第05练 高考读后续写真题写作微技能训练：情绪链追踪（专项训练）2027年高考英语一轮复习读后续写高分突破

第05练 从真题习得读后续写·写作微技能：情绪链追踪 起笔练·根基铸牢 情绪链追踪 1、 什么是情绪链追踪？ 情绪链追踪是指追踪情绪在事件推进中的动态变化轨迹——情绪如何随事件翻转、如何被细节触发、如何从一个状态滑向另一个状态。 简言之，情绪链追踪就是让情绪像情节一样有起承转合——每个情绪变化都有原因，每个情绪状态都有细节，每个情绪终点都回扣起点。 2、 完整情绪链拆解 阶段 事件 情绪状态 原文依据 1 热情、期待 2 担忧、防备 3 掌控、安心 4 ........ 提笔练·进阶跃升 （2026·浙江强基联盟·高三联考）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was a snowy morning in Colorado. The season to search for naturally shed antlers (脱落的鹿角), the bony structures on the heads of male deer, on public land began on May first. I wrapped up, grabbed my pack and left home early with my dog, Dell, the best buddy I’d ever had in outdoor activities, “Let’s find some antlers!” Dell barked excitedly. Bull elk (雄鹿) shed their antlers every spring. I’d picked the perfect spot where they grazed and rubbed their antlers against trees. We found many sheds there last year. Of course, shed-hunting wasn’t without risks. The trails could be rough, storms could blow in, and cougars, fierce mountain lions, could be around. With plenty of deer and elk for their primary food, cougars rarely attacked humans or dogs. However, a mother cougar protecting her cubs (幼崽) was absolutely different. With the perfect spot in mind, we headed east on Highway 40. Dell sat motionless in the seat. After 10 years of training dogs, I finally had a winner in Dell. My other dogs could only find antlers in the yard; they’d lose focus on open land. Dell had been different from the beginning. He loved the hunt and stayed focused on our task, no matter how wide the area was. We parked at the spot. My heart was beating fast. Dell took off running, nose down, like a police dog at a crime scene. He raced up over rocks, down around trees, over piles of snow, sniffing (嗅), always sniffing. When he found an antler, he barked for a treat. We hadn’t walked 100 yards together when Dell planted himself in front of me. “Find the antlers,” I said, a command I’d never had to give twice. Dell Dog stayed still. I stared down at him in disbelief. I kept going for about 30 yards. Looking back, I saw him still sitting like a stone, his eyes never leaving mine. For the first time ever, Dell refused to obey. What possible reason could he have? 注意： 1．续写词数应为150个左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 实操练习：情绪链追踪 · 原文已提供的环节（续写前要完成的部分） 阶段 事件 情绪状态 原文依据 1 出发前 期待、兴奋 “Let's find some antlers!” Dell barked excitedly 2 介绍 Dell 自豪、自信 “I finally had a winner in Dell” 3 到达猎场 紧张、期待 “My heart was beating fast” 4 Dell 开始搜寻 投入、掌控 “nose down, like a police dog at a crime scene” 5 Dell 找到鹿角 成功、满足 “When he found an antler, he barked for a treat” 6 Dell 突然停住 困惑、不解 “I stared down at him in disbelief” 7 再次命令 困惑加深 “a command I'd never had to give twice” 8 Dell 纹丝不动 震惊、焦虑 “still sitting like a stone, his eyes never leaving mine” 9 第一次拒命 不解、担忧 “For the first time ever, Dell refused to obey” · 续写需要完成的链条 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 1 困惑加深 再次命令无效 “I called Dell again, but he didn't move” (1) 衔接1 我没能理解Dell，但我告诉自己要冷静下来，查看Dell的情况。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 2 焦虑升起 Dell 的行为反常 “His eyes were fixed on something behind me, his body tense” （2）情绪推进 Dell呈现出警惕的样子，眼神直直地盯着我的后方，尾巴高高竖起，呈紧张状态。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 3 恐惧萌芽 意识到危险 “A chill ran down my spine as I slowly turned around” （3）情节推进 我意识到可能遇到危险，决定带着Dell撤离。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 4 震惊 看见母美洲狮 “Less than twenty yards away, a mother cougar stood between us and the trail” 5 后怕理解 Dell 的保护 “Dell hadn't disobeyed — he had saved me” （4）衔接2 就在我们撤离一小段距离后，我看见了美洲狮，原来Dell是在保护我。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. 步骤 事件 情绪状态 核心细节 1 后怕 电视报道证实 “a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye” 2 顿悟 母狮保护幼崽 “A mother cougar had been nesting just yards from where we'd stopped” (1) 衔接3 野生动物官方保护机构观测到野生美洲狮育崽，地点和我们昨天寻找鹿角的地点吻合。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 步骤 事件 情绪状态 核心细节 3 感恩 理解 Dell 的行为 “Dell had sensed her presence before I did” (2) 情节推进（一定围绕核心人物展开，含回扣伏笔或情绪变化） 如果没有Dell的及时反映，我们不会成功地脱险。我内心充满对Dell的感激和敬畏。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 步骤 事件 情绪状态 核心细节 4 敬畏 重新认识 Dell “He wasn't just a hunting dog — he was my guardian” 5 温暖 人狗纽带 “I looked at Dell, sleeping peacefully at my feet, and whispered, 'Thank you.'” (3) 结尾 望着Dell安然睡在我的脚边，我轻声道谢，它于我而言，不只是一条猎犬，更是我的守护者。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ (4) 主旨升华 多亏了Dell，我要完全信赖它，因为它比我更懂我们周围的这个世界。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 风向标·评分标准 第五档（很好）(21～25分)： (1)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接非常合理，文章内容新颖、丰富、合理，非常有逻辑性，续写完整； (2)所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，语言错误很少，且完全不影响意义表达； (3)自然有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构非常清晰，前后呼应，意义非常连贯。 锚高分·连句成篇 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 多维评·复盘进阶 项目 填写内容 学生姓名 ____________________ 写作题目 2026浙江强基联盟高三联考读后续写 写作日期 ____________________ 互评同学姓名 ____________________ 本次核心 训练点 □ 情绪链追踪梳理 □ 句式多样化运用 □ 连句成篇逻辑衔接 □ 五档评分标准对标 · 总分汇总与档位确认 评分类型 自评总分 互评总分 最终得分（师评） 本次得分对应高考档位 得分 □ 五档（21-25 分） □ 四档（16-20 分） □ 三档（11-15 分） □ 二档（6-10 分） □ 一档（0-5 分） · 三级评语反馈 评价主体 评语内容 学生自评评语 对本次写作的整体评价、核心亮点、最明显的不足： 同学互评评语 对本次写作的亮点肯定、可落地的改进建议： 教师评语 对标五档标准的针对性反馈、高分提升路径： · 自我反思与进步规划 1. 本次写作的核心亮点（对标五档标准，我完全做到了的点）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 本次写作的主要失分点 / 待改进的核心问题（对标五档标准，我还有哪些差距）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 对比上一次写作，我取得的明确进步是： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 针对本次写作的不足，我下一步的具体提升计划（可落地、可检验）： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 我下一次写作的目标分数 / 档位是： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 6. 我下一次写作一定要使用的句式或词汇： ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 第05练 从真题习得读后续写·写作微技能：情绪链追踪 起笔练·根基铸牢 情绪链追踪 1、 什么是情绪链追踪？ 情绪链追踪是指追踪情绪在事件推进中的动态变化轨迹——情绪如何随事件翻转、如何被细节触发、如何从一个状态滑向另一个状态。 简言之，情绪链追踪就是让情绪像情节一样有起承转合——每个情绪变化都有原因，每个情绪状态都有细节，每个情绪终点都回扣起点。 2、 完整情绪链拆解 阶段 事件 情绪状态 原文依据 1 热情、期待 2 担忧、防备 3 掌控、安心 4 ........ 提笔练·进阶跃升 （2026·浙江强基联盟·高三联考）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was a snowy morning in Colorado. The season to search for naturally shed antlers (脱落的鹿角), the bony structures on the heads of male deer, on public land began on May first. I wrapped up, grabbed my pack and left home early with my dog, Dell, the best buddy I’d ever had in outdoor activities, “Let’s find some antlers!” Dell barked excitedly. Bull elk (雄鹿) shed their antlers every spring. I’d picked the perfect spot where they grazed and rubbed their antlers against trees. We found many sheds there last year. Of course, shed-hunting wasn’t without risks. The trails could be rough, storms could blow in, and cougars, fierce mountain lions, could be around. With plenty of deer and elk for their primary food, cougars rarely attacked humans or dogs. However, a mother cougar protecting her cubs (幼崽) was absolutely different. With the perfect spot in mind, we headed east on Highway 40. Dell sat motionless in the seat. After 10 years of training dogs, I finally had a winner in Dell. My other dogs could only find antlers in the yard; they’d lose focus on open land. Dell had been different from the beginning. He loved the hunt and stayed focused on our task, no matter how wide the area was. We parked at the spot. My heart was beating fast. Dell took off running, nose down, like a police dog at a crime scene. He raced up over rocks, down around trees, over piles of snow, sniffing (嗅), always sniffing. When he found an antler, he barked for a treat. We hadn’t walked 100 yards together when Dell planted himself in front of me. “Find the antlers,” I said, a command I’d never had to give twice. Dell Dog stayed still. I stared down at him in disbelief. I kept going for about 30 yards. Looking back, I saw him still sitting like a stone, his eyes never leaving mine. For the first time ever, Dell refused to obey. What possible reason could he have? 注意： 1．续写词数应为150个左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 实操练习：情绪链追踪 · 原文已提供的环节（续写前要完成的部分） 阶段 事件 情绪状态 原文依据 1 出发前 期待、兴奋 “Let's find some antlers!” Dell barked excitedly 2 介绍 Dell 自豪、自信 “I finally had a winner in Dell” 3 到达猎场 紧张、期待 “My heart was beating fast” 4 Dell 开始搜寻 投入、掌控 “nose down, like a police dog at a crime scene” 5 Dell 找到鹿角 成功、满足 “When he found an antler, he barked for a treat” 6 Dell 突然停住 困惑、不解 “I stared down at him in disbelief” 7 再次命令 困惑加深 “a command I'd never had to give twice” 8 Dell 纹丝不动 震惊、焦虑 “still sitting like a stone, his eyes never leaving mine” 9 第一次拒命 不解、担忧 “For the first time ever, Dell refused to obey” · 续写需要完成的链条 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 1 困惑加深 再次命令无效 “I called Dell again, but he didn't move” (1) 衔接1 我没能理解Dell，但我告诉自己要冷静下来，查看Dell的情况。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ I had no idea why Dell had suddenly frozen, but I forced myself to take a deep breath and walked back to see what was troubling him. 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 2 焦虑升起 Dell 的行为反常 “His eyes were fixed on something behind me, his body tense” （2）情绪推进 Dell呈现出警惕的样子，眼神直直地盯着我的后方，尾巴高高竖起，呈紧张状态。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Dell's body went rigid, his eyes locked on something behind me, his tail standing straight up in the air. 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 3 恐惧萌芽 意识到危险 “A chill ran down my spine as I slowly turned around” （3）情节推进 我意识到可能遇到危险，决定带着Dell撤离。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ A chill ran down my spine as I sensed we were in real danger. Without hesitation, I signaled Dell and we began to withdraw slowly. 步骤 情绪 触发点 细节外化 4 震惊 看见母美洲狮 “Less than twenty yards away, a mother cougar stood between us and the trail” 5 后怕理解 Dell 的保护 “Dell hadn't disobeyed — he had saved me” （4）衔接2 就在我们撤离一小段距离后，我看见了美洲狮，原来Dell是在保护我。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ After we had moved a short distance away, I saw the cougar. Only then did it hit me: Dell hadn't been disobeying. He had been protecting me. The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. 步骤 事件 情绪状态 核心细节 1 后怕 电视报道证实 “a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye” 2 顿悟 母狮保护幼崽 “A mother cougar had been nesting just yards from where we'd stopped” (1) 衔接3 野生动物官方保护机构观测到野生美洲狮育崽，地点和我们昨天寻找鹿角的地点吻合。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Officials had confirmed the presence of a mother cougar raising her cubs in the region — and the exact location was where we had spent the morning searching for antlers. 步骤 事件 情绪状态 核心细节 3 感恩 理解 Dell 的行为 “Dell had sensed her presence before I did” (2) 情节推进（一定围绕核心人物展开，含回扣伏笔或情绪变化） 如果没有Dell的及时反映，我们不会成功地脱险。我内心充满对Dell的感激和敬畏。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ If it hadn't been for Dell's alertness and his refusal to obey my command, we could have walked straight into danger. 步骤 事件 情绪状态 核心细节 4 敬畏 重新认识 Dell “He wasn't just a hunting dog — he was my guardian” 5 温暖 人狗纽带 “I looked at Dell, sleeping peacefully at my feet, and whispered, 'Thank you.'” (3) 结尾 望着Dell安然睡在我的脚边，我轻声道谢，它于我而言，不只是一条猎犬，更是我的守护者。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Sitting there, I felt a surge of gratitude so strong it brought tears to my eyes — and something deeper, something like awe. I had always thought of Dell as my hunting partner, but that moment revealed the truth: he was my protector, my guide through a world I barely understood. (4) 主旨升华 多亏了Dell，我要完全信赖它，因为它比我更懂我们周围的这个世界。 请在下方横线处作答，书写你的句子：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ From that day forward, I trusted him completely, because I finally knew — he knows the wild around us far better than I ever could. 风向标·评分标准 第五档（很好）(21～25分)： (1)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接非常合理，文章内容新颖、丰富、合理，非常有逻辑性，续写完整； (2)所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，语言错误很少，且完全不影响意义表达； (3)自然有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，全文结构非常清晰，前后呼应，意义非常连贯。 锚高分·连句成篇 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 【范文达标版】 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. I had no idea why Dell had suddenly frozen, but I forced myself to take a deep breath and walked back to see what was troubling him. Dell's body went rigid, his eyes locked on something behind me, his tail standing straight up in the air. A chill ran down my spine as I sensed we were in real danger. Without hesitation, I signaled Dell and we began to withdraw slowly. After we had moved a short distance away, I saw the cougar. Only then did it hit me: Dell hadn't been disobeying. He had been protecting me. The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. Officials had confirmed the presence of a mother cougar raising her cubs in the region — and the exact location was where Dell stopped to follow my order. If it hadn't been for Dell's alertness and his refusal to obey my command, we could have walked straight into danger. Sitting there, I felt a surge of gratitude so strong it brought tears to my eyes — and something deeper, something like awe. I had always thought of Dell as my hunting partner, but that moment revealed the truth: he was my protector, my guide through a world I barely understood. From that day forward, I trusted him completely, because I finally knew — he knows the wild around us far better than I ever could. 【范文高分版】 I called Dell again, but he didn’t move. I had no idea why Dell had suddenly frozen, but I forced myself to take a deep breath and walked back to see what was troubling him. Dell's body went rigid, his eyes locked on something behind me, his tail standing straight up in the air. A chill ran down my spine as I sensed we were in real danger. Without hesitation, I signaled Dell and we began to withdraw slowly. After we had moved a short distance away, I saw the cougar — a massive mother, her golden eyes gleaming in the shadows, less than thirty yards from where I had been standing. Only then did it hit me: Dell hadn't been disobeying. He had been protecting me. The next morning, a local TV report on cougar cubs caught my eye. Officials had confirmed the presence of a mother cougar raising her cubs in the region — and the exact location was where Dell stopped to follow my order. The coordinates matched perfectly with our trail. If it hadn't been for Dell's alertness and his refusal to obey my command, we could have walked straight into danger. Sitting there, I felt a surge of gratitude so strong it brought tears to my eyes — and something deeper, something like awe. I had always thought of Dell as my hunting partner, but that moment revealed the truth: he was my protector, my guide through a world I barely understood. From that day forward, I trusted him completely, because I finally knew — he knows the wild around us far better than I ever could. 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