Unit 1 A New Start 读后续写句式仿写与实战演练 -2027届高三英语一轮复习外研版必修第一册

读后续写句式仿写与实战演练 外研版必修一 Unit 1 A New Start 【单元导读】 本单元围绕“新起点”展开：高中第一天的忐忑与期待，以及学长 Lisa 的经验之谈。“初次经历”是读后续写高频话题——新学校、第一次比赛、第一次独自面对困难。写好这类故事需要三种能力：用环境描写渲染气氛、用动作链还原现场、用心理变化推动情节。下面按“环境—动作—心理—过渡—升华”主线，精选 12 个可直接迁移的教材句式；第二部分的实战演练则把这些句式真正“用活”在 50 篇素材的真实故事里。 【话题语块储备】（续写高频，按功能取用） 环境与气氛：be still quiet 一片寂静 ｜ with one's heart beating fast 心跳加速 ｜ in the last light 在暮色中 ｜ be wrapped in morning mist 笼罩在晨雾中 动作与节奏：rush out of the door 冲出门 ｜ go all out 全力以赴 ｜ one by one / in turn 依次 ｜ step into the light 走入灯光 情绪与心理：feel a lot more relaxed 放松许多 ｜ be frightened at the sight of 一看到…就害怕 ｜ aching to be accepted 渴望被接纳 ｜ with a trace of annoyance 带着一丝恼怒 过渡与升华：However 然而（转折）｜ There is always a way to 总有办法… ｜ People say 人们说 ｜ turn … into 把…变成 第一部分 仿写句式库 句式1　[环境与场景]　抵达时刻——以静衬“早”，引出行动 【原句】The campus was still quiet when I arrived, so I decided to explore a bit. 【结构】… was still + adj. when …, so … decided to … 【点拨】still quiet 用环境的“静”反衬到达之早、人物之新；so 顺接行动，一句完成“场景+动作”双重任务。读后续写首段常需“初到某地，我决定……”，此句比平铺 I arrived 更有层次。提醒：arrive / reach / get to 三选一即可，把篇幅留给 still quiet 这类氛围词；decided to 后接动词原形。 【情境仿写】The little town was still wrapped in morning mist when we arrived, so we decided to walk along the river before the crowd woke. 句式2　[动作与动作链]　定格画面——先动作，后镜头 【原句】Turning around, I saw a white-haired man. 【结构】Doing …, I saw + n. 【点拨】现在分词开头先写“我”的反应，再亮出所见，像电影定格。读后续写每次“突然撞见新人/新物”都可用它制造悬念，也顺带打破“句句以 I 开头”的单调。提醒：分词短语的逻辑主语必须是 I；可换 Seeing / Looking up 等，镜头感不变。 【情境仿写】Looking up from my book, I saw a girl in a red coat standing at the door. 句式3　[场景切换]　线索人物再度登场 【原句】When my English teacher stepped into the classroom, I was surprised to see the same man I had met earlier. 【结构】When … stepped into …, … was surprised to see the same … 【点拨】stepped into 完成场景切换，the same … 一语勾连前后两幕，surprised 点出反应。读后续写里“伏笔人物”再次出场时，用它把两幕缝合成整体，还能制造戏剧性。提醒：same 是得分点，它暗示前文已有铺垫——前后呼应正是阅卷看点。 【情境仿写】When the old neighbor stepped into the light, I was surprised to see the same man who had returned my lost wallet. 句式4　[动作与动作链]　期待外化为动作链 【原句】I woke up early and rushed out of the door in my eagerness. 【结构】… woke up early and rushed out … in one's eagerness 【点拨】woke up early 与 rushed out 构成动作链，in my eagerness 点出行为背后的情绪，让动作“有动机”。读后续写写人物为何急切做某事，一句话交代，比堆动词更高级。提醒：eagerness 可换 excitement / anxiety，情绪词一换，故事基调随变。 【情境仿写】She woke before dawn and ran to the kitchen in her eagerness to prepare a surprise breakfast. 句式5　[动作与动作链]　突发事件插入——“正在……这时突然……” 【原句】I was looking at the photos on the noticeboard when I heard a voice behind me. 【结构】… was doing … when … 【点拨】过去进行时铺“平静背景”，when 从句突然插入打破平衡的事件（when ≈ and suddenly）。这是引入冲突、意外的万能句：先铺陈，再一笔打破，张力立现。提醒：when 从句用一般过去时，与前面的过去进行时形成时态对比，是本句的得分细节。 【情境仿写】I was arranging the books on the shelf when a soft knock sounded at the back door. 句式6　[心理与情感]　逆境中的选择——决心加行动 【原句】But she decided to go all out and work hard to support her teammates. 【结构】But … decided to go all out and work hard to … 【点拨】But 转折先声夺人，go all out 与 work hard 形成行动升级，to support … 补出目的。读后续写里人物受挫后“从哪里跌倒从哪里爬起”的转折段，用它完成从决心到行动的落地。提醒：go all out 后常接 and + 第二个动作，写出“决心+持续行动”的完整链条。 【情境仿写】But he decided to go all out and practise every evening to win back his place in the team. 句式7　[心理与情感]　长久期盼终成现实 【原句】My first day at senior high finally arrived after I had pictured it over and over again in my mind. 【结构】… finally arrived after I had pictured … over and over again 【点拨】过去完成时 had pictured 写出期盼之久，over and over again 加强语气，finally 稳稳落地。读后续写开篇模板：重要日子终于到来，“我”早已在脑中预演无数遍。提醒：若材料首句已给时间，此句退居第二句专铺心情；pictured 可换 imagined / rehearsed。 【情境仿写】The day of the final exam finally arrived after I had reviewed the notes over and over again. 句式8　[心理与情感]　尴尬场面中的迟来发现 【原句】When I introduced my name, everyone started laughing. At last I found I shared the same name with my teacher. 【结构】When …, everyone started … At last I found … 【点拨】先写众人反应，再写“我”发现的原因，有层次有悬念。读后续写里的意外、误会、巧合都可这样写，让读者和人物一起“后知后觉”。提醒：两句用句号断开，短句更有镜头切换感；第二句可换 Only then did I realise … 加强语气。 【情境仿写】When I opened the gift, my friends burst out laughing. At last I found it was the same sweater I had returned last week. 句式9　[心理与情感]　他人一句话带来的情绪转变 【原句】However, my teacher's words made me feel a lot more relaxed. 【结构】However, sb's words made me feel … 【点拨】However 转折 + make sb do，一句话完成从紧张到释然的过渡。读后续写里“他人的安慰/鼓励”几乎必写，可直接调用；a lot more 修饰比较级，把变化幅度也写出来。提醒：make 后接不带 to 的动词原形，feel 后接形容词，是高频易错点。 【情境仿写】However, the stranger's smile made me feel safe enough to ask for help. 句式10　[心理与情感]　回忆里的恐惧与失落 【原句】She still remembers when she was frightened at the sight of the chemistry test paper and when she wasn't selected for the end-of-year volleyball competition. 【结构】sb still remembers when … and when … 【点拨】still remembers 引出回忆，两个 when 从句并列，一“怕”一“失落”，压缩成长的典型挫折。读后续写需插叙往事、解释心结时，用它把“过去之痛”压进一句，避免大段倒叙拖慢节奏。提醒：回忆内容要与当前情节相关，切忌为插叙而插叙。 【情境仿写】He still remembers when he was frightened at the sight of the dark water and when he was left out of the team photo. 句式11　[过渡与升华]　引用格言，由叙事转入感悟 【原句】People say, "Well begun, half done." I guess this was a good beginning to my new school life. 【结构】People say, "…". I guess this was … 【点拨】先引格言，再用 I guess this was … 落回自身经历，完成由“事”到“悟”的过渡。读后续写结尾常需“拔高一句”，此句提供自然入口：不突兀、有文采。提醒：格言宜短，落回自身的一句宜实，一虚一实才不空洞。 【情境仿写】People say, "A small kind act can light a whole day." I guess that coupon did exactly that for us. 句式12　[过渡与升华]　从经历中提炼通用道理 【原句】There is always a way to be part of something that we love. 【结构】There is always a way to … 【点拨】There be 给出普适结论，不定式 to 引具体路径，简洁气足。读后续写最后一句点题常用“总有办法/总有一条路……”，比 I think 开头的主观断言更含蓄有力。提醒：to 后接动词原形，句末不必再添评论，戛然而止更有力。 【情境仿写】There is always a way to turn an awkward start into a real friendship. 巩固练习（课堂当堂练，题量贴合实际） 1. 句型迁移（句式3）用 “When … stepped into …, … was surprised to see the same …” 描写： 当那位一向沉默的邻居走进灯光下，我惊讶地发现——竟是上周帮我捡回书包的那个人。 2. 语境仿写（句式5）用 “… was doing … when …” 写一句： 我正在整理书架，这时后门突然传来轻轻的敲门声。 3. 表达升级 基础句：The teacher came in. We stopped talking. 请用现在分词开头改写，让句式更丰富。 4. 微写作 以“第一次独自照顾生病的弟弟”为题续写两段，至少用上本课 3 个句式（建议选用 句式4 动作链、句式5 突发事件、句式9 情绪转变），词数 80–100。 参考答案 1.When the usually silent neighbor stepped into the light, I was surprised to see the same man who had returned my lost schoolbag last week. 2.I was arranging the books on the shelf when a soft knock sounded at the back door. 3.Seeing the teacher come in, we all stopped talking and took our seats. 4.开放题，示例（含句式4动作链、句式5突发事件、句式9情绪转变）：I woke before dawn and tiptoed into the kitchen in my eagerness to make porridge for my sick brother. I was feeling his forehead when the fever suddenly spiked and he began to cry. However, Mom's calm voice on the phone made me feel brave enough to fetch the medicine at once. 第二部分 实战演练 【使用说明】每篇均给出：阅读原文 → 续写任务 → 推荐运用的教材句式 → 参考范文（亲自撰写，刻意用活推荐句式）→ 范文句式亮点。建议用法：先独立续写，再对照范文圈出被“激活”的教材句式，最后回看第一部分补全自己的句式弹药库。四篇所推荐的句式互不重复，覆盖全部 12 条。 实战 　Bobby 与一角硬币 善意无需购买 话题：社会善意 贫寒中的爱与慷慨 【阅读原文】 Bobby was getting cold sitting out in his backyard in the snow. Bobby didn’t wear boots; or rather, he didn’t own any. The thin sneakers he wore had a few holes in them and they did a poor job of keeping out the cold. Bobby had been in his backyard for about an hour already. Try as he might, he could not come up with an idea for his mother’s Christmas gift. He shook his head as he thought, “This is useless. Even if I do come up with an idea, I don’t have any money for a gift.” Wiping tears from his eyes, Bobby started walking down to the street where the shops were. It wasn’t easy being six without a father, especially when he needed a man to talk to. Bobby walked from shop to shop, looking into each decorated window. Everything seemed so beautiful but so out of reach. It was starting to get dark and Bobby reluctantly turned to walk home when suddenly his eyes caught the glimmer (微光) of the setting sun’s rays reflecting on something on the roadside. He reached down and discovered a shiny dime (一角硬币). Never before has anyone felt as wealthy as Bobby did at that moment. As he held his newly- found treasure, warmth spread throughout his entire body and he walked into the first store. His excitement quickly turned cold when salesperson after salesperson told him that he could not buy anything with only a dime. He saw a flower shop and went inside to wait in line. When the shop owner asked if he could help him, Bobby presented the dime and asked if he could buy one flower for his mother’s Christmas gift. The shop owner looked at Bobby and his ten-cent offering. Then he put his hand on Bobby’s shoulder, saying, “You just wait here and I’ll see what I can do for you.” The sound of the door closing as the last customer left pulled Bobby back to reality. All alone in the shop, Bobby began to feel alone and afraid. 【续写任务】Paragraph 1: Eventually the shop owner came out and moved to the counter. Paragraph 2: With the bunch of beautiful roses in his hands, Bobby backed off and then turned and ran. 【推荐运用的教材句式】 句式4 期待外化为动作链模板：… woke up early and rushed out … in one's eagerness；用法：把“急着为妈妈买礼物”写成有动机的动作链。 句式7 长久期盼终成现实模板：… finally arrived after I had pictured … over and over again；用法：用过去完成时铺出对礼物的长久想象。 句式11 引用格言，由叙事转入感悟模板：People say, "…". I guess this was …；用法：结尾用格言收束，再落回 Bobby 的体会。 【参考范文】 Eventually the shop owner came out and moved to the counter. In his eagerness to buy a gift for his mother, Bobby had rushed from shop to shop since morning, and now his small hands trembled as he pushed the dime forward. The day of giving finally arrived after he had pictured his mother's smile over and over again in his mind, yet the ten-cent coin seemed to mock his wish. With the bunch of beautiful roses in his hands, Bobby backed off and then turned and ran. People say, "It is better to give than to receive." I guess that winter afternoon taught Bobby exactly what that meant — for the owner had quietly paid for the flowers himself. Clutching the roses, Bobby ran home, certain that no gift had ever carried more love. 【范文句式亮点】 →“In his eagerness to buy a gift … Bobby had rushed from shop to shop” → 句式4（期待外化为动作链，in his eagerness 点出动机）。 →“The day of giving finally arrived after he had pictured his mother's smile over and over again” → 句式7（长久期盼终成现实，had pictured 写期盼之久）。 →“People say, 'It is better to give than to receive.' I guess that winter afternoon taught Bobby …” → 句式11（引用格言，由叙事转入感悟，一虚一实）。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $