Unit 3 Never give up 写作篇（励志人物）（“导”与“练”）-2026-2027学年九年级英语上册导练测同步（译林版2024）

本讲义聚焦初中英语“励志人物”写作核心知识点，构建“主题理解—框架搭建—语言积累—实践应用”学习支架，涵盖写作三段式结构（引出人物、描述困难与努力、感悟启发），分类必备词句（困难挑战、品质精神等词汇及句式），并通过思路拆解与范文分析，帮助学生完成结构完整的励志短文。 该资料以“永不言弃”主题为载体，通过霍金、钟扬等真实人物案例培养学生思维品质（逻辑叙述事件过程），提供分类词句库提升语言能力（准确表达人物经历与感悟）。课中辅助教师系统教学，课后学生可借助词句积累和范文模仿自主练习，查漏补缺，落实写作能力。

Unit 写作篇 【实践演练】1 在英语课上，你们班开展了一次以 “The Person Who Inspires Me Most” 为主题的讨论。请你根据以下要点，用英语写一篇短文，向校英语报投稿，介绍一位激励你的人。 要点提示：1. 这位激励你的人是谁(可以是名人或身边普通人)； 2. 他/她有哪些令人钦佩的品质或事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上学到了什么。 要求：1. 包含所有提示要点，可适当发挥； 2. 注意使用本单元核心句型(现在完成时、it作形式主语等)； 3. 词数100词左右(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。 参考词汇：inspire激励；admirable令人钦佩的；persistence坚持； dedication奉献；ordinary普通的；role model榜样 开头： Everyone has someone who inspires them in life. The person who inspires me most is  ______________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Everyone has someone who inspires them in life. The person who inspires me most is my grandpa. He is an ordinary farmer, but his life story teaches me valuable lessons. My grandpa was born in a poor village. He had no chance to go to school when young. However, he never gave up learning. He taught himself to read and write by reading newspapers. At 70, he still reads every day. It is admirable of him to keep learning all his life. He has set a great example for me. I have learned that age and background are not barriers to achieving our dreams. My grandpa may not be famous, but he is truly inspiring. He encourages me to work hard and never give up. 【详解】 写作步骤 【第一步：审题立意】 确定文体：记叙文 确定时态：以一般现在时、一般过去时和现在完成时为主为主 明确要点：激励你的人是谁 令人钦佩的品质或事迹(出身贫寒、自学成才、终身学习) 从他/她身上学到了什么(年龄和背景不是阻碍，努力不放弃) 确定人称：第一人称(I)和第三人称(he/his) 语法要求：使用现在完成时、it作形式主语等 注意事项：不得出现真实信息；开头已给出；词数100左右，不包含已给出部分 【第二步：构思布局】 三段式结构：开头段：已给出，点明激励自己的人是谁，介绍爷爷的背景 主体段：第一层：描述爷爷令人钦佩的品质或事迹 第二层：从爷爷身上学到的道理 结尾段：总结，表达对爷爷的敬佩 【第三步：要点展开】 要点一：点明身份 常用词汇：ordinary farmer/life story/valuable lessons/role model等 常用句型：The person who inspires me most is.../He is an ordinary..., but.../His life story teaches me...等 要点二：令人钦佩的事迹 常用词汇：born in a poor village/no chance to go to school/never gave up/taught himself/read newspapers/at the age of/reads every day等 常用句型：He was born in.../He had no chance to.../However, he never gave up.../He taught himself to.../Even now, he still...等 要点三：从榜样身上学到的道理(含核心句型) 常用词汇：admirable/keep learning/set a great example/Thanks to him/achieving dreams/develop good virtues等 常用句型：It is admirable of him to.../He has set a great example for me./Thanks to him, I have learned that.../...are not barriers to...等 要点四：结尾总结 常用词汇：not be famous/truly inspiring/lights up my life/encourages/work hard/never give up等 常用句型：...may not be famous, but he is truly inspiring to me./He lights up my life and encourages me to...等 【实践演练】2 世界经典名著中有许多永不言弃的故事。请你结合生活实际，用英文写一篇不少于80词的短文，向某英文报社投稿。 要求：1. 讲述你或他人一个永不言弃的事； 2. 表达你的感悟； 3. 可适当增加细节，行文连贯； 4. 文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和校名。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Never Give Up Last year, I signed up for my first race, dreaming of finishing like a hero in Forrest Gump. However, after two weeks of training, my legs ached so badly that I wanted to quit. “Every champion was once a beginner who refused to stop,” my coach said when he saw me limping. His words made me think: If I give up now, I’ll never know what I could achieve. I adjusted my plan—running shorter distances daily and stretching carefully. Gradually, my stamina improved. On race day, though tired, I crossed the finish line with a smile. Like Santiago in The Alchemist, who kept pursuing his dream despite obstacles, I learned that perseverance turns “impossible” into “I’m possible.” 【详解】 【总体分析】 ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文。 ②时态：时态主要为“一般过去时”。 ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意要点齐全，可适当补充。 【写作步骤】 第一步，表明写作意图。引出自己参加比赛的初衷和梦想。 第二步，具体阐述写作内容。从“训练的困难、教练的鼓励、自己的调整以及比赛的结果”几个方面详细描述了整个过程。 第三步，书写结语。表达了自己从这次经历中学到的道理。 【亮点词汇】 ①dream of梦想 ②ache疼痛 ③adjust调整 ④stamina耐力 ⑤perseverance毅力；坚持不懈 【高分句型】 ①However, after two weeks of training, my legs ached so badly that I wanted to quit. (运用了so…that…引导的结果状语从句) ②If I give up now, I’ll never know what I could achieve.(运用了if条件状语从句，what宾语从句) 【实践演练】3 在我们的生活中，总有一些人用他们永不放弃的精神激励着我们。请你以“The person who never gives up”为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍一位你敬佩的永不放弃的人。 提示：1. 这个人是谁？ 2. 他/她遇到了什么困难？ 3. 他/她是如何克服困难的？ 4. 你从他/她身上学到了什么？ 要求：1. 词数100左右； 2. 内容完整，语言流畅，可适当发挥； 3. 必须使用本单元所学的至少两个时间状语从句连词(before, after, when, while, since, until, as soon as, whenever等)。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 The person who never gives up The person who never gives up that I admire most is my uncle, Mr Zhang. After he lost his job in the factory, he decided to start his own business. However, he faced many difficulties at the beginning. He had little money and no experience. Whenever he encountered setbacks, he never thought of giving up. He worked hard every day until his business finally took off. His story has inspired me greatly. I have learned that failure is not the end, but a stepping stone to success. Whenever I face challenges in my studies, I think of my uncle and keep going. 【详解】 【写作步骤】    【第一步：审题立意】  确定文体：记叙文 确定时态：全文以全文以一般过去时叙事，穿插现在完成时、一般现在时抒发感悟 明确要点：①介绍你敬佩的人物是谁； ②叙述此人遭遇的困难； ③描写他/她克服困难的具体做法； ④写出你从这个人身上收获的启示。 确定人称：第一人称(I/my)为主，第三人称(he/she/his/her)介绍主人公 注意事项：①词数控制在100词左右，内容完整、语句流畅； ②文中必须使用至少两个时间状语从句连词(when/while/since/until等)； ③不得透露真实姓名、学校等个人信息。 【第二步：构思布局】   三段式结构：开头段：开门见山，点明题目，引出你敬佩的永不放弃的人物 主体段：分层叙述，先写人物遇到的困境，再详细写其如何坚持、克服困难(本段嵌入要求的时间状语从句) 结尾段：总结人物品质，抒发自身感悟，点明永不放弃带给你的启发    【第三步：要点展开】   要点一：人物与遭遇的困难    人物选择：my uncle/my teacher/a famous sports star等 困难描述：faced many difficulties/failed many times/had a serious illness/met lots of troubles等 时间连词铺垫：whenever he encountered setbacks/while she was going through hard times等 要点二：克服困难的过程   行动描写：worked hard/never stop trying/stick to his dream等 时间从句运用：worked hard every day until she won the first prize/since he failed the exam, he has never given up studying hard等 要点三：自身收获与感悟   品质提炼：never give up/keep trying in face of difficulties等 个人启发：shouldn’t stop when we meet troubles/failure is not the end, but a stepping stone to success等 【实践演练】4 每个人的成长路上都有一个令自己感动或敬佩的人。他/她或许是你的家人、朋友、老师，或许是你从书上或新闻中了解到的陌生人。他/她的故事让你懂得了坚持、勇气或感恩。请以“The story of ________”为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍一位让你敬佩的人。 要点如下：1. Who is this person? What difficulties did he/ she face? 2. How did he/ she face these challenges and keep pursuing his/ her dream?( Please include specific examples.) 3. What have you learned from his/ her story? 注意：1. 词数100左右，可适当增加细节，使行文连贯； 2. 语言规范，信息完整，结构连贯，书写工整。 The story of __________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 The story of my mother My mother grew up in a poor village. Her family was too poor to afford transport, so she walked five kilometres to school daily. Though life was tough, she held fast to her dream of being a teacher.    Supported by her parents, she studied harder than all her peers. After farm work each day, she finished homework late into the night, unwilling to disappoint her family or herself. Years later, she passed the college entrance exam, becoming the village’s first college student.    Now she is a well-respected teacher. Her experience tells me that perseverance makes anything possible. 【详解】 【写作步骤】 【第一步：审题立意】 确定文体：记叙短文 确定时态：主体叙事使用一般过去时，结尾评价人物、提炼人生道理使用一般现在时，感悟总结可结合现在完成时强化收获 明确要点：介绍人物身份与遭遇的困境、人物克服困难追逐梦想的具体事例、自身从中收获的道理；全文词数100词左右，禁止出现真实姓名、学校等隐私信息 确定人称：第三人称(he/she/his/her)为主，结尾感悟使用第一人称I/my 注意事项：完整覆盖三大写作要点，补充细节让行文逻辑连贯，标题需补全人物名称 【第二步：构思布局】 三段式结构：开头段：补全标题，点明自己敬佩的人物是谁，简单交代其面临的艰难处境 主体段：列举人物直面困境、坚持追梦的具体实例，细化行动细节 结尾段：总结该人物带给自己的启发，升华文章主题 【第三步：要点展开】 要点一：人物身份与遭遇的困境 人物选择：my mother/a hard-working villager/ordinary role model等 困境描述：grow up in a poor village/had to walk five kilometres to school every day/heavy farm work took up her spare time/family was too poor to afford bikes等    要点二：直面挑战、追逐梦想的具体事例 具体行动：study harder than all peers/finish homework late into night/make notes by weak light/make full use of spare time after farm work/never give up learning under pressure/ask elders for learning advice等 成果事例：passed the college entrance exam/became the first college student in the village/realized her dream of being a teacher等 要点三：从人物故事得到的成长感悟 感悟方向：perseverance makes anything possible/bravery and hard work pay off/never give up on your dream/difficulties can make us stronger等 【实践演练】5 “水滴石穿”常用来比喻坚持不懈、持之以恒。在三年的初中生涯中，你一定有这样的印记。请以“Persistence(坚持)makes me grow”为题，从下列提示中选择一个话题写一篇英语短文，并讲述这背后的故事。 注意：1. 词数90词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 2. 表达中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。 3. 请在答题卡的相应区域作答。 Persistence makes me grow Persistence has played an important role in my growth. __________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Persistence makes me grow Persistence has played an important role in my growth. It helps me build good habits and overcome challenges in both my daily life and my schoolwork. I keep a healthy lifestyle now. I used to eat a lot of junk food and have less exercise. But later, I decided to change. I joined a running club and insisted on jogging for 15 minutes every morning. At first, it was tiring, but I kept telling myself not to give up. My parents also encourage me to keep practising and it gives me great support. I become much healthier and stronger than before. Persistence shapes a better me. I believe that as long as I keep trying, I can make my dream come true. 【详解】 【总体分析】 ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文，主题为“坚持使我成长”； ②时态：主要采用一般过去时和一般现在时相结合； ③提示：结合个人经历，通过一个具体事件或习惯变化来体现“坚持”的意义，突出成长过程中的收获与变化。 【写作步骤】 第一步：引出主题，简要说明“坚持”对成长的重要性； 第二步：描述一个坚持的具体故事或习惯变化的过程(如运动、阅读、写作、学习等)； 第三步：总结坚持带来的收获，升华主题。 【亮点词汇】 ① play an important role in在……中起重要作用 ② both...and...两者都 ③ insist on坚持 ④ used to过去常常 ⑤ come true实现(梦想) 【高分句型】 ① My parents also encourages me to keep practising and it gives me great support.(运用了并列句) ② I believe that as long as I keep trying, I can make my dream come true. (运用了as long as引导的条件状语从句) 【实践演练】6 奋斗的道路不会一帆风顺。我们每个人在生活和学习上都会遇到这样那样的困境。你遇到困难时是怎样解决的呢？请以“How to get over difficulties”为题写一篇英语短文，讲述你的一次经历和感悟。 内容包括：1. What kind of difficulties did you meet? 2. How did you get over it? 3. Your feeling about it. 注意：1. 词数100左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。 提示词：confidence(自信n.) courage(勇气n.) How to get over difficulties In our daily life, we often meet with different kinds of difficulties. _________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 How to get over difficulties In our daily life, we often meet with different kinds of difficulties. But how can we get over them? Here is one of my experiences. When I was in Grade 7, I didn’t do well in my lessons at first. Exams always brought me endless sadness. As a result, I was afraid of studying and I became very lonely. I turned to my teachers for help. They gave me some useful advice. They told me not to give up because nothing is impossible for a willing heart. I was moved and worked harder than before. Finally, I succeeded. Now I understand that I should learn to get over difficulties by myself with confidence and hard work. 【详解】 【写作步骤】 【第一步：审题立意】 确定文体：叙事经历用一般过去时，总结感悟、得出道理用一般现在时 明确要点：遇到的困难、如何克服困难及感受 确定人称：第一人称(I) 注意事项：不能出现真实姓名及学校名称 【第二步：构思布局】 三段式结构：开头段：承接开头，引出下文克服困难的经历 主体段：具体介绍自己遇到的困难及如何克服困难 结尾段：表达自己的感受 【第三步：要点展开】 要点一：遇到的困难 困难描述：didn’t do well in my lessons at first/was afraid of studying/I became very lonely/was afraid of speaking English in public/even failed my oral test等 要点二：克服方法 方法描述：turned to my teachers for help/worked harder than before/read aloud for 15 minutes each morning/asked my classmates to listen to my speeches等 要点三：表达感受 感受描述：learn to get over difficulties by myself with confidence and hard work/difficulties are not terrible/face them bravely and keep trying等 第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 3 Never give up 写作篇 【话题解读】 本单元以“永不言弃”(Never give up)为主题，通过讲述霍金、梵高、贝多芬、奥运健儿等励志人物的故事，引导学生理解坚强意志的重要性，学会用英语描述人物战胜困难的经历，表达对人物精神的感悟。 本单元核心写作任务“励志人物”要求同学们能够用准确的语言介绍人物的基本信息、经历的挑战、付出的努力与最终的成就；能够清晰叙述事件过程；能够恰当表达对“永不言弃”精神的理解，最终完成一篇结构完整的人物励志短文。此外，结合中考考情，我们还可以拓展延伸相关话题的写作。比如：对励志人物所共有的优秀品质(坚守初衷、坚信自我、坚韧不拔、直面困难等等)展开议论或说明佐证。 【写作框架】 “励志人物”话题的写作应该区别于普通人物介绍，不是刻意渲染传奇成就，而是聚焦普通人的逆境成长历程，核心写作逻辑为身处困境、直面磨难、坚守初心、精进自我。因此，在谋划写作框架之前，需要了解“励志人物”话题的一般写作内容。内容一般从以下几方面考虑： Who is the inspiring person(and what are his/her inspiring qualities)? 励志人物是谁(他/她的优秀励志品质是什么)？(介绍人物姓名、身份，<概括其优秀励志品质>) What difficulties did he/she face?他/她遭遇了哪些困难？(生活、学习或人生中的各类挫折与困境) What efforts did he/she make?他/她付出了哪些努力？(直面困境、坚持不懈、努力拼搏、从不轻言放弃) What achievements did he/she get?他/她取得了什么成果？(突破自我、收获进步、实现阶段性目标与梦想) What spirit does he/she show?他/她体现了什么品质？(坚韧不拔、奋勇拼搏、积极乐观、永不言弃) What can you learn from him/her?你从中得到什么启示？(汲取力量、不惧挫折、为梦想努力、提升自我) 三段式：开头(总起)：引出话题，点明你所敬佩的励志人物； 中间(分述)：具体描述人物遇到的困难与挫折，体现挑战的艰巨性。介绍人物面对困难的态度 与付出的努力，突出“永不放弃”的核心主旨； 结尾(总结)：抒发内心感悟，写出人物带给自己的启发，结合自身表态，回扣励志主题。 【必备词句】 词汇 一、困难与挑战类 accident n.事故 barrier n.障碍 challenge n.挑战 condition n.处境，条件 difficulty n.困难 disappoint v.使失望 disease n.疾病 encounter v.遭遇 failure n.失败 hardship n.艰难 illness n.疾病 injury n.伤害 loneliness n.孤独 obstacle n.障碍 pain n.疼痛，痛苦 quit v.放弃，退出 sadness n.悲伤 setback n.挫折 suffer v.遭受 suffering n.痛苦；苦难 terrible adj.糟糕的，恶劣的 tough adj.艰难的 give up放弃 get over克服 rob sb of sth剥夺某人所需或应得之物 stand in one’s way妨碍某人；阻止某人 live through经历(灾难等)而幸存 二、品质与精神类 compete v.参加比赛；竞争 confidence n.信心 courage n.勇气 determination n.决心 devotion n.奉献 effort n.努力 encourage v.鼓励 inspiring adj.鼓舞人心的 inspire v.激励 overcome v.克服；解决 patience n.耐心 perform v.表演；做；执行 perseverance n.毅力，坚持不懈 pursue v.追求 recognize v.赞赏；公认 spirit n.精神 valuable adj.有价值的 will n.意志 willing adj.心甘情愿的 keep trying不断努力 live on流传下去 set a goal设定目标 stick to坚持 try one’s best尽某人最大努力 三、成就与成功类 achieve v.实现；取得 achievement n.成就 contribution n.贡献 growth n.成长 gymnast n.体操运动员 impossible adj.不可能的 inspiration n.鼓舞人心的人(或事物) musician n.音乐家 possible adj.可能的 progress n.进步 succeed v.成功 success n.成功 victory n.胜利 a stepping stone to success通往成功的垫脚石 come true实现 cross the finish line冲过终点线 make it (to)获得成功 make one’s dream come true使某人梦想成真 role model楷模；行为榜样 take off (事业)腾飞 四、感悟与评价类 admire v.钦佩，仰慕 believe v.相信 change v.改变 deep adj.深切的 move v.使感动 shape v.塑造 along the way在人生道路上 be deeply moved by被……深深感动 build good habits养成良好习惯 hold fast to坚守 improve ourselves提升自我 keep practising坚持练习 learn from向……学习 make…possible使……成为可能 turn…into…把……变成…… work harder更加努力学习 句子 开头(引出话题，点明所敬佩的励志人物) There are many inspiring people around us.我们身边有许多鼓舞人心的人。 The person I admire most is Zhong Yang.我最敬佩的人是钟扬。 Everyone has someone who inspires them in life.每个人生命中都有激励自己的人。 My grandpa may not be famous, but he is truly inspiring.我的爷爷或许并不出名，但他确实令人备受鼓舞。 Persistence has played an important role in my growth.坚持在我的成长中起到了重要作用。 In our daily life, we often meet with different kinds of difficulties. 在日常生活中，我们常常会遇到各种各样的困难。 I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion.我被他的毅力与奉献深深打动。 It is common for us to meet difficulties in our life.生活中我们遭遇困难是很平常的事。 Some ordinary people can inspire us greatly.一些普通人可以极大地激励我们。 Stories of brave people are always worth reading.勇敢者的故事总是值得品读。 中间(描写困难挫折、人物态度与付出，突出永不放弃) Even with all these challenges, Yang has set a big goal for himself. 尽管面临重重挑战，杨帆为自己定下了远大目标。 Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research.尽管饱受病痛折磨，他从未放弃自己的研究。 He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. 他花费十六年多的时间在青藏高原收集野生植物种子。 However, he never gave up learning. He taught himself to read and write by reading newspapers. 但他从未放弃学习，他通过看报纸自学读写。 He did not want to disappoint his family as well as himself, so he always tried his best. 他不想让家人和自己失望，所以总是拼尽全力。 Every champion was once a beginner who refused to stop.每一位冠军都曾是不肯止步的初学者。 I adjusted my plan—running shorter distances daily and stretching carefully. 我调整了计划，每天缩短跑步距离并且认真做拉伸。 Whenever he encountered setbacks, he never thought of giving up.每当遭遇挫折，他从没想过放弃。 Though life was tough, she held fast to her dream of being a teacher. 尽管生活艰苦，她坚守成为一名教师的梦想。 Thanks to his strong will, Yang finally got a chance to continue his dream. 凭借顽强的意志，杨帆终于获得继续追逐梦想的机会。 They told me not to give up because nothing is impossible for a willing heart. 他们告诉我不要放弃，因为心之所向，无事不成。 He kept working hard even when things went badly.即便情况很糟糕，他依旧坚持努力。 She finished homework late into the night after heavy housework.繁重家务之后，她熬夜完成作业。 He faced terrible conditions but stuck to his work.他身处恶劣环境，但坚守自己的工作。 He kept moving forward in spite of plenty of difficulties.尽管困难重重，他依然不断前行。 结尾(抒发感悟、自身表态、回扣励志主题) Trying to improve ourselves along the way is also a success.在人生路上努力提升自我，这同样是一种成功。 From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. 从他身上我懂得：我们应当坚守目标，尽全力服务社会。 I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future. 我会更加努力学习，争取将来做一个有用的人。 He encourages me to work hard and never give up.他激励我努力奋斗，永不放弃。 I learned that perseverance turns “impossible” into “I’m possible.” 我懂得了毅力可以把“不可能”变为“我能行”。 Whenever I face challenges in my studies, I think of my uncle and keep going. 每当我学习遇到挑战，我就想起我的叔叔，继续奋力前行。 Her experience tells me that perseverance makes anything possible. 她的经历告诉我，坚持可以让一切成为可能。 I believe that as long as I keep trying, I can make my dream come true. 我相信只要不断努力，我就可以实现梦想。 Now I understand that I should learn to get over difficulties by myself with confidence and hard work. 现在我明白，我应当凭借信心与努力学会独自克服困难。 Age and background are not barriers to achieving our dreams.年龄和出身不是实现梦想的障碍。 【思路拆解】 学校英语专栏开展征文活动：An Inspiring Person I Admire。请写一篇英语短文投稿。 提示：1. 你敬佩的一位励志人物(可以是名人或身边普通人)； 2. 人物主要事迹与可贵品质； 3. 你的感悟以及对你的启发。 要求：1. 词数 100‑120； 2. 行文连贯，语法正确； 3. 不得出现真实校名、人名。 参考词汇：admire, devote oneself to, perseverance, overcome difficulties __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 An Inspiring Person I Admire There are many inspiring people around us. The person I admire most is Zhong Yang. He was a great botanist. He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. The living and working conditions were really terrible. Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research. He collected more than 40 million seeds for our country. He passed away in 2017, but his spirit lives on. I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion. From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future. 【写作任务】 本篇书面表达属于励志人物征文投稿类之记叙文。要求考生以An Inspiring Person I Admire为题给学校英语专栏投稿，介绍一位自己敬佩的励志人物，讲述该人物的主要事迹与可贵品质，写出自己的感悟以及该人物带给自己的启发。写作内容必须覆盖三项规定内容：介绍自己敬佩的励志人物、叙述人物的主要事迹与可贵品质、写出个人感悟以及对自身的启发，做到要点齐全、逻辑顺畅，词数控制在100‑120词，行文连贯、语法正确，不得出现真实校名与人名。 【思路拆解】 一、有“点”可写——范文要点来源拆解 1. 题目提示的要点(三大核心要点，必须全覆盖) (1) (2) (3) 2. 范文拓展的要点(拆解核心要点，使内容条理清晰、贴合语境) (1)介绍敬佩的励志人物要点(开篇点题，忠实题干不添加无关信息) (2)人物主要事迹与可贵品质要点(叙事展开，环境——挫折——行动——贡献层层推进) ①人物身份： ②主要事迹： ③面对挫折的行动： ④品质体现： ⑤精神评价： (3)个人感悟以及对你的启发要点 (情感升华，人物故事联系自我成长) ①内心感受： ②提炼道理： ③自我行动： (4)细节设计思路 (把握征文文体语言特点) 二、据“点”会写——范文要点表达拆解 1. 开篇介绍人物表达 核心句式：There are many inspiring people around us. The person I admire most is Zhong Yang. 表达拆解： 2. 人物事迹与可贵品质主体表达 核心句式1：He was a great botanist. He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. 表达拆解： 核心句式2：The living and working conditions were really terrible. Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research. 表达拆解： 核心句式3：He collected more than 40 million seeds for our country. He passed away in 2017, but his spirit lives on. 表达拆解： 3. 结尾感悟与启发表达 核心句式：I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion. From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future. 表达拆解： 4. 整体表达手法拆解 全文以基础句型为主，搭配定语从句、让步状语从句、宾语从句丰富句式；词汇选用__________________ ____________________等重点词汇，无复杂生词；叙事段落顺着环境、困难、行动、贡献依次展开，层次清晰，完全适配单元检测书面表达评分标准。 三、连句成篇——范文成篇手段拆解 1. 篇章结构设计(三段式标准征文结构) 开头 (总起：引出话题，点明人物)： 总述_______________________________________，直接完成第一项写作任务。 主体中段(分述：介绍身份‑叙述困境‑讲述事迹‑体现品质)： 第一层： 第二层： 结尾(总结：抒发触动——明白道理——规划自我)： 写出自己内心受到的感动，提炼学到的道理，表达自己今后的努力方向，覆盖相关写作要点，完成全文。 2. 连贯表达设计 依靠段落内部逻辑实现流畅行文：开头引出话题、点明人物；主体部分顺着“____________________”完成人物叙事；结尾由人物故事过渡到个人感悟与未来行动。全文严格按照题干指定三项内容依次推进，顺序合理。词数控制在100‑120，三大写作要点全部覆盖，无要点缺失、无多余无关内容，叙事和议论结合，符合学校英语专栏征文投稿的写作要求。 附录【传统解析】 【总体分析】 ①题材：本文是为英语征文投稿类短文写作，属于人物介绍类记叙文； ②时态：时态为一般过去时、一般现在时、一般将来时混用，叙述人物过往困境、付出的努力与取得的成就用一般过去时；评价人物品质、表达个人感悟用一般现在时；表达自我未来期许与决心用一般将来时； ③提示：需紧扣题目提示完成写作，完整覆盖励志人物、人物事迹与可贵品质、个人感悟与启发三大要点，遵循三段式写作结构。严格遵守100-120词数要求，不得出现真实校名、人名，保证语法正确、大小写和标点规范，行文语意连贯、逻辑清晰；突出“永不言弃”的核心精神。 【写作步骤】 【第一步：审题立意】 确定文体：记叙文(征文投稿) 明确要点：介绍敬佩的励志人物；讲述人物主要事迹与可贵品质；写出个人感悟与带来的启发 确定人称：第一人称(I)，第三人称(he/she) 注意事项：覆盖全部提示要点，词数100‑120，行文连贯语法正确，文中不能出现真实人名、校名 【第二步：构思布局】 三段式结构：开头段：引出话题，点明自己最敬佩的人物 主体段：介绍人物身份，讲述主要事迹，体现人物可贵品质 结尾段：写出自身感悟，说明人物带给自己的启发，表达今后的行动方向 【第三步：要点展开】 要点一：引出敬佩的人物 开篇引入：There are many inspiring people around us./There are lots of great people who set good examples for us等 点明对象：The person I admire most is…/I admire…very much等 要点二：人物事迹与可贵品质 人物身份：He/She is a great…/He/She is a common but great person等 主要事迹：He devoted himself to doing sth./He spent lots of time doing sth./He overcame many difficulties等 环境与挫折：Though he met lots of difficulties,…/Although the conditions were terrible等 品质体现：show his perseverance/his spirit of devotion等 要点三：个人感悟与启发 内心感受：I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion./His spirit touches me deeply等 学到的道理：From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals./We should never give up when we face difficulties等 未来行动：I will study harder./I will try my best to become a useful person等 第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $Unit写作篇 “练一本 【实践演练】1 在英语课上，你们班开展了一次以“The Person Who Inspires Me Most'”为主题的讨论。请你根据以 下要点，用英语写一篇短文，向校英语报投稿，介绍一位激励你的人。 要点提示：1.这位激励你的人是谁（可以是名人或身边普通人）： 2.他她有哪些令人钦佩的品质或事迹； 3.你从他她身上学到了什么。 要求：1.包含所有提示要点，可适当发挥： 2.注意使用本单元核心句型（现在完成时、t作形式主语等）： 3.词数100词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 参考词汇：inspire激励；admirable令人钦佩的；persistence坚持； dedication奉献；ordinary普通的；role model榜样 开头： Everyone has someone who inspires them in life.The person who inspires me most is 【实践演练】2 第1页共5页 世界经典名著中有许多永不言弃的故事。请你结合生活实际，用英文写一篇不少于80词的短文，向某 英文报社投稿。 要求：1.讲述你或他人一个永不言弃的事： 2.表达你的感悟： 3.可适当增加细节，行文连贯： 4.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和校名。 【实践演练】3 在我们的生活中，总有一些人用他们永不放弃的精神激励着我们。请你以“The person who never gives p”为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍一位你敬佩的永不放弃的人。 提示：1.这个人是谁？ 2.他/她遇到了什么困难？ 3.他/她是如何克服困难的？ 4.你从他/她身上学到了什么？ 要求：1.词数100左右： 2。内容完整，语言流畅，可适当发挥： 3.必须使用本单元所学的至少两个时间状语从句连词before,after,,when,while,since,until, as soon as,whenever). 第2页共5页 【实践演练】4 每个人的成长路上都有一个令自己感动或敬佩的人。他她或许是你的家人、朋友、老师，或许是你从 书上或新闻中了解到的陌生人。他/她的故事让你懂得了坚持、勇气或感恩。请以“The story of 为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍一位让你敬佩的人。 要点如下：I.Who is this person??What difficulties did he/she face? 2.How did he/she face these challenges and keep pursuing his/her dream?(Please include specific examples.) 3.What have you learned from his/her story? 注意：1.词数100左右，可适当增加细节，使行文连贯： 2.语言规范，信息完整，结构连贯，书写工整。 The story of 【实践演练】5 “水滴石穿”常用来比喻坚持不懈、持之以恒。在三年的初中生涯中，你一定有这样的印记。请以 第3页共5页 “Persistence(坚持)makes me grow'为题，从下列提示中选择一个话题写一篇英语短文，并讲述这背后的故 事。 keep a good relationship with... develop good babits like reading protect the eovironment Persistence have a healthy lifestyle try many times after failure 注意：1.词数90词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 2.。表达中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。 3.请在答题卡的相应区域作答。 Persistence makes me grow Persistence has played an important role in my growth. 【实践演练】6 奋斗的道路不会一帆风顺。我们每个人在生活和学习上都会遇到这样那样的困境。你遇到困难时是怎 样解决的呢？请以“How to get over difficulties''为题写一篇英语短文，讲述你的一次经历和感悟。 内容包括：1.What kind of difficulties did you meet? 2.How did you get over it? 3.Your feeling about it. 注意：1.词数100左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数： 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯： 3.文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。 第4页共5页 提示词：confidence(自信n.)courage(勇气n) How to get over difficulties In our daily life,we often meet with different kinds of difficulties. 第5页共5页 Unit 3 Never give up 写作篇 【话题解读】 本单元以“永不言弃”(Never give up)为主题，通过讲述霍金、梵高、贝多芬、奥运健儿等励志人物的故事，引导学生理解坚强意志的重要性，学会用英语描述人物战胜困难的经历，表达对人物精神的感悟。 本单元核心写作任务“励志人物”要求同学们能够用准确的语言介绍人物的基本信息、经历的挑战、付出的努力与最终的成就；能够清晰叙述事件过程；能够恰当表达对“永不言弃”精神的理解，最终完成一篇结构完整的人物励志短文。此外，结合中考考情，我们还可以拓展延伸相关话题的写作。比如：对励志人物所共有的优秀品质(坚守初衷、坚信自我、坚韧不拔、直面困难等等)展开议论或说明佐证。 【写作框架】 “励志人物”话题的写作应该区别于普通人物介绍，不是刻意渲染传奇成就，而是聚焦普通人的逆境成长历程，核心写作逻辑为身处困境、直面磨难、坚守初心、精进自我。因此，在谋划写作框架之前，需要了解“励志人物”话题的一般写作内容。内容一般从以下几方面考虑： Who is the inspiring person(and what are his/her inspiring qualities)? 励志人物是谁(他/她的优秀励志品质是什么)？(介绍人物姓名、身份，<概括其优秀励志品质>) What difficulties did he/she face?他/她遭遇了哪些困难？(生活、学习或人生中的各类挫折与困境) What efforts did he/she make?他/她付出了哪些努力？(直面困境、坚持不懈、努力拼搏、从不轻言放弃) What achievements did he/she get?他/她取得了什么成果？(突破自我、收获进步、实现阶段性目标与梦想) What spirit does he/she show?他/她体现了什么品质？(坚韧不拔、奋勇拼搏、积极乐观、永不言弃) What can you learn from him/her?你从中得到什么启示？(汲取力量、不惧挫折、为梦想努力、提升自我) 三段式：开头(总起)：引出话题，点明你所敬佩的励志人物； 中间(分述)：具体描述人物遇到的困难与挫折，体现挑战的艰巨性。介绍人物面对困难的态度 与付出的努力，突出“永不放弃”的核心主旨； 结尾(总结)：抒发内心感悟，写出人物带给自己的启发，结合自身表态，回扣励志主题。 【必备词句】 词汇 一、困难与挑战类 accident n.事故 barrier n.障碍 challenge n.挑战 condition n.处境，条件 difficulty n.困难 disappoint v.使失望 disease n.疾病 encounter v.遭遇 failure n.失败 hardship n.艰难 illness n.疾病 injury n.伤害 loneliness n.孤独 obstacle n.障碍 pain n.疼痛，痛苦 quit v.放弃，退出 sadness n.悲伤 setback n.挫折 suffer v.遭受 suffering n.痛苦；苦难 terrible adj.糟糕的，恶劣的 tough adj.艰难的 give up放弃 get over克服 rob sb of sth剥夺某人所需或应得之物 stand in one’s way妨碍某人；阻止某人 live through经历(灾难等)而幸存 二、品质与精神类 compete v.参加比赛；竞争 confidence n.信心 courage n.勇气 determination n.决心 devotion n.奉献 effort n.努力 encourage v.鼓励 inspiring adj.鼓舞人心的 inspire v.激励 overcome v.克服；解决 patience n.耐心 perform v.表演；做；执行 perseverance n.毅力，坚持不懈 pursue v.追求 recognize v.赞赏；公认 spirit n.精神 valuable adj.有价值的 will n.意志 willing adj.心甘情愿的 keep trying不断努力 live on流传下去 set a goal设定目标 stick to坚持 try one’s best尽某人最大努力 三、成就与成功类 achieve v.实现；取得 achievement n.成就 contribution n.贡献 growth n.成长 gymnast n.体操运动员 impossible adj.不可能的 inspiration n.鼓舞人心的人(或事物) musician n.音乐家 possible adj.可能的 progress n.进步 succeed v.成功 success n.成功 victory n.胜利 a stepping stone to success通往成功的垫脚石 come true实现 cross the finish line冲过终点线 make it (to)获得成功 make one’s dream come true使某人梦想成真 role model楷模；行为榜样 take off (事业)腾飞 四、感悟与评价类 admire v.钦佩，仰慕 believe v.相信 change v.改变 deep adj.深切的 move v.使感动 shape v.塑造 along the way在人生道路上 be deeply moved by被……深深感动 build good habits养成良好习惯 hold fast to坚守 improve ourselves提升自我 keep practising坚持练习 learn from向……学习 make…possible使……成为可能 turn…into…把……变成…… work harder更加努力学习 句子 开头(引出话题，点明所敬佩的励志人物) There are many inspiring people around us.我们身边有许多鼓舞人心的人。 The person I admire most is Zhong Yang.我最敬佩的人是钟扬。 Everyone has someone who inspires them in life.每个人生命中都有激励自己的人。 My grandpa may not be famous, but he is truly inspiring.我的爷爷或许并不出名，但他确实令人备受鼓舞。 Persistence has played an important role in my growth.坚持在我的成长中起到了重要作用。 In our daily life, we often meet with different kinds of difficulties. 在日常生活中，我们常常会遇到各种各样的困难。 I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion.我被他的毅力与奉献深深打动。 It is common for us to meet difficulties in our life.生活中我们遭遇困难是很平常的事。 Some ordinary people can inspire us greatly.一些普通人可以极大地激励我们。 Stories of brave people are always worth reading.勇敢者的故事总是值得品读。 中间(描写困难挫折、人物态度与付出，突出永不放弃) Even with all these challenges, Yang has set a big goal for himself. 尽管面临重重挑战，杨帆为自己定下了远大目标。 Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research.尽管饱受病痛折磨，他从未放弃自己的研究。 He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. 他花费十六年多的时间在青藏高原收集野生植物种子。 However, he never gave up learning. He taught himself to read and write by reading newspapers. 但他从未放弃学习，他通过看报纸自学读写。 He did not want to disappoint his family as well as himself, so he always tried his best. 他不想让家人和自己失望，所以总是拼尽全力。 Every champion was once a beginner who refused to stop.每一位冠军都曾是不肯止步的初学者。 I adjusted my plan—running shorter distances daily and stretching carefully. 我调整了计划，每天缩短跑步距离并且认真做拉伸。 Whenever he encountered setbacks, he never thought of giving up.每当遭遇挫折，他从没想过放弃。 Though life was tough, she held fast to her dream of being a teacher. 尽管生活艰苦，她坚守成为一名教师的梦想。 Thanks to his strong will, Yang finally got a chance to continue his dream. 凭借顽强的意志，杨帆终于获得继续追逐梦想的机会。 They told me not to give up because nothing is impossible for a willing heart. 他们告诉我不要放弃，因为心之所向，无事不成。 He kept working hard even when things went badly.即便情况很糟糕，他依旧坚持努力。 She finished homework late into the night after heavy housework.繁重家务之后，她熬夜完成作业。 He faced terrible conditions but stuck to his work.他身处恶劣环境，但坚守自己的工作。 He kept moving forward in spite of plenty of difficulties.尽管困难重重，他依然不断前行。 结尾(抒发感悟、自身表态、回扣励志主题) Trying to improve ourselves along the way is also a success.在人生路上努力提升自我，这同样是一种成功。 From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. 从他身上我懂得：我们应当坚守目标，尽全力服务社会。 I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future. 我会更加努力学习，争取将来做一个有用的人。 He encourages me to work hard and never give up.他激励我努力奋斗，永不放弃。 I learned that perseverance turns “impossible” into “I’m possible.” 我懂得了毅力可以把“不可能”变为“我能行”。 Whenever I face challenges in my studies, I think of my uncle and keep going. 每当我学习遇到挑战，我就想起我的叔叔，继续奋力前行。 Her experience tells me that perseverance makes anything possible. 她的经历告诉我，坚持可以让一切成为可能。 I believe that as long as I keep trying, I can make my dream come true. 我相信只要不断努力，我就可以实现梦想。 Now I understand that I should learn to get over difficulties by myself with confidence and hard work. 现在我明白，我应当凭借信心与努力学会独自克服困难。 Age and background are not barriers to achieving our dreams.年龄和出身不是实现梦想的障碍。 【思路拆解】 学校英语专栏开展征文活动：An Inspiring Person I Admire。请写一篇英语短文投稿。 提示：1. 你敬佩的一位励志人物(可以是名人或身边普通人)； 2. 人物主要事迹与可贵品质； 3. 你的感悟以及对你的启发。 要求：1. 词数 100‑120； 2. 行文连贯，语法正确； 3. 不得出现真实校名、人名。 参考词汇：admire, devote oneself to, perseverance, overcome difficulties __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 An Inspiring Person I Admire There are many inspiring people around us. The person I admire most is Zhong Yang. He was a great botanist. He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. The living and working conditions were really terrible. Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research. He collected more than 40 million seeds for our country. He passed away in 2017, but his spirit lives on. I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion. From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future. 【写作任务】 本篇书面表达属于励志人物征文投稿类之记叙文。要求考生以An Inspiring Person I Admire为题给学校英语专栏投稿，介绍一位自己敬佩的励志人物，讲述该人物的主要事迹与可贵品质，写出自己的感悟以及该人物带给自己的启发。写作内容必须覆盖三项规定内容：介绍自己敬佩的励志人物、叙述人物的主要事迹与可贵品质、写出个人感悟以及对自身的启发，做到要点齐全、逻辑顺畅，词数控制在100‑120词，行文连贯、语法正确，不得出现真实校名与人名。 【思路拆解】 一、有“点”可写——范文要点来源拆解 1. 题目提示的要点(三大核心要点，必须全覆盖) (1)介绍敬佩的励志人物要点：总述身边存在许多励志人物，点明自己最敬佩的人物，忠实还原题目写作要求，完成写作任务的刚性要求。 (2)人物主要事迹与可贵品质要点：介绍人物身份，叙述人物所做的主要工作、面临的艰难处境以及实际行动，从具体事件中体现人物可贵的毅力与奉献品质，搭建“人物身份——困境——行动——品质” 的行文逻辑，完成写作任务的刚性要求。 (3)个人感悟以及对你的启发要点：写出自己内心受到的触动，提炼从人物身上学到的道理，联系自身实际表明今后的行动方向，呼应征文表达感悟的写作目的，完成文章收尾。 2. 范文拓展的要点(拆解核心要点，使内容条理清晰、贴合语境) (1)介绍敬佩的励志人物要点(开篇点题，忠实题干不添加无关信息) 先用一句话总起励志人物这一话题，紧接着直接点明写作对象。句式简洁开门见山，快速完成基础得分要点，为下文叙述人物事迹做好铺垫。 (2)人物主要事迹与可贵品质要点(叙事展开，环境——挫折——行动——贡献层层推进) ①人物身份：简单交代人物职业身份，让读者快速认识人物； ②主要事迹：紧扣参考词汇devote oneself to，叙述人物长期投身的事业；交代恶劣的生活工作条件，摆出客观困难； ③面对挫折的行动：运用让步逻辑，写出人物身患疾病却依旧不放弃研究；介绍人物为国家作出的实际贡献； ④品质体现：用真实事迹来体现perseverance以及奉献精神，不空洞地堆砌形容词； ⑤精神评价：补充人物虽离世但精神永存，自然为下文抒发个人感悟做好过渡。 (3)个人感悟以及对你的启发要点 (情感升华，人物故事联系自我成长) ①内心感受：表达自己被人物的毅力与奉献深深打动； ②提炼道理：结合人物故事提炼人生道理，树立正向价值； ③自我行动：把感悟落实到自身学习成长，写明自己未来的具体做法，拒绝空泛说理，贴合中学生身份。 (4)细节设计思路 (把握征文文体语言特点) 本文为学校专栏征文，语言平实庄重；叙事在前，感悟在后；合理用上参考词汇admire, devote oneself to, perseverance, overcome difficulties；词数限定100‑120；选用公众人物，规避真实校名、人名。三大要点依次排布，脉络清晰，完全匹配题干规定写作内容，保证要点无遗漏。 二、据“点”会写——范文要点表达拆解 1. 开篇介绍人物表达 核心句式：There are many inspiring people around us. The person I admire most is Zhong Yang. 表达拆解：第一句总起话题，引出生活中的励志人物；第二句中定语从句I admire most修饰先行词the person，明确写作对象，高效覆盖第一项写作要点。 2. 人物事迹与可贵品质主体表达 核心句式1：He was a great botanist. He devoted over 16 years to collecting wild plant seeds on the Qinghai‑Tibet Plateau. 表达拆解：简单句交代人物身份；固定搭配devote…to doing，to为介词，后接动名词，叙述人物长期投身的事业。 核心句式2：The living and working conditions were really terrible. Though he suffered from illness, he never gave up his research. 表达拆解：简单句交代艰苦的客观环境；though引导让步状语从句，写出人物遭遇病痛仍坚守事业，体现顽强毅力。 核心句式3：He collected more than 40 million seeds for our country. He passed away in 2017, but his spirit lives on. 表达拆解：陈述句陈述人物重大贡献；but连接并列句，完成对人物精神的评价，为下文感悟做铺垫。 3. 结尾感悟与启发表达 核心句式：I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion. From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals and try our best to serve society. I will study harder and try to be a useful person in the future. 表达拆解：被动结构be deeply moved by表达内心触动，用上参考词汇perseverance；that引导宾语从句提炼道理；一般将来时表达自己未来的行动，圆满完成最后一项写作要点。 4. 整体表达手法拆解 全文以基础句型为主，搭配定语从句、让步状语从句、宾语从句丰富句式；词汇选用admire, devote oneself to, perseverance, give up, stick to one’s goals等重点词汇，无复杂生词；叙事段落顺着环境、困难、行动、贡献依次展开，层次清晰，完全适配单元检测书面表达评分标准。 三、连句成篇——范文成篇手段拆解 1. 篇章结构设计(三段式标准征文结构) 开头 (总起：引出话题，点明人物)： 总述身边有许多励志人物，直接点明自己最敬佩的人物，直接完成第一项写作任务。 主体中段(分述：介绍身份‑叙述困境‑讲述事迹‑体现品质)： 第一层：交代人物的职业身份，介绍人物所从事的事业； 第二层：描写人物所处的恶劣条件与身体磨难，写出人物不放弃的行动以及为国作出的贡献，评价人物精神永存，完整落实叙述人物事迹与可贵品质的写作任务。 结尾(总结：抒发触动——明白道理——规划自我)： 写出自己内心受到的感动，提炼学到的道理，表达自己今后的努力方向，覆盖相关写作要点，完成全文。 2. 连贯表达设计 依靠段落内部逻辑实现流畅行文：开头引出话题、点明人物；主体部分顺着“身份——困难——行动 ——贡献”完成人物叙事；结尾由人物故事过渡到个人感悟与未来行动。全文严格按照题干指定三项内容依次推进，顺序合理。词数控制在100‑120，三大写作要点全部覆盖，无要点缺失、无多余无关内容，叙事和议论结合，符合学校英语专栏征文投稿的写作要求。 附录【传统解析】 【总体分析】 ①题材：本文是为英语征文投稿类短文写作，属于人物介绍类记叙文； ②时态：时态为一般过去时、一般现在时、一般将来时混用，叙述人物过往困境、付出的努力与取得的成就用一般过去时；评价人物品质、表达个人感悟用一般现在时；表达自我未来期许与决心用一般将来时； ③提示：需紧扣题目提示完成写作，完整覆盖励志人物、人物事迹与可贵品质、个人感悟与启发三大要点，遵循三段式写作结构。严格遵守100-120词数要求，不得出现真实校名、人名，保证语法正确、大小写和标点规范，行文语意连贯、逻辑清晰；突出“永不言弃”的核心精神。 【写作步骤】 【第一步：审题立意】 确定文体：记叙文(征文投稿) 明确要点：介绍敬佩的励志人物；讲述人物主要事迹与可贵品质；写出个人感悟与带来的启发 确定人称：第一人称(I)，第三人称(he/she) 注意事项：覆盖全部提示要点，词数100‑120，行文连贯语法正确，文中不能出现真实人名、校名 【第二步：构思布局】 三段式结构：开头段：引出话题，点明自己最敬佩的人物 主体段：介绍人物身份，讲述主要事迹，体现人物可贵品质 结尾段：写出自身感悟，说明人物带给自己的启发，表达今后的行动方向 【第三步：要点展开】 要点一：引出敬佩的人物 开篇引入：There are many inspiring people around us./There are lots of great people who set good examples for us等 点明对象：The person I admire most is…/I admire…very much等 要点二：人物事迹与可贵品质 人物身份：He/She is a great…/He/She is a common but great person等 主要事迹：He devoted himself to doing sth./He spent lots of time doing sth./He overcame many difficulties等 环境与挫折：Though he met lots of difficulties,…/Although the conditions were terrible等 品质体现：show his perseverance/his spirit of devotion等 要点三：个人感悟与启发 内心感受：I am deeply moved by his perseverance and devotion./His spirit touches me deeply等 学到的道理：From him, I learn that we should stick to our goals./We should never give up when we face difficulties等 未来行动：I will study harder./I will try my best to become a useful person等 第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $