Unit4 writing学案2026-2027学年沪教版七年级英语上册

七年级上册 Unit 4 The Earth | 写作 U4 写作探究学案 2026—2027学年沪教版七年级英语上册 班级 __________ 姓名 __________ 日期 __________ 本课任务：为Teen Post绿色周写一篇短文，让同龄读者知道为什么保护地球、怎样开始行动。 学习重点：每段围绕一个中心，并用细节支撑。学习难点：让问题与建议对应，避免空泛口号。 一 先读懂写作任务 4分钟 Teen Post is collecting articles for Green Week. Write 70–90 words about protecting the Earth. Describe its beauty or value, explain one or two problems, and suggest things students can do. 1. Who will read your article? ____________________________________ 2. What should readers be able to do after reading it? __________________ 二 选材料时先问是否相关 7分钟 Read the notes. Choose useful ones. Cross out the note that does not help this article. a. The Earth gives us water and air. b. Plastic rubbish may harm sea animals. c. My cousin buys a new computer on Sunday. d. We can bring our own bottles to school. e. People waste paper. f. We can use both sides of paper. 3. Put your choices into three parts: Paragraph My notes 1 Beauty or value ______________________________________ 2 Problem and harm ______________________________________ 3 Action and reason ______________________________________ 4. Match an action to each problem. Then explain ONE match. Plastic rubbish → _________________________________ Wasted paper → __________________________________ This action helps because ________________________________________. 句型支架：The Earth provides us with … / … can harm … / We can … / Let’s … 三 做一次小编辑 9分钟 Read this draft. The writer has ideas, but the reader needs clearer details. The Earth is nice. There are beautiful places. It gives us many things. But there are some pollution in the sea. Some animals eat plastic. We should do good things. We should protect it. It is important. 5. Find and correct one grammar mistake. ________________________________________________________________ 6. Replace “There are beautiful places” with a sentence giving two examples. ________________________________________________________________ 7. Add a result to “Some animals eat plastic.” Some animals eat plastic, so _____________________________________. 8. Replace “We should do good things” with one action students can take and a time or place. ________________________________________________________________ 9. The same draft ends with “It is important.” What does “It” mean? Rewrite the sentence to make the meaning clear. ________________________________________________________________ 四 把三段话搭起来 4分钟 Write one topic sentence for each paragraph. Choose words that fit YOUR ideas. Paragraph 1: ___________________________________________________ Supporting detail: ______________________________________________ Paragraph 2: ___________________________________________________ Supporting detail: ______________________________________________ Paragraph 3: ___________________________________________________ Supporting detail: ______________________________________________ 连接提示：For example用于举例；However表示转折；because说明原因。按需要选用，不必全部塞进文章。 基础支架：The Earth is our … It gives us … However, … We can … because … 提升挑战：把一句笼统建议改为“谁＋何时／何地＋做什么”。 五 完成初稿并修改 16分钟 Write 70–90 words in three short paragraphs. Give your article a title. You have 10 minutes for writing and 6 minutes for checking and revising. Title: _________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 读者检查单 先自己检查，再请同桌只提出一条最有用的建议。 [ ] 第一段让读者知道地球的美或价值。 [ ] 问题后写了影响，建议能回应问题。 [ ] 至少一项行动是学生可以做到的。 [ ] there is / are、拼写、大小写和标点已检查。 My partner’s question: ___________________________________________ My sentence before revision: _____________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ My sentence after revision: ______________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ 参考答案与写作评价 教材对应：第60—61页。课堂依次完成审题、选材、修改和写作，共40分钟。70—90词为本学案的训练要求，可按学情适度调整。 1. Teen readers / Students. 2. They should know why and how to protect the Earth. 接受具体表述，如They can bring their own bottles。 3. 删除c。第1段用a；第2段用b或e；第3段用d或f。可写一两个问题，不要求把所有材料都用上。 4. Plastic rubbish → bring our own bottles；Wasted paper → use both sides of paper。理由示例：Using both sides of paper helps us use less paper。 5. there are some pollution → there is some pollution。6. 示例：There are high mountains and beautiful rivers。 7. 示例：they may get ill or die。8. 示例：We can bring our own bottles to school every day。9. It指代不够清楚；可改为Protecting the Earth is important to all of us。 三段提纲示例：The Earth is our beautiful home. / However, our home has problems. / Students can help in simple ways. 每句后配相关事实或行动。 参考短文 Small actions for our Earth The Earth is our beautiful home. There are high mountains and blue seas. It gives us food, water and air. However, there is plastic rubbish in the sea. Some sea animals eat it and get ill. People also waste paper every day. We can bring our own bottles to school and use both sides of paper. These actions help us make less rubbish and save paper. Let’s start today and keep our home clean. 参考短文74词，不含标题。仅供讲评；学生初稿前不展示整篇范文。 维度 评价依据 分值 内容 地球价值、问题影响、对应行动齐全且合理 4 结构 三段分工清楚，细节支持中心 2 语言 基本句准确，表达清楚，错误不妨碍理解 3 修改 根据检查或反馈完成一处有效修改 1 讲评优先级：先看建议能否解决文中问题，再看句子准确性。基础学生可先写60词左右的完整草稿，再补充一个细节；不因词数少几词掩盖其内容进步。 第 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $