Unit 3 Fit for Life 现象分析短文（含学习地图）（单元同步写作讲义）高中英语译林版选择性必修第二册

Unit 3 Fit for Life｜现象分析短文写作学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 Fit for Life · 现象分析短文 现象分析短文（题干给定标题，无称呼落款） 80 词左右 分析中国学生近视的现状与成因，提出科学护眼对策 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 引入、特征说明、成因或影响、总结 搭出完整说明结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 定义、举例、列数据的说明句式 把说明对象写清楚、写准确 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整说明短文 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练习1｜安全用药 人与自我-医疗 分析自行用药现象与危害 练习2｜健康体重 人与自我-减肥 分析肥胖原因给出健康对策 练习3｜体能锻炼 人与自我-锻炼/健身 分析体能下降提出锻炼对策 练习4｜压力睡眠 人与自我-认识压力 分析压力对睡眠影响提建议 练习5｜含糖饮料 人与自我-健康饮食 分析含糖饮料危害倡导减量 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 3 Fit for Life 现象分析短文（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题： Fit for Life；青少年健康、视力保护、公共健康 应用文体裁： 现象分析短文（说明文） 写作任务： 面向校英文报读者撰写分析中国学生近视现状的专题短文，说明成因与危害，并提出科学护眼的对策。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 开头（1—2句） 呈现近视高发的现状，引出分析对象。 主体（3—4句） 分析近视的成因与危害，提出科学护眼对策。 结尾（1—2句） 总结护眼意义，呼吁行动。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 physician 医师，内科医生 引用专家观点 affect 影响 说明危害 identify 确定，识别 分析成因 fundamental 根本的，基本的 强调对策地位 arise 产生，出现 描述问题出现 restrict 限制 提出对策 prohibit sb from doing sth 禁止某人做某事 提出对策 characteristic 特征，特点 描述现象特征 phenomenon 现象 点明分析对象 widespread 普遍的，广泛的 描述现状 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 relate to 与……相关 分析成因关联 put sth in place 落实，实施 提出措施 wrestle with 努力解决，应对 描述应对问题 without doubt 毫无疑问 强调观点 date back to 追溯到 补充背景 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. Eye problems have become a ________(普遍的) issue among students. 2. Doctors have ________(确定) several main causes of short sight. 3. Too much screen time ________(影响) our eyesight badly. 4. Schools should ________(限制) the time students spend on electronic devices. 5. Myopia is a ________(现象) that deserves our attention. 【答案】 1. widespread 【解析】a 后接形容词作定语，widespread 表示"普遍的"。 2. identified 【解析】have 后接过去分词构成现在完成时，identify 表示"确定，识别"。 3. affects 【解析】主语为不可数名词短语，一般现在时谓语用第三人称单数 affects。 4. restrict 【解析】should 后接动词原形，restrict 表示"限制"。 5. phenomenon 【解析】a 后接单数名词，phenomenon 表示"现象"。 句子翻译 1. 近年来，越来越多的学生一直在遭受视力下降的困扰。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 医生已经发现，长时间使用手机与近视密切相关。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 自从上学期以来，学校一直在努力改善教室的照明条件。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 许多专家一直在呼吁限制中小学生的屏幕时间。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 毫无疑问，保护视力对学生的发展至关重要。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 1. In recent years, more and more students have been suffering from poor eyesight. 【解析】in recent years 是现在完成进行时的标志性时间状语，have been suffering 表示动作从过去持续到现在。 2. Doctors have found that using mobile phones for a long time relates closely to short sight. 【解析】have found 为现在完成时；that 引导宾语从句；relate to 表示"与……相关"。 3. Since last term, the school has been trying to improve the lighting in classrooms. 【解析】since last term 表示动作从过去某时持续至今，用现在完成进行时 has been trying。 4. Many experts have been calling for restrictions on screen time for primary and secondary school students. 【解析】have been calling 为现在完成进行时，强调呼吁动作的持续性；call for 表示"呼吁"。 5. Without doubt, protecting eyesight is vital to students' development. 【解析】without doubt 作状语表示"毫无疑问"；protecting eyesight 为动名词短语作主语。 四、写作句型 开头句 1. In recent years, short sight has become increasingly common among Chinese students. 2. Have you noticed that more and more classmates around you wear glasses? 3. A recent survey shows that over half of the students in our school are short-sighted. 中间句 1. Experts have identified several causes: too much screen time, heavy schoolwork and a lack of outdoor activities. 2. Since primary school, many students have been spending hours a day on electronic devices. 3. Poor eyesight not only affects study but also increases the risk of eye diseases in the future. 4. Therefore, it is fundamental to restrict screen time and take regular eye breaks. 结尾句 1. In conclusion, protecting our eyes is protecting our future. 2. Only by developing good eye habits can we keep the world in focus. 3. Let us put scientific eye-care methods in place from today on. 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 Clear Vision, Bright Future In recent years, short sight has become increasingly common among Chinese students. Experts have identified several causes, such as too much screen time and heavy schoolwork. Since primary school, many students have been spending hours on electronic devices, which harms their eyes badly. Poor eyesight affects both study and health. Therefore, we should restrict screen time, do eye exercises and spend more time outdoors. In conclusion, protecting our eyes is protecting our future. 模板2：分层高分版 Clear Vision, Bright Future Have you noticed that more and more classmates around you wear glasses? Short sight has become a widespread phenomenon among Chinese students, which without doubt deserves our attention. Why has myopia risen so fast? Experts have identified the main causes: since childhood, many students have been staring at screens for hours, while heavy schoolwork keeps them indoors. The consequences are serious. Poor eyesight not only makes study harder but also raises the risk of severe eye diseases later in life. Fortunately, the problem can be tackled. Schools and families should work together to restrict screen time, guarantee outdoor hours and put regular eye examinations in place. In conclusion, only by developing good eye habits can we keep the world in focus. 六、典例精练 你校英文报正在开展"健康中国"专栏。请你以 "Clear Vision, Bright Future" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中国学生近视的现状与成因，并提出科学护眼的对策。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中国学生近视高发的现状。 2. 分析近视的主要成因与危害。 3. 提出科学护眼的对策。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Clear Vision, Bright Future ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作指导 第一步 审题谋篇 体裁是现象分析短文，题干已给标题，无称呼、无落款，读者是校英文报读者，目的在于分析近视现状与成因并提出对策。呈现持续现状用现在完成进行时，分析成因与对策用一般现在时；语气客观、逻辑清晰。布局为标题、现状呈现、成因与危害分析、对策建议、总结呼吁。 第二步 要点拆解与表达 中文要点 英文表达 句式说明 呈现现状 In recent years, short sight has been affecting more and more students. 现在完成进行时呈现持续趋势。 分析成因 Since childhood, many students have been staring at screens for hours. 现在完成进行时突出习惯累积。 说明危害 Poor eyesight not only affects study but also raises the risk of eye diseases. not only...but also 并列强化危害层次。 提出对策 Schools should restrict screen time and guarantee outdoor hours. should 提建议，对策具体可操作。 第三步 句式升级 原句 升级句 仿写句 说明 Short sight is common. Short sight has become a widespread phenomenon among students. Obesity has become a widespread problem among teenagers. 用现在完成时加名词提升正式度。 Students use phones too much. Since childhood, students have been staring at screens for hours. Since last year, we have been relying on online learning. 用现在完成进行时强调持续。 We should protect our eyes. Only by developing good eye habits can we keep the world in focus. Only by practising every day can we master a language. 用倒装句强化对策。 第四步 同义替换 基础表达 升级表达 使用场景 bad for eyes harmful to eyesight 说明危害 find identify 分析成因 very important fundamental 强调对策地位 deal with tackle 提出应对 in a word in conclusion 结尾总结 参考范文 基础版范文 Clear Vision, Bright Future In recent years, short sight has become increasingly common among Chinese students. Experts have identified several causes, such as too much screen time and heavy schoolwork. Since primary school, many students have been spending hours on electronic devices, and this harms their eyes badly. Poor eyesight affects both study and health. Therefore, we should restrict screen time, do eye exercises regularly and spend more time outdoors. In conclusion, protecting our eyes is protecting our future. 提高版范文 Clear Vision, Bright Future In recent years, short sight has become increasingly common among Chinese students. Experts have learned to identify the causes early: too much screen time and heavy schoolwork. Since primary school, many students have been spending hours on electronic devices, and this habit is harmful to eyesight. Poor eyesight affects both study and health. Therefore, it is fundamental to restrict screen time, do eye exercises regularly and spend more time outdoors, so that we can tackle the problem at its root. In conclusion, protecting our eyes is protecting our future. 七、拓展练习 练习1：分析中学生自行用药、滥用抗生素的现象与危害（人与自我-医疗） 你校英文报正在开展"安全用药"专栏。请你以 "Use Medicine Wisely" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中学生自行用药、滥用抗生素的现象与危害，并提出科学用药的建议。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中学生自行用药、滥用抗生素的现象。 2. 分析这一现象的成因与危害。 3. 提出科学用药的建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Use Medicine Wisely ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：分析自行用药现象及其成因与危害，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：呈现现象；分析成因与危害；提出用药建议。 3. 结构：现象描述；成因与危害分析；对策建议。 4. 表达：使用 phenomenon、widespread、risk 和 affect。 基础版范文 Use Medicine Wisely In recent years, self-medication has become a widespread phenomenon among middle school students. When they have a cold or a fever, many students take medicine on their own, and some even use antibiotics for every minor illness. This habit is risky. Overusing antibiotics has been making bacteria resistant, so a common infection may trouble them for a much longer time. Doctors suggest that we should see a doctor in time and follow their advice. Use medicine wisely, and stay healthy. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 take medicine on their own treat themselves without advice 表述更准确 is risky pose a serious risk 用词更正式 make bacteria resistant weaken the effect of antibiotics 危害说明更具体 see a doctor consult a physician 用词更专业 follow their advice act on professional advice 搭配更地道 提高版范文 Use Medicine Wisely Self-medication has become a widespread phenomenon among middle school students. More and more of them treat themselves without advice when they fall ill. When they have a cold or a fever, many students take medicine at will, and some have even been using antibiotics for every minor illness. Such habits pose a serious risk. Overusing them can weaken the effect of antibiotics, so a common infection may trouble them for a much longer time. Doctors suggest that we should consult a physician in time and act on professional advice. Use medicine wisely, and stay healthy. 练习2：分析青少年肥胖率上升的原因并给出健康对策（人与自我-减肥） 你校英文报正在开展"健康体重"专栏。请你以 "A Healthy Weight, A Healthy Life" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析青少年肥胖率上升的原因并给出健康对策。 写作要点： 1. 描述青少年肥胖率上升的现象。 2. 分析饮食与运动方面的原因。 3. 提出科学管理体重的建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Healthy Weight, A Healthy Life ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：分析肥胖率上升原因并给出对策，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：描述现象；分析原因；提出建议。 3. 结构：现象描述；成因梳理；方案建议。 4. 表达：使用 weight、regular exercise、balanced diet 和 phenomenon。 基础版范文 A Healthy Weight, A Healthy Life In recent years, the obesity rate among teenagers has been rising quickly, which has caused wide concern. Two main reasons explain this phenomenon. On the one hand, fast food and sugary drinks have been taking the place of healthy meals. On the other hand, many students have been sitting for hours without enough exercise. To stay fit, we should eat a balanced diet, avoid junk food and take at least an hour of exercise every day. A healthy weight brings us a healthy life. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 has been rising quickly has been climbing steadily 表述趋势更精准 has caused wide concern has aroused wide concern 搭配更地道 taking the place of replacing 用词更凝练 avoid junk food stay away from junk food 表达更形象 brings us guarantees us 语气更肯定 提高版范文 A Healthy Weight, A Healthy Life In recent years, the obesity rate among teenagers has been climbing steadily, which has aroused wide concern. Two main reasons explain this phenomenon. On the one hand, fast food and sugary drinks have been replacing healthy meals. On the other hand, many students have been sitting for hours without enough exercise. To stay fit, we should eat a balanced diet, stay away from junk food and take at least an hour of exercise every day. A healthy weight guarantees us a healthy life. 练习3：分析中学生体能下降现象并提出锻炼对策（人与自我-锻炼/健身（个人）） 你校英文报正在开展"强健体魄"专栏。请你以 "Move More, Grow Stronger" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中学生体能下降现象并提出锻炼对策。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中学生体能下降的现状。 2. 分析运动不足等原因。 3. 提出切实可行的锻炼对策。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Move More, Grow Stronger ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：分析体能下降现象并提出锻炼对策，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：呈现现状；分析原因；提出对策。 3. 结构：现状说明；原因分析；锻炼建议。 4. 表达：使用 strength、endurance、work out 和 regularly。 基础版范文 Move More, Grow Stronger It is worrying that the physical fitness of middle school students has been going down in recent years. One major cause is the lack of exercise. Many students have been burying themselves in books and screens, leaving little time for sports. As a result, they easily feel tired and even get sick often. To change this, we should work out for at least an hour a day, choose a sport we enjoy and stick to it regularly. Strong bodies support strong minds. Let us move more from now on. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 has been going down has been declining 用词更正式 burying themselves in occupying themselves with 句式更多样 easily feel tired suffer from tiredness 表述更客观 stick to it regularly keep it up consistently 强调坚持更明确 from now on starting today 表达更自然 提高版范文 Move More, Grow Stronger It is worrying that the physical fitness of middle school students has been declining in recent years. One major cause is the lack of exercise. Many students have been occupying themselves with books and screens, leaving little time for sports. As a result, they suffer from tiredness easily and even get sick often. To change this, we should work out for at least an hour a day, choose a sport we enjoy and keep it up consistently. Strong bodies support strong minds. Let us move more starting today. 练习4：分析学业压力对中学生睡眠的影响并给建议（人与自我-认识压力） 你校英文报正在开展"睡眠健康"专栏。请你以 "A Good Sleep, A Better Day" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析学业压力对中学生睡眠的影响并给出改善建议。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中学生睡眠不足的现状。 2. 分析学业压力对睡眠的影响。 3. 提出改善睡眠的具体建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Good Sleep, A Better Day ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：分析压力对睡眠的影响并给建议，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：呈现现状；分析影响；提出作息建议。 3. 结构：现状数据；影响分析；作息建议。 4. 表达：使用 pressure、suffer from、regular schedule 和 relax。 基础版范文 A Good Sleep, A Better Day Nowadays, many middle school students fail to get enough sleep, and the situation has been becoming worse. Heavy schoolwork is a main cause. Facing exams and homework, many students have been staying up late, so they often feel sleepy in class and cannot focus on lessons. To improve this, we should make a regular schedule, finish homework efficiently and relax before bed instead of playing with phones. A good sleep brings a better day. Let us sleep early and live well. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 has been becoming worse has been worsening 用词更凝练 fail to get enough sleep suffer from a lack of sleep 表述更客观 feel sleepy in class struggle to stay focused in class 描述影响更具体 make a regular schedule follow a regular schedule 搭配更准确 relax before bed wind down before bed 用词更地道 提高版范文 A Good Sleep, A Better Day Nowadays, many middle school students fail to get enough sleep, and the situation has been worsening. Heavy schoolwork is a main cause. Facing exams and homework, many students have been staying up late, so they often suffer from a lack of sleep and struggle to stay focused in class. To improve this, we should follow a regular schedule, finish homework efficiently and wind down before bed instead of playing with phones. A good sleep brings a better day. Let us sleep early and live well. 练习5：分析中学生含糖饮料摄入过量的现象与危害（人与自我-健康饮食） 你校英文报正在开展"健康饮食"专栏。请你以 "Say No to Sugary Drinks" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中学生含糖饮料摄入过量的现象与危害，并倡导健康选择。 写作要点： 1. 描述含糖饮料摄入过量的现象。 2. 分析其健康危害。 3. 提出健康饮水的替代建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Say No to Sugary Drinks ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：分析含糖饮料过量现象与危害，读者为校英文报读者。 2. 要点：描述现象；分析危害；提出替代建议。 3. 结构：现象描述；危害分析；替代建议。 4. 表达：使用 sugary drinks、replace、strength and energy 和 instead of。 基础版范文 Say No to Sugary Drinks Walk past any school shop and you will find sugary drinks selling well. In recent years, many students have been drinking them every day. This habit harms our health. Sugary drinks lead to weight problems, damage our teeth and provide little nutrition. Drinking too many of them has been weakening our strength and energy day by day. Instead, we should drink more water or fresh juice and treat sweet drinks as an occasional choice rather than a daily need. Choose water, choose health. Let us say no to sugary drinks today. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 selling well flying off the shelves 描述现象更形象 lead to contribute to 搭配更正式 provide little nutrition offer little nutrition 用词更多样 has been weakening has been draining 表述危害更有力 an occasional choice an occasional treat 搭配更地道 提高版范文 Say No to Sugary Drinks Walk past any school shop and you will find sugary drinks flying off the shelves. In recent years, many students have been drinking them every day. This habit harms our health. Sugary drinks contribute to weight problems, damage our teeth and offer little nutrition. Drinking too many of them has been draining our energy day by day. Instead, we should drink more water or fresh juice and treat sweet drinks as an occasional treat rather than a daily need. Choose water, choose health. Let us say no to sugary drinks today. 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 标题、开头、主体、结尾安排合理，分析层次清楚。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 现状呈现清楚，成因与危害分析客观，对策可行。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和分析句型，表达准确连贯。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 格式规范，标题居中，拼写、大小写和标点正确。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价结构、内容、语言和书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分15分；13—15优秀；10—12达标；7—9需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 3 Fit for Life｜现象分析短文写作学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 Fit for Life · 现象分析短文 现象分析短文（题干给定标题，无称呼落款） 80 词左右 分析中国学生近视的现状与成因，提出科学护眼对策 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 引入、特征说明、成因或影响、总结 搭出完整说明结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 定义、举例、列数据的说明句式 把说明对象写清楚、写准确 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整说明短文 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练习1｜安全用药 人与自我-医疗 分析自行用药现象与危害 练习2｜健康体重 人与自我-减肥 分析肥胖原因给出健康对策 练习3｜体能锻炼 人与自我-锻炼/健身 分析体能下降提出锻炼对策 练习4｜压力睡眠 人与自我-认识压力 分析压力对睡眠影响提建议 练习5｜含糖饮料 人与自我-健康饮食 分析含糖饮料危害倡导减量 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 3 Fit for Life 现象分析短文（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题： Fit for Life；青少年健康、视力保护、公共健康 应用文体裁： 现象分析短文（说明文） 写作任务： 面向校英文报读者撰写分析中国学生近视现状的专题短文，说明成因与危害，并提出科学护眼的对策。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 开头（1—2句） 呈现近视高发的现状，引出分析对象。 主体（3—4句） 分析近视的成因与危害，提出科学护眼对策。 结尾（1—2句） 总结护眼意义，呼吁行动。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 physician 医师，内科医生 引用专家观点 affect 影响 说明危害 identify 确定，识别 分析成因 fundamental 根本的，基本的 强调对策地位 arise 产生，出现 描述问题出现 restrict 限制 提出对策 prohibit sb from doing sth 禁止某人做某事 提出对策 characteristic 特征，特点 描述现象特征 phenomenon 现象 点明分析对象 widespread 普遍的，广泛的 描述现状 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 relate to 与……相关 分析成因关联 put sth in place 落实，实施 提出措施 wrestle with 努力解决，应对 描述应对问题 without doubt 毫无疑问 强调观点 date back to 追溯到 补充背景 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. Eye problems have become a ________(普遍的) issue among students. 2. Doctors have ________(确定) several main causes of short sight. 3. Too much screen time ________(影响) our eyesight badly. 4. Schools should ________(限制) the time students spend on electronic devices. 5. Myopia is a ________(现象) that deserves our attention. 句子翻译 1. 近年来，越来越多的学生一直在遭受视力下降的困扰。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 医生已经发现，长时间使用手机与近视密切相关。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 自从上学期以来，学校一直在努力改善教室的照明条件。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 许多专家一直在呼吁限制中小学生的屏幕时间。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 毫无疑问，保护视力对学生的发展至关重要。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 四、写作句型 开头句 1. In recent years, short sight has become increasingly common among Chinese students. 2. Have you noticed that more and more classmates around you wear glasses? 3. A recent survey shows that over half of the students in our school are short-sighted. 中间句 1. Experts have identified several causes: too much screen time, heavy schoolwork and a lack of outdoor activities. 2. Since primary school, many students have been spending hours a day on electronic devices. 3. Poor eyesight not only affects study but also increases the risk of eye diseases in the future. 4. Therefore, it is fundamental to restrict screen time and take regular eye breaks. 结尾句 1. In conclusion, protecting our eyes is protecting our future. 2. Only by developing good eye habits can we keep the world in focus. 3. Let us put scientific eye-care methods in place from today on. 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 Clear Vision, Bright Future In recent years, short sight has become increasingly common among Chinese students. Experts have identified several causes, such as too much screen time and heavy schoolwork. Since primary school, many students have been spending hours on electronic devices, which harms their eyes badly. Poor eyesight affects both study and health. Therefore, we should restrict screen time, do eye exercises and spend more time outdoors. In conclusion, protecting our eyes is protecting our future. 模板2：分层高分版 Clear Vision, Bright Future Have you noticed that more and more classmates around you wear glasses? Short sight has become a widespread phenomenon among Chinese students, which without doubt deserves our attention. Why has myopia risen so fast? Experts have identified the main causes: since childhood, many students have been staring at screens for hours, while heavy schoolwork keeps them indoors. The consequences are serious. Poor eyesight not only makes study harder but also raises the risk of severe eye diseases later in life. Fortunately, the problem can be tackled. Schools and families should work together to restrict screen time, guarantee outdoor hours and put regular eye examinations in place. In conclusion, only by developing good eye habits can we keep the world in focus. 六、典例精练 你校英文报正在开展"健康中国"专栏。请你以 "Clear Vision, Bright Future" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中国学生近视的现状与成因，并提出科学护眼的对策。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中国学生近视高发的现状。 2. 分析近视的主要成因与危害。 3. 提出科学护眼的对策。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Clear Vision, Bright Future ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 七、拓展练习 练习1：分析中学生自行用药、滥用抗生素的现象与危害（人与自我-医疗） 你校英文报正在开展"安全用药"专栏。请你以 "Use Medicine Wisely" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中学生自行用药、滥用抗生素的现象与危害，并提出科学用药的建议。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中学生自行用药、滥用抗生素的现象。 2. 分析这一现象的成因与危害。 3. 提出科学用药的建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Use Medicine Wisely ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习2：分析青少年肥胖率上升的原因并给出健康对策（人与自我-减肥） 你校英文报正在开展"健康体重"专栏。请你以 "A Healthy Weight, A Healthy Life" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析青少年肥胖率上升的原因并给出健康对策。 写作要点： 1. 描述青少年肥胖率上升的现象。 2. 分析饮食与运动方面的原因。 3. 提出科学管理体重的建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Healthy Weight, A Healthy Life ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习3：分析中学生体能下降现象并提出锻炼对策（人与自我-锻炼/健身（个人）） 你校英文报正在开展"强健体魄"专栏。请你以 "Move More, Grow Stronger" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中学生体能下降现象并提出锻炼对策。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中学生体能下降的现状。 2. 分析运动不足等原因。 3. 提出切实可行的锻炼对策。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Move More, Grow Stronger ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习4：分析学业压力对中学生睡眠的影响并给建议（人与自我-认识压力） 你校英文报正在开展"睡眠健康"专栏。请你以 "A Good Sleep, A Better Day" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析学业压力对中学生睡眠的影响并给出改善建议。 写作要点： 1. 呈现中学生睡眠不足的现状。 2. 分析学业压力对睡眠的影响。 3. 提出改善睡眠的具体建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Good Sleep, A Better Day ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习5：分析中学生含糖饮料摄入过量的现象与危害（人与自我-健康饮食） 你校英文报正在开展"健康饮食"专栏。请你以 "Say No to Sugary Drinks" 为题写一篇现象分析短文，分析中学生含糖饮料摄入过量的现象与危害，并倡导健康选择。 写作要点： 1. 描述含糖饮料摄入过量的现象。 2. 分析其健康危害。 3. 提出健康饮水的替代建议。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Say No to Sugary Drinks ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 标题、开头、主体、结尾安排合理，分析层次清楚。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 现状呈现清楚，成因与危害分析客观，对策可行。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和分析句型，表达准确连贯。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 格式规范，标题居中，拼写、大小写和标点正确。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价结构、内容、语言和书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分15分；13—15优秀；10—12达标；7—9需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $