专题03 读后续写-人与自然（专项训练）（全国通用）2027年春季高考英语

专题03 读后续写·人与自然（生态保护与危机应对篇） 内容导航 方法总结·技巧提炼 一、“人与自然”语境作文特点 1 二、“十句五定”万能构思法 2 （一）“五定”的位置与功能 2 （二）构思万能模式：负 →转 →正 2 三、万能句式模板（情绪+动作） 3 【Para1 专用语料：消极与转折】 3 【Para 2 专用语料：积极与升华“五定”推演实战：如何让情节不跑偏】 3 题型探究・深度突破 一、“五定”推演实战：如何让情节不跑偏 3 二、高分语料库 4 1. 开局：深陷自然危机/悲悯的泥沼（写“惧”与“怜”） 4 2. 转折：绝境中的生机/自然法则的顿悟（写“破”与“悟”） 4 3. 破局：求生/救助的果敢行动（写“战”与“救”） 4 4. 终局：获救、重逢与回归自然（写“喜”与“暖”） 5 5. 升华：敬畏生命与和谐共生的灵魂独白（写“思”与“长”） 5 三、专项拓展：“描写动物”微场景语料 6 （一）受伤/脆弱（适用于Para1：引出怜悯与救助） 6 （二）警惕/惊恐（适用于Para1：初次接触、被人类惊吓） 6 （三）灵性/温情（适用于Para2：救助成功、互动与感恩） 7 （四）壮美/活力（适用于Para2：结局、放归自然、和谐共处） 7 （五）动物与环境的融合（高级背景烘托） 7 分层训练·达标过关 一、巩固过关（基础篇：野外迷路与生命救助） 8 专练1：森林迷路与烟花指引（野外求生） 8 专练2：救助受伤小鸟与归巢（生命救助） 9 二、能力提升（进阶篇：灾难应对与敬畏自然） 10 专练3：洪水被困与直升机救援（自然灾害） 10 专练4：救助受伤天鹅与善意传递（动物保护） 10 专练5：试图驯服狐狸与尊重自由（野生动物互动） 11 一、“人与自然”语境作文特点 “人与自然”的核心永远只有一个：“主角在自然环境或与动物的互动中，经历了从恐惧/破坏/占有，到理解/尊重/和谐共生的转变。” 阅卷老师扫一眼题目，就知道你要写一个“敬畏生命与和谐共生（Harmony & Respect）”的故事。 常见场景：野外迷路、自然灾害（洪水/暴风雪）、救助受伤动物、试图驯服野生动物、环保行动。 核心矛盾：人类的恐惧/无知/占有欲 VS 自然的脆弱/力量/动物对自由的渴望。 阅卷期待：老师最怕看到你第二段突然变成“超级英雄拯救世界”。他们想看的是：主角在危机中保持冷静，或被动物的母爱/求生欲打动，最终做出保护自然、尊重生命的行动，实现人与自然的互相救赎。 二、“十句五定”万能构思法 （一）“五定”的位置与功能 “十句五定”中的“五定”，本质上是在两段共十句话里，先锁定五个“情节锚点”，让续写不跑偏、不断层。 五个“定句”分别是：定句1（Para1首句）、定句5（Para1尾句）、定句6（Para2首句）、定句9（Para2倒数第二句）、定句10（Para2尾句）。 定句 位置 功能定位 推动故事的核心动作 定句1 第一段首句 入口 承接原文结尾，用环境描写（天色/风雨/动物神态）引出情绪，将人拉入自然危机。 定句5 第一段尾句 出口/伏笔 制造生存危机或道德困境，或出现一线生机，推向第二段。 定句6 第二段首句 承接/推进 接住生机，主角采取求生行动（寻路/包扎/求助/停止占有）。 定句9 第二段倒数第二句 结局落地 成功获救、动物回归自然、危机解除，给出完整结果。 定句10 第二段尾句 升华 提炼敬畏生命、尊重自然、生态保护、危机冷静的感悟。 总原则：第一段“陷入”困境（恐惧/危机），第二段“化解”困境（求生/救助/尊重）。 （二）“人与自然”构思万能模式：负 →转 →正 Para1. 消极（情绪+动作链） →转折：通过环境描写引出内心的恐慌/绝望，用倒装和独立主格刻画无助，最后发现生机或动物流露的情感产生触动。 Para2. 积极（情绪+动作链） →结局，升华：描写脱险后的如释重负/感动，用双形容词和比喻展现人与自然的温情，最后用倒装句提炼主旨（敬畏/和谐/善意）。 三、万能句式模板（情绪+动作） 【Para1 专用语料：消极与转折】 ① 情绪爆发（非谓语+无灵主语）：Catching sight of the endless darkness / Taking notice of the injured animal, a great wave of panic/pity was welling up in my heart and surging through my chest. ② 极度恐惧（倒装+with复合）：So terrified was I that I trembled all over, with my heart in my mouth / with cold sweat breaking out on my forehead. ③ 动作链（独立主格+with复合）：Seized by a sense of helplessness, I was rooted in the wild, with the wind howling around me, only in hope of a miracle. ④ 转折顿悟（倒装）：After what seemed like a century, I cast a desperate glance at [某物]. Through my mind flashed an idea: "Stay calm, and we can survive!" 【Para 2 专用语料：积极与升华】 ⑤ 情绪特写（双形容词+with复合）：Exceedingly relieved and grateful, with my eyes sparkling with tears of joy, my face lit up and a broad smile lifted the corner of my mouth. ⑥ 感动/释然（with复合）：Looking at the little creature, something indescribable pulled at my heartstrings; with tears welling up and clouding my vision, I gently released it into the wild. ⑦ 无灵主语（狂喜/温暖）：Overwhelmed/Seized/Dominated by a wave of relief/warmth, I was floating in the river of wild joy. ⑧ 比喻特写：Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on my face, like sunshine melting the winter ice. ⑨ 主旨升华（倒装句）：Deep inside/Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of respecting nature and protecting wildlife. 一、“五定”推演实战：如何让情节不跑偏 （一）定句1（Para1首句）：从给定的“自然场景”推进到“我”的生存反应。 示例：When we realized it was time to walk home, we found ourselves lost. →Catching sight of the darkening forest, a great wave of panic washed over me. （二）定句5（Para1尾句）：制造一个“必须由第二段来解决”的危机（如彻底迷路，或动物快不行了）。 示例：So desperate was I that I burst into tears, with my legs giving way. （三）定句6（Para2首句）：接住危机，主角冷静下来，采取行动（看到烟花、尝试急救）。 示例：Taking a deep breath, I forced myself to stay calm and searched for any sign of hope. （四）定句9（Para2倒数第二句）：让故事落地。获救、回到鸟巢、天鹅康复。 （五）定句10（Para2尾句）：从具体事件，升华到人与自然和谐共生的道理。 二、高分语料库 适用场景：森林迷路、动物救助、洪水求生、野生动物互动。 1. 开局：深陷自然危机/悲悯的泥沼（写“惧”与“怜”） ① 环境的压迫感（感官描写 + 无灵主语） Catching sight of the darkening sky and towering trees, a great wave of panic washed over me, threatening to drown my courage. (看到渐暗的天空和高耸的树木，一阵巨大的恐慌席卷了我，几乎淹没我的勇气。) The wind howled like a wild beast, making my blood run cold. (风像野兽一样呼啸，让我不寒而栗。) Taking notice of the injured bird struggling to move, a sudden flush of pity rushed to my heart. (注意到受伤的小鸟挣扎着移动，一阵突如其来的怜悯涌上心头。) ② 躯体的僵硬（倒装+独立主格） So terrified was I that I stood frozen on the spot, with my mind going blank. (我吓坏了，僵在原地，大脑一片空白。) Seized by a sense of helplessness, I was rooted in the darkness, with my palms soaked in cold sweat. (被无助感攫住，我僵在黑暗中，手心全是冷汗。) 2. 转折：绝境中的生机/自然法则的顿悟（写“破”与“悟”） ① 发现生机（倒装） After what seemed like a century of wandering, a beam of light caught my eye. Through my mind flashed an idea: "We are saved!" (在似乎漫无目的的游荡了一个世纪后，一束光吸引了我的视线。脑海中闪过一个念头：“我们有救了！”) Just as I was about to give up, the mother bird circled over my head, as if showing me the way. (就在我准备放弃时，母鸟在我头顶盘旋，似乎在为我指路。) ② 顿悟自然法则（心理描写） Looking at the fox's eager eyes for freedom, I suddenly realized that true love means letting it go, not possessing it. (看着狐狸渴望自由的眼神，我突然意识到，真正的爱是让它走，而不是占有它。) 3. 破局：求生/救助的果敢行动（写“战”与“救”） ① 求生动作链（动作链 + with复合） Taking a deep breath, I grabbed my cousin's hand, ran towards the light, and shouted at the top of my lungs. (深吸一口气，我抓住表亲的手，朝光亮处跑去，并拼尽全力大喊。) Clenching my teeth against the cold water, I struggled to my feet, with my eyes fixed firmly on the helicopter. (咬牙抵抗着冷水，我挣扎着站起来，眼睛死死盯着直升机。) ② 救助动物（非谓语 + 动作链） Carefully approaching the little creature, I gently scooped it up and cradled it in my warm hands. (小心翼翼地靠近这个小生物，我轻轻把它捧起来，捂在温暖的手心里。) With a piece of soft cloth, I carefully bandaged its injured leg, trying to ease its pain. (用一块软布，我小心地包扎了它受伤的腿，试图减轻它的痛苦。) 4. 终局：获救、重逢与回归自然（写“喜”与“暖”） ① 如释重负的喜悦（双形容词+with复合） Exceedingly relieved and thrilled, with tears of joy pouring down my cheeks, I hugged my family tightly. (极度释然和激动，喜悦的泪水顺着脸颊流下，我紧紧抱住了家人。) Watching the bird fly into the blue sky, a great sense of relief welled up in my heart. (看着鸟儿飞向蓝天，巨大的释然涌上心头。) ② 温情/美丽的画面（比喻） Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on my face, like sunshine piercing through the dark clouds. (不经意间，我脸上绽放出灿烂的笑容，像阳光穿透乌云。) The mother bird sang a beautiful song, which sounded like the most grateful thanks to us. (母鸟唱起了一首动听的歌，听起来像是对我们最感激的谢意。) 5. 升华：敬畏生命与和谐共生的灵魂独白（写“思”与“长”） ① 敬畏自然/动物（倒装） Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of nature, for it can be both destructive and healing. (在内心深处，我意识到我们绝不能低估自然的强大力量，因为它既具毁灭性又具治愈力。) Never should we try to tame or possess wild animals, for they belong to nature, not to us. (我们绝不应该试图驯服或占有野生动物，因为它们属于大自然，不属于我们。) ② 生态保护/社会责任（倒装） Deep inside, it dawned on me that protecting wildlife is protecting ourselves, and every small act of kindness counts. (在内心深处，我顿悟到保护野生动物就是保护我们自己，每一个微小的善举都算数。) Never should we hesitate to give a helping hand to the injured creatures, for it is our shared duty to maintain the balance of nature. (我们绝不应对受伤的生灵袖手旁观，因为维护自然平衡是我们共同的责任。) 三、专项拓展：“描写动物”微场景语料 在“人与自然”的续写中，动物不仅是背景，更是推动情感升华的关键“角色”。为了让人物互动更加生动，阅卷老师更青睐于看到微观动作与神态的特写。以下从五个维度进行专项语料拓展： （一）、 描写受伤/脆弱（适用于Para1：引出怜悯与救助） 1. 状态描写（独立主格 + 非谓语） The little bird lay on the grass, its chest heaving violently and its tiny wings trembling uncontrollably. (小鸟躺在草地上，胸口剧烈起伏，小翅膀不受控制地颤抖着。) → 赏析：its chest heaving... 独立主格结构，极具画面感地写出濒死边缘的脆弱。 The injured swan buried its long neck in its wings, looking like a helpless white ball in the cold wind. (受伤的天鹅将长颈埋在翅膀里，在寒风中看起来像一个无助的白球。) → 赏析：looking like... 现在分词作伴随状语 + 比喻，激起读者的保护欲。 A wave of pity seized me the moment I caught sight of the wounded puppy, with its eyes full of fear and pain. (看到那只受伤的小狗，满眼恐惧与痛苦，一阵怜悯涌上心头。) → 赏析：the moment... 时间状语从句 + with 复合结构描写眼神。 2. 挣扎与求生（动作链） Struggling desperately to break free from the trap, the little creature let out a piercing cry. (拼命挣扎着想要挣脱陷阱，这个小生灵发出了刺耳的叫声。) → 赏析：Struggling... 现在分词作状语，展现动物求生的本能。 （二）、 描写警惕/惊恐（适用于Para1：初次接触、被人类惊吓） 1. 眼神与神态（with复合 + 倒装） So alert was the fox that it froze instantly, with its black eyes wide open in alarm and its ears standing straight up. (狐狸如此警觉，瞬间僵住，黑眼睛惊恐地睁大，耳朵笔直地竖起。) → 赏析：So...that... 部分倒装 + with 复合结构，生动写出野生动物的警惕性。 Catching a glimpse of the human, the squirrel sprang to its feet, its eyes darting around cautiously. (瞥见人类，松鼠一跃而起，眼睛警惕地四处张望。) → 赏析：Catching... 非谓语 + its eyes darting... 独立主格，展现动物的敏捷与惊恐。 2. 逃跑的姿态（现在分词） The moment we approached, the deer dashed into the woods, its white tail flashing like a warning sign. (我们刚一靠近，鹿就冲进树林，白色的尾巴像警告信号一样闪动。) → 赏析：its white tail flashing... 独立主格，结合比喻，画面感极强。 （三）、 描写灵性/温情（适用于Para2：救助成功、互动与感恩） 1. 试探与靠近（动作链） The fox approached me step by step, sniffing the air cautiously before gently brushing against my leg. (狐狸一步步靠近我，小心翼翼地嗅着空气，然后轻轻蹭了蹭我的腿。) → 赏析：连续的动词 (approached, sniffing, brushing) 构成动作链，写出信任的建立。 2. 表达感激与亲昵（无灵主语 + 独立主格） Letting out cheerful chirps, the mother bird circled over our heads, as if expressing her heartfelt gratitude. (母鸟发出欢快的叫声，在我们头顶盘旋，仿佛在表达由衷的感激。) → 赏析：Letting out... 现在分词 + as if 虚拟语气，赋予动物灵性。 The little deer gently nuzzled against my palm, its warm breath melting the ice in my heart. (小鹿轻轻蹭着我的手心，它温暖的呼吸融化了我心中的坚冰。) → 赏析：its warm breath melting... 独立主格，写出人兽之间的温情流动。 （四）、 描写壮美/活力（适用于Para2：结局、放归自然、和谐共处） 1. 翱翔/奔跑的自由之美（非谓语 + 倒装） Spreading its broad wings, the eagle soared into the blue sky, disappearing into the golden sunlight. (展开宽阔的翅膀，老鹰翱翔进入蓝天，消失在金色的阳光中。) → 赏析：Spreading... 现在分词 + disappearing...，展现放归自然的美好。 Across the green meadow galloped the wild horses, their manes flying in the wind. (野马在绿色的草地上飞奔，鬃毛在风中飞扬。) → 赏析：完全倒装 Across... galloped... + 独立主格，极富张力和生命力。 The bird hopped onto the branch, shook its feathers vigorously, and burst into a melodious song. (鸟儿跳上枝头，用力抖了抖羽毛，唱起了一首悦耳的歌曲。) → 赏析：连续动作链，写出动物重获新生后的活力。 （五）、 动物与环境的融合（高级背景烘托） 1. 宁静祥和（with复合） The lake was as calm as a mirror, with a few water birds gliding smoothly across its surface. (湖面平静如镜，几只水鸟在水面上平滑地滑行。) Under the moonlight, the forest was shrouded in silence, with only the occasional hoot of an owl breaking the night. (月光下，森林被寂静笼罩，只有偶尔传来的猫头鹰叫声打破夜空。) 2. 暴力与危险（环境渲染） The wind howled fiercely, making the branches crack like whips, while the frightened animals scurried for shelter. (狂风肆虐地呼啸，树枝像鞭子一样劈啪作响，受惊的动物们四处逃窜寻找庇护。) 考场应用“点睛”提示： 不要只写“我救了它”，一定要加入“它看我/它动了一下”的微观特写。 例如：不要只写 I saved the bird. 而要写：As I bandaged its leg, the little bird looked up at me, its bright black eyes seeming to say thank you.（当我给它包扎时，小鸟抬头看着我，它明亮的黑眼睛似乎在说谢谢。） 一、巩固过关（基础篇：野外迷路与生命救助） 专练1：森林迷路与烟花指引（野外求生） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the middle of the day with the bright sun, blue sky, green grass, and a soft breeze. It was a great day to play outside and the best day of my life because I got a new ball and a new bike as my sixth birthday presents, and I was visiting my cousin, Kristy, at her house. "Here I go!" shouted David while kicking my new ball. David lived next door and was older than me. I thought he was a wild child, but he was actually very kind. The ball went flying as if it were going to space. "That was high!" Kristy said in surprise and we went after the ball. We all had a great time. Later we had supper and the food my aunt made was good. While Kristy was helping do the dishes, David and I ran outside to play. We started taking turns riding my bike. David suggested that we ride it to the forest. And I agreed. David and I got on the bike and David started riding fast. As we rode through the forest, I felt the wind brushing my face. It felt so great and free. Suddenly the bike hit a fallen branch and we went flying off the bike. Lying on the ground, I felt dizzy. I checked myself for injuries and saw some but they didn't upset me. "David!" I shouted out anxiously. "Hey," said a voice. I turned my head and it was David, who was standing behind me, holding my broken bike. At the sight of my disabled bike, I was so sad that I couldn't hold back my tears. It took David some time to calm me down. 注意： 1. 续写的词数应为150左右。 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: When we realized it was time to walk home, we found ourselves lost. Paragraph 2: It was completely dark when we saw fireworks being set off in the distance. 专练2：救助受伤小鸟与归巢（生命救助） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was a little girl, I liked to listen to my father telling his childhood stories. The image of him and his friends climbing to the top of a tree to get a bird's nest hung in my mind for quite a while. I dreamed of peeking into a bird's nest that had eggs or small baby birds inside, like my father often did when he was a boy. But that was almost impossible. First, youngsters today are not allowed to climb trees. People think it is too dangerous. Second, we don't have so many birds' nests around anymore. The healthy eco-system of Dad's youth is slowly disappearing. However, one day, my dream came true. It was a Saturday morning. My dad's best friend, who I call Uncle Ben, invited us to visit his business. He sold used cars at his shop outside the city. There were a lot of trees around it. Uncle Ben led us through the parking lot, pointing out all kinds of different cars — different makes, models, years and prices. As we walked across the lot, we suddenly found something unusual — a bird's nest on top of the back wheel of a big truck! I was excited to be so close. I looked at the nest in amazement. It was real — a real bird's nest with a few eggs sitting inside. The nest looked strong and warm. How smart the little bird was to make such a pretty nest. And how creative it was to build the nest on the wheel for shelter in this cold Canadian weather! Uncle Ben took a close look, but he was surprised to find a baby bird was hanging down a branch under the nest, with one of its legs hurt badly. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Watching the little bird struggling to move, I felt a deep sense of responsibility. Paragraph 2: The mother bird circled several times over our head. 二、能力提升（进阶篇：灾难应对与敬畏自然） 专练3：洪水被困与直升机救援（自然灾害） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Mary and her parents were downstairs in the living room. Mary was looking through the windows at the endless rain outside. It had been raining non-stop for three days. She had never seen a storm this bad. It was making her nervous. The wind roared and the rain beat on the roof and windows. Dad was listening to a weather report on the radio, while Mum was putting their important documents and disaster supplies into a bag. "Mum, Dad," said Mary suddenly, "I think we should leave here right away!" "No," said Dad. "It's too late! The radio says the city has already been flooded." "We can drive our car through the floodwater! Let's just leave! I'm really scared!" cried Mary. "We can't do that, honey," explained Mum, "otherwise the moving water could wash the car away!" Mary walked to the door. She was curious to see how much water there was outside. "Don't open the door!" shouted Mum and Dad at the same time. "The water may flood in!" Dad moved the dinner table against the door, in case the floodwater forced the door open. Mum waved to Mary to sit on the sofa. "Mary, don't worry. Everything's going to be OK," she said softly, trying her best to comfort Mary. Her voice was calm, but Mary could tell she was worried too. Without saying a single word, Dad walked to the sofa, sat down and hugged his wife and daughter. The sudden silence in the house seemed to make the wind and rain more frightening outside. What could they do? All of a sudden, the dinner table moved and the door was forced open. Water poured in. Mary burst out crying. "Upstairs!" Dad ordered. They rushed to the second floor, only to find the whole neighborhood had been surrounded by water. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Just then they heard a helicopter flying in the distance. Paragraph 2: Three days later, they returned home and found their house in a mess. 专练4：救助受伤天鹅与善意传递（动物保护） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When Ariel rode her bike to Jamaica Bay Wildlife Refuge in Queens, New York, last November, she planned to go hiking and bird-watching. After a one-mile walk, she found a beautiful female swan near the water's edge. Ariel, 30, who had worked at the Wild Bird Fund health recovery center, knew that some swans can be aggressive. But as she approached this one, it didn't move. Ariel found that the swan which buried its neck in its wings seemed to have lost its all energy. She was certain that the bird needed medical attention. Ariel took off her jacket and covered the bird's head to keep it calm, carefully picked it up, and carried it in her arms gently. And then a thought struck her: What do I do now? Her best choice was the recovery center, but that was across the East River and clear on the other side of town. How was she going to transport a 17-pound swan on her bike all that way? Luckily, some warm-hearted strangers driving by offered her, her bike, and the swan a lift to a nearby subway station. On the subway, no one seemed particularly to focus on the feathered passenger. "One man was sitting right in front of me on his phone. I don't know if he noticed there was a swan in front of him." said Ariel. Ariel called the center, and Tristan Higginbotham, an animal-care manager, picked her up at the subway station and drove the bird, the bike, and the rescuer to the center. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: There, the staff members along with Ariel gave the swan careful examination. Paragraph 2: Soon Ariel's story got spread online. 专练5：试图驯服狐狸与尊重自由（野生动物互动） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写最后一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My story started one autumn morning, at the bend on a path. I was 13 years old, and was on the way to school. It was the first time I had caught sight of a fox. Fascinated to the point that I forgot all fear, I dared to go up to it. I had never come so close to a wild animal. There was nobody else around, only me and the fox. "Hey, fox!" I tried to greet it, though my voice was so weak it felt like I was saying hello to myself. It didn't hear me. It stayed there and I watched it. My heart was beating flat out. It was so cute. For a moment, I thought I might be able to touch it. Throughout the day at school, I could only think of the fox at the big beech tree. At my return to the place where we met, I was sure I'd find it there. And I did. This time I gathered a little bit more courage and called out to it, "Fox!" Of course it escaped. But that only made me long to meet it again. I decided that if I could find its kennel and catch it, I would try and tame it, making it my friend. Thus, I spent most of my free time in the forests trying to find the fox during the following months. But I never saw it again before winter came. During the winter, I followed its footprints far across the fields. Suddenly I was alarmed by the howling of wolves near me. I ran away frightened, stumbled and hurt my ankle. It healed very slowly, so that I had to stay at home during the winter, reading a book about animals of the forest and foxes. When spring arrived, I was free again. I looked for fox kennels and waited for my fox. To my amazement, it had got young ones but kept moving because of my observations; therefore I decided to observe the fox from a longer distance. Finally, it would let me get close. But before that, several days had seen my distant and patient observation, during which time the fox gradually got accustomed to my presence and finally quit moving. Delighted to see its attitude transformation, I started to bring some food, put it outside the kennel and soon returned to my distant observation site to avoid disturbing and frightening the fox. Every time, it carried the food back to the kennel after cautiously sniffing. Several times later, I attempted to get close and was astonished to find that it didn't get away. What thrilled me further was that it would even initiatively walk to me and lie beside me for a while. So thrilled was I that one day I impulsively took it home, imaging to tame it with tips from my book. 注意： (1) 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； (2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 To my surprise, the day after I took it home, it fled. 1 / 11 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 专题03 读后续写·人与自然（生态保护与危机应对篇） 内容导航 方法总结·技巧提炼 一、“人与自然”语境作文特点 2 二、“十句五定”万能构思法 2 （一）“五定”的位置与功能 2 （二）构思万能模式：负 →转 →正 2 三、万能句式模板（情绪+动作） 3 【Para1 专用语料：消极与转折】 3 【Para 2 专用语料：积极与升华“五定”推演实战：如何让情节不跑偏】 3 题型探究・深度突破 一、“五定”推演实战：如何让情节不跑偏 3 二、高分语料库 3 1. 开局：深陷自然危机/悲悯的泥沼（写“惧”与“怜”） 3 2. 转折：绝境中的生机/自然法则的顿悟（写“破”与“悟”） 4 3. 破局：求生/救助的果敢行动（写“战”与“救”） 4 4. 终局：获救、重逢与回归自然（写“喜”与“暖”） 4 5. 升华：敬畏生命与和谐共生的灵魂独白（写“思”与“长”） 4 三、专项拓展：“描写动物”微场景语料 5 （一）受伤/脆弱（适用于Para1：引出怜悯与救助） 5 （二）警惕/惊恐（适用于Para1：初次接触、被人类惊吓） 5 （三）灵性/温情（适用于Para2：救助成功、互动与感恩） 5 （四）壮美/活力（适用于Para2：结局、放归自然、和谐共处） 6 （五）动物与环境的融合（高级背景烘托） 6 分层训练·达标过关 一、巩固过关（基础篇：野外迷路与生命救助） 6 专练1：森林迷路与烟花指引（野外求生） 6 专练2：救助受伤小鸟与归巢（生命救助） 7 二、能力提升（进阶篇：灾难应对与敬畏自然） 9 专练3：洪水被困与直升机救援（自然灾害） 9 专练4：救助受伤天鹅与善意传递（动物保护） 10 专练5：试图驯服狐狸与尊重自由（野生动物互动） 11 一、“人与自然”语境作文特点 “人与自然”的核心永远只有一个：“主角在自然环境或与动物的互动中，经历了从恐惧/破坏/占有，到理解/尊重/和谐共生的转变。” 阅卷老师扫一眼题目，就知道你要写一个“敬畏生命与和谐共生（Harmony & Respect）”的故事。 常见场景：野外迷路、自然灾害（洪水/暴风雪）、救助受伤动物、试图驯服野生动物、环保行动。 核心矛盾：人类的恐惧/无知/占有欲 VS 自然的脆弱/力量/动物对自由的渴望。 阅卷期待：老师最怕看到你第二段突然变成“超级英雄拯救世界”。他们想看的是：主角在危机中保持冷静，或被动物的母爱/求生欲打动，最终做出保护自然、尊重生命的行动，实现人与自然的互相救赎。 二、“十句五定”万能构思法 （一）“五定”的位置与功能 “十句五定”中的“五定”，本质上是在两段共十句话里，先锁定五个“情节锚点”，让续写不跑偏、不断层。 五个“定句”分别是：定句1（Para1首句）、定句5（Para1尾句）、定句6（Para2首句）、定句9（Para2倒数第二句）、定句10（Para2尾句）。 定句 位置 功能定位 推动故事的核心动作 定句1 第一段首句 入口 承接原文结尾，用环境描写（天色/风雨/动物神态）引出情绪，将人拉入自然危机。 定句5 第一段尾句 出口/伏笔 制造生存危机或道德困境，或出现一线生机，推向第二段。 定句6 第二段首句 承接/推进 接住生机，主角采取求生行动（寻路/包扎/求助/停止占有）。 定句9 第二段倒数第二句 结局落地 成功获救、动物回归自然、危机解除，给出完整结果。 定句10 第二段尾句 升华 提炼敬畏生命、尊重自然、生态保护、危机冷静的感悟。 总原则：第一段“陷入”困境（恐惧/危机），第二段“化解”困境（求生/救助/尊重）。 （二）“人与自然”构思万能模式：负 →转 →正 Para1. 消极（情绪+动作链） →转折：通过环境描写引出内心的恐慌/绝望，用倒装和独立主格刻画无助，最后发现生机或动物流露的情感产生触动。 Para2. 积极（情绪+动作链） →结局，升华：描写脱险后的如释重负/感动，用双形容词和比喻展现人与自然的温情，最后用倒装句提炼主旨（敬畏/和谐/善意）。 三、万能句式模板（情绪+动作） 【Para1 专用语料：消极与转折】 ① 情绪爆发（非谓语+无灵主语）：Catching sight of the endless darkness / Taking notice of the injured animal, a great wave of panic/pity was welling up in my heart and surging through my chest. ② 极度恐惧（倒装+with复合）：So terrified was I that I trembled all over, with my heart in my mouth / with cold sweat breaking out on my forehead. ③ 动作链（独立主格+with复合）：Seized by a sense of helplessness, I was rooted in the wild, with the wind howling around me, only in hope of a miracle. ④ 转折顿悟（倒装）：After what seemed like a century, I cast a desperate glance at [某物]. Through my mind flashed an idea: "Stay calm, and we can survive!" 【Para 2 专用语料：积极与升华】 ⑤ 情绪特写（双形容词+with复合）：Exceedingly relieved and grateful, with my eyes sparkling with tears of joy, my face lit up and a broad smile lifted the corner of my mouth. ⑥ 感动/释然（with复合）：Looking at the little creature, something indescribable pulled at my heartstrings; with tears welling up and clouding my vision, I gently released it into the wild. ⑦ 无灵主语（狂喜/温暖）：Overwhelmed/Seized/Dominated by a wave of relief/warmth, I was floating in the river of wild joy. ⑧ 比喻特写：Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on my face, like sunshine melting the winter ice. ⑨ 主旨升华（倒装句）：Deep inside/Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of respecting nature and protecting wildlife. 一、“五定”推演实战：如何让情节不跑偏 （一）定句1（Para1首句）：从给定的“自然场景”推进到“我”的生存反应。 示例：When we realized it was time to walk home, we found ourselves lost. →Catching sight of the darkening forest, a great wave of panic washed over me. （二）定句5（Para1尾句）：制造一个“必须由第二段来解决”的危机（如彻底迷路，或动物快不行了）。 示例：So desperate was I that I burst into tears, with my legs giving way. （三）定句6（Para2首句）：接住危机，主角冷静下来，采取行动（看到烟花、尝试急救）。 示例：Taking a deep breath, I forced myself to stay calm and searched for any sign of hope. （四）定句9（Para2倒数第二句）：让故事落地。获救、回到鸟巢、天鹅康复。 （五）定句10（Para2尾句）：从具体事件，升华到人与自然和谐共生的道理。 二、高分语料库 适用场景：森林迷路、动物救助、洪水求生、野生动物互动。 1. 开局：深陷自然危机/悲悯的泥沼（写“惧”与“怜”） ① 环境的压迫感（感官描写 + 无灵主语） Catching sight of the darkening sky and towering trees, a great wave of panic washed over me, threatening to drown my courage. (看到渐暗的天空和高耸的树木，一阵巨大的恐慌席卷了我，几乎淹没我的勇气。) The wind howled like a wild beast, making my blood run cold. (风像野兽一样呼啸，让我不寒而栗。) Taking notice of the injured bird struggling to move, a sudden flush of pity rushed to my heart. (注意到受伤的小鸟挣扎着移动，一阵突如其来的怜悯涌上心头。) ② 躯体的僵硬（倒装+独立主格） So terrified was I that I stood frozen on the spot, with my mind going blank. (我吓坏了，僵在原地，大脑一片空白。) Seized by a sense of helplessness, I was rooted in the darkness, with my palms soaked in cold sweat. (被无助感攫住，我僵在黑暗中，手心全是冷汗。) 2. 转折：绝境中的生机/自然法则的顿悟（写“破”与“悟”） ① 发现生机（倒装） After what seemed like a century of wandering, a beam of light caught my eye. Through my mind flashed an idea: "We are saved!" (在似乎漫无目的的游荡了一个世纪后，一束光吸引了我的视线。脑海中闪过一个念头：“我们有救了！”) Just as I was about to give up, the mother bird circled over my head, as if showing me the way. (就在我准备放弃时，母鸟在我头顶盘旋，似乎在为我指路。) ② 顿悟自然法则（心理描写） Looking at the fox's eager eyes for freedom, I suddenly realized that true love means letting it go, not possessing it. (看着狐狸渴望自由的眼神，我突然意识到，真正的爱是让它走，而不是占有它。) 3. 破局：求生/救助的果敢行动（写“战”与“救”） ① 求生动作链（动作链 + with复合） Taking a deep breath, I grabbed my cousin's hand, ran towards the light, and shouted at the top of my lungs. (深吸一口气，我抓住表亲的手，朝光亮处跑去，并拼尽全力大喊。) Clenching my teeth against the cold water, I struggled to my feet, with my eyes fixed firmly on the helicopter. (咬牙抵抗着冷水，我挣扎着站起来，眼睛死死盯着直升机。) ② 救助动物（非谓语 + 动作链） Carefully approaching the little creature, I gently scooped it up and cradled it in my warm hands. (小心翼翼地靠近这个小生物，我轻轻把它捧起来，捂在温暖的手心里。) With a piece of soft cloth, I carefully bandaged its injured leg, trying to ease its pain. (用一块软布，我小心地包扎了它受伤的腿，试图减轻它的痛苦。) 4. 终局：获救、重逢与回归自然（写“喜”与“暖”） ① 如释重负的喜悦（双形容词+with复合） Exceedingly relieved and thrilled, with tears of joy pouring down my cheeks, I hugged my family tightly. (极度释然和激动，喜悦的泪水顺着脸颊流下，我紧紧抱住了家人。) Watching the bird fly into the blue sky, a great sense of relief welled up in my heart. (看着鸟儿飞向蓝天，巨大的释然涌上心头。) ② 温情/美丽的画面（比喻） Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on my face, like sunshine piercing through the dark clouds. (不经意间，我脸上绽放出灿烂的笑容，像阳光穿透乌云。) The mother bird sang a beautiful song, which sounded like the most grateful thanks to us. (母鸟唱起了一首动听的歌，听起来像是对我们最感激的谢意。) 5. 升华：敬畏生命与和谐共生的灵魂独白（写“思”与“长”） ① 敬畏自然/动物（倒装） Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of nature, for it can be both destructive and healing. (在内心深处，我意识到我们绝不能低估自然的强大力量，因为它既具毁灭性又具治愈力。) Never should we try to tame or possess wild animals, for they belong to nature, not to us. (我们绝不应该试图驯服或占有野生动物，因为它们属于大自然，不属于我们。) ② 生态保护/社会责任（倒装） Deep inside, it dawned on me that protecting wildlife is protecting ourselves, and every small act of kindness counts. (在内心深处，我顿悟到保护野生动物就是保护我们自己，每一个微小的善举都算数。) Never should we hesitate to give a helping hand to the injured creatures, for it is our shared duty to maintain the balance of nature. (我们绝不应对受伤的生灵袖手旁观，因为维护自然平衡是我们共同的责任。) 三、专项拓展：“描写动物”微场景语料 在“人与自然”的续写中，动物不仅是背景，更是推动情感升华的关键“角色”。为了让人物互动更加生动，阅卷老师更青睐于看到微观动作与神态的特写。以下从五个维度进行专项语料拓展： （一）、 描写受伤/脆弱（适用于Para1：引出怜悯与救助） 1. 状态描写（独立主格 + 非谓语） The little bird lay on the grass, its chest heaving violently and its tiny wings trembling uncontrollably. (小鸟躺在草地上，胸口剧烈起伏，小翅膀不受控制地颤抖着。) → 赏析：its chest heaving... 独立主格结构，极具画面感地写出濒死边缘的脆弱。 The injured swan buried its long neck in its wings, looking like a helpless white ball in the cold wind. (受伤的天鹅将长颈埋在翅膀里，在寒风中看起来像一个无助的白球。) → 赏析：looking like... 现在分词作伴随状语 + 比喻，激起读者的保护欲。 A wave of pity seized me the moment I caught sight of the wounded puppy, with its eyes full of fear and pain. (看到那只受伤的小狗，满眼恐惧与痛苦，一阵怜悯涌上心头。) → 赏析：the moment... 时间状语从句 + with 复合结构描写眼神。 2. 挣扎与求生（动作链） Struggling desperately to break free from the trap, the little creature let out a piercing cry. (拼命挣扎着想要挣脱陷阱，这个小生灵发出了刺耳的叫声。) → 赏析：Struggling... 现在分词作状语，展现动物求生的本能。 （二）、 描写警惕/惊恐（适用于Para1：初次接触、被人类惊吓） 1. 眼神与神态（with复合 + 倒装） So alert was the fox that it froze instantly, with its black eyes wide open in alarm and its ears standing straight up. (狐狸如此警觉，瞬间僵住，黑眼睛惊恐地睁大，耳朵笔直地竖起。) → 赏析：So...that... 部分倒装 + with 复合结构，生动写出野生动物的警惕性。 Catching a glimpse of the human, the squirrel sprang to its feet, its eyes darting around cautiously. (瞥见人类，松鼠一跃而起，眼睛警惕地四处张望。) → 赏析：Catching... 非谓语 + its eyes darting... 独立主格，展现动物的敏捷与惊恐。 2. 逃跑的姿态（现在分词） The moment we approached, the deer dashed into the woods, its white tail flashing like a warning sign. (我们刚一靠近，鹿就冲进树林，白色的尾巴像警告信号一样闪动。) → 赏析：its white tail flashing... 独立主格，结合比喻，画面感极强。 （三）、 描写灵性/温情（适用于Para2：救助成功、互动与感恩） 1. 试探与靠近（动作链） The fox approached me step by step, sniffing the air cautiously before gently brushing against my leg. (狐狸一步步靠近我，小心翼翼地嗅着空气，然后轻轻蹭了蹭我的腿。) → 赏析：连续的动词 (approached, sniffing, brushing) 构成动作链，写出信任的建立。 2. 表达感激与亲昵（无灵主语 + 独立主格） Letting out cheerful chirps, the mother bird circled over our heads, as if expressing her heartfelt gratitude. (母鸟发出欢快的叫声，在我们头顶盘旋，仿佛在表达由衷的感激。) → 赏析：Letting out... 现在分词 + as if 虚拟语气，赋予动物灵性。 The little deer gently nuzzled against my palm, its warm breath melting the ice in my heart. (小鹿轻轻蹭着我的手心，它温暖的呼吸融化了我心中的坚冰。) → 赏析：its warm breath melting... 独立主格，写出人兽之间的温情流动。 （四）、 描写壮美/活力（适用于Para2：结局、放归自然、和谐共处） 1. 翱翔/奔跑的自由之美（非谓语 + 倒装） Spreading its broad wings, the eagle soared into the blue sky, disappearing into the golden sunlight. (展开宽阔的翅膀，老鹰翱翔进入蓝天，消失在金色的阳光中。) → 赏析：Spreading... 现在分词 + disappearing...，展现放归自然的美好。 Across the green meadow galloped the wild horses, their manes flying in the wind. (野马在绿色的草地上飞奔，鬃毛在风中飞扬。) → 赏析：完全倒装 Across... galloped... + 独立主格，极富张力和生命力。 The bird hopped onto the branch, shook its feathers vigorously, and burst into a melodious song. (鸟儿跳上枝头，用力抖了抖羽毛，唱起了一首悦耳的歌曲。) → 赏析：连续动作链，写出动物重获新生后的活力。 （五）、 动物与环境的融合（高级背景烘托） 1. 宁静祥和（with复合） The lake was as calm as a mirror, with a few water birds gliding smoothly across its surface. (湖面平静如镜，几只水鸟在水面上平滑地滑行。) Under the moonlight, the forest was shrouded in silence, with only the occasional hoot of an owl breaking the night. (月光下，森林被寂静笼罩，只有偶尔传来的猫头鹰叫声打破夜空。) 2. 暴力与危险（环境渲染） The wind howled fiercely, making the branches crack like whips, while the frightened animals scurried for shelter. (狂风肆虐地呼啸，树枝像鞭子一样劈啪作响，受惊的动物们四处逃窜寻找庇护。) 考场应用“点睛”提示： 不要只写“我救了它”，一定要加入“它看我/它动了一下”的微观特写。 例如：不要只写 I saved the bird. 而要写：As I bandaged its leg, the little bird looked up at me, its bright black eyes seeming to say thank you.（当我给它包扎时，小鸟抬头看着我，它明亮的黑眼睛似乎在说谢谢。） 一、巩固过关（基础篇：野外迷路与生命救助） 专练1：森林迷路与烟花指引（野外求生） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the middle of the day with the bright sun, blue sky, green grass, and a soft breeze. It was a great day to play outside and the best day of my life because I got a new ball and a new bike as my sixth birthday presents, and I was visiting my cousin, Kristy, at her house. "Here I go!" shouted David while kicking my new ball. David lived next door and was older than me. I thought he was a wild child, but he was actually very kind. The ball went flying as if it were going to space. "That was high!" Kristy said in surprise and we went after the ball. We all had a great time. Later we had supper and the food my aunt made was good. While Kristy was helping do the dishes, David and I ran outside to play. We started taking turns riding my bike. David suggested that we ride it to the forest. And I agreed. David and I got on the bike and David started riding fast. As we rode through the forest, I felt the wind brushing my face. It felt so great and free. Suddenly the bike hit a fallen branch and we went flying off the bike. Lying on the ground, I felt dizzy. I checked myself for injuries and saw some but they didn't upset me. "David!" I shouted out anxiously. "Hey," said a voice. I turned my head and it was David, who was standing behind me, holding my broken bike. At the sight of my disabled bike, I was so sad that I couldn't hold back my tears. It took David some time to calm me down. 注意： 1. 续写的词数应为150左右。 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: When we realized it was time to walk home, we found ourselves lost. Paragraph 2: It was completely dark when we saw fireworks being set off in the distance. 【高分范文实战】 Paragraph 1: When we realized it was time to walk home, we found ourselves lost. Catching sight of the darkening forest and endless trees, a great wave of panic was welling up in my heart and surging through my chest. So terrified was I that I burst into tears, with my heart in my mouth. Seized by a sense of helplessness, I was rooted to the spot, with the cold wind howling around me, only in hope of a miracle. After what seemed like a century, David cast a nervous glance at me and comforted me. Through my mind flashed an idea: "Stay calm, and we can find a way out!" Upon this, without the slightest hesitation, we gathered our courage and walked towards a possible path. Paragraph 2: It was completely dark when we saw fireworks being set off in the distance. Exceedingly excited and hopeful, with my eyes wide open in disbelief, I pointed at the light. Looking at the bright sparks in the sky, something indescribable pulled at my heartstrings; with tears of joy welling up and clouding my vision, we ran towards the direction as fast as our legs could carry us. Overwhelmed by a wave of wild joy, I was floating in the river of relief when we finally saw Kristy holding the fireworks. Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on my face, like a lost boat finding its lighthouse. Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the power of calmness in crisis and the warmth of family love. 【解析】 【原文大意】 作者六岁生日和表亲Kristy、邻居David去森林骑车，不小心摔倒摔坏了自行车，且迷失在森林里。 【段落续写】 ①由第一段首句“当我们意识到该回家时，发现迷路了”可知，第一段描写发现迷路后的恐慌、害怕，以及冷静下来寻找出路的过程。 ②由第二段首句“天彻底黑了，此时我们看到远处有人在放烟花”可知，第二段描写看到烟花的狂喜、循着光亮找到家人的过程，以及对危机中冷静和亲情力量的感悟。 【高分句型】 ①So terrified was I that I burst into tears, with my heart in my mouth. (so...that...部分倒装；with复合结构) ②Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the power of calmness in crisis and the warmth of family love. (it作形式主语；否定词never倒装) 专练2：救助受伤小鸟与归巢（生命救助） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was a little girl, I liked to listen to my father telling his childhood stories. The image of him and his friends climbing to the top of a tree to get a bird's nest hung in my mind for quite a while. I dreamed of peeking into a bird's nest that had eggs or small baby birds inside, like my father often did when he was a boy. But that was almost impossible. First, youngsters today are not allowed to climb trees. People think it is too dangerous. Second, we don't have so many birds' nests around anymore. The healthy eco-system of Dad's youth is slowly disappearing. However, one day, my dream came true. It was a Saturday morning. My dad's best friend, who I call Uncle Ben, invited us to visit his business. He sold used cars at his shop outside the city. There were a lot of trees around it. Uncle Ben led us through the parking lot, pointing out all kinds of different cars — different makes, models, years and prices. As we walked across the lot, we suddenly found something unusual — a bird's nest on top of the back wheel of a big truck! I was excited to be so close. I looked at the nest in amazement. It was real — a real bird's nest with a few eggs sitting inside. The nest looked strong and warm. How smart the little bird was to make such a pretty nest. And how creative it was to build the nest on the wheel for shelter in this cold Canadian weather! Uncle Ben took a close look, but he was surprised to find a baby bird was hanging down a branch under the nest, with one of its legs hurt badly. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Watching the little bird struggling to move, I felt a deep sense of responsibility. Paragraph 2: The mother bird circled several times over our head. 【高分范文实战】 Paragraph 1: Watching the little bird struggling to move, I felt a deep sense of responsibility. Catching sight of its injured leg, a great wave of pity was welling up in my heart and surging through my chest. So heartbroken was I that I approached it gently, with my heart in my mouth. Seized by a sense of tenderness, I was kneeling there, with my hands cupping the tiny creature softly. After what seemed like a century, I finished binding its leg with a twig and some soft cloth. Through my mind flashed an idea: "Every life deserves our care!" Upon this, without the slightest hesitation, I carefully placed it back into the nest. Paragraph 2: The mother bird circled several times over our head. Exceedingly anxious and cautious, she landed near the nest, with her eyes darting between us and her baby. Looking at the mother bird, something indescribable pulled at my heartstrings; with tears welling up and clouding my vision, I stepped back to give them space. Overwhelmed by a wave of warmth, I saw the mother bird nuzzling her baby gently. Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on my face, like sunshine melting the winter ice. Deep inside, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of kindness to wildlife and the beauty of respecting life. 【解析】 【原文大意】 作者在叔叔的停车场意外发现了一个鸟巢，并发现一只受伤的小鸟挂在鸟巢下的树枝上。 【段落续写】 ①由第一段首句“看着小鸟挣扎，我感到深深的责任感”可知，第一段描写作者心生怜悯、小心翼翼为小鸟包扎伤腿，并将其放回鸟巢的过程。 ②由第二段首句“母鸟在我们头顶盘旋了几圈”可知，第二段描写母鸟的警惕与温柔、作者退后给它们空间，以及人鸟和谐相处的温馨画面。 【高分句型】 ①So heartbroken was I that I approached it gently, with my heart in my mouth. (so...that...部分倒装；with复合结构) ②Deep inside, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of kindness to wildlife. (it作形式主语；否定词never倒装) 二、能力提升（进阶篇：灾难应对与敬畏自然） 专练3：洪水被困与直升机救援（自然灾害） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Mary and her parents were downstairs in the living room. Mary was looking through the windows at the endless rain outside. It had been raining non-stop for three days. She had never seen a storm this bad. It was making her nervous. The wind roared and the rain beat on the roof and windows. Dad was listening to a weather report on the radio, while Mum was putting their important documents and disaster supplies into a bag. "Mum, Dad," said Mary suddenly, "I think we should leave here right away!" "No," said Dad. "It's too late! The radio says the city has already been flooded." "We can drive our car through the floodwater! Let's just leave! I'm really scared!" cried Mary. "We can't do that, honey," explained Mum, "otherwise the moving water could wash the car away!" Mary walked to the door. She was curious to see how much water there was outside. "Don't open the door!" shouted Mum and Dad at the same time. "The water may flood in!" Dad moved the dinner table against the door, in case the floodwater forced the door open. Mum waved to Mary to sit on the sofa. "Mary, don't worry. Everything's going to be OK," she said softly, trying her best to comfort Mary. Her voice was calm, but Mary could tell she was worried too. Without saying a single word, Dad walked to the sofa, sat down and hugged his wife and daughter. The sudden silence in the house seemed to make the wind and rain more frightening outside. What could they do? All of a sudden, the dinner table moved and the door was forced open. Water poured in. Mary burst out crying. "Upstairs!" Dad ordered. They rushed to the second floor, only to find the whole neighborhood had been surrounded by water. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Just then they heard a helicopter flying in the distance. Paragraph 2: Three days later, they returned home and found their house in a mess. 【高分范文实战】 Paragraph 1: Just then they heard a helicopter flying in the distance. Catching the sound of the roaring engine, a great wave of hope was welling up in Mary's heart and surging through her chest. So excited was she that she rushed to the window, with her heart in her mouth. Seized by a sense of survival instinct, Mary was waving her flashlight frantically, with her palms soaked in sweat. After what seemed like a century, the rope ladder was lowered. Through her mind flashed an idea: "Hold on, and we will survive!" Upon this, without the slightest hesitation, the family climbed up the ladder one by one, driven by a strong determination to live. Paragraph 2: Three days later, they returned home and found their house in a mess. Exceedingly exhausted but grateful, with their clothes stained with mud, they looked at the ruined living room. Looking around, something indescribable pulled at their heartstrings; with tears welling up and clouding their vision, they hugged each other tightly. Overwhelmed by a wave of warmth, they realized they were still alive and together. Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on their faces, like sunshine piercing through the dark clouds. Deep inside, it dawned on them that never should we underestimate the profound power of calmness in crisis and the unbreakable bond of family love. 【解析】 【原文大意】 Mary一家遭遇洪水被困二楼，在绝望之际，听到了直升机的声音。 【段落续写】 ①由第一段首句“就在那时，他们听到远处有直升机的声音”可知，第一段描写看到希望的激动、挥舞手电筒求救的紧张，以及成功登上直升机获救的过程。 ②由第二段首句“三天后，他们回家发现家里一片狼藉”可知，第二段描写面对破败家园时的释然、家人相拥的温暖，以及感悟灾难中的冷静与亲情。 【高分句型】 ①So excited was she that she rushed to the window, with her heart in her mouth. (so...that...部分倒装；with复合结构) ②Deep inside, it dawned on them that never should we underestimate the profound power of calmness in crisis and the unbreakable bond of family love. (it作形式主语；否定词never倒装) 专练4：救助受伤天鹅与善意传递（动物保护） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When Ariel rode her bike to Jamaica Bay Wildlife Refuge in Queens, New York, last November, she planned to go hiking and bird-watching. After a one-mile walk, she found a beautiful female swan near the water's edge. Ariel, 30, who had worked at the Wild Bird Fund health recovery center, knew that some swans can be aggressive. But as she approached this one, it didn't move. Ariel found that the swan which buried its neck in its wings seemed to have lost its all energy. She was certain that the bird needed medical attention. Ariel took off her jacket and covered the bird's head to keep it calm, carefully picked it up, and carried it in her arms gently. And then a thought struck her: What do I do now? Her best choice was the recovery center, but that was across the East River and clear on the other side of town. How was she going to transport a 17-pound swan on her bike all that way? Luckily, some warm-hearted strangers driving by offered her, her bike, and the swan a lift to a nearby subway station. On the subway, no one seemed particularly to focus on the feathered passenger. "One man was sitting right in front of me on his phone. I don't know if he noticed there was a swan in front of him." said Ariel. Ariel called the center, and Tristan Higginbotham, an animal-care manager, picked her up at the subway station and drove the bird, the bike, and the rescuer to the center. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: There, the staff members along with Ariel gave the swan careful examination. Paragraph 2: Soon Ariel's story got spread online. 【高分范文实战】 Paragraph 1: There, the staff members along with Ariel gave the swan careful examination. Catching sight of the exhausted bird, a great wave of sympathy was welling up in their hearts. So concentrated were they that they stood around the table, with their eyes fixed firmly on the swan. Seized by a sense of responsibility, they worked meticulously, with their hands gentle and steady. After what seemed like a century, they found the cause: lead poisoning from fishing lines. Through Ariel's mind flashed an idea: "We must save her!" Upon this, without the slightest hesitation, the team administered the treatment and offered the best care. Paragraph 2: Soon Ariel's story got spread online. Exceedingly moved and inspired, with netizens' eyes glued to the screen, the post received thousands of likes. Looking at the warm comments, something indescribable pulled at their heartstrings; with tears of joy welling up and clouding their vision, people praised Ariel's selfless love. Overwhelmed by a wave of warmth, the internet was filled with positive energy. Unintentionally, a bright and broad smile bloomed on Ariel's face, like sunshine melting the winter ice. Deep down, it dawned on Ariel that never should we underestimate the profound power of kindness to animals and the ripple effect of public empathy. 【解析】 【原文大意】 Ariel在野生动物保护区救助了一只奄奄一息的天鹅，并在好心人和地铁工作人员的帮助下将其送到救助中心。 【段落续写】 ①由第一段首句“在那里，工作人员和Ariel对天鹅进行了仔细检查”可知，第一段描写检查过程的专注、找到病因（铅中毒）的紧张，以及紧急救治的过程。 ②由第二段首句“很快，Ariel的故事在网上传开了”可知，第二段描写网友的感动与点赞、Ariel内心的温暖，以及善意在网络上传递的力量。 【高分句型】 ①So concentrated were they that they stood around the table, with their eyes fixed firmly on the swan. (so...that...部分倒装；with复合结构) ②Deep down, it dawned on Ariel that never should we underestimate the profound power of kindness to animals and the ripple effect of public empathy. (it作形式主语；否定词never倒装) 专练5：试图驯服狐狸与尊重自由（野生动物互动） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写最后一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My story started one autumn morning, at the bend on a path. I was 13 years old, and was on the way to school. It was the first time I had caught sight of a fox. Fascinated to the point that I forgot all fear, I dared to go up to it. I had never come so close to a wild animal. There was nobody else around, only me and the fox. "Hey, fox!" I tried to greet it, though my voice was so weak it felt like I was saying hello to myself. It didn't hear me. It stayed there and I watched it. My heart was beating flat out. It was so cute. For a moment, I thought I might be able to touch it. Throughout the day at school, I could only think of the fox at the big beech tree. At my return to the place where we met, I was sure I'd find it there. And I did. This time I gathered a little bit more courage and called out to it, "Fox!" Of course it escaped. But that only made me long to meet it again. I decided that if I could find its kennel and catch it, I would try and tame it, making it my friend. Thus, I spent most of my free time in the forests trying to find the fox during the following months. But I never saw it again before winter came. During the winter, I followed its footprints far across the fields. Suddenly I was alarmed by the howling of wolves near me. I ran away frightened, stumbled and hurt my ankle. It healed very slowly, so that I had to stay at home during the winter, reading a book about animals of the forest and foxes. When spring arrived, I was free again. I looked for fox kennels and waited for my fox. To my amazement, it had got young ones but kept moving because of my observations; therefore I decided to observe the fox from a longer distance. Finally, it would let me get close. But before that, several days had seen my distant and patient observation, during which time the fox gradually got accustomed to my presence and finally quit moving. Delighted to see its attitude transformation, I started to bring some food, put it outside the kennel and soon returned to my distant observation site to avoid disturbing and frightening the fox. Every time, it carried the food back to the kennel after cautiously sniffing. Several times later, I attempted to get close and was astonished to find that it didn't get away. What thrilled me further was that it would even initiatively walk to me and lie beside me for a while. So thrilled was I that one day I impulsively took it home, imaging to tame it with tips from my book. 注意： (1) 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； (2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 To my surprise, the day after I took it home, it fled. 【高分范文实战】 To my surprise, the day after I took it home, it fled. Catching sight of the empty cage, a great wave of shock and disappointment was welling up in my heart and surging through my chest. So regretful was I that I rushed towards the kennel, with tears welling up and clouding my vision. Seized by a sense of loss, I was rooted there in silence, with my palms clenched tightly. After what seemed like a century, I found the fox and its young ones playing in the forest. Through my mind flashed an idea: "True love means respecting freedom, not possessing it!" Upon this, without the slightest hesitation, I stepped back, leaving them alone. Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of respecting wildlife and the balance of nature. 【解析】 【原文大意】 作者遇到一只狐狸，想尽办法试图靠近并驯服它。在狐狸渐渐放下戒备后，作者将其带回家，但狐狸逃走了。 【段落续写】 ①由本段首句“令我惊讶的是，把它带回家的第二天，它逃跑了”可知，需要描写作者发现狐狸逃跑时的震惊、后悔，以及寻找狐狸的过程。 ②中间转折：看到狐狸和幼崽在森林中的和谐画面。 ③结局升华：意识到喜爱不等于占有，尊重自由才是真正的爱。用倒装句点明主旨，完成情感升华。 【高分句型】 ①So regretful was I that I rushed towards the kennel, with tears welling up and clouding my vision. (so...that...部分倒装；with复合结构) ②Deep down, it dawned on me that never should we underestimate the profound power of respecting wildlife and the balance of nature. (it作形式主语；否定词never倒装) 1 / 11 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $