内容正文:
新仁爱九上英语单元写作训练
Unit 5 Path to a Better World
命题方向:
①介绍科学技术怎样改变自己的日常生活,并按一天中的过程写具体场景;
②按照Beginning—Middle—End组织一个完整生活片段,用具体科技及其作用推动内容发展,并表达感激或期待。
一、高频词汇积累
➤ 科技与生活:
科学和技术
改变我们的生活
现代厨房
北斗导航系统
在网上预约
视频通话
大屏电视
➤ 早晨和出行:
准备早餐
去学校
交通拥堵
找到最好的路线
准时到校
帮助某人做某事
➤ 工作和服务:
看病人
预约看医生
不用等待很久
通过电话帮助
通过视频通话
在网上
➤ 休闲和家庭:
下班后
在家看电影
不用去电影院
享受科技带来的便利
和朋友聊天
➤ 感受和未来:
令人惊叹的
带来好处
对……心怀感激
继续改变世界
更好的生活
我真的希望……
二、高阶句型操练
➤ 开头:总写科技改变生活
1. 教材句式: Science and technology are so amazing!(用简短感叹句表达对科技的总体感受)
仿句:科学和技术真的很神奇!(适合作为主题引入)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: My mom is a doctor and she says that she can’t imagine life without all the cool things that science and technology give us.(先交代人物身份,再用 says that...can’t imagine life without... 总写科技对生活的重要性)
仿句:我爸爸是一名老师,他说他无法想象生活中没有那些能帮助我们学习的科技产品。(保留“人物身份+says that...+can’t imagine life without...+that定语从句”的完整结构,同时保持中文自然)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
3. 教材句式: Let me tell you about a day in our lives.(用 Let me tell you... 引出按一天过程展开的主体)
仿句:让我来告诉你科技怎样改变我的一天。(从总评转到具体生活片段)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
➤ 主体一:写早晨和出行场景
1. 教材句式: In the morning, my mom prepares breakfast for us quickly in our modern kitchen.(用 In the morning 标出故事开端,并用具体场景体现科技便利)
仿句:早上,我爸爸在现代厨房里很快为我们准备早餐。(只替换人物,保留“时间+人物+具体生活场景”的基本结构)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: Sometimes there’s a lot of traffic, but the BeiDou Navigation Satellite System on her phone helps us find the best way to get to school on time.(用 but 写问题与科技解决办法,用 help...do... 表达作用)
仿句:有时路上很拥堵,但手机导航帮助我们找到最快的路线。(训练“生活问题+科技帮助”)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
3. 教材句式: Technology has changed our lives in many ways, especially in how we get around.(概括科技在出行方面的改变)
仿句:科技在很多方面改变了我们的生活,尤其是学习和出行。(用于具体场景前后的概括)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
➤ 主体二:写白天和休闲场景
1. 教材句式: They don’t have to wait long to see her because people can make an appointment to see the doctor on the internet.(用 because 解释网络预约如何减少等待)
仿句:我们不用花很长时间排队,因为很多服务可以提前在网上预约。(训练“科技方式+实际好处”)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: Sometimes, she even helps patients by phone or through video calls if they can’t come to the hospital.(用 by phone / through video calls 写远程科技服务)
仿句:有时,如果学生不能到学校,老师甚至会通过视频通话帮助他们。(替换人物和场景,保留 through video calls+if条件关系)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
3. 教材句式: After work, we watch movies at home on our big TV with amazing sound.(用 After work 推动时间线到一天后段)
仿句:放学后,我可以在家用电脑学习、听音乐或看电影。(训练故事时间推进)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
4. 教材句式: We don’t even have to go to the theater!(用 don’t have to... 突出科技带来的便利)
仿句:我们甚至不用出门就能完成很多事情!(对具体科技好处作简洁评价)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
➤ 结尾:感激科技并展望未来
1. 教材句式: We should all be thankful for the benefits that science and technology have brought to our lives.(用 that 定语从句概括科技已经带来的好处)
仿句:我们应该感谢科技给学习和生活带来的便利。(总结全文并落实定语从句)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
2. 教材句式: I really hope that in the future, science and technology will keep making the world an even better place to live in.(用 I really hope... 展望科技未来)
仿句:我真的希望未来科技能继续让我们的生活变得更美好。(适合作为价值结尾)
_______________________________________________________________________________________
【连句成段】
请从上面完成的仿句中,选择属于同一内容中心或同一内容链的 2—3 句,用合适的连接词组成一个 30 词左右的小段落,让单句之间形成清楚的逻辑关系。_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
三、高级段落训练
学校英语社团正在制作“Technology in My Day”主题专栏。假如你是李华,请根据下面的时间线提示,用英语写一篇不少于80词的短文,介绍科学技术怎样改变你一天中的学习、出行或休闲生活,并表达你的感受。可适当发挥。
【策略提示】本单元用 plot 思维组织写作。不要按“科技一、科技二、科技三”生硬列举,而要按一天的过程推进:Beginning写早晨,Middle写白天的学习/出行,End写放学后或晚上的生活,让科技作用自然进入每个场景。
Plot stage
Time / scene
Technology and its help
Beginning
morning / way to school
phone / navigation
Middle
class / study / service
internet / computer / video call
End
after school / evening
online learning / movie / communication
Your feeling:____________________________________
(一)审题
1. 读题时,在文中圈画出写作内容。
2. 三定:
定体裁________________定人称________________定时态________________
3. 谋篇布局:
Technology in My Day
Beginning
从一天的开端引出科技写作内容:简要评价科技,并从早晨或上学路上的一个具体场景开始。
可用表达:Science and technology are... / Let me tell you... / In the morning...
填写区:__________________________________________
Body
按时间推进写科技怎样解决实际问题写作内容:写2—3个生活场景,每个场景说明使用了什么科技、它怎样帮助自己。
可用表达:helps...do... / because... / on the Internet / through video calls / After...
填写区:
1. Beginning scene:____________________________________
2. Middle scene:____________________________________
3. End scene:____________________________________
Ending
总结好处并展望未来写作内容:表达对科技带来便利的感激,并可写对未来科技的期待。
可用表达:be thankful for... / the benefits that... / I really hope...
填写区:__________________________________________
(二)分段写作
第一段:从一天的开端引题
写作提示:①评价科技;②从早晨或上学路上切入;③语言提示:amazing, Let me tell you, In the morning 2—3句_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
第二段:按生活过程写科技作用
写作提示:①上学或出行;②学习或服务;③放学后休闲;④每个场景写科技怎样解决问题;⑤语言提示:help, because, Internet, video calls, After 6—9句_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
第三段:总结并展望未来
写作提示:①总结科技带来的好处;②表达感激或期待;③语言提示:thankful, benefits that, I really hope 2—3句_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
四、高分作文输出
校英文报征集“Technology Helped Me That Day”主题短文。请回忆一次科技帮助你解决生活中实际问题的经历,写一篇80—100词的英文短文。按照事情发展的顺序介绍当时遇到的问题、你使用的科技、它怎样帮助你解决问题、事情的结果和你的感受,并谈谈你对未来科技的期待。文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
提示:
1. What problem did you meet that day?
2. What technology did you use?
3. How did it help you solve the problem?
4. What happened in the end?
5. How did you feel about the experience?
6. What do you hope technology will do in the future?
草稿区:请先完成审题和写作构思。
1. 在题目中划关键词:__________________________
2. 三定:
定体裁________________ 定人称________________ 定时态________________
3. 谋篇布局:
Beginning:事情发生的场景和遇到的问题__________________________
Body:使用的科技__________________________ 科技怎样帮助解决问题__________________________ 事情的结果__________________________
Ending:自己的感受和未来期待__________________________
正文区
Technology Helped Me That Day
_______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________
检查清单
(1)是否写清了事情发生的场景、遇到的问题、使用的科技、解决过程、结果和感受;
(2)是否按Beginning—Middle—End推进内容,使场景和事件前后连贯;
(3)是否使用本单元重点词汇和句型;
(4)是否在描述科技或事物时自然、正确地使用本单元定语从句;
(5)句子结构、单词形式、标点和拼写是否正确;
(6)书写是否端正清晰,可与同桌互相检查卷面整洁度。
新仁爱九上英语单元写作训练
Unit 5 Path to a Better World
命题方向:
①介绍科学技术怎样改变自己的日常生活,并按一天中的过程写具体场景;
②按照Beginning—Middle—End组织一个完整生活片段,用具体科技及其作用推动内容发展,并表达感激或期待。
一、高频词汇积累
➤ 科技与生活:
科学和技术science and technology 改变我们的生活change our lives 现代厨房a modern kitchen 北斗导航系统the BeiDou Navigation Satellite System 在网上预约make an appointment online 视频通话video calls 大屏电视a big TV
➤ 早晨和出行:
准备早餐prepare breakfast 去学校get to school 交通拥堵a lot of traffic 找到最好的路线find the best way 准时到校get to school on time 帮助某人做某事help sb. do sth.
➤ 工作和服务:
看病人see patients 预约看医生make an appointment to see the doctor 不用等待很久don’t have to wait long 通过电话帮助help by phone 通过视频通话through video calls 在网上on the Internet
➤ 休闲和家庭:
下班后after work 在家看电影watch movies at home 不用去电影院don’t have to go to the theater 享受科技带来的便利enjoy the convenience brought by technology 和朋友聊天chat with friends
➤ 感受和未来:
令人惊叹的amazing 带来好处bring benefits 对……心怀感激be thankful for... 继续改变世界keep changing the world 更好的生活a better life 我真的希望……I really hope...
二、高阶句型操练
➤ 开头:总写科技改变生活
1. 教材句式: Science and technology are so amazing!(用简短感叹句表达对科技的总体感受)
仿句:科学和技术真的很神奇!(适合作为主题引入)
Science and technology are really amazing!
2. 教材句式: My mom is a doctor and she says that she can’t imagine life without all the cool things that science and technology give us.(先交代人物身份,再用 says that...can’t imagine life without... 总写科技对生活的重要性)
仿句:我爸爸是一名老师,他说他无法想象生活中没有那些能帮助我们学习的科技产品。(保留“人物身份+says that...+can’t imagine life without...+that定语从句”的完整结构,同时保持中文自然)
My dad is a teacher, and he says that he can’t imagine life without all the useful technological products that help us study.
3. 教材句式: Let me tell you about a day in our lives.(用 Let me tell you... 引出按一天过程展开的主体)
仿句:让我来告诉你科技怎样改变我的一天。(从总评转到具体生活片段)
Let me tell you how technology changes my day.
➤ 主体一:写早晨和出行场景
1. 教材句式: In the morning, my mom prepares breakfast for us quickly in our modern kitchen.(用 In the morning 标出故事开端,并用具体场景体现科技便利)
仿句:早上,我爸爸在现代厨房里很快为我们准备早餐。(只替换人物,保留“时间+人物+具体生活场景”的基本结构)
In the morning, my dad prepares breakfast for us quickly in our modern kitchen.
2. 教材句式: Sometimes there’s a lot of traffic, but the BeiDou Navigation Satellite System on her phone helps us find the best way to get to school on time.(用 but 写问题与科技解决办法,用 help...do... 表达作用)
仿句:有时路上很拥堵,但手机导航帮助我们找到最快的路线。(训练“生活问题+科技帮助”)
Sometimes there’s a lot of traffic, but the navigation system on my phone helps us find the fastest route.
3. 教材句式: Technology has changed our lives in many ways, especially in how we get around.(概括科技在出行方面的改变)
仿句:科技在很多方面改变了我们的生活,尤其是学习和出行。(用于具体场景前后的概括)
Technology has changed our lives in many ways, especially in how we study and get around.
➤ 主体二:写白天和休闲场景
1. 教材句式: They don’t have to wait long to see her because people can make an appointment to see the doctor on the internet.(用 because 解释网络预约如何减少等待)
仿句:我们不用花很长时间排队,因为很多服务可以提前在网上预约。(训练“科技方式+实际好处”)
We don’t have to wait in line for long because many services can be booked online in advance.
2. 教材句式: Sometimes, she even helps patients by phone or through video calls if they can’t come to the hospital.(用 by phone / through video calls 写远程科技服务)
仿句:有时,如果学生不能到学校,老师甚至会通过视频通话帮助他们。(替换人物和场景,保留 through video calls+if条件关系)
Sometimes, if students can’t come to school, teachers even help them through video calls.
3. 教材句式: After work, we watch movies at home on our big TV with amazing sound.(用 After work 推动时间线到一天后段)
仿句:放学后,我可以在家用电脑学习、听音乐或看电影。(训练故事时间推进)
After school, I can study, listen to music or watch movies on my computer at home.
4. 教材句式: We don’t even have to go to the theater!(用 don’t have to... 突出科技带来的便利)
仿句:我们甚至不用出门就能完成很多事情!(对具体科技好处作简洁评价)
We don’t even have to go out to get many things done!
➤ 结尾:感激科技并展望未来
1. 教材句式: We should all be thankful for the benefits that science and technology have brought to our lives.(用 that 定语从句概括科技已经带来的好处)
仿句:我们应该感谢科技给学习和生活带来的便利。(总结全文并落实定语从句)
We should be thankful for the convenience that science and technology have brought to our studies and daily lives.
2. 教材句式: I really hope that in the future, science and technology will keep making the world an even better place to live in.(用 I really hope... 展望科技未来)
仿句:我真的希望未来科技能继续让我们的生活变得更美好。(适合作为价值结尾)
I really hope that technology will keep making our lives better in the future.
【连句成段】
请从上面完成的仿句中,选择属于同一内容中心或同一内容链的 2—3 句,用合适的连接词组成一个 30 词左右的小段落,让单句之间形成清楚的逻辑关系。In the morning, my phone helps me find the best way to school. After school, I use my computer to study or watch movies. Technology has changed my life in many ways.
三、高级段落训练
学校英语社团正在制作“Technology in My Day”主题专栏。假如你是李华,请根据下面的时间线提示,用英语写一篇不少于80词的短文,介绍科学技术怎样改变你一天中的学习、出行或休闲生活,并表达你的感受。可适当发挥。
【策略提示】本单元用 plot 思维组织写作。不要按“科技一、科技二、科技三”生硬列举,而要按一天的过程推进:Beginning写早晨,Middle写白天的学习/出行,End写放学后或晚上的生活,让科技作用自然进入每个场景。
Plot stage
Time / scene
Technology and its help
Beginning
morning / way to school
phone / navigation
Middle
class / study / service
internet / computer / video call
End
after school / evening
online learning / movie / communication
Your feeling:Science and technology make my life easier and more convenient.
(一)审题
1. 读题时,在文中圈画出写作内容。
2. 三定:
定体裁说明类短文定人称第一人称定时态一般现在时为主,可结合现在完成时
3. 谋篇布局:
Technology in My Day
Beginning
从一天的开端引出科技写作内容:简要评价科技,并从早晨或上学路上的一个具体场景开始。
可用表达:Science and technology are... / Let me tell you... / In the morning...
填写区:Science and technology have changed my daily life in many ways.
Body
按时间推进写科技怎样解决实际问题写作内容:写2—3个生活场景,每个场景说明使用了什么科技、它怎样帮助自己。
可用表达:helps...do... / because... / on the Internet / through video calls / After...
填写区:
1. Beginning scene:phone navigation helps me get to school
2. Middle scene:the Internet and video calls help me study and communicate
3. End scene:online learning and movies make after-school life easier
Ending
总结好处并展望未来写作内容:表达对科技带来便利的感激,并可写对未来科技的期待。
可用表达:be thankful for... / the benefits that... / I really hope...
填写区:I am thankful for these benefits and hope technology will keep making life better.
(二)分段写作
第一段:从一天的开端引题
写作提示:①评价科技;②从早晨或上学路上切入;③语言提示:amazing, Let me tell you, In the morning 2—3句Science and technology are amazing! They have changed my daily life in many ways. Let me tell you about a day in my life.
第二段:按生活过程写科技作用
写作提示:①上学或出行;②学习或服务;③放学后休闲;④每个场景写科技怎样解决问题;⑤语言提示:help, because, Internet, video calls, After 6—9句In the morning, phone navigation helps me find the best way to school. In class, I use the Internet to find useful information. Video calls also help me communicate with classmates. After school, online learning helps me review my lessons at home. In the evening, I can watch movies on a big TV. These technologies save time and make my day easier.
第三段:总结并展望未来
写作提示:①总结科技带来的好处;②表达感激或期待;③语言提示:thankful, benefits that, I really hope 2—3句I am thankful for the benefits that technology has brought to my life. They make study, travel and communication more convenient. I hope technology will keep making the world a better place.
四、高分作文输出
校英文报征集“Technology Helped Me That Day”主题短文。请回忆一次科技帮助你解决生活中实际问题的经历,写一篇80—100词的英文短文。按照事情发展的顺序介绍当时遇到的问题、你使用的科技、它怎样帮助你解决问题、事情的结果和你的感受,并谈谈你对未来科技的期待。文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
提示:
1. What problem did you meet that day?
2. What technology did you use?
3. How did it help you solve the problem?
4. What happened in the end?
5. How did you feel about the experience?
6. What do you hope technology will do in the future?
草稿区:请先完成审题和写作构思。
1. 在题目中划关键词:problem, technology, solution, result, feeling, future
2. 三定:
定体裁记叙类短文 定人称第一人称 定时态一般过去时为主,结尾用一般将来时
3. 谋篇布局:
Beginning:事情发生的场景和遇到的问题needed to find a library; did not know the way
Body:使用的科技phone navigation 科技怎样帮助解决问题showed the best route; searched online for the opening time 事情的结果arrived safely and on time
Ending:自己的感受和未来期待felt thankful; hope technology will make life more convenient
正文区
Technology Helped Me That Day
Last Saturday, I had to find a library for a school project. I did not know the way, and the streets were busy. Then I used the navigation system on my phone. It showed me the best route and helped me avoid traffic. I also checked the library’s opening time online. Soon, I arrived there safely and on time. The technology that I used saved me a lot of time. It also made the trip much easier. I was thankful for the convenience that technology brought me. I hope future technology will make daily life even better.
检查清单
(1)是否写清了事情发生的场景、遇到的问题、使用的科技、解决过程、结果和感受;
(2)是否按Beginning—Middle—End推进内容,使场景和事件前后连贯;
(3)是否使用本单元重点词汇和句型;
(4)是否在描述科技或事物时自然、正确地使用本单元定语从句;
(5)句子结构、单词形式、标点和拼写是否正确;
(6)书写是否端正清晰,可与同桌互相检查卷面整洁度。
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