week on … 短句收束 先收一句，再展开 She did not explain at once. 物件复现是这一类最省力的衔接。原文里的糖果纸、梳子、那扇玻璃，第二段再拿出来用一次，读者立刻知道“还是那件事”，不必解释。 四、通关三·母题与变式：水箱里的秘密，院子里的鸟 前面三节讲的是办法，这一节把办法放回真题里走一遍。原卷这篇先精讲，后面那篇作同题变式，两篇的落点不同，用的却是同一套分工。 （原卷 Passage 1） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 （2024·九省联考） 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 阅读材料 Last summer, Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park. Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items. However, one day after cleaning, one of the dolphins, Maya, presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank. When Katherine, the trainer, saw this, she blamed Hilda for her carelessness. Upset but not discouraged by this event, Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya. The next morning, Hilda arrived at the park early. She put on her scuba gear (水下呼吸器) and jumped into the tank for her usual, underwater sweep. Finding nothing in the tank, she climbed out of the water just in time to see Katherine jumping in on the other side. After what happened yesterday, Hilda knew what she was doing. She watched as Katherine performed her underwater search, but Hilda wasn't surprised when she surfaced empty-handed. During the tank sweeps, Maya had been swimming playfully, but now the dolphin stopped suddenly and swam to the back part of the tank where the filter (过滤) box was located. She stuck her nose down behind the box and then swam away. What was Maya doing back there? Hilda wondered. She jumped back into the water and swam over to take a look behind the box, and her question was answered. Hilda then swam across the tank following Maya's path and emerged from the water to find Katherine removing her scuba gear. As Katherine turned around, her mouth dropped open. There was Maya at the edge of the tank with a comb (梳子) in her mouth waiting for her treat. “Maya! Where did you get that?” demanded Katherine, taking the comb and throwing her a fish. “I know where she got it,” declared Hilda, climbing out of the tank with a handful of items still wet from their watery resting place. “What's all this?” Katherine asked, obviously confused. 两段段首句： “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 原文信息梳理 项目 内容 卡在哪一步 Hilda 被当成粗心的人；她要证明水箱里另有一个“藏东西的” 可用的物件 candy wrapper、comb、filter box、a handful of items、fish（treat） 段首句①管什么 只给“她要解释”，不给内容；第一段必须把 secret 说成一件看得见的事 段首句②管什么 视角转到 Katherine；第二段只能写她的反应与做法，不能再写 Hilda 的委屈 写作区：第一段（约 75 词） 写作区：第二段（约 75 词） 同题变式　Passage 2：给它一个风到不了的地方 这一篇与海豚那篇骨架相同：第一段写人动手做一件事，第二段写鸟接受这件事、人因此变了。区别在于原文的落点不是误会，而是“它们不肯放弃”这件事本身；续写要接住的是这股劲，不是可怜它们。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 （2024·浙江省北斗星盟高三阶段性考试） 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 阅读材料 I sat in the breakfast corner with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. I was still recovering from a surgery. I hoped for strength and happiness. But the future seemed so hopeless. Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to the sliding door. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated on a rubber tree. It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. I'd never seen one in our neighborhood before. When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time it was with a mate carrying twigs (嫩枝). “Look, Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They're going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on the top of the rubber tree. Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he'd run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door, talking to the birds while they worked. As much as I was grieving (感到悲伤), I couldn't help but look forward to the doves' visits too. We watched their progress as if it were a real-life soap opera unfolding before us. Gradually, my pain disappeared, replaced by joy. Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree's broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew through, throwing the doves' nest to the ground. I heard the twigs break apart. Nothing good ever lasts. I wouldn't blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest. They started again from scratch, though the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they renewed their efforts, as if nothing had happened. 两段段首句： I knew I had to do something for the poor creatures. “The birds were back!” Matthew announced. 原文信息梳理 项目 内容 卡在哪一步 一夜强风把巢掀到地上，嫩枝断成几截；人要给它一个风到不了的位置 可用的物件 rubber tree、twigs、the sliding door、Matthew 的位置、作者的病 段首句①管什么 “do something”必须先变成一样具体的东西，不能停在“我想帮它们” 段首句②管什么 儿子报信；第二段要写鸟接受了新地方，以及人身上的变化 写作区：第一段（约 75 词） 写作区：第二段（约 75 词） 五、通关检测 写完对照下表逐项打勾。这一类最容易被扣的是第一段：动物写了一堆，人看懂了什么却没说清，自查时重点看“看懂”这一栏。 检查项 达标标准 段首句 第一句接住段首句的动作或情绪，没有另起一件事 看懂 第一段说清了这只动物在做什么，不是只写它可怜 动作 至少三处动物的动作，每一处都拍得到 分寸 野生题材写清了距离与退让，没有一把抱住 改变 第二段有一个具体做法：换饲料、撤网、让水、钉板子 回应 动物在第二段有回应，人也被别人看见 衔接 原文的物件或动作至少复现一次 词数 含两段段首句合计 170 词左右，不少于 150 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $