Unit 6 At One with Nature 写景记叙文（含学习地图）（单元同步写作讲义）高中英语外研版必修第一册

Unit 6 At One with Nature｜写景游记写作学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 人与自然·自然风光与生态 写景记叙文（游记） 80词左右 按序描写自然景色，抒发人与自然和谐的感悟 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 开头、发展、高潮、结尾 搭出完整叙事结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 描述人物、交代信息的常用句式 把人和事写得具体、连贯 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整记叙文 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练习1｜湖光山色之旅 人与社会·旅游观光 空间顺序与景物描写 练习2｜乡村生态体验 人与自然·生态旅游 体验叙事与情感表达 练习3｜家乡的秋天 人与自然·季节 景物描写与修辞运用 练习4｜登山观日出 人与自然·人与环境 时间顺序与哲理收束 练习5｜海边度假 人与自然·自然地理 多感官描写与敬畏表达 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 6 At One with Nature 写景记叙文（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题： At One with Nature；自然风光、人与自然和谐共生 应用文体裁： 写景记叙文（游记） 写作任务： 以游记记叙一次亲近自然的经历，按序描写沿途景色，抒发游览感悟，表达对自然的热爱与敬畏。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 开头（1—2句） 交代游览的时间、地点与缘由，引出这段经历。 主体（3—4句） 按空间或时间顺序描写沿途景色，调动感官写出细节。 结尾（1—2句） 抒发游览感悟，点明人与自然和谐相处的主题。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 grand 宏伟的，壮丽的 描写山川气势 valley 谷，山谷 描写山谷景色 waterfall 瀑布 描写水景 steep 陡的，陡峭的 描写山路 path 小径，小道 描写游踪线路 beauty 美，美丽 点明景色之美 region 地区，区域 交代游览地点 therefore 因此，由此 衔接游览感悟 harmony 融洽相处，和谐 升华人与自然主题 crop 庄稼，作物 描写田园景色 soil 土壤 描写乡土风貌 climate 气候 描写地域环境 benefit 好处，益处 表达自然馈赠 pleasant 令人愉快的 描写旅途感受 energy 力量，活力 描写内心感受 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 at one with nature 与自然和谐相处 点明单元主题 a sheet of 一大片 描写水面景色 flow down 流淌而下 描写瀑布水流 wind one's way 蜿蜒而行 描写山路走向 take in the view 欣赏景色 描写观景行为 be surrounded by 被……环绕 描写环境位置 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. We walked along a narrow ________(小径) that ________(蜿蜒而行) up the steep hill. 2. From the top of the mountain, we saw a deep ________(山谷) below. 3. The ________(瀑布) flows down from the rocks, and the water is clear and cool. 4. Local farmers grow their ________(庄稼) on the rich ________(土壤) of this ________(地区). 5. Standing in the quiet forest, I felt completely ________(与自然和谐相处). 句子翻译 1. 清晨，我们沿着一条通往山顶的小路出发了。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 站在山顶上，我们欣赏到了脚下山谷的壮丽景色。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 瀑布从陡峭的岩壁上飞流而下，水声如雷。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 这片土地上的人们世世代代与自然和谐相处。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 这次旅行让我明白了保护自然就是保护我们自己的家园。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 四、写作句型 开头句 1. Last National Day, I took an unforgettable trip to the mountains with my family. 2. Nestled deep in the mountains, the valley where I spent last summer still calls back my memory. 3. If you want to feel the true beauty of nature, the village at the foot of the mountain is the place to go. 中间句 1. Early in the morning, we set out along a path that wound its way up the steep hill. 2. From the top, we took in the grand view of the valley, where golden crops danced in the wind. 3. The waterfall, the sound of which could be heard far away, flowed down the rocks like a silver sheet. 4. Walking through the quiet forest, we felt the fresh air filling us with energy. 结尾句 1. Only in nature did I truly understand what harmony means. 2. The trip taught me to live at one with nature and treasure every gift it gives us. 3. Sitting on the soft grass, I felt that I was truly part of the beautiful world around me. 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______（标题） Last _______， I took a pleasant trip to _______ with _______. We set out along _______, which _______. On the way, we saw _______, where _______. From the top, we took in the grand view of _______. The trip taught me _______. I hope to visit it again soon. 模板2：分层高分版 _______（标题） Deep in _______, a place where _______, lies a world of natural beauty that I visited last _______. Early in the morning, we started along the path, which wound its way up the steep hill, _______. Halfway up, we passed _______, the sound of which _______. When we finally reached the top, _______ spread out below us, and _______. Standing there, I finally understood the meaning of living at one with nature. Nature gives us its best, and therefore, protecting it is protecting ourselves. 六、典例精练 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次你游览家乡附近山水的经历，描写沿途景色并抒发感悟。 写作要点： 1. 交代游览的时间与地点。 2. 按顺序描写沿途所见的自然景色。 3. 抒发你对人与自然和谐相处的感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Day in the Mountains Near My Home ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 七、拓展练习 练习1：记叙一次游览山水名胜的经历与感受（人与社会-旅游观光） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次你游览山水名胜的经历与感受。 写作要点： 1. 交代游览的地点与时间。 2. 描写名胜的山水景色。 3. 表达这次游览带给你的感受。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Morning by the West Lake ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习2：记叙一次乡村生态之旅中的所见所感（人与自然-生态旅游） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次乡村生态之旅中的所见所感。 写作要点： 1. 交代乡村之旅的时间与地点。 2. 描写乡村的田园景色与生态风貌。 3. 表达你对田园生活的感受与向往。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Peaceful Day in Grandma's Village ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习3：描写家乡秋季的自然景色并抒发热爱之情（人与自然-季节） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，描写家乡秋季的自然景色并抒发你的热爱之情。 写作要点： 1. 点明家乡秋天的到来。 2. 描写家乡秋天的典型景色。 3. 抒发你对家乡秋色的热爱。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Autumn in My Hometown ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习4：记叙一次登山看日出的经历与心灵触动（人与自然-人与环境） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次你登山看日出的经历与心灵触动。 写作要点： 1. 交代登山的时间与过程。 2. 描写山顶等待与日出时分的景色。 3. 表达这次经历带给你的心灵触动。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Watching the Sunrise from the Mountain Top ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习5：描写一次海边度假所见的自然景观（人与自然-自然地理） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，描写一次你海边度假所见的自然景观。 写作要点： 1. 交代海边度假的时间与地点。 2. 描写大海与沙滩的自然景观。 3. 表达你对大海与自然的敬畏之情。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 The Sea in My Eyes ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 游记结构清楚，时间地点、景色描写与感悟收束安排合理。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 景色描写具体生动，感官细节丰富，感悟自然真挚。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和"介词+关系代词"句式，写景语言准确优美。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 书写清楚，拼写、大小写和标点规范。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价结构、内容、语言和书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分15分；13—15优秀；10—12达标；7—9需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 6 At One with Nature｜写景游记写作学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 人与自然·自然风光与生态 写景记叙文（游记） 80词左右 按序描写自然景色，抒发人与自然和谐的感悟 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 开头、发展、高潮、结尾 搭出完整叙事结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 描述人物、交代信息的常用句式 把人和事写得具体、连贯 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整记叙文 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练习1｜湖光山色之旅 人与社会·旅游观光 空间顺序与景物描写 练习2｜乡村生态体验 人与自然·生态旅游 体验叙事与情感表达 练习3｜家乡的秋天 人与自然·季节 景物描写与修辞运用 练习4｜登山观日出 人与自然·人与环境 时间顺序与哲理收束 练习5｜海边度假 人与自然·自然地理 多感官描写与敬畏表达 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 6 At One with Nature 写景记叙文（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题： At One with Nature；自然风光、人与自然和谐共生 应用文体裁： 写景记叙文（游记） 写作任务： 以游记记叙一次亲近自然的经历，按序描写沿途景色，抒发游览感悟，表达对自然的热爱与敬畏。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 开头（1—2句） 交代游览的时间、地点与缘由，引出这段经历。 主体（3—4句） 按空间或时间顺序描写沿途景色，调动感官写出细节。 结尾（1—2句） 抒发游览感悟，点明人与自然和谐相处的主题。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 grand 宏伟的，壮丽的 描写山川气势 valley 谷，山谷 描写山谷景色 waterfall 瀑布 描写水景 steep 陡的，陡峭的 描写山路 path 小径，小道 描写游踪线路 beauty 美，美丽 点明景色之美 region 地区，区域 交代游览地点 therefore 因此，由此 衔接游览感悟 harmony 融洽相处，和谐 升华人与自然主题 crop 庄稼，作物 描写田园景色 soil 土壤 描写乡土风貌 climate 气候 描写地域环境 benefit 好处，益处 表达自然馈赠 pleasant 令人愉快的 描写旅途感受 energy 力量，活力 描写内心感受 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 at one with nature 与自然和谐相处 点明单元主题 a sheet of 一大片 描写水面景色 flow down 流淌而下 描写瀑布水流 wind one's way 蜿蜒而行 描写山路走向 take in the view 欣赏景色 描写观景行为 be surrounded by 被……环绕 描写环境位置 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. We walked along a narrow ________(小径) that ________(蜿蜒而行) up the steep hill. 2. From the top of the mountain, we saw a deep ________(山谷) below. 3. The ________(瀑布) flows down from the rocks, and the water is clear and cool. 4. Local farmers grow their ________(庄稼) on the rich ________(土壤) of this ________(地区). 5. Standing in the quiet forest, I felt completely ________(与自然和谐相处). 【答案】 1. path / winds its way 【解析】a narrow 后接名词 path；主语 a path 单数，wind 用第三人称单数并加 its way。 2. valley 【解析】a deep 后接名词，valley 表示"山谷"。 3. waterfall 【解析】The 后接名词，waterfall 表示"瀑布"。 4. crops / soil / region 【解析】their 后接可数名词复数 crops；rich 后接名词 soil；this 后接名词 region。 5. at one with nature 【解析】固定短语，表示"与自然和谐相处"。 句子翻译 1. 清晨，我们沿着一条通往山顶的小路出发了。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 站在山顶上，我们欣赏到了脚下山谷的壮丽景色。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 瀑布从陡峭的岩壁上飞流而下，水声如雷。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 这片土地上的人们世世代代与自然和谐相处。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 这次旅行让我明白了保护自然就是保护我们自己的家园。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 1. In the early morning, we set out along a path that led to the top of the mountain. 【解析】that 引导定语从句修饰 a path。 2. Standing on the top, we took in the grand view of the valley below us. 【解析】现在分词短语作状语，take in the view 表示"欣赏景色"。 3. The waterfall flows down the steep rocks, thundering like distant drums. 【解析】现在分词 thundering 作伴随状语，描写水声。 4. The people on this land have lived in harmony with nature for generations. 【解析】in harmony with 表示"与……和谐相处"，for generations 作时间状语。 5. This trip taught me that protecting nature means protecting our own home. 【解析】that 引导宾语从句，动名词短语作主语。 四、写作句型 开头句 1. Last National Day, I took an unforgettable trip to the mountains with my family. 2. Nestled deep in the mountains, the valley where I spent last summer still calls back my memory. 3. If you want to feel the true beauty of nature, the village at the foot of the mountain is the place to go. 中间句 1. Early in the morning, we set out along a path that wound its way up the steep hill. 2. From the top, we took in the grand view of the valley, where golden crops danced in the wind. 3. The waterfall, the sound of which could be heard far away, flowed down the rocks like a silver sheet. 4. Walking through the quiet forest, we felt the fresh air filling us with energy. 结尾句 1. Only in nature did I truly understand what harmony means. 2. The trip taught me to live at one with nature and treasure every gift it gives us. 3. Sitting on the soft grass, I felt that I was truly part of the beautiful world around me. 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______（标题） Last _______， I took a pleasant trip to _______ with _______. We set out along _______, which _______. On the way, we saw _______, where _______. From the top, we took in the grand view of _______. The trip taught me _______. I hope to visit it again soon. 模板2：分层高分版 _______（标题） Deep in _______, a place where _______, lies a world of natural beauty that I visited last _______. Early in the morning, we started along the path, which wound its way up the steep hill, _______. Halfway up, we passed _______, the sound of which _______. When we finally reached the top, _______ spread out below us, and _______. Standing there, I finally understood the meaning of living at one with nature. Nature gives us its best, and therefore, protecting it is protecting ourselves. 六、典例精练 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次你游览家乡附近山水的经历，描写沿途景色并抒发感悟。 写作要点： 1. 交代游览的时间与地点。 2. 按顺序描写沿途所见的自然景色。 3. 抒发你对人与自然和谐相处的感悟。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Day in the Mountains Near My Home ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作指导 第一步 审题谋篇 体裁是写景记叙文（游记），题干已给标题，无称呼、无落款。对象是英文报读者，目的在于分享游览经历并抒发感悟。记叙过去经历以一般过去时为主，描写恒常景色可用一般现在时；语气清新自然，情景交融。布局为时间地点、景色描写、感悟收束。 第二步 要点拆解与表达 中文要点 英文表达 句式说明 交代时间地点 Last Sunday, I visited the mountains near my home. 时间状语开头引出经历。 描写登山过程 We set out along a path that wound its way up the hill. that 引导定语从句描写路径。 描写山顶景色 We took in the grand view of the valley, where crops danced in the wind. where 引导定语从句描写地点。 抒发感悟 Living at one with nature brings us true peace. 动名词作主语点明主题。 第三步 句式升级 原句 升级句 仿写句 说明 We walked up the hill. We walked up the hill, the path of which was covered with fallen leaves. We climbed the tower, the top of which offered a grand view. 介词+关系代词描写景物细节。 The valley was beautiful. The valley, in the middle of which a river flowed, was amazingly beautiful. The village, around which rice fields spread, looked peaceful. 介词+关系代词引导定语从句。 I felt peaceful. A sense of peace flowed into my heart. A feeling of joy rose in my heart. 比喻描写内心感受。 第四步 同义替换 基础表达 升级表达 使用场景 very beautiful breathtakingly beautiful 描写壮丽景色 walked up wound its way up 描写山路蜿蜒 saw took in the view of 描写观景行为 nice weather mild autumn sunshine 描写宜人天气 I felt happy a sense of joy filled my heart 升华内心感受 a clear stream a crystal-clear stream 描写溪水的清澈质感 swimming happily flashing like silver coins 描写鱼群的灵动光影 reached the top arrived at the peak bathed in sunshine 描写登顶时刻的画面 golden crops endless waves of golden crops 描写田野的辽阔动感 the beauty around us the quiet beauty the land offers us 描写自然馈赠的静谧之美 参考范文 基础版范文 A Day in the Mountains Near My Home Last Sunday, my family and I visited the mountains near our home. In the morning, we set out along a path winding up the steep hill. Halfway up, we passed a clear stream, in which small fish were swimming. When we reached the top, we took in the grand view of the valley, where golden crops danced in the wind. There, I felt completely at one with nature. The trip taught me to treasure the beauty around us. 提高版范文 A Day in the Mountains Near My Home Last Sunday, my family and I visited the mountains near our home. In the morning, we set out along a path winding up the steep hill. Halfway up, we passed a crystal-clear stream, in which small fish were flashing like silver coins. When we arrived at the peak bathed in sunshine, we took in the grand view of the valley, where endless waves of golden crops danced in the wind. There, I felt completely at one with nature. The trip taught me to treasure the quiet beauty the land offers us. 七、拓展练习 练习1：记叙一次游览山水名胜的经历与感受（人与社会-旅游观光） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次你游览山水名胜的经历与感受。 写作要点： 1. 交代游览的地点与时间。 2. 描写名胜的山水景色。 3. 表达这次游览带给你的感受。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Morning by the West Lake ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：游记，题干已给标题，记叙游览山水名胜的经历。 2. 要点：交代地点时间；描写山水景色；表达游览感受。 3. 结构：地点引入；景色描写；感受收束。 4. 表达：使用 beauty、waterfall、a sheet of、take in the view 和 pleasant。 基础版范文 Morning by the West Lake Morning mist was still rising from the West Lake when my parents and I arrived one summer day. The lake lay quietly in the morning sun, like a sheet of silver glass. We walked along the water, taking in the view of the hills far away, the tops of which were hidden in soft white mist. Birds sang in the trees, and the air smelled sweet. I have never seen such beauty. That peaceful morning stays in my heart like a picture. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 lay quietly slept peacefully in the morning light 以拟人手法呈现宁静 a sheet of silver glass a huge mirror handed down by nature 突出自然造化的神奇 taking in the view drinking in every bit of the view 强化欣赏的沉浸感 hidden in soft white mist wrapped in a thin veil of white mist 以比喻升级雾景描写 stays in my heart is painted on my memory forever 升华记忆的深远持久 提高版范文 Morning by the West Lake Morning mist was still rising from the West Lake when my parents and I arrived one summer day. The lake slept peacefully in the morning light, like a huge mirror handed down by nature. We walked along the water, drinking in every bit of the view of the hills far away, the tops of which were wrapped in a thin veil of white mist. Birds sang in the trees, and the air smelled sweet. I have never seen such beauty. That peaceful morning is painted on my memory forever. 练习2：记叙一次乡村生态之旅中的所见所感（人与自然-生态旅游） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次乡村生态之旅中的所见所感。 写作要点： 1. 交代乡村之旅的时间与地点。 2. 描写乡村的田园景色与生态风貌。 3. 表达你对田园生活的感受与向往。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Peaceful Day in Grandma's Village ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：游记，题干已给标题，记叙乡村生态之旅。 2. 要点：交代时间地点；描写田园景色；表达感受向往。 3. 结构：出行引入；景色描写；向往收束。 4. 表达：使用 crop、soil、harmony、benefit 和 be surrounded by。 基础版范文 A Peaceful Day in Grandma's Village Last month, I spent a weekend in Grandma's village at the foot of the green hills. The village is surrounded by rice fields, where farmers were busy with their crops. The soil there is rich, which brings good harvests year after year. In the evening, we sat in the yard, listening to the insects and watching the stars fill the sky. Life there is simple but sweet. I really admire the way people live in harmony with nature. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 rice fields endless rice fields stretching to the hills 突出田野的辽阔层次 busy with their crops bending over their crops with a smile 以细节呈现劳作的喜悦 good harvests golden harvests that reward their hard work 点明耕耘与回报的联系 the stars fill the sky the stars hang like lanterns over the fields 以比喻升级星空描写 simple but sweet simple but richly rewarding 升华田园生活的价值 提高版范文 A Peaceful Day in Grandma's Village Last month, I spent a weekend in Grandma's village at the foot of the green hills. The village is surrounded by endless rice fields stretching to the hills, where farmers were bending over their crops with a smile. The soil there is rich, which brings golden harvests that reward their hard work year after year. In the evening, we sat in the yard, listening to the insects and watching the stars hang like lanterns over the fields. Life there is simple but richly rewarding. I really admire the way people live in harmony with nature. 练习3：描写家乡秋季的自然景色并抒发热爱之情（人与自然-季节） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，描写家乡秋季的自然景色并抒发你的热爱之情。 写作要点： 1. 点明家乡秋天的到来。 2. 描写家乡秋天的典型景色。 3. 抒发你对家乡秋色的热爱。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Autumn in My Hometown ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：游记式写景短文，题干已给标题，描写家乡秋景。 2. 要点：点明秋天到来；描写典型景色；抒发热爱之情。 3. 结构：季节引入；景色描写；情感收束。 4. 表达：使用 beauty、climate、leaf、mild 和 a variety of。 基础版范文 Autumn in My Hometown When September comes, my hometown quietly puts on its autumn clothes. The weather turns mild and cool, which is perfect for long walks. Along the river, the leaves turn gold and red, and a soft wind carries them down like dancing butterflies. In the fields, farmers are harvesting crops, their happy voices floating in the clear autumn air. Autumn gives my hometown its gentlest beauty. I love this season deeply, for it fills my heart with warmth and peace. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 puts on its autumn clothes changes into a golden dress 以拟人统一秋装意象 mild and cool mild and refreshing after the summer heat 点明秋凉的舒适感 like dancing butterflies like golden butterflies dancing in the air 丰富落叶的画面色彩 harvesting crops gathering in the fruits of a whole year 升华丰收的季节意义 fills my heart with warmth fills my heart with quiet warmth and pride 加入自豪感深化乡情 提高版范文 Autumn in My Hometown When September comes, my hometown quietly changes into a golden dress. The weather turns mild and refreshing after the summer heat, which is perfect for long walks. Along the river, the leaves turn gold and red, and a soft wind carries them down like golden butterflies dancing in the air. In the fields, farmers are gathering in the fruits of a whole year, their happy voices floating in the clear autumn air. Autumn gives my hometown its gentlest beauty. I love this season deeply, for it fills my heart with quiet warmth and pride. 练习4：记叙一次登山看日出的经历与心灵触动（人与自然-人与环境） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，记叙一次你登山看日出的经历与心灵触动。 写作要点： 1. 交代登山的时间与过程。 2. 描写山顶等待与日出时分的景色。 3. 表达这次经历带给你的心灵触动。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Watching the Sunrise from the Mountain Top ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：游记，题干已给标题，记叙登山看日出的经历。 2. 要点：交代登山过程；描写日出景色；表达心灵触动。 3. 结构：登山引入；日出描写；触动收束。 4. 表达：使用 steep、path、energy、breathtaking 和 wind one's way。 基础版范文 Watching the Sunrise from the Mountain Top My friends and I climbed the mountain near our town before dawn to watch the sunrise. We set out at four in the morning and walked up the path that wound its way up the steep slope. It was dark and hard, but we encouraged each other. When we reached the top, the east began to turn red, and the sun rose slowly with golden light. At that moment, all my tiredness disappeared. Nature filled me with new energy and quiet strength. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 walked up the path followed the narrow path in the dark 突出夜登的专注与坚持 encouraged each other pulled each other up the steepest part 以动作细节呈现互助 began to turn red caught fire with the first light 以比喻强化色彩变化 the sun rose slowly the sun climbed out of the sea of clouds 生动呈现日出动态 new energy and quiet strength a new power that seemed to flow into my heart 升华内心力量的描写 提高版范文 Watching the Sunrise from the Mountain Top My friends and I climbed the mountain near our town before dawn to watch the sunrise. We set out at four in the morning and followed the narrow path in the dark that wound its way up the steep slope. It was hard, but we pulled each other up the steepest part. When we reached the top, the east caught fire with the first light, and the sun climbed out of the sea of clouds slowly with golden light. At that moment, all my tiredness disappeared. Nature filled me with a new power that seemed to flow into my heart. 练习5：描写一次海边度假所见的自然景观（人与自然-自然地理） 你校英文网站"行走自然"专栏现向全校同学征稿。请用英语写一篇短文，描写一次你海边度假所见的自然景观。 写作要点： 1. 交代海边度假的时间与地点。 2. 描写大海与沙滩的自然景观。 3. 表达你对大海与自然的敬畏之情。 注意： 1. 词数80左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 The Sea in My Eyes ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：游记，题干已给标题，描写海边度假的自然景观。 2. 要点：交代时间地点；描写海滨景色；表达敬畏之情。 3. 结构：度假引入；景色描写；敬畏收束。 4. 表达：使用 climate、sheet、grand、be surrounded by 和 benefit。 基础版范文 The Sea in My Eyes Last summer, my family spent a week by the sea in the south, where the climate is warm and pleasant. Every morning, I walked along the beach, watching the blue water stretch to the sky. The waves rushed onto the sand and left white foam behind. In the afternoon, we lay under the tall palm trees, surrounded by the sound of the sea. Standing before the great ocean, I felt how small we humans are. The sea teaches us to respect nature and its power. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 stretch to the sky stretch endlessly to meet the sky 强化海天的辽阔感 rushed onto the sand rolled onto the soft sand again and again 以节奏感呈现海浪 left white foam behind left behind a line of white lace 以比喻升级浪花描写 surrounded by the sound bathed in the endless music of the waves 以通感升华海浪声 felt how small we are felt my heart fill with awe for nature 直接点明敬畏之情 提高版范文 The Sea in My Eyes Last summer, my family spent a week by the sea in the south, where the climate is warm and pleasant. Every morning, I walked along the beach, watching the blue water stretch endlessly to meet the sky. The waves rolled onto the soft sand again and again and left behind a line of white lace. In the afternoon, we lay under the tall palm trees, bathed in the endless music of the waves. Standing before the great ocean, I felt my heart fill with awe for nature. The sea teaches us to respect nature and its power. 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 游记结构清楚，时间地点、景色描写与感悟收束安排合理。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 景色描写具体生动，感官细节丰富，感悟自然真挚。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和"介词+关系代词"句式，写景语言准确优美。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 书写清楚，拼写、大小写和标点规范。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价结构、内容、语言和书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分15分；13—15优秀；10—12达标；7—9需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $