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How to Protect Our Environment
书面表达写作指导课
仁爱版 · 九年级上册 · Unit 2 Greener Planet, Better Home
作文题目
环境对所有生物十分重要,现在环境污染问题日益严重。请以 How to Protect Our Environment 为题写一篇英语短文参加学校英语征文比赛。
写作要点:
① Why should we protect the environment?
② What kind of pollution do we face?
③ What do you often do in your daily life to protect the environment?
④ Call on more people to protect the environment.
词数 80-100 词,不得出现真实姓名和学校名称。
第一步:理清思路 & 头脑风暴
我们要写:如何保护环境。先想好词,再说句子。
环境很重要
depend on / play an important role in
污染问题
air pollution / water pollution
关灯节能
turn off the lights / save energy
带布袋购物
take cloth bags / instead of plastic bags
垃圾分类
sort rubbish / as carefully as we can
号召行动
take action / realize the importance
第二步:连词成句(看中文+关键词说英文)
所有生物都依赖环境,所以它在我们生活中扮演重要角色。
关键词:所有生物 all living things|依赖 depend on|所以 so|扮演重要角色 play an important role in
All living things depend on the environment, so it plays an important role in our life.
如果我们持续污染它,我们将会失去干净的水和清新的空气。
关键词:如果 if|持续做 keep doing|污染 pollute|将会 will|干净的水 clean water|清新的空气 fresh air
If we keep polluting it, we will lose clean water and fresh air.
空气污染和水污染是其中最严重的。
关键词:空气污染 air pollution|水污染 water pollution|最严重的 the most serious
Air pollution and water pollution are the most serious ones.
虽然我们只是中学生,但我们在日常生活中可以做很多小事。
关键词:虽然 though|中学生 middle-school students|日常生活 in daily life|做小事 do small things
Though we are only middle-school students, we can do lots of small things in daily life.
当我离开房间时,我总会关灯,以便节约更多能源。
关键词:当……时 when|离开房间 leave a room|关灯 turn off the lights|以便 so that|节约能源 save energy
When I leave a room, I always turn off the lights so that I can save more energy.
第三步:表达看法(结尾升华)
结尾别只写"We should protect the environment."升级一下。
我们希望每个人都能意识到环境保护的重要性。
关键词:希望 hope that|意识到 realize|……的重要性 the importance of|环境保护 environmental protection
We hope that everyone can realize the importance of environmental protection.
我们做得越多,我们的世界就会变得越好。让我们立刻行动起来。
关键词:the+比较级, the+比较级|做得越多 the more we do|变得越好 the better|采取行动 take action
The more we do, the better our world will become. Let's take action right now.
范文赏析:How to Protect Our Environment
【第一段】 All living things depend on the environment, so it plays an important role in our life. If we keep polluting it, we will lose clean water and fresh air, because we can't live without them. Nowadays we face many kinds of pollution, and air pollution and water pollution are the most serious ones.
【第二段】 Though we are only middle-school students, we can do lots of small things in daily life. When I leave a room, I always turn off the lights so that I can save more energy. When I go shopping, I take cloth bags instead of plastic bags, for they do harm to the earth. I also sort rubbish as carefully as I can.
【第三段】 We hope that everyone can realize the importance of environmental protection. The more we do, the better our world will become. Let's take action right now.
图例: 红色=从句/高级句型 蓝色=重点短语 绿色=好句亮点
范文用到的语法结构(约110词)
① so 并列连词(所以)
② if 条件状语从句(主将从现)
③ because 原因状语从句
④ though 让步状语从句
⑤ when 时间状语从句
⑥ so that 目的状语从句
⑦ the+比较级, the+比较级
⑧ 形容词最高级
语法精讲① if 条件状语从句(主将从现)
【原句】 If we keep polluting it, we will lose clean water and fresh air.
【翻译】 如果我们持续污染它,我们将会失去干净的水和清新的空气。
【要点】 if从句用一般现在时,主句用一般将来时(will+动词原形)
✍ 仿写练习:看中文+关键词,自己说英文
如果你坚持尝试,你将会取得巨大进步。
关键词:if|坚持尝试 keep trying|将会 will|取得进步 make progress
If you keep trying, you will make great progress.
如果人人都尽全力,我们的世界将会变得更美丽。
关键词:if|人人 everyone|尽全力 try one's best|变得更美丽 become more beautiful
If everyone tries his best, our world will become more beautiful.
语法精讲② though 让步状语从句(虽然……但是……)
【原句】 Though we are only middle-school students, we can do lots of small things in daily life.
【翻译】 虽然我们只是中学生,但我们在日常生活中可以做很多小事。
【要点】 though不能和but连用,但可以和yet连用
✍ 仿写练习:看中文+关键词,自己说英文
虽然他很累,但他仍然坚持工作。
关键词:though|累 tired|仍然 still|坚持工作 keep working
Though he is tired, he keeps working.
虽然雨下得很大,我们仍然去上学。
关键词:though|雨下得大 rain heavily|仍然 still|去上学 go to school
Though it rained heavily, we still went to school.
语法精讲③ so that 目的状语从句(以便……)
【原句】 When I leave a room, I always turn off the lights so that I can save more energy.
【翻译】 当我离开房间时,我总会关灯,以便节约更多能源。
【要点】 so that后面常接can/could/may/might,表示目的
✍ 仿写练习:看中文+关键词,自己说英文
她努力学习,为的是能够通过考试。
关键词:努力学习 study hard|以便 so that|通过考试 pass the exam
She studies hard so that she can pass the exam.
我每天早起,以便能有时间读英语。
关键词:起床 get up early|以便 so that|有时间 have time|读英语 read English
I get up early every day so that I can have time to read English.
语法精讲④ the+比较级, the+比较级(越……越……)
【原句】 The more we do, the better our world will become.
【翻译】 我们做得越多,我们的世界就会变得越好。
【要点】 结构:the + 比较级..., the + 比较级...
✍ 仿写练习:看中文+关键词,自己说英文
你练习得越多,就会越熟练。
关键词:the+比较级|练习 practice|越熟练 the more skilled
The more you practice, the more skilled you will be.
我们种的树越多,空气就会越清新。
关键词:the+比较级|种树 plant trees|越清新 the fresher|空气 air
The more trees we plant, the fresher the air will be.
重点短语必背(选自范文)
① depend on
依靠,依赖
② play an important role in
在……起重要作用
③ keep doing sth.
持续做某事
④ turn off
关闭(电器)
⑤ instead of
代替,而不是
⑥ do harm to
对……有害
⑦ take action
采取行动
短语闯关(看中文说英文)
① 依靠,依赖
depend on
② 在……起重要作用
play an important role in
③ 持续做某事
keep doing sth.
④ 关闭(电器)
turn off
⑤ 代替,而不是
instead of
⑥ 对……有害
do harm to
⑦ 采取行动
take action
背诵闯关(一)看中文背英文
所有生物都依赖环境,所以它在我们生活中扮演重要角色。
结构:depend on|so|play an important role in
All living things depend on the environment, so it plays an important role in our life.
如果我们持续污染它,我们将会失去干净的水和清新的空气。
结构:if 条件从句|keep doing|will
If we keep polluting it, we will lose clean water and fresh air.
虽然我们只是中学生,但我们在日常生活中可以做很多小事。
结构:though 让步从句|in daily life
Though we are only middle-school students, we can do lots of small things in daily life.
背诵闯关(二)看中文背英文
当我离开房间时,我总会关灯,以便节约更多能源。
结构:when|turn off|so that
When I leave a room, I always turn off the lights so that I can save more energy.
我们做得越多,我们的世界就会变得越好。
结构:the+比较级, the+比较级
The more we do, the better our world will become.
让我们立刻行动起来。
结构:take action|right now
Let's take action right now.
写作技巧总结
① 四段变三段
引出话题→阐述原因+做法→结尾号召,三段式总分总
② 多用状语从句
if条件、though让步、so that目的,让句子有层次
③ 要点全覆盖
原因→污染→做法→号召,四个要点一个不能少
④ 时态统一
全文一般现在时,不要一会儿过去时一会儿现在时
⑤ 结尾升华
用the+比较级, the+比较级加分,发出号召take action
Greener Planet, Better Home.
绿色地球,美好家园。下节课见!
仁爱版 · 九年级上册 · Unit 2 Greener Planet, Better Home
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