内容正文:
新仁爱九上英语单元写作训练
Unit 6 From Nobody to Somebody
命题方向:
①介绍自己最敬佩的人,写清人物身份、主要事迹、性格品质和敬佩原因;
②通过人物“做了什么”推断“是什么样的人”,用具体事迹支撑人物品质,并表达自己从人物身上学到的精神。
一、高频词汇积累
➤ 人物基本信息:
我最敬佩的人
出生于……
毕业于……
来自……
一名……
回到家乡
选择做某事
➤ 人物事迹:
花时间做某事
走访家庭
帮助村民
邀请专家
网上销售
为社区做志愿者
组织活动
➤ 人物品质:
有耐心的
有创造力的
勇敢的
勤奋的
积极的
乐于助人的
知识渊博的
➤ 事迹和品质连接:
通过他说的话
通过他做的事
表现出……
面对困难
从不放弃
帮助他人
为……作出努力
➤ 敬佩和学习:
敬佩……
向……学习
永远不会被忘记
精神永存
帮助身边的人
以自己的方式成为英雄
二、高阶句型操练
➤ 开头:介绍敬佩的人及其身份
1. 教材句式: For me, the person I admire most is Huang Wenxiu, a woman who gave her life to fighting against poverty in the countryside.(用 The person I admire most is... 点明人物,并用 who 定语从句补充核心事迹)
仿句:对我来说,我最敬佩的人是我的一位老师,她总是尽力帮助学生。(迁移“人物+who+关键事迹”的开头结构)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: In 1989, Huang Wenxiu was born in a poor village in Guangxi.(用 be born in 交代人物出生时间和地点)
仿句:她出生在一个普通的小村庄。(训练人物背景信息)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
3. 教材句式: In 2016, she graduated with a master’s degree from Beijing Normal University.(用 graduate from... 交代教育经历)
仿句:2018年,他从一所大学毕业。(替换时间和学校信息,保留 graduate from... 的人物经历结构)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
➤ 主体一:写关键选择和具体事迹
1. 教材句式: However, instead of settling down in a big city, Huang chose to go back to her hometown village, and worked as a village Party secretary.(用 instead of 和 choose to... 突出人物关键选择)
仿句:然而,他没有选择离开,而是决定留在社区帮助别人。(训练“面对选择—作出行动”的人物事迹)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: She spent two months visiting 195 poor families across the village.(用 spend time doing 写人物为目标投入的时间和行动)
仿句:她花了很多周末给社区里的孩子辅导功课。(迁移“投入时间+具体行动”)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
3. 教材句式: She invited experts to teach the villagers to grow orange trees.(用 invite...to do... 写人物组织资源帮助他人)
仿句:他邀请志愿者一起组织社区阅读活动。(训练具体帮助方式)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
4. 教材句式: Besides, she helped villagers sell oranges online.(用 Besides 补充第二项关键事迹)
仿句:此外,她还帮助老人学习使用智能手机。(通过并列事迹丰富人物形象)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
➤ 主体二:由事迹分析人物品质
1. 教材句式: Huang showed great patience and creativity to prove herself.(用 show great... 直接概括从行动中体现的品质)
仿句:她在解决问题时表现出了极大的耐心和创造力。(从具体行动上升到人物品质)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: Forest protectors are hard-working people. They often have to work in hot, dry, or cold conditions.(先概括人物品质,再用具体工作条件作为证据支撑判断)
仿句:社区志愿者都是勤奋的人。他们经常不得不在炎热或寒冷的天气里工作。(替换人物和工作场景,保留“品质判断+have to work in...conditions”的两句结构)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
3. 教材句式: Forest protectors are very brave. They risk their lives to put out the fire.(先判断人物勇敢,再用 risk one’s life to... 写具体行为作为依据)
仿句:这位志愿者非常勇敢。他冒着生命危险去帮助洪水中的人们。(用具体行动支撑“勇敢”这一人物品质)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
4. 教材句式: He is a sports hero who will never be forgotten.(用 who 定语从句补充人物评价)
仿句:她是一位永远不会被我们忘记的普通英雄。(自然落实定语从句并总结人物)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
➤ 结尾:表达敬佩和学习
1. 教材句式: However, Huang’s spirit will never die.(用 spirit will never die 总结人物精神影响)
仿句:然而,她的精神永远不会消逝。(保留 However+spirit will never die 的总结结构)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: I hope one day I can also do something to help people around me, just like my hero Huang Wenxiu.(用 I hope one day... 把敬佩转化为自己的行动愿望)
仿句:我希望有一天也能像我的英雄一样帮助身边的人。(用于人物作文自然升华)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
【连句成段】
请从上面完成的仿句中,选择属于同一内容中心或同一内容链的 2—3 句,用合适的连接词组成一个 30 词左右的小段落,让单句之间形成清楚的逻辑关系。_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
三、高级段落训练
学校开展“A True Hero in My Eyes”主题征文。假如你是李华,请根据下面的人物品质图提示,用英语写一篇不少于80词的短文,介绍一位你敬佩的人,写清他/她做过的具体事情、体现出的品质以及你敬佩的原因。可适当发挥。
【策略提示】本单元重点是 analyzing character traits。不能只写“He is kind / brave / hard-working”,要用“他做了什么”作为证据,再得出“他是什么样的人”的判断。
What the person does
What the person is like
spends time helping others
helpful
keeps trying when things are difficult
hard-working / positive
thinks of new ways to solve problems
creative
takes action when others need help
brave
The person you admire:____________________________________
(一)审题
1. 读题时,在文中圈画出写作内容。
2. 三定:
定体裁________________定人称________________定时态________________
3. 谋篇布局:
A True Hero in My Eyes
Beginning
介绍人物身份和敬佩对象写作内容:点明最敬佩的人,可补充职业、关系或重要背景。
可用表达:The person I admire most is... / be born in... / a person who...
填写区:__________________________________________
Body
用具体事迹分析人物品质写作内容:写2—3件有代表性的事情;每件事之后说明这件事体现了什么品质。
可用表达:choose to... / spend time doing... / Besides... / show great... / through what...do
填写区:
1. Action 1 → Trait:____________________________________
2. Action 2 → Trait:____________________________________
3. Action 3 → Trait:____________________________________
Ending
说明敬佩原因和自己学到的精神写作内容:总结人物最打动自己的品质,并写自己准备怎样向他/她学习。
可用表达:I admire...because... / spirit / I hope one day... / learn from
填写区:__________________________________________
(二)分段写作
第一段:介绍敬佩的人
写作提示:①点明人物;②简单介绍身份或关系;③语言提示:The person I admire most, a person who 2—3句_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
第二段:写事迹并分析品质
写作提示:①写2—3件具体事情;②每件事对应人物品质;③语言提示:choose to, spend time, Besides, show, who 6—9句_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
第三段:表达敬佩并联系自己
写作提示:①说明最敬佩的品质;②写自己学到什么或准备怎样做;③语言提示:admire, spirit, learn from, I hope 2—3句_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
四、高分作文输出
校英文网站开设“Heroes Around Us”主题板块。请写一篇80—100词的英文短文,介绍你身边的一位普通英雄,可以是家人、老师、志愿者或社区工作者。写清他/她做过的2—3件具体事情、体现出的品质、你敬佩的原因,以及你准备向他/她学习什么。文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
提示:
1. Who is the person you admire?
2. How do you know him or her?
3. What has he or she done for others?
4. What character traits do these actions show?
5. Why do you admire this person?
6. What will you learn from him or her?
草稿区:请先完成审题和写作构思。
1. 在题目中划关键词:__________________________
2. 三定:
定体裁________________ 定人称________________ 定时态________________
3. 谋篇布局:
Beginning:人物身份和与你的关系__________________________
Body:2—3件具体事迹__________________________ 由事迹体现的品质__________________________ 敬佩原因__________________________
Ending:自己要学习的精神或行动__________________________
正文区
A Hero Around Us
_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
检查清单
(1)是否介绍了人物身份、具体事迹、人物品质、敬佩原因和自己的学习方向;
(2)是否用具体行为作为依据分析人物品质,而不是只堆砌形容词;
(3)是否使用本单元重点词汇和句型;
(4)是否在补充人物身份、事迹或评价时自然、正确地使用定语从句;
(5)句子结构、单词形式、标点和拼写是否正确;
(6)书写是否端正清晰,可与同桌互相检查卷面整洁度。
新仁爱九上英语单元写作训练
Unit 6 From Nobody to Somebody
命题方向:
①介绍自己最敬佩的人,写清人物身份、主要事迹、性格品质和敬佩原因;
②通过人物“做了什么”推断“是什么样的人”,用具体事迹支撑人物品质,并表达自己从人物身上学到的精神。
一、高频词汇积累
➤ 人物基本信息:
我最敬佩的人the person I admire most 出生于……be born in... 毕业于……graduate from... 来自……come from... 一名……a / an... 回到家乡go back to one’s hometown 选择做某事choose to do sth.
➤ 人物事迹:
花时间做某事spend time doing sth. 走访家庭visit families 帮助村民help villagers 邀请专家invite experts 网上销售sell...online 为社区做志愿者volunteer in the community 组织活动organize activities
➤ 人物品质:
有耐心的patient 有创造力的creative 勇敢的brave 勤奋的hard-working 积极的positive 乐于助人的helpful 知识渊博的knowledgeable
➤ 事迹和品质连接:
通过他说的话through what he says 通过他做的事through what he does 表现出……show... 面对困难face difficulties 从不放弃never give up 帮助他人help others 为……作出努力make efforts to...
➤ 敬佩和学习:
敬佩……admire... 向……学习learn from... 永远不会被忘记will never be forgotten 精神永存one’s spirit will never die 帮助身边的人help people around me 以自己的方式成为英雄become a hero in one’s own way
二、高阶句型操练
➤ 开头:介绍敬佩的人及其身份
1. 教材句式: For me, the person I admire most is Huang Wenxiu, a woman who gave her life to fighting against poverty in the countryside.(用 The person I admire most is... 点明人物,并用 who 定语从句补充核心事迹)
仿句:对我来说,我最敬佩的人是我的一位老师,她总是尽力帮助学生。(迁移“人物+who+关键事迹”的开头结构)
For me, the person I admire most is one of my teachers, a woman who always tries her best to help students.
2. 教材句式: In 1989, Huang Wenxiu was born in a poor village in Guangxi.(用 be born in 交代人物出生时间和地点)
仿句:她出生在一个普通的小村庄。(训练人物背景信息)
She was born in an ordinary small village.
3. 教材句式: In 2016, she graduated with a master’s degree from Beijing Normal University.(用 graduate from... 交代教育经历)
仿句:2018年,他从一所大学毕业。(替换时间和学校信息,保留 graduate from... 的人物经历结构)
In 2018, he graduated from a university.
➤ 主体一:写关键选择和具体事迹
1. 教材句式: However, instead of settling down in a big city, Huang chose to go back to her hometown village, and worked as a village Party secretary.(用 instead of 和 choose to... 突出人物关键选择)
仿句:然而,他没有选择离开,而是决定留在社区帮助别人。(训练“面对选择—作出行动”的人物事迹)
However, instead of leaving, he chose to stay in the community and help others.
2. 教材句式: She spent two months visiting 195 poor families across the village.(用 spend time doing 写人物为目标投入的时间和行动)
仿句:她花了很多周末给社区里的孩子辅导功课。(迁移“投入时间+具体行动”)
She spent many weekends helping children in the community with their schoolwork.
3. 教材句式: She invited experts to teach the villagers to grow orange trees.(用 invite...to do... 写人物组织资源帮助他人)
仿句:他邀请志愿者一起组织社区阅读活动。(训练具体帮助方式)
He invited volunteers to organize community reading activities together.
4. 教材句式: Besides, she helped villagers sell oranges online.(用 Besides 补充第二项关键事迹)
仿句:此外,她还帮助老人学习使用智能手机。(通过并列事迹丰富人物形象)
Besides, she helped old people learn to use smartphones.
➤ 主体二:由事迹分析人物品质
1. 教材句式: Huang showed great patience and creativity to prove herself.(用 show great... 直接概括从行动中体现的品质)
仿句:她在解决问题时表现出了极大的耐心和创造力。(从具体行动上升到人物品质)
She showed great patience and creativity when solving problems.
2. 教材句式: Forest protectors are hard-working people. They often have to work in hot, dry, or cold conditions.(先概括人物品质,再用具体工作条件作为证据支撑判断)
仿句:社区志愿者都是勤奋的人。他们经常不得不在炎热或寒冷的天气里工作。(替换人物和工作场景,保留“品质判断+have to work in...conditions”的两句结构)
Community volunteers are hard-working people. They often have to work in hot or cold weather.
3. 教材句式: Forest protectors are very brave. They risk their lives to put out the fire.(先判断人物勇敢,再用 risk one’s life to... 写具体行为作为依据)
仿句:这位志愿者非常勇敢。他冒着生命危险去帮助洪水中的人们。(用具体行动支撑“勇敢”这一人物品质)
This volunteer is very brave. He risked his life to help people during a flood.
4. 教材句式: He is a sports hero who will never be forgotten.(用 who 定语从句补充人物评价)
仿句:她是一位永远不会被我们忘记的普通英雄。(自然落实定语从句并总结人物)
She is an ordinary hero who will never be forgotten.
➤ 结尾:表达敬佩和学习
1. 教材句式: However, Huang’s spirit will never die.(用 spirit will never die 总结人物精神影响)
仿句:然而,她的精神永远不会消逝。(保留 However+spirit will never die 的总结结构)
However, her spirit will never die.
2. 教材句式: I hope one day I can also do something to help people around me, just like my hero Huang Wenxiu.(用 I hope one day... 把敬佩转化为自己的行动愿望)
仿句:我希望有一天也能像我的英雄一样帮助身边的人。(用于人物作文自然升华)
I hope one day I can also help people around me, just like my hero.
【连句成段】
请从上面完成的仿句中,选择属于同一内容中心或同一内容链的 2—3 句,用合适的连接词组成一个 30 词左右的小段落,让单句之间形成清楚的逻辑关系。My teacher spends many weekends helping children in the community. These actions show that she is patient and helpful. I admire her and hope I can also help people around me.
三、高级段落训练
学校开展“A True Hero in My Eyes”主题征文。假如你是李华,请根据下面的人物品质图提示,用英语写一篇不少于80词的短文,介绍一位你敬佩的人,写清他/她做过的具体事情、体现出的品质以及你敬佩的原因。可适当发挥。
【策略提示】本单元重点是 analyzing character traits。不能只写“He is kind / brave / hard-working”,要用“他做了什么”作为证据,再得出“他是什么样的人”的判断。
What the person does
What the person is like
spends time helping others
helpful
keeps trying when things are difficult
hard-working / positive
thinks of new ways to solve problems
creative
takes action when others need help
brave
The person you admire:my English teacher
(一)审题
1. 读题时,在文中圈画出写作内容。
2. 三定:
定体裁人物介绍短文定人称第一、三人称定时态一般现在时为主,结合一般过去时和现在完成时
3. 谋篇布局:
A True Hero in My Eyes
Beginning
介绍人物身份和敬佩对象写作内容:点明最敬佩的人,可补充职业、关系或重要背景。
可用表达:The person I admire most is... / be born in... / a person who...
填写区:The person I admire most is my English teacher, a woman who always tries to help others.
Body
用具体事迹分析人物品质写作内容:写2—3件有代表性的事情;每件事之后说明这件事体现了什么品质。
可用表达:choose to... / spend time doing... / Besides... / show great... / through what...do
填写区:
1. Action 1 → Trait:helps children with schoolwork → patient / helpful
2. Action 2 → Trait:organizes reading activities → hard-working
3. Action 3 → Trait:thinks of new ways to solve problems → creative
Ending
说明敬佩原因和自己学到的精神写作内容:总结人物最打动自己的品质,并写自己准备怎样向他/她学习。
可用表达:I admire...because... / spirit / I hope one day... / learn from
填写区:I admire her spirit and hope I can also help people around me.
(二)分段写作
第一段:介绍敬佩的人
写作提示:①点明人物;②简单介绍身份或关系;③语言提示:The person I admire most, a person who 2—3句The person I admire most is my English teacher, who always tries her best to help others. She is not famous, but she is a true hero to me. I have learned a lot from what she does.
第二段:写事迹并分析品质
写作提示:①写2—3件具体事情;②每件事对应人物品质;③语言提示:choose to, spend time, Besides, show, who 6—9句She spends many weekends helping children with their schoolwork. This shows that she is patient and helpful. Besides, she often organizes reading activities for children. She keeps trying when she meets a problem. She also thinks of new ways to solve it. These actions show that she is hard-working and creative.
第三段:表达敬佩并联系自己
写作提示:①说明最敬佩的品质;②写自己学到什么或准备怎样做;③语言提示:admire, spirit, learn from, I hope 2—3句I admire her because she is always willing to help others. Her spirit will never die in my heart. I hope I can also help people around me one day.
四、高分作文输出
校英文网站开设“Heroes Around Us”主题板块。请写一篇80—100词的英文短文,介绍你身边的一位普通英雄,可以是家人、老师、志愿者或社区工作者。写清他/她做过的2—3件具体事情、体现出的品质、你敬佩的原因,以及你准备向他/她学习什么。文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
提示:
1. Who is the person you admire?
2. How do you know him or her?
3. What has he or she done for others?
4. What character traits do these actions show?
5. Why do you admire this person?
6. What will you learn from him or her?
草稿区:请先完成审题和写作构思。
1. 在题目中划关键词:person, relationship, actions, character traits, admiration, learning
2. 三定:
定体裁人物介绍短文 定人称第一、三人称 定时态一般现在时和现在完成时为主
3. 谋篇布局:
Beginning:人物身份和与你的关系a volunteer who lives in my community
Body:2—3件具体事迹helps old people; teaches children to read 由事迹体现的品质helpful, hard-working and positive 敬佩原因she always takes action and never gives up
Ending:自己要学习的精神或行动learn from her and help people around me
正文区
A Hero Around Us
The person I admire is a volunteer who lives in my community. I met her during a weekend activity last year. She has spent much time helping old people who live alone. She also teaches children to read after school. When someone needs help, she always takes action quickly. These actions show that she is helpful and hard-working. She never gives up when a problem is difficult. That positive spirit is why I admire her. She is an ordinary hero who will never be forgotten. I hope I can learn from her and help others.
检查清单
(1)是否介绍了人物身份、具体事迹、人物品质、敬佩原因和自己的学习方向;
(2)是否用具体行为作为依据分析人物品质,而不是只堆砌形容词;
(3)是否使用本单元重点词汇和句型;
(4)是否在补充人物身份、事迹或评价时自然、正确地使用定语从句;
(5)句子结构、单词形式、标点和拼写是否正确;
(6)书写是否端正清晰,可与同桌互相检查卷面整洁度。
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