Unit 5 Music单元写作作业设计 -2026-2027学年高中英语人教版必修第二册

必修二 Unit 5　Music 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 假定你是李华，你校英文报“音乐与生活”专栏正在征稿。请你就“音乐对我的影响”写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 介绍一首对你有特殊意义的歌曲或一次难忘的音乐经历； 2. 说明音乐给你带来了什么（至少两点）； 3. 向同学们推荐一种享受音乐的方式。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 短文题目已给出，不计入总词数。 The Song That Changed Me 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　____________________________________________________________________ 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙 + 议论类短文（英文报投稿），三段式，无称呼与落款。 人称 第一人称（I）叙述经历，第一人称复数（we）发出倡议。 时态 叙述过去经历用一般过去时；说明音乐的普遍作用、提出建议用一般现在时。 结构 Para 1：点题 + 引出歌曲/经历（时间、场景）；Para 2：具体经过 + 它带来的改变（两点）；Para 3：推荐一种听音乐的方式 + 呼吁。 要点 “经历”要有画面感（谁、何时、何地、听到什么）；“影响”要具体到情绪、行为或认知的改变，不能只说 it made me happy。 语气 真诚、有温度，像与同龄人分享心事；结尾可稍作升华，但不宜喊口号。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. classical adj. ____________ 2. ____________ n. 嘻哈音乐 3. energy n. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 灵魂；心灵 5. virtual adj. ____________ 6. ____________ n. 成分；作品；作曲 7. opportunity n. ____________ 8. ____________ vi.&vt. 表演；履行 9. performance n. ____________ 10. ____________ n. 表演者；演员 11. ordinary adj. ____________ 12. ____________ vt. 使能够；使可能 13. prove vt. ____________ 14. ____________ n. 奖；奖品 vt. 授予 15. stage n. ____________ 16. ____________ n. 天才；天资；天赋 17. original adj. ____________ 18. ____________ n. 曲调；调子 19. rhythm n. ____________ 20. ____________ n. 歌词 21. inspire vt. ____________ 22. ____________ adj. 动人的；令人感动的 23. audience n. ____________ 24. ____________ vt. 欣赏；感激 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. fall in love with ____________ 2. ____________ 由……组成 3. on stage ____________ 4. ____________ 上台表演 5. cheer sb. up ____________ 6. ____________ 使某人想起 7. be familiar with ____________ 8. ____________ 对……有天赋 9. in tune ____________ 10. ____________ 与……协调；与……一致 11. express oneself ____________ 12. ____________ 缓解压力 13. calm down ____________ 14. ____________ 参加；参与 15. be absorbed in ____________ 16. ____________ 情不自禁做某事 17. bring sb. comfort ____________ 18. ____________ 与……产生共鸣 19. have access to ____________ 20. ____________ 现场音乐会 21. play an instrument ____________ 22. ____________ 谱写乐曲 23. touch one's heart ____________ 24. ____________ 随着音乐起舞 25. from then on ____________ 26. ____________ 度过难关 27. keep sb. company ____________ 28. ____________ 音乐节 29. a source of inspiration ____________ 30. ____________ 释放情感 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Music is very important to me. ____________________ 2. The song is very good. ____________________ 3. I like it very much. ____________________ 4. It made me happy. ____________________ 5. I felt relaxed. ____________________ 6. The band played well. ____________________ 7. Music helps me forget my problems. ____________________ 8. I listen to music every day. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 音乐是一种世界通用的语言。 　　Music is a ________ language. 2. 大多数乐队都是由音乐家自己组建的。 　　Most bands are ________ by musicians themselves. 3. 他们起初在婚礼和聚会上表演。 　　They first ________ at weddings and parties. 4. 他们的音乐使人们想起了过去的美好时光。 　　Their music ________ people ________ the good old days. 5. 他们演奏得如此动听，以至于观众都站了起来。 　　They played ________ beautifully ________ the audience stood up. 6. 这支乐队由五名成员组成。 　　The band ________ ________ ________ ________ five members. 7. 他们在舞台上表演了将近两个小时。 　　They ________ ________ ________ for nearly two hours. 8. 音乐帮助我们表达语言无法表达的情感。 　　Music helps us express feelings ________ words cannot ________. 9. 正是在那时，我爱上了音乐。 　　________ ________ ________ ________ I fell in love with music. 10. 每当我感到疲惫，音乐总能让我振作起来。 　　________ I feel tired, music always ________ me ________. 11. 音乐不仅是一种娱乐，也是一种治疗。 　　Music is ________ ________ entertainment ________ ________ therapy. 12. 只有亲自聆听，你才能感受到它的力量。 　　Only by listening yourself ________ ________ feel its power. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. The song is good. I like it very much. 要求：用 so…that 合并，并换用高级形容词 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. I was tired. I listened to music. I felt better. 要求：用现在分词作状语 + 主句 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. Music can help us. We can express our feelings. 要求：用 enable sb. to do 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. I heard the song for the first time. I was in Junior One. 要求：用 the first time 引导时间状语从句 → ____________________________________________________________ 5. The concert was wonderful. Everyone stood up and clapped. 要求：用 so…that 的倒装句 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. Music is entertainment. It is also a kind of therapy. 要求：用 not only…but also… 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. Whenever I feel down, I listen to this song. 要求：用 Not a day goes by without… 改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. The lyrics are simple. They touch many people. 要求：用 however 引导的让步 + 定语从句 → ____________________________________________________________ 9. We can truly understand a song only by listening to it ourselves. 要求：用 only + 状语置于句首的倒装句 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. Music gave me strength. I got through that difficult year. 要求：用 It was…that… 强调句 → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Music is what feelings sound like. 音乐就是情感的声音。　（what 引导的表语从句） Never have I heard a song that speaks to me so deeply. 我从未听过一首如此直击我心的歌。　（否定词置于句首的倒装） What struck me first was not the melody but the lyrics. 最先打动我的不是旋律，而是歌词。　（what 主语从句 + not…but…） Whenever I feel overwhelmed, I put on my headphones and let the music carry me away. 每当我感到不堪重负，就戴上耳机，让音乐带我远行。　（whenever 引导时间状语从句） So powerful was her performance that the whole hall fell silent. 她的表演如此有力量，整个大厅都安静下来。　（so…that 的倒装） It was music that helped me get through the darkest days. 正是音乐帮我度过了最黑暗的日子。　（强调句） With the melody rising, all my worries seemed to disappear. 随着旋律升起，我所有的烦恼似乎都消失了。　（with 复合结构） The more I listen to it, the more I understand myself. 我越听这首歌，就越了解自己。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） There is no denying that music has a healing power. 不可否认，音乐具有治愈的力量。　（There is no denying that…） Compared with words, music reaches a place in us that language cannot. 与语言相比，音乐能抵达语言无法抵达的内心深处。　（过去分词作状语） Not until I lost myself in music did I realize how much I needed it. 直到沉浸在音乐中，我才意识到自己多么需要它。　（not until 的倒装） Simple as the tune is, it stays with you long after the song ends. 曲调虽简单，却在歌结束后久久萦绕。　（as 引导的让步状语从句倒装） Every song is a small door through which we enter someone else's world. 每一首歌都是一扇小门，我们借此走进别人的世界。　（介词 + 关系代词引导的定语从句） Music does not change the world, but it changes the people who will. 音乐不改变世界，却改变着那些将要改变世界的人。　（not…but… 对称句） 七、同话题高考真题【2019年高考全国卷Ⅲ 应用文试题】 假定你是李华，你校将举办音乐节。请给外教Allen写封邮件，邀请他参加，内容包括： 1. 音乐节的时间和地点； 2. 音乐节的活动； 3. 邀请他表演节目。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 The Song That Changed Me 　　Not a day goes by without music, but one song means more to me than all the others—“Heal the World”, which I first heard in my first year of junior high. 　　That winter, I failed an important exam and felt I had let everyone down. One evening, my father played the song in the car without saying a word. When Michael Jackson sang “heal the world, make it a better place”, something inside me loosened. I realized that my failure was only a moment, not the whole story. 　　From then on, music has done two things for me. It calms me down when I am anxious, and it reminds me that I am not alone. Whenever I feel overwhelmed, I put on my headphones and let the melody carry me away for ten minutes. 　　If I may offer one suggestion, it is this: listen to a whole album, not just short videos. Sit down, close your eyes and follow the music from beginning to end—only in this way can you hear what the singer is really trying to say. 【学生习作】 The Song That Changed Me 　　I like music very much. I listen to music every day. My favourite song is “Heal the World”. 　　I heard it when I was in junior high school. At that time I was very sad. I failed an exam. I thought I was not good. The song is very good. It made me happy. I listened to it many times. 　　Music is very important. It can make us relax. It can make us happy. I think everyone should listen to music. 　　I hope you can listen to this song too. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 是否写出了具体的歌名、时间与场景，让读者“看得见”？ □ “影响”是否具体到情绪或行为的改变，而非只说 make me happy？ □ 时态是否区分了“过去经历（过去时）”与“普遍作用（现在时）”？ □ 有没有把 very good、very sad 换成 moving、overwhelmed 等更有表现力的词？ □ 是否用了至少一个从句、一个非谓语动词？ □ 结尾是否落实了“推荐一种享受音乐的方式”这一要点？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. classical adj. 古典的；经典的 2. hip-hop n. 嘻哈音乐 3. energy n. 能源；能量；精力 4. soul n. 灵魂；心灵 5. virtual adj. 虚拟的；模拟的 6. composition n. 成分；作品；作曲 7. opportunity n. 机会；时机 8. perform vi.&vt. 表演；履行；执行 9. performance n. 表演；演技；表现 10. performer n. 表演者；演员 11. ordinary adj. 普通的；平凡的 12. enable vt. 使能够；使可能 13. prove vt. 证明；展现 14. award n. 奖；奖品 vt. 授予 15. stage n. 舞台；阶段；步骤 16. talent n. 天才；天资；天赋 17. original adj. 原来的；独创的；原作的 18. tune n. 曲调；调子 19. rhythm n. 节奏；韵律 20. lyrics n. 歌词 21. inspire vt. 鼓舞；激励；启发思考 22. touching adj. 动人的；令人感动的 23. audience n. 观众；听众 24. appreciate vt. 欣赏；感激 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. fall in love with 爱上 2. be made up of 由……组成 3. on stage 在舞台上 4. perform on stage 上台表演 5. cheer sb. up 使某人振作起来 6. remind sb. of 使某人想起 7. be familiar with 熟悉 8. have a talent for 对……有天赋 9. in tune 音调准确；和谐 10. in harmony with 与……协调；与……一致 11. express oneself 表达自己的思想 12. relieve stress 缓解压力 13. calm down 平静下来 14. take part in 参加；参与 15. be absorbed in 全神贯注于 16. can't help doing sth. 情不自禁做某事 17. bring sb. comfort 给某人带来安慰 18. strike a chord with 与……产生共鸣 19. have access to 可以接触；有权使用 20. a live concert 现场音乐会 21. play an instrument 演奏乐器 22. compose a piece of music 谱写乐曲 23. touch one's heart 触动某人的心 24. dance to the music 随着音乐起舞 25. from then on 从那时起 26. get through 度过；通过 27. keep sb. company 陪伴某人 28. music festival 音乐节 29. a source of inspiration 灵感的来源 30. release emotions 释放情感 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. Music means a lot to me. / Music is of great importance to me. 2. The song is deeply moving. 3. I'm really fond of it. / It has grown on me. 4. It lifted my spirits. 5. I felt a great weight lifted off my shoulders. 6. The band gave a wonderful performance. 7. Music helps me escape from my troubles for a while. 8. Not a day goes by without music. 四、教材好句精选 1. Music is a universal language. 2. Most bands are formed by musicians themselves. 3. They first performed at weddings and parties. 4. Their music reminded people of the good old days. 5. They played so beautifully that the audience stood up. 6. The band is made up of five members. 7. They performed on stage for nearly two hours. 8. Music helps us express feelings that words cannot express. 9. It was then that I fell in love with music. 10. Whenever I feel tired, music always cheers me up. 11. Music is not only entertainment but also therapy. 12. Only by listening yourself can you feel its power. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. The song is so moving that I can't help listening to it again and again. 2. Feeling exhausted, I turned on some music and soon felt much better. 3. Music enables us to express feelings that are hard to put into words. 4. I heard the song the first time I was in Junior One. 5. So wonderful was the concert that everyone stood up and clapped. 6. Music is not only entertainment but also a kind of therapy. 7. Not a day goes by without me listening to this song when I feel down. 8. Simple as the lyrics are, they touch the hearts of millions of people. 9. Only by listening to a song ourselves can we truly understand it. 10. It was music that gave me strength and helped me get through that difficult year. 七、同话题高考真题【2019年高考全国卷Ⅲ 应用文试题】 审体裁：邀请信（电子邮件），三段式。 审人称：以第一人称（I / we）为主，称对方用 you。 审时态：活动安排用一般将来时；说明活动内容可用一般将来时。 审内容：Para 1 问候 + 邀请 + 时间地点；Para 2 活动内容（乐队演出、独唱、乐器演奏、观众互动）；Para 3 邀请表演 + 期待回复。 审语气：热情、尊重，突出“我们特别希望您登台”的诚意。 【参考范文】 Dear Allen, 　　I'm writing to invite you to our school music festival, which will be held in the school hall from 6:00 to 9:00 p.m. next Friday. 　　The festival will be a real feast for music lovers. Student bands will perform rock and folk songs, several talented singers will give solo performances, and there will even be a traditional Chinese instrument show. At the end of the evening, the audience will be invited to sing along with the performers. 　　Since you are so good at playing the guitar, we would be honoured if you could give us a performance. It would certainly be the highlight of the night. 　　Looking forward to your reply. 　　Yours, 　　Li Hua 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 必修二 Unit 5　Music 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 假定你是李华，你校英文报“音乐与生活”专栏正在征稿。请你就“音乐对我的影响”写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 介绍一首对你有特殊意义的歌曲或一次难忘的音乐经历； 2. 说明音乐给你带来了什么（至少两点）； 3. 向同学们推荐一种享受音乐的方式。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 短文题目已给出，不计入总词数。 The Song That Changed Me 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　____________________________________________________________________ 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这五件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙 + 议论类短文（英文报投稿），三段式，无称呼与落款。 人称 第一人称（I）叙述经历，第一人称复数（we）发出倡议。 时态 叙述过去经历用一般过去时；说明音乐的普遍作用、提出建议用一般现在时。 结构 Para 1：点题 + 引出歌曲/经历（时间、场景）；Para 2：具体经过 + 它带来的改变（两点）；Para 3：推荐一种听音乐的方式 + 呼吁。 要点 “经历”要有画面感（谁、何时、何地、听到什么）；“影响”要具体到情绪、行为或认知的改变，不能只说 it made me happy。 语气 真诚、有温度，像与同龄人分享心事；结尾可稍作升华，但不宜喊口号。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. classical adj. 古典的；经典的 2. hip-hop n. 嘻哈音乐 3. energy n. 能源；能量；精力 4. soul n. 灵魂；心灵 5. virtual adj. 虚拟的；模拟的 6. composition n. 成分；作品；作曲 7. opportunity n. 机会；时机 8. perform vi.&vt. 表演；履行；执行 9. performance n. 表演；演技；表现 10. performer n. 表演者；演员 11. ordinary adj. 普通的；平凡的 12. enable vt. 使能够；使可能 13. prove vt. 证明；展现 14. award n. 奖；奖品 vt. 授予 15. stage n. 舞台；阶段；步骤 16. talent n. 天才；天资；天赋 17. original adj. 原来的；独创的；原作的 18. tune n. 曲调；调子 19. rhythm n. 节奏；韵律 20. lyrics n. 歌词 21. inspire vt. 鼓舞；激励；启发思考 22. touching adj. 动人的；令人感动的 23. audience n. 观众；听众 24. appreciate vt. 欣赏；感激 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. fall in love with 爱上 2. be made up of 由……组成 3. on stage 在舞台上 4. perform on stage 上台表演 5. cheer sb. up 使某人振作起来 6. remind sb. of 使某人想起 7. be familiar with 熟悉 8. have a talent for 对……有天赋 9. in tune 音调准确；和谐 10. in harmony with 与……协调；与……一致 11. express oneself 表达自己的思想 12. relieve stress 缓解压力 13. calm down 平静下来 14. take part in 参加；参与 15. be absorbed in 全神贯注于 16. can't help doing sth. 情不自禁做某事 17. bring sb. comfort 给某人带来安慰 18. strike a chord with 与……产生共鸣 19. have access to 可以接触；有权使用 20. a live concert 现场音乐会 21. play an instrument 演奏乐器 22. compose a piece of music 谱写乐曲 23. touch one's heart 触动某人的心 24. dance to the music 随着音乐起舞 25. from then on 从那时起 26. get through 度过；通过 27. keep sb. company 陪伴某人 28. music festival 音乐节 29. a source of inspiration 灵感的来源 30. release emotions 释放情感 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. Music is very important to me. Music means a lot to me. / Music is of great importance to me. 2. The song is very good. The song is deeply moving. 3. I like it very much. I'm really fond of it. / It has grown on me. 4. It made me happy. It lifted my spirits. 5. I felt relaxed. I felt a great weight lifted off my shoulders. 6. The band played well. The band gave a wonderful performance. 7. Music helps me forget my problems. Music helps me escape from my troubles for a while. 8. I listen to music every day. Not a day goes by without music. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 音乐是一种世界通用的语言。 　　Music is a universal language. 2. 大多数乐队都是由音乐家自己组建的。 　　Most bands are formed by musicians themselves. 3. 他们起初在婚礼和聚会上表演。 　　They first performed at weddings and parties. 4. 他们的音乐使人们想起了过去的美好时光。 　　Their music reminded people of the good old days. 5. 他们演奏得如此动听，以至于观众都站了起来。 　　They played so beautifully that the audience stood up. 6. 这支乐队由五名成员组成。 　　The band is made up of five members. 7. 他们在舞台上表演了将近两个小时。 　　They performed on stage for nearly two hours. 8. 音乐帮助我们表达语言无法表达的情感。 　　Music helps us express feelings that words cannot express. 9. 正是在那时，我爱上了音乐。 　　It was then that I fell in love with music. 10. 每当我感到疲惫，音乐总能让我振作起来。 　　Whenever I feel tired, music always cheers me up. 11. 音乐不仅是一种娱乐，也是一种治疗。 　　Music is not only entertainment but also therapy. 12. 只有亲自聆听，你才能感受到它的力量。 　　Only by listening yourself can you feel its power. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. The song is good. I like it very much. 要求：用 so…that 合并，并换用高级形容词 → The song is so moving that I can't help listening to it again and again. 2. I was tired. I listened to music. I felt better. 要求：用现在分词作状语 + 主句 → Feeling exhausted, I turned on some music and soon felt much better. 3. Music can help us. We can express our feelings. 要求：用 enable sb. to do 改写 → Music enables us to express feelings that are hard to put into words. 4. I heard the song for the first time. I was in Junior One. 要求：用 the first time 引导时间状语从句 → I heard the song the first time I was in Junior One. 5. The concert was wonderful. Everyone stood up and clapped. 要求：用 so…that 的倒装句 → So wonderful was the concert that everyone stood up and clapped. 6. Music is entertainment. It is also a kind of therapy. 要求：用 not only…but also… 改写 → Music is not only entertainment but also a kind of therapy. 7. Whenever I feel down, I listen to this song. 要求：用 Not a day goes by without… 改写 → Not a day goes by without me listening to this song when I feel down. 8. The lyrics are simple. They touch many people. 要求：用 however 引导的让步 + 定语从句 → Simple as the lyrics are, they touch the hearts of millions of people. 9. We can truly understand a song only by listening to it ourselves. 要求：用 only + 状语置于句首的倒装句 → Only by listening to a song ourselves can we truly understand it. 10. Music gave me strength. I got through that difficult year. 要求：用 It was…that… 强调句 → It was music that gave me strength and helped me get through that difficult year. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Music is what feelings sound like. 音乐就是情感的声音。　（what 引导的表语从句） Never have I heard a song that speaks to me so deeply. 我从未听过一首如此直击我心的歌。　（否定词置于句首的倒装） What struck me first was not the melody but the lyrics. 最先打动我的不是旋律，而是歌词。　（what 主语从句 + not…but…） Whenever I feel overwhelmed, I put on my headphones and let the music carry me away. 每当我感到不堪重负，就戴上耳机，让音乐带我远行。　（whenever 引导时间状语从句） So powerful was her performance that the whole hall fell silent. 她的表演如此有力量，整个大厅都安静下来。　（so…that 的倒装） It was music that helped me get through the darkest days. 正是音乐帮我度过了最黑暗的日子。　（强调句） With the melody rising, all my worries seemed to disappear. 随着旋律升起，我所有的烦恼似乎都消失了。　（with 复合结构） The more I listen to it, the more I understand myself. 我越听这首歌，就越了解自己。　（the + 比较级, the + 比较级） There is no denying that music has a healing power. 不可否认，音乐具有治愈的力量。　（There is no denying that…） Compared with words, music reaches a place in us that language cannot. 与语言相比，音乐能抵达语言无法抵达的内心深处。　（过去分词作状语） Not until I lost myself in music did I realize how much I needed it. 直到沉浸在音乐中，我才意识到自己多么需要它。　（not until 的倒装） Simple as the tune is, it stays with you long after the song ends. 曲调虽简单，却在歌结束后久久萦绕。　（as 引导的让步状语从句倒装） Every song is a small door through which we enter someone else's world. 每一首歌都是一扇小门，我们借此走进别人的世界。　（介词 + 关系代词引导的定语从句） Music does not change the world, but it changes the people who will. 音乐不改变世界，却改变着那些将要改变世界的人。　（not…but… 对称句） 七、同话题高考真题【2019年高考全国卷Ⅲ 应用文试题】 假定你是李华，你校将举办音乐节。请给外教Allen写封邮件，邀请他参加，内容包括： 1. 音乐节的时间和地点； 2. 音乐节的活动； 3. 邀请他表演节目。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 【审题建模】 审体裁：邀请信（电子邮件），三段式。 审人称：以第一人称（I / we）为主，称对方用 you。 审时态：活动安排用一般将来时；说明活动内容可用一般将来时。 审内容：Para 1 问候 + 邀请 + 时间地点；Para 2 活动内容（乐队演出、独唱、乐器演奏、观众互动）；Para 3 邀请表演 + 期待回复。 审语气：热情、尊重，突出“我们特别希望您登台”的诚意。 【参考范文】 Dear Allen, 　　I'm writing to invite you to our school music festival, which will be held in the school hall from 6:00 to 9:00 p.m. next Friday. 　　The festival will be a real feast for music lovers. Student bands will perform rock and folk songs, several talented singers will give solo performances, and there will even be a traditional Chinese instrument show. At the end of the evening, the audience will be invited to sing along with the performers. 　　Since you are so good at playing the guitar, we would be honoured if you could give us a performance. It would certainly be the highlight of the night. 　　Looking forward to your reply. 　　Yours, 　　Li Hua 【亮点句式】 ① …which will be held in…（非限制性定语从句补充时间地点，避免另起一句） ② The festival will be a real feast for music lovers.（比喻句作主题句，一句话定调） ③ Since you are so good at…, we would be honoured if…（先扬后请，邀请更显诚意） ④ It would certainly be the highlight of the night.（虚拟语气表推测，抬高对方） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 The Song That Changed Me 　　Not a day goes by without music, but one song means more to me than all the others—“Heal the World”, which I first heard in my first year of junior high. 　　That winter, I failed an important exam and felt I had let everyone down. One evening, my father played the song in the car without saying a word. When Michael Jackson sang “heal the world, make it a better place”, something inside me loosened. I realized that my failure was only a moment, not the whole story. 　　From then on, music has done two things for me. It calms me down when I am anxious, and it reminds me that I am not alone. Whenever I feel overwhelmed, I put on my headphones and let the melody carry me away for ten minutes. 　　If I may offer one suggestion, it is this: listen to a whole album, not just short videos. Sit down, close your eyes and follow the music from beginning to end—only in this way can you hear what the singer is really trying to say. 【学生习作】 The Song That Changed Me 　　I like music very much. I listen to music every day. My favourite song is “Heal the World”. 　　I heard it when I was in junior high school. At that time I was very sad. I failed an exam. I thought I was not good. The song is very good. It made me happy. I listened to it many times. 　　Music is very important. It can make us relax. It can make us happy. I think everyone should listen to music. 　　I hope you can listen to this song too. 【习作点评】 优点：扣题准确，写出了具体歌曲和听歌的场景，能看出真实的情感，结构完整，语言基本正确。 问题一：叙事缺少细节。“I was very sad. I failed an exam.”两句就把最该展开的部分带过了；应补上“谁、何时、何地、听到哪一句”，例如父亲在车里什么也没说就放了这首歌。 问题二：影响写得太泛。“It can make us relax. It can make us happy.”是任何人都能写的句子，应具体到“它让我平静下来”“它让我知道我不是一个人”。 问题三：句式重复严重。全文 11 句中有 8 句是“主语 + be + 形容词”或“It can…”，应加入 Whenever…、Not a day goes by without…、only 倒装等结构。 问题四：结尾没有落实“推荐一种方式”这一要点，只是重复“希望你也听”，内容分会被扣。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：把“听歌”写成“场景”。“I heard it when I was in junior high school”只有 6 分，“my father played the song in the car without saying a word”才有 12 分——因为后者有画面、有人物、有情绪。 得分点二：影响要“可验证”。与其写 it makes me happy，不如写 it calms me down when I am anxious、it reminds me that I am not alone，读者能立刻对上自己的生活经验。 得分点三：本单元词块要用够。fall in love with、cheer sb. up、remind sb. of、be absorbed in、touch one's heart、a source of inspiration 至少出现 5 个，结尾再用 Only in this way can you… 收束，语言与立意同时到位。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $