Unit 2 Making a Difference单元写作作业设计-2026-2027学年高中英语外研版必修第三册

外研版必修三 Unit 2　Making a Difference 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报 "Making a Difference" 栏目正在以 “A Quiet Hero Next Door” 为题征稿，主题是“平凡人的不平凡”。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位你身边的普通人，讲述他/她如何用一件件小事改变着身边的人，内容包括： 1. 介绍这位普通人是谁； 2. 讲述他/她做过的具体事情； 3. 说明他/她为什么打动你。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 短文标题已给出，不计入总词数。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 人物介绍类短文（英文报征稿）：开门见山点人物—具体事例—带来的改变—点题升华，无称呼落款。 人称 第三人称（he/she）介绍人物事迹，第一人称（I）表达所见与感受。 时态 叙述事迹用一般过去时；坚持多年的事情用现在完成时；评价与感受用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：引出人物，一句话点明他为什么特别；Para 2：具体事迹（两三件小事，有时间、地点、细节）；Para 3：这些事带来的改变；Para 4：为什么打动我 + 呼应栏目主题。 要点 事例必须“小而真”：修鞋不收老人钱、雨中送伞、给山区孩子捐鞋皆可入文；细节越具体越动人，切忌写成“他是个好人”式的空话。 语气 平实而有温度，用细节说话，让读者自己被打动；结尾用一句金句升华，如 “Ordinary people, extraordinary kindness.” 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. volunteer n. ____________ vi. ____________ 2. ____________ vt. 捐赠；捐献 3. donation n. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 慈善；慈善机构 5. aid n./vt. ____________ 6. ____________ n. 资金 vt. 资助 7. target n. ____________ vt. ____________ 8. ____________ vt. 说服；劝服 9. determination n. ____________ 10. ____________ n. 信心 11. encourage vt. ____________ 12. ____________ adj. 感激的 13. kindness n. ____________ 14. ____________ adj. 慷慨的 15. warm-hearted adj. ____________ 16. ____________ adj. 尽心的；一心一意的 17. contribution n. ____________ 18. ____________ n. 社区 19. barrier n. ____________ 20. ____________ n. 通道；使用权 21. supply n. ____________ vt. ____________ 22. ____________ n. 设备；器材 23. well n. ____________ 24. ____________ n. 影响 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. make a difference ____________ 2. ____________ 为……筹款 3. do voluntary work ____________ 4. ____________ 把……献给 5. contribute to ____________ 6. ____________ 感激 7. care for ____________ 8. ____________ 帮助……摆脱困难 9. set up ____________ 10. ____________ 把……捐赠给…… 11. have access to ____________ 12. ____________ 遭受 13. in need ____________ 14. ____________ 打破；消除 15. work towards ____________ 16. ____________ 下定决心做 17. give up ____________ 18. ____________ 起初 19. come true ____________ 20. ____________ 被……感动 21. day after day ____________ 22. ____________ 独自；靠自己 23. call on ____________ 24. ____________ 采取行动 25. a sense of responsibility ____________ 26. ____________ 传递 27. light up ____________ 28. ____________ 只要 29. no matter how ____________ 30. ____________ 从那时起 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. He is a kind man. ____________________ 2. She often helps others. ____________________ 3. He gave away his money. ____________________ 4. It moved me deeply. ____________________ 5. He works hard. ____________________ 6. Many people were helped. ____________________ 7. We should learn from him. ____________________ 8. Small things matter. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 六岁的瑞恩得知非洲许多孩子喝不上干净的水。 　　Six-year-old Ryan learned that many children in Africa had no ________ ________ clean water. 2. 他决心攒钱为他们打一口井。 　　He was ________ ________ save money to dig a well for them. 3. 他靠做额外的家务来挣这笔钱。 　　He earned the money by ________ ________ chores around the house. 4. 起初，两千美元的目标对他来说似乎遥不可及。 　　At first, the ________ of 2,000 dollars seemed ________ ________ ________. 5. 他没有放弃，而是一步一步朝着目标努力。 　　He didn't ________ ________; instead, he kept working ________ his goal. 6. 他做的事感动了许多人，人们纷纷捐款。 　　________ he did touched many people, who ________ money one after another. 7. 终于，第一口井在乌干达的一个村庄建成了。 　　Finally, the first well was ________ ________ in a village in Uganda. 8. 清水涌出的那一刻，全村人都欢呼起来。 　　The moment clean water ________ ________, the whole village cheered. 9. 这口水井改变了成千上万人的生活。 　　The well changed the lives of ________ ________ people. 10. 后来，瑞恩建立了自己的基金会，帮助更多需要帮助的人。 　　Later, Ryan set up his own foundation to help more people ________ ________. 11. 正是这个小男孩让世界相信：一个孩子也能带来改变。 　　It was this little boy ________ made the world ________ that even a child can make a difference. 12. 只要人人都献出一点爱，世界将变成美好的人间。 　　________ ________ everyone gives a little love, the world will become a better place. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Ryan was a six-year-old boy. He decided to dig a well. 要求：用形容词短语作状语开头合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. He did extra chores. It took him four months. 要求：用 It took sb. some time to do 句型合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. What he did touched many people. They donated money. 要求：用定语从句合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. The well was built. The village had clean water. 要求：用 the moment 引导时间状语从句合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 5. He didn't give up. He kept working towards his goal. 要求：用 instead of 短语改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. Many children can drink clean water now. 要求：用 Thanks to... 开头改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. His story tells us that small acts matter. 要求：用 what 主语从句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. I was moved by his determination. 要求：用强调句强调 his determination → ____________________________________________________________ 9. If everyone does a little, the world will be better. 要求：用 as long as 改写并增强语气 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. Ordinary people can also change the world. 要求：用强调句强调 ordinary people → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） A small act of kindness can light up a whole life. 一点小小的善举，能照亮一整段人生。　（动名词短语作主语） We may not be able to do great things, but we can do small things with great love. 我们也许做不成大事，但可以用大爱做小事。　（but 对比（特蕾莎修女名言）） It is not how much we give, but how much love we put into giving, that counts. 重要的不是给予多少，而是投入了多少爱。　（强调句 + not...but...） What Ryan dug was a well; what he really dug was hope. 瑞恩挖出的是井，真正挖出的是希望。　（what 主语从句对比） Never underestimate the power of a determined heart. 永远不要低估一颗下定决心的心。　（否定祈使句） The best way to change the world is to change someone's day first. 改变世界最好的方式，是先改变某个人的一天。　（不定式作表语） Ordinary as he was, his kindness was extraordinary. 他虽平凡，善良却非凡。　（as 引导的让步状语从句倒装） Kindness, like water, flows quietly but reaches far. 善良如水，静静流淌，却能抵达远方。　（明喻） Not until the well was finished did Ryan realise how big his dream had grown. 直到水井建成，瑞恩才意识到自己的梦想已经长得多大。　（not until 的倒装） Where there is a willing heart, there is a way. 有心者，事竟成。　（where 引导的地点状语从句） What we do for others lives on long after we are gone. 我们为他人做的事，在我们离开后仍会长久留存。　（what 主语从句） The more we share, the more we have. 分享越多，拥有越多。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） A single well may seem small, but to a village it is an ocean of hope. 一口井看似很小，对一个村庄而言却是希望的海洋。　（but 对比 + 比喻） Great changes often begin with one person saying, "I will try." 伟大的改变，常常始于一个人说“我来试试”。　（动名词复合结构） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿类，情境已替换】 你校英文报 “Voices” 栏目正在以 “The Person Who Moved Me Most” 为题征稿。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位最打动你的人，内容包括： 1. 他/她是谁； 2. 一件打动你的事； 3. 你的感悟。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题按高考应用文真题中“英文报征稿”的命题形式改编，具体情境为本单元话题原创。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 A Quiet Hero Next Door 　　Every neighbourhood has its quiet heroes. Mine is Uncle Wang, a thin old man who repairs bicycles in a shed by the gate. 　　For ten years he has fixed bikes for students, charging us nothing. On rainy days, he pumps tyres for delivery riders and hands them hot tea. Last winter, he saved his spare money and bought twenty warm coats for children in a mountain village. 　　Because of him, our community has changed: young volunteers now follow him around, and the shed has become the warmest corner of the street. 　　Uncle Wang never calls himself a hero. Yet he proves what Ryan's well once proved—small hands, used kindly, can change the world. 【学生习作】 A Quiet Hero Next Door 　　Uncle Wang is my neighbour. He is a very kind man. He repairs bicycles near our gate. 　　He helps many people. He fixes bikes for students for free. He gives hot tea to workers. He also donates money to poor children. He is always happy to help. 　　I think he is a good person. We should learn from him. He makes our neighbourhood better. I like him very much. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 人物是不是“身边的普通人”？有没有一句话点明他为什么特别？ □ 事迹是否具体：有时间、有地点、有细节，而不是“他很善良”？ □ 有没有写这些事带来的改变（对人、对社区）？ □ 评价与感悟是否放在叙事之后，结尾是否回扣栏目主题？ □ 叙述事迹是否用了一般过去时/现在完成时，感悟是否用了一般现在时？ □ 是否用上了本单元词块（make a difference, raise money for, devote...to... 等）至少三个？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. volunteer n. 志愿者 vi. 自愿做 2. donate vt. 捐赠；捐献 3. donation n. 捐赠；捐款 4. charity n. 慈善；慈善机构 5. aid n./vt. 援助；帮助 6. fund n. 资金 vt. 资助 7. target n. 目标 vt. 以……为目标 8. persuade vt. 说服；劝服 9. determination n. 决心；坚定 10. confidence n. 信心 11. encourage vt. 鼓励 12. grateful adj. 感激的 13. kindness n. 善良；好意 14. generous adj. 慷慨的 15. warm-hearted adj. 热心肠的 16. devoted adj. 尽心的；一心一意的 17. contribution n. 贡献 18. community n. 社区 19. barrier n. 障碍；屏障 20. access n. 通道；使用权 21. supply n. 供应；补给 vt. 供给 22. equipment n. 设备；器材 23. well n. 水井 24. impact n. 影响 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. make a difference 产生影响；有所作为 2. raise money for 为……筹款 3. do voluntary work 做志愿工作 4. devote...to... 把……献给 5. contribute to 为……做贡献；有助于 6. be grateful to 感激 7. care for 照顾；关心 8. help out 帮助……摆脱困难 9. set up 建立；设立 10. donate...to... 把……捐赠给…… 11. have access to 有机会使用；能获得 12. suffer from 遭受 13. in need 需要帮助的 14. break down 打破；消除 15. work towards 朝着……努力 16. be determined to do 下定决心做 17. give up 放弃 18. at first 起初 19. come true 实现；成真 20. be touched by 被……感动 21. day after day 日复一日 22. on one's own 独自；靠自己 23. call on 号召；拜访 24. take action 采取行动 25. a sense of responsibility 责任感 26. pass on 传递 27. light up 点亮；照亮 28. as long as 只要 29. no matter how 无论多么 30. from then on 从那时起 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. He is a man who quietly changes the world around him. 2. Helping others has become part of her daily life. 3. He gave away what little he had. 4. I was deeply touched by what he did. 5. He spares no effort in helping those in need. 6. His kindness has touched and changed many lives. 7. His example lights the way for all of us. 8. Small acts of kindness can make a big difference. 四、教材好句精选 1. Six-year-old Ryan learned that many children in Africa had no access to clean water. 2. He was determined to save money to dig a well for them. 3. He earned the money by doing extra chores around the house. 4. At first, the target of 2,000 dollars seemed out of reach. 5. He didn't give up; instead, he kept working towards his goal. 6. What he did touched many people, who donated money one after another. 7. Finally, the first well was set up in a village in Uganda. 8. The moment clean water came out, the whole village cheered. 9. The well changed the lives of thousands of people. 10. Later, Ryan set up his own foundation to help more people in need. 11. It was this little boy who made the world believe that even a child can make a difference. 12. As long as everyone gives a little love, the world will become a better place. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. Determined to help the African children, Ryan, a six-year-old boy, decided to dig a well. 2. It took him four months of extra chores to earn the money for the well. 3. What he did touched many people, who donated money one after another. 4. The moment the well was built, the village had clean water at last. 5. Instead of giving up, he kept working towards his goal. 6. Thanks to Ryan's well, thousands of children can drink clean water today. 7. What his story tells us is that even the smallest act of kindness matters. 8. It was his determination that moved me most. 9. As long as everyone does his bit, the world will surely be a better place. 10. It is ordinary people like Ryan that quietly change the world. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿类，情境已替换】 审体裁：人物介绍类征稿短文，有标题，无称呼与落款，三段式即可。 审人称：第三人称（he）介绍人物事迹，第一人称（I）抒发感受。 审时态：叙述事迹用一般过去时或现在完成时，评价与感悟用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 点出人物（校门口的老修鞋匠）；Para 2 两件小事（低价修鞋、雨中送伞、给山区孩子捐鞋）；Para 3 感悟并点题。 审语气：平实有温度，靠细节动人，避免 “He is very kind” 式的直白夸赞。 【参考范文】 The Person Who Moved Me Most 　　The person who moves me most is Mr Chen, the old cobbler at our school gate. 　　Every morning he fixes shoes by the roadside, charging students little or nothing. One rainy afternoon, I saw him repair an old lady's umbrella for free and walk her home under his own. Later I learned he had given away more than a hundred pairs of shoes to children in mountain villages. 　　What touches me is not any single big deed, but the quiet care he puts into small things. Ordinary as he is, Mr Chen shows us that everyone can make a difference. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 外研版必修三 Unit 2　Making a Difference 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报 "Making a Difference" 栏目正在以 “A Quiet Hero Next Door” 为题征稿，主题是“平凡人的不平凡”。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位你身边的普通人，讲述他/她如何用一件件小事改变着身边的人，内容包括： 1. 介绍这位普通人是谁； 2. 讲述他/她做过的具体事情； 3. 说明他/她为什么打动你。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 短文标题已给出，不计入总词数。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 人物介绍类短文（英文报征稿）：开门见山点人物—具体事例—带来的改变—点题升华，无称呼落款。 人称 第三人称（he/she）介绍人物事迹，第一人称（I）表达所见与感受。 时态 叙述事迹用一般过去时；坚持多年的事情用现在完成时；评价与感受用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：引出人物，一句话点明他为什么特别；Para 2：具体事迹（两三件小事，有时间、地点、细节）；Para 3：这些事带来的改变；Para 4：为什么打动我 + 呼应栏目主题。 要点 事例必须“小而真”：修鞋不收老人钱、雨中送伞、给山区孩子捐鞋皆可入文；细节越具体越动人，切忌写成“他是个好人”式的空话。 语气 平实而有温度，用细节说话，让读者自己被打动；结尾用一句金句升华，如 “Ordinary people, extraordinary kindness.” 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. volunteer n. 志愿者 vi. 自愿做 2. donate vt. 捐赠；捐献 3. donation n. 捐赠；捐款 4. charity n. 慈善；慈善机构 5. aid n./vt. 援助；帮助 6. fund n. 资金 vt. 资助 7. target n. 目标 vt. 以……为目标 8. persuade vt. 说服；劝服 9. determination n. 决心；坚定 10. confidence n. 信心 11. encourage vt. 鼓励 12. grateful adj. 感激的 13. kindness n. 善良；好意 14. generous adj. 慷慨的 15. warm-hearted adj. 热心肠的 16. devoted adj. 尽心的；一心一意的 17. contribution n. 贡献 18. community n. 社区 19. barrier n. 障碍；屏障 20. access n. 通道；使用权 21. supply n. 供应；补给 vt. 供给 22. equipment n. 设备；器材 23. well n. 水井 24. impact n. 影响 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. make a difference 产生影响；有所作为 2. raise money for 为……筹款 3. do voluntary work 做志愿工作 4. devote...to... 把……献给 5. contribute to 为……做贡献；有助于 6. be grateful to 感激 7. care for 照顾；关心 8. help out 帮助……摆脱困难 9. set up 建立；设立 10. donate...to... 把……捐赠给…… 11. have access to 有机会使用；能获得 12. suffer from 遭受 13. in need 需要帮助的 14. break down 打破；消除 15. work towards 朝着……努力 16. be determined to do 下定决心做 17. give up 放弃 18. at first 起初 19. come true 实现；成真 20. be touched by 被……感动 21. day after day 日复一日 22. on one's own 独自；靠自己 23. call on 号召；拜访 24. take action 采取行动 25. a sense of responsibility 责任感 26. pass on 传递 27. light up 点亮；照亮 28. as long as 只要 29. no matter how 无论多么 30. from then on 从那时起 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. He is a kind man. He is a man who quietly changes the world around him. 2. She often helps others. Helping others has become part of her daily life. 3. He gave away his money. He gave away what little he had. 4. It moved me deeply. I was deeply touched by what he did. 5. He works hard. He spares no effort in helping those in need. 6. Many people were helped. His kindness has touched and changed many lives. 7. We should learn from him. His example lights the way for all of us. 8. Small things matter. Small acts of kindness can make a big difference. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 六岁的瑞恩得知非洲许多孩子喝不上干净的水。 　　Six-year-old Ryan learned that many children in Africa had no access to clean water. 2. 他决心攒钱为他们打一口井。 　　He was determined to save money to dig a well for them. 3. 他靠做额外的家务来挣这笔钱。 　　He earned the money by doing extra chores around the house. 4. 起初，两千美元的目标对他来说似乎遥不可及。 　　At first, the target of 2,000 dollars seemed out of reach. 5. 他没有放弃，而是一步一步朝着目标努力。 　　He didn't give up; instead, he kept working towards his goal. 6. 他做的事感动了许多人，人们纷纷捐款。 　　What he did touched many people, who donated money one after another. 7. 终于，第一口井在乌干达的一个村庄建成了。 　　Finally, the first well was set up in a village in Uganda. 8. 清水涌出的那一刻，全村人都欢呼起来。 　　The moment clean water came out, the whole village cheered. 9. 这口水井改变了成千上万人的生活。 　　The well changed the lives of thousands of people. 10. 后来，瑞恩建立了自己的基金会，帮助更多需要帮助的人。 　　Later, Ryan set up his own foundation to help more people in need. 11. 正是这个小男孩让世界相信：一个孩子也能带来改变。 　　It was this little boy who made the world believe that even a child can make a difference. 12. 只要人人都献出一点爱，世界将变成美好的人间。 　　As long as everyone gives a little love, the world will become a better place. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. Ryan was a six-year-old boy. He decided to dig a well. 要求：用形容词短语作状语开头合并 → Determined to help the African children, Ryan, a six-year-old boy, decided to dig a well. 2. He did extra chores. It took him four months. 要求：用 It took sb. some time to do 句型合并 → It took him four months of extra chores to earn the money for the well. 3. What he did touched many people. They donated money. 要求：用定语从句合并 → What he did touched many people, who donated money one after another. 4. The well was built. The village had clean water. 要求：用 the moment 引导时间状语从句合并 → The moment the well was built, the village had clean water at last. 5. He didn't give up. He kept working towards his goal. 要求：用 instead of 短语改写 → Instead of giving up, he kept working towards his goal. 6. Many children can drink clean water now. 要求：用 Thanks to... 开头改写 → Thanks to Ryan's well, thousands of children can drink clean water today. 7. His story tells us that small acts matter. 要求：用 what 主语从句改写 → What his story tells us is that even the smallest act of kindness matters. 8. I was moved by his determination. 要求：用强调句强调 his determination → It was his determination that moved me most. 9. If everyone does a little, the world will be better. 要求：用 as long as 改写并增强语气 → As long as everyone does his bit, the world will surely be a better place. 10. Ordinary people can also change the world. 要求：用强调句强调 ordinary people → It is ordinary people like Ryan that quietly change the world. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） A small act of kindness can light up a whole life. 一点小小的善举，能照亮一整段人生。　（动名词短语作主语） We may not be able to do great things, but we can do small things with great love. 我们也许做不成大事，但可以用大爱做小事。　（but 对比（特蕾莎修女名言）） It is not how much we give, but how much love we put into giving, that counts. 重要的不是给予多少，而是投入了多少爱。　（强调句 + not...but...） What Ryan dug was a well; what he really dug was hope. 瑞恩挖出的是井，真正挖出的是希望。　（what 主语从句对比） Never underestimate the power of a determined heart. 永远不要低估一颗下定决心的心。　（否定祈使句） The best way to change the world is to change someone's day first. 改变世界最好的方式，是先改变某个人的一天。　（不定式作表语） Ordinary as he was, his kindness was extraordinary. 他虽平凡，善良却非凡。　（as 引导的让步状语从句倒装） Kindness, like water, flows quietly but reaches far. 善良如水，静静流淌，却能抵达远方。　（明喻） Not until the well was finished did Ryan realise how big his dream had grown. 直到水井建成，瑞恩才意识到自己的梦想已经长得多大。　（not until 的倒装） Where there is a willing heart, there is a way. 有心者，事竟成。　（where 引导的地点状语从句） What we do for others lives on long after we are gone. 我们为他人做的事，在我们离开后仍会长久留存。　（what 主语从句） The more we share, the more we have. 分享越多，拥有越多。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） A single well may seem small, but to a village it is an ocean of hope. 一口井看似很小，对一个村庄而言却是希望的海洋。　（but 对比 + 比喻） Great changes often begin with one person saying, "I will try." 伟大的改变，常常始于一个人说“我来试试”。　（动名词复合结构） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿类，情境已替换】 你校英文报 “Voices” 栏目正在以 “The Person Who Moved Me Most” 为题征稿。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位最打动你的人，内容包括： 1. 他/她是谁； 2. 一件打动你的事； 3. 你的感悟。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题按高考应用文真题中“英文报征稿”的命题形式改编，具体情境为本单元话题原创。 【审题建模】 审体裁：人物介绍类征稿短文，有标题，无称呼与落款，三段式即可。 审人称：第三人称（he）介绍人物事迹，第一人称（I）抒发感受。 审时态：叙述事迹用一般过去时或现在完成时，评价与感悟用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 点出人物（校门口的老修鞋匠）；Para 2 两件小事（低价修鞋、雨中送伞、给山区孩子捐鞋）；Para 3 感悟并点题。 审语气：平实有温度，靠细节动人，避免 “He is very kind” 式的直白夸赞。 【参考范文】 The Person Who Moved Me Most 　　The person who moves me most is Mr Chen, the old cobbler at our school gate. 　　Every morning he fixes shoes by the roadside, charging students little or nothing. One rainy afternoon, I saw him repair an old lady's umbrella for free and walk her home under his own. Later I learned he had given away more than a hundred pairs of shoes to children in mountain villages. 　　What touches me is not any single big deed, but the quiet care he puts into small things. Ordinary as he is, Mr Chen shows us that everyone can make a difference. 【亮点句式】 ① The person who moves me most is...（定语从句开头，直接点题） ② charging students little or nothing（现在分词作伴随状语，一句话带出细节） ③ What touches me is not...but...（what 主语从句 + not...but 对比，评价有层次） ④ Ordinary as he is...（as 让步倒装收尾，呼应栏目主题） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 A Quiet Hero Next Door 　　Every neighbourhood has its quiet heroes. Mine is Uncle Wang, a thin old man who repairs bicycles in a shed by the gate. 　　For ten years he has fixed bikes for students, charging us nothing. On rainy days, he pumps tyres for delivery riders and hands them hot tea. Last winter, he saved his spare money and bought twenty warm coats for children in a mountain village. 　　Because of him, our community has changed: young volunteers now follow him around, and the shed has become the warmest corner of the street. 　　Uncle Wang never calls himself a hero. Yet he proves what Ryan's well once proved—small hands, used kindly, can change the world. 【学生习作】 A Quiet Hero Next Door 　　Uncle Wang is my neighbour. He is a very kind man. He repairs bicycles near our gate. 　　He helps many people. He fixes bikes for students for free. He gives hot tea to workers. He also donates money to poor children. He is always happy to help. 　　I think he is a good person. We should learn from him. He makes our neighbourhood better. I like him very much. 【习作点评】 优点：选材合适，写的是身边的普通人；事迹列举清楚，没有跑题；篇幅达标，语言基本无误。 问题一：只有罗列没有画面。“He fixes bikes for students for free” 之后应有一个具体场景：什么时间、为谁、他蹲在寒风里敲了多久，细节比形容词更打动人。 问题二：形容词代替叙事。“very kind / a good person” 出现多次，属于空泛评价；评价应放在结尾，用事例支撑，先叙后议。 问题三：句式单调，缺少连接词与从句；可加入 What touches me is...、Ordinary as he is... 等句式提升层次。 问题四：结尾没有点题。栏目主题是 Making a difference，最后应回扣一句 “small acts can make a big difference”，否则有头无尾。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：用“小而真”的事例打动人。学瑞恩的写法：老师的一句话、四个月的家务、第一口井——写人物时选两三件小事，一件写足细节，胜过十件一笔带过。 得分点二：让改变“看得见”。不要停在“他很善良”，要写他带来的影响：孩子们跟着学、街坊们互帮互助，用现在完成时写 “has changed”，体现影响的延续。 得分点三：结尾要有金句点题。用 What he did proves that... 或 Ordinary as he is... 收束，并嵌入 make a difference、devote...to... 等本单元词块，让主题和语言同时升华。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $