Unit 5 What an Adventure!单元写作作业设计-2026-2027学年高中英语外研版必修第三册

外研版必修三 Unit 5　What an Adventure! 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报 “My Adventure” 栏目正在征稿，鼓励同学们分享自己的冒险经历。请你以 “The Mountain Taught Me” 为题写一篇短文投稿，记叙一次你的冒险经历（如登山、徒步、迷路等），内容包括： 1. 叙述这次经历的经过； 2. 描述当时的恐惧与你如何克服； 3. 谈谈这次经历带给你的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 短文标题已给出，不计入总词数。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙文（英文报征稿）：交代背景—叙述经过—描写高潮—抒发感悟，情节要有起伏。 人称 第一人称（I/we）叙述亲身经历；写同伴时用 he/she/we。 时态 叙述经过用一般过去时；写当时的心理可用过去进行时；谈收获用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：交代时间、地点、与谁同行、为何出发；Para 2：途中经过，按时间推进写困难（天黑、迷路、体力不支）；Para 3：最恐惧的一刻与我如何克服，用慢镜头加心理描写；Para 4：登顶或脱险后的收获，回扣“冒险是否值得”。 要点 险情要具体（浓雾、陡坡、暴雨），克服要真实（互相鼓励、冷静判断、咬牙坚持）；收获要与“勇气、成长”挂钩，切忌写成流水账。 语气 紧张—释然—自豪，情绪有起伏；多用短句和感叹句渲染紧张气氛，高潮处可用倒装或强调句。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. adventure n. ____________ 2. ____________ n./vt. 危险；冒险 3. climb v./n. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 山峰；顶峰 5. attempt n. ____________ vt. ____________ 6. ____________ n. 氧气 7. freezing adj. ____________ 8. ____________ adj. 极端的；极度的 9. challenge n. ____________ vt. ____________ 10. ____________ vt. 克服；战胜 11. deserve vt. ____________ 12. ____________ n. 回报；奖赏 13. determination n. ____________ 14. ____________ n. 勇气 15. explore vt. ____________ 16. ____________ n. 探险家 17. survive vi. ____________ 18. ____________ adj. 恐惧的 19. exhausted adj. ____________ 20. ____________ adj. 陡峭的 21. path n. ____________ 22. ____________ n. 向导 23. achievement n. ____________ 24. ____________ adj. 自信的 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. take a risk ____________ 2. ____________ 接受挑战 3. set off ____________ 4. ____________ 尝试做 5. be worth doing ____________ 6. ____________ 直面恐惧 7. lose one's way ____________ 8. ____________ 保持冷静 9. catch one's breath ____________ 10. ____________ 在……脚下 11. look up at ____________ 12. ____________ 一步一步地 13. cheer sb. on ____________ 14. ____________ 鼓励某人做 15. give up halfway ____________ 16. ____________ 用完；耗尽 17. in the distance ____________ 18. ____________ 令某人欣慰的是 19. at last ____________ 20. ____________ 登顶 21. be proud of ____________ 22. ____________ 成就感 23. go beyond ____________ 24. ____________ 互相信任 25. depend on ____________ 26. ____________ 高达 27. no matter what ____________ 28. ____________ 挣扎着站起来 29. turn back ____________ 30. ____________ 从那时起 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. It was dangerous, but I didn't give up. ____________________ 2. I was very afraid. ____________________ 3. We finally got to the top. ____________________ 4. The mountain is high. ____________________ 5. It was an unforgettable experience. ____________________ 6. I learned a lot from it. ____________________ 7. We helped each other. ____________________ 8. Adventure is exciting. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. “为什么要攀登珠穆朗玛峰？”马洛里的回答很简单：“因为山在那里。” 　　________ climb Qomolangma? Mallory's answer was simple: "Because it's there." 2. 珠穆朗玛峰是世界最高峰，海拔高达8844.43米。 　　Qomolangma, the world's highest mountain, ________ 8,844.43 metres above sea ________. 3. 登山者必须面对严寒、缺氧和狂风。 　　Climbers have to face freezing cold, ________ oxygen and strong ________. 4. 尽管危险重重，仍有人不断向峰顶发起挑战。 　　Despite all the ________, people keep ________ the summit. 5. 每一步都可能是最后一步，但没有人回头。 　　Every step could be the ________, but no one ________ ________. 6. 山顶的风景属于那些坚持到最后的人。 　　The view from the top ________ ________ those who hold on to the end. 7. 那一刻，我们所有的疲惫仿佛都消散了。 　　At that moment, all our ________ seemed to ________ ________. 8. 我的手冻得发麻，心却狂跳不止。 　　My hands were ________ ________, and my heart was beating ________. 9. 正是同伴的鼓励让我坚持了下来。 　　It was my companion's encouragement that ________ ________ ________. 10. 站在山顶，我觉得一切都值得。 　　________ on the summit, I felt it was all ________. 11. 冒险的价值不在于山有多高，而在于我们超越了什么。 　　The value of adventure lies not in ________ ________ the mountain is, but in what we ________ ________. 12. 最重要的不是胜利，而是敢于尝试。 　　What ________ is not winning, but ________ ________ ________. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. It was dangerous. We still went on. 要求：用 as 引导让步状语从句倒装合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. We walked for six hours. We reached the top. 要求：用 after doing 结构合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. I was very tired. I kept moving. 要求：用 exhausted 引导的形容词短语作状语合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. The wind blew hard. We put up the tent. 要求：用 with 复合结构合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 5. We saw the sunrise. We forgot all the pain. 要求：用 the moment 引导时间状语从句合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. If you don't face your fear, you will never grow. 要求：用 unless 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. It is an experience I will never forget. 要求：用 Never shall I... 的倒装句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. The mountain taught me to be brave. 要求：用 what 主语从句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 9. Standing on the top, we felt proud. 要求：用 so...that 的倒装句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. I think the risk is worth taking. 要求：加一个 for 引导的原因状语从句增强说服力 → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Because it's there. 因为山就在那里。　（短句点题（马洛里名言）） Adventure is worthwhile in itself. 冒险本身就值得一试。　（反身代词强调（阿蒙森名言）） The greatest risk is not taking one. 最大的冒险，是不去冒险。　（对称警句） It is not the mountain we conquer, but ourselves. 我们征服的不是高山，而是自己。　（not...but...（希拉里名言）） Only those who dare to lose sight of the shore can discover new oceans. 只有敢于看不见海岸的人，才能发现新的大洋。　（only 引导的强调 + 定语从句） Fear is a fire to be walked through, not a wall to stop at. 恐惧是要穿越的火焰，不是要止步的墙。　（not...but... + 不定式作定语） The higher we climb, the smaller our worries become. 我们爬得越高，烦恼就越小。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） Never measure a mountain until you reach the top. 登顶之前，不要去丈量高山。　（否定祈使 + until） What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies within us. 与内心相比，身后与眼前的事都微不足道。　（what 从句排比（爱默生名言）） A ship in harbour is safe, but that is not what ships are built for. 港湾里的船很安全，但那不是造船的目的。　（but 对比 + what 表语从句） So tired was I that every step forward felt like a victory. 我累到每前进一步都像一场胜利。　（so...that 的倒装） Courage is not the absence of fear, but the triumph over it. 勇敢不是没有恐惧，而是战胜恐惧。　（not...but...（曼德拉名言）） The path may disappear, but the will to move on never does. 路可能消失，前行的意志永远不会。　（but 对比） Every summit climbed quietly becomes part of who you are. 每一次登顶，都悄悄成为你的一部分。　（过去分词作后置定语 + who 宾语从句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿类，情境已替换】 你校英文报 “Adventure” 栏目正在就 “Is Adventure Worth the Risk?” 话题征稿。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 简述一次冒险经历； 2. 谈谈你认为冒险是否值得； 3. 给同学们提一条建议。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题按高考应用文真题中“英文报话题征稿”的命题形式改编，具体情境为本单元话题原创。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 The Mountain Taught Me 　　Last National Day holiday, my classmates and I set off to climb a mountain near our city, hoping to see the sunrise from the top. 　　We started at four in the morning. Halfway up, my legs turned to water and the steep path ahead disappeared into darkness. "Shall we turn back?" I asked. Nobody answered, but nobody moved down either. 　　It was Xiaohui who broke the silence: "Step by step." So we did—hundred steps, rest, another hundred. My heart was pounding wildly, yet my feet kept climbing. The moment we saw the first gold light spill over the sea of clouds, all our tiredness melted away. 　　Now I understand why climbers answer "Because it's there." The mountain taught me that fear shrinks to nothing, one brave step at a time. 【学生习作】 The Mountain Taught Me 　　Last holiday I climbed a mountain with my classmates. We got up very early and began to climb at four in the morning. 　　The mountain was very high. I was very tired. My legs hurt and I wanted to give up. But my friends said, "Don't stop!" So we kept climbing slowly. 　　At last we saw the sunrise. It was very beautiful. We were all happy. I learned that we should not give up when things are hard. It was a good trip. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 时间、地点、同行人、出发目的是否交代清楚？ □ 最危险/最恐惧的一刻是否放慢了镜头，写出细节与心理？ □ “如何克服”是否真实可信（互相鼓励、冷静坚持），而非奇迹式脱险？ □ 收获是否与勇气、成长挂钩，并回扣标题或“冒险是否值得”？ □ 叙述是否用一般过去时，谈收获是否切换为一般现在时？ □ 是否用上了本单元词块（set off, take a risk, step by step 等）至少三个？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. adventure n. 冒险；奇遇 2. risk n./vt. 危险；冒险 3. climb v./n. 攀登；爬 4. peak n. 山峰；顶峰 5. attempt n. 尝试；努力 vt. 试图 6. oxygen n. 氧气 7. freezing adj. 极冷的；结冰的 8. extreme adj. 极端的；极度的 9. challenge n. 挑战 vt. 向……挑战 10. overcome vt. 克服；战胜 11. deserve vt. 值得；应得 12. reward n. 回报；奖赏 13. determination n. 决心；毅力 14. courage n. 勇气 15. explore vt. 探险；探索 16. explorer n. 探险家 17. survive vi. 幸存；活下来 18. terrified adj. 恐惧的 19. exhausted adj. 筋疲力尽的 20. steep adj. 陡峭的 21. path n. 小路；路径 22. guide n. 向导 23. achievement n. 成就；成绩 24. confident adj. 自信的 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. take a risk 冒险 2. take on challenges 接受挑战 3. set off 出发；动身 4. make an attempt to do 尝试做 5. be worth doing 值得做 6. face the fear 直面恐惧 7. lose one's way 迷路 8. keep calm 保持冷静 9. catch one's breath 喘口气；屏息 10. at the foot of 在……脚下 11. look up at 抬头看 12. step by step 一步一步地 13. cheer sb. on 为某人加油 14. encourage sb. to do 鼓励某人做 15. give up halfway 半途而废 16. run out of 用完；耗尽 17. in the distance 在远处 18. to one's relief 令某人欣慰的是 19. at last 最终；终于 20. reach the top 登顶 21. be proud of 为……骄傲 22. a sense of achievement 成就感 23. go beyond 超越 24. trust each other 互相信任 25. depend on 依靠；取决于 26. as high as 高达 27. no matter what 无论什么 28. struggle to one's feet 挣扎着站起来 29. turn back 返回；折回 30. from then on 从那时起 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. Dangerous as it was, I refused to give up. 2. My heart was pounding, and every step took all my courage. 3. At last, we stood on the top, breathing hard and laughing. 4. The path seemed to climb forever into the clouds. 5. Never shall I forget that golden morning on the ridge. 6. What the mountain taught me, no textbook ever could. 7. It was each other's encouragement that carried us to the top. 8. Adventure is not the absence of fear, but the courage that goes beyond it. 四、教材好句精选 1. Why climb Qomolangma? Mallory's answer was simple: "Because it's there." 2. Qomolangma, the world's highest mountain, rises 8,844.43 metres above sea level. 3. Climbers have to face freezing cold, thin oxygen and strong winds. 4. Despite all the risks, people keep challenging the summit. 5. Every step could be the last, but no one turns back. 6. The view from the top belongs to those who hold on to the end. 7. At that moment, all our tiredness seemed to melt away. 8. My hands were frozen numb, and my heart was beating wildly. 9. It was my companion's encouragement that kept me going. 10. Standing on the summit, I felt it was all worthwhile. 11. The value of adventure lies not in how high the mountain is, but in what we go beyond. 12. What matters is not winning, but daring to try. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. Dangerous as it was, we still pressed on. 2. After climbing for six hours in the dark, we finally reached the top. 3. Exhausted and breathless, I still kept moving one step at a time. 4. We put up the tent with the wind howling around us. 5. The moment we saw the sunrise, we forgot all the pain. 6. Unless you face your fear, you will never truly grow. 7. Never shall I forget that misty morning on the mountain path. 8. What the mountain taught me was to respect nature and to be brave. 9. So proud were we that we shouted our names to the valley below. 10. I believe the risk is worth taking, for not all treasures are found on safe roads. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿类，情境已替换】 审体裁：议论性短文（话题征稿），有标题，叙事与议论结合。 审人称：第一人称（I/we）叙述经历并亮观点。 审时态：叙述经历用一般过去时；谈看法与建议用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 简述迷路经历；Para 2 亮明观点（值得，但要准备充分、敬畏自然）；Para 3 给建议并引马洛里名言收束。 审语气：观点不绝对，先叙后议；用 provided 等条件表达“有前提的赞成”，更显思辨。 【参考范文】 Is Adventure Worth the Risk? 　　Last summer, our family hiked in Yunnan. Halfway up, thick fog fell and we lost the path. For an hour we shouted, listened, and finally followed a stream downhill until we reached a village. 　　Terrified as I was that afternoon, I never regretted the trip. The fog taught me to keep calm, and the villagers who guided us home taught me that strangers can be kind. 　　So is adventure worth the risk? My answer is yes—provided we prepare well and respect nature. As Mallory said, "Because it's there." So are the courage and growth waiting on the other side of fear. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 外研版必修三 Unit 5　What an Adventure! 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报 “My Adventure” 栏目正在征稿，鼓励同学们分享自己的冒险经历。请你以 “The Mountain Taught Me” 为题写一篇短文投稿，记叙一次你的冒险经历（如登山、徒步、迷路等），内容包括： 1. 叙述这次经历的经过； 2. 描述当时的恐惧与你如何克服； 3. 谈谈这次经历带给你的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 短文标题已给出，不计入总词数。 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙文（英文报征稿）：交代背景—叙述经过—描写高潮—抒发感悟，情节要有起伏。 人称 第一人称（I/we）叙述亲身经历；写同伴时用 he/she/we。 时态 叙述经过用一般过去时；写当时的心理可用过去进行时；谈收获用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：交代时间、地点、与谁同行、为何出发；Para 2：途中经过，按时间推进写困难（天黑、迷路、体力不支）；Para 3：最恐惧的一刻与我如何克服，用慢镜头加心理描写；Para 4：登顶或脱险后的收获，回扣“冒险是否值得”。 要点 险情要具体（浓雾、陡坡、暴雨），克服要真实（互相鼓励、冷静判断、咬牙坚持）；收获要与“勇气、成长”挂钩，切忌写成流水账。 语气 紧张—释然—自豪，情绪有起伏；多用短句和感叹句渲染紧张气氛，高潮处可用倒装或强调句。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. adventure n. 冒险；奇遇 2. risk n./vt. 危险；冒险 3. climb v./n. 攀登；爬 4. peak n. 山峰；顶峰 5. attempt n. 尝试；努力 vt. 试图 6. oxygen n. 氧气 7. freezing adj. 极冷的；结冰的 8. extreme adj. 极端的；极度的 9. challenge n. 挑战 vt. 向……挑战 10. overcome vt. 克服；战胜 11. deserve vt. 值得；应得 12. reward n. 回报；奖赏 13. determination n. 决心；毅力 14. courage n. 勇气 15. explore vt. 探险；探索 16. explorer n. 探险家 17. survive vi. 幸存；活下来 18. terrified adj. 恐惧的 19. exhausted adj. 筋疲力尽的 20. steep adj. 陡峭的 21. path n. 小路；路径 22. guide n. 向导 23. achievement n. 成就；成绩 24. confident adj. 自信的 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. take a risk 冒险 2. take on challenges 接受挑战 3. set off 出发；动身 4. make an attempt to do 尝试做 5. be worth doing 值得做 6. face the fear 直面恐惧 7. lose one's way 迷路 8. keep calm 保持冷静 9. catch one's breath 喘口气；屏息 10. at the foot of 在……脚下 11. look up at 抬头看 12. step by step 一步一步地 13. cheer sb. on 为某人加油 14. encourage sb. to do 鼓励某人做 15. give up halfway 半途而废 16. run out of 用完；耗尽 17. in the distance 在远处 18. to one's relief 令某人欣慰的是 19. at last 最终；终于 20. reach the top 登顶 21. be proud of 为……骄傲 22. a sense of achievement 成就感 23. go beyond 超越 24. trust each other 互相信任 25. depend on 依靠；取决于 26. as high as 高达 27. no matter what 无论什么 28. struggle to one's feet 挣扎着站起来 29. turn back 返回；折回 30. from then on 从那时起 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. It was dangerous, but I didn't give up. Dangerous as it was, I refused to give up. 2. I was very afraid. My heart was pounding, and every step took all my courage. 3. We finally got to the top. At last, we stood on the top, breathing hard and laughing. 4. The mountain is high. The path seemed to climb forever into the clouds. 5. It was an unforgettable experience. Never shall I forget that golden morning on the ridge. 6. I learned a lot from it. What the mountain taught me, no textbook ever could. 7. We helped each other. It was each other's encouragement that carried us to the top. 8. Adventure is exciting. Adventure is not the absence of fear, but the courage that goes beyond it. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. “为什么要攀登珠穆朗玛峰？”马洛里的回答很简单：“因为山在那里。” 　　Why climb Qomolangma? Mallory's answer was simple: "Because it's there." 2. 珠穆朗玛峰是世界最高峰，海拔高达8844.43米。 　　Qomolangma, the world's highest mountain, rises 8,844.43 metres above sea level. 3. 登山者必须面对严寒、缺氧和狂风。 　　Climbers have to face freezing cold, thin oxygen and strong winds. 4. 尽管危险重重，仍有人不断向峰顶发起挑战。 　　Despite all the risks, people keep challenging the summit. 5. 每一步都可能是最后一步，但没有人回头。 　　Every step could be the last, but no one turns back. 6. 山顶的风景属于那些坚持到最后的人。 　　The view from the top belongs to those who hold on to the end. 7. 那一刻，我们所有的疲惫仿佛都消散了。 　　At that moment, all our tiredness seemed to melt away. 8. 我的手冻得发麻，心却狂跳不止。 　　My hands were frozen numb, and my heart was beating wildly. 9. 正是同伴的鼓励让我坚持了下来。 　　It was my companion's encouragement that kept me going. 10. 站在山顶，我觉得一切都值得。 　　Standing on the summit, I felt it was all worthwhile. 11. 冒险的价值不在于山有多高，而在于我们超越了什么。 　　The value of adventure lies not in how high the mountain is, but in what we go beyond. 12. 最重要的不是胜利，而是敢于尝试。 　　What matters is not winning, but daring to try. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. It was dangerous. We still went on. 要求：用 as 引导让步状语从句倒装合并 → Dangerous as it was, we still pressed on. 2. We walked for six hours. We reached the top. 要求：用 after doing 结构合并 → After climbing for six hours in the dark, we finally reached the top. 3. I was very tired. I kept moving. 要求：用 exhausted 引导的形容词短语作状语合并 → Exhausted and breathless, I still kept moving one step at a time. 4. The wind blew hard. We put up the tent. 要求：用 with 复合结构合并 → We put up the tent with the wind howling around us. 5. We saw the sunrise. We forgot all the pain. 要求：用 the moment 引导时间状语从句合并 → The moment we saw the sunrise, we forgot all the pain. 6. If you don't face your fear, you will never grow. 要求：用 unless 改写 → Unless you face your fear, you will never truly grow. 7. It is an experience I will never forget. 要求：用 Never shall I... 的倒装句改写 → Never shall I forget that misty morning on the mountain path. 8. The mountain taught me to be brave. 要求：用 what 主语从句改写 → What the mountain taught me was to respect nature and to be brave. 9. Standing on the top, we felt proud. 要求：用 so...that 的倒装句改写 → So proud were we that we shouted our names to the valley below. 10. I think the risk is worth taking. 要求：加一个 for 引导的原因状语从句增强说服力 → I believe the risk is worth taking, for not all treasures are found on safe roads. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Because it's there. 因为山就在那里。　（短句点题（马洛里名言）） Adventure is worthwhile in itself. 冒险本身就值得一试。　（反身代词强调（阿蒙森名言）） The greatest risk is not taking one. 最大的冒险，是不去冒险。　（对称警句） It is not the mountain we conquer, but ourselves. 我们征服的不是高山，而是自己。　（not...but...（希拉里名言）） Only those who dare to lose sight of the shore can discover new oceans. 只有敢于看不见海岸的人，才能发现新的大洋。　（only 引导的强调 + 定语从句） Fear is a fire to be walked through, not a wall to stop at. 恐惧是要穿越的火焰，不是要止步的墙。　（not...but... + 不定式作定语） The higher we climb, the smaller our worries become. 我们爬得越高，烦恼就越小。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） Never measure a mountain until you reach the top. 登顶之前，不要去丈量高山。　（否定祈使 + until） What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies within us. 与内心相比，身后与眼前的事都微不足道。　（what 从句排比（爱默生名言）） A ship in harbour is safe, but that is not what ships are built for. 港湾里的船很安全，但那不是造船的目的。　（but 对比 + what 表语从句） So tired was I that every step forward felt like a victory. 我累到每前进一步都像一场胜利。　（so...that 的倒装） Courage is not the absence of fear, but the triumph over it. 勇敢不是没有恐惧，而是战胜恐惧。　（not...but...（曼德拉名言）） The path may disappear, but the will to move on never does. 路可能消失，前行的意志永远不会。　（but 对比） Every summit climbed quietly becomes part of who you are. 每一次登顶，都悄悄成为你的一部分。　（过去分词作后置定语 + who 宾语从句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·英文报征稿类，情境已替换】 你校英文报 “Adventure” 栏目正在就 “Is Adventure Worth the Risk?” 话题征稿。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 简述一次冒险经历； 2. 谈谈你认为冒险是否值得； 3. 给同学们提一条建议。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题按高考应用文真题中“英文报话题征稿”的命题形式改编，具体情境为本单元话题原创。 【审题建模】 审体裁：议论性短文（话题征稿），有标题，叙事与议论结合。 审人称：第一人称（I/we）叙述经历并亮观点。 审时态：叙述经历用一般过去时；谈看法与建议用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 简述迷路经历；Para 2 亮明观点（值得，但要准备充分、敬畏自然）；Para 3 给建议并引马洛里名言收束。 审语气：观点不绝对，先叙后议；用 provided 等条件表达“有前提的赞成”，更显思辨。 【参考范文】 Is Adventure Worth the Risk? 　　Last summer, our family hiked in Yunnan. Halfway up, thick fog fell and we lost the path. For an hour we shouted, listened, and finally followed a stream downhill until we reached a village. 　　Terrified as I was that afternoon, I never regretted the trip. The fog taught me to keep calm, and the villagers who guided us home taught me that strangers can be kind. 　　So is adventure worth the risk? My answer is yes—provided we prepare well and respect nature. As Mallory said, "Because it's there." So are the courage and growth waiting on the other side of fear. 【亮点句式】 ① Halfway up, thick fog fell and we lost the path.（短句急转，紧张感扑面而来） ② Terrified as I was..., I never regretted...（as 让步倒装，先抑后扬） ③ My answer is yes—provided we prepare well and respect nature.（provided 条件句，观点不绝对，思辨加分） ④ So are the courage and growth...（倒装呼应引语，结尾有回声） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 The Mountain Taught Me 　　Last National Day holiday, my classmates and I set off to climb a mountain near our city, hoping to see the sunrise from the top. 　　We started at four in the morning. Halfway up, my legs turned to water and the steep path ahead disappeared into darkness. "Shall we turn back?" I asked. Nobody answered, but nobody moved down either. 　　It was Xiaohui who broke the silence: "Step by step." So we did—hundred steps, rest, another hundred. My heart was pounding wildly, yet my feet kept climbing. The moment we saw the first gold light spill over the sea of clouds, all our tiredness melted away. 　　Now I understand why climbers answer "Because it's there." The mountain taught me that fear shrinks to nothing, one brave step at a time. 【学生习作】 The Mountain Taught Me 　　Last holiday I climbed a mountain with my classmates. We got up very early and began to climb at four in the morning. 　　The mountain was very high. I was very tired. My legs hurt and I wanted to give up. But my friends said, "Don't stop!" So we kept climbing slowly. 　　At last we saw the sunrise. It was very beautiful. We were all happy. I learned that we should not give up when things are hard. It was a good trip. 【习作点评】 优点：结构完整，起因、经过、结果齐全；点题到位，结尾的收获与“冒险”主题呼应；感情真实，没有夸张编造。 问题一：过程平铺直叙，没有高潮。“very high / very tired” 都是概述；应放慢写最恐惧的那一刻：黑暗中的陡坡、想回头的动摇、同伴一句话带来的转折。 问题二：very 用了三次，句式单调；可用 freezing、exhausted 等精准词替换，并用 Dangerous as it was... 等倒装句制造起伏。 问题三：缺少心理描写。只有 “I wanted to give up”，没有当时的恐惧细节——心跳、腿软、山的黑影，心理写活了，冒险才可信。 问题四：连接词少，句子间靠默认顺序衔接；应加入 halfway up、the moment、step by step 等，让时间推进感更强。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：像写珠峰那样写“险”。课文里登山者面对的是严寒、缺氧与“每一步都可能是最后一步”——你不必写雪崩，但要写一处具体的险：天黑、陡坡、体力见底，让读者替你捏一把汗。 得分点二：高潮用“慢镜头 + 心理”。Step by step、heart pounding、one hundred steps, rest——把克服的过程拆成一格一格，再配 Dangerous as it was... 的倒装，紧张感就有了节奏。 得分点三：收获落在“超越自己”。借 Mallory 的 Because it's there 点题，再用 What the mountain taught me is... 的句式收束，把一次登山写成一次成长；本单元词块 set off、catch one's breath、a sense of achievement 至少用三个。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $