第12天 写作专题(二)-【通成学典】2026-2027学年预备九年级英语暑期升级训练（8升9译林版）

复习·整合培优 第12天写作专题（二） 】典题在线 写作提纲 每位同学都希望成为学校中受欢迎的人， Travelling:Broaden Hobbies my horizons 你校近期将以“Being a popular student'”为题， interests Reading:Enrich my 举办一次演讲比赛，请以李华的名义，写一篇英 knowledge 文演讲稿。 Say hello to teachers 兴趣爱好 旅游、阅读（给出喜欢的理由） Daily habits Finish homework on 1.注重礼仪（举例说明）： time 行为习惯 2. 自拟一点 Being a popular Save water 1.节约用水（举例说明）： student Green living 绿色生活 Save paper 2. 自拟一点 Donate money 1.捐钱助学 Help 助人为乐 2.自拟一点 others Help classmates with difficult problems 注意：1.短文必须包括表格中所有的信 Call for Work together 息，并作适当的发挥；2.词数80左右；3.短文 action Try our best 中不得出现真实的人名、校名、地名等相关信息。 审题谋篇， 高分解码 本文需以“成为受欢迎的学生”为核心，从 [习作初稿]Being a popular student 兴趣爱好、行为习惯、绿色生活、助人为乐四个 Hello,everyone.My name is Li Hua.I want to 维度展开，每个维度按要求补全信息并简单发 be a popular student with my classmates and teachers.I'm glad to make a 挥，语言简洁贴合中学生演讲语境，结尾可稍加 speech here. 呼吁升华主题。 I like travel and read.They make me 体裁 应用文 know more things.I am polite.I say hello to 时态 以一般现在时为主 teachers.I also finish homework on time.I 以第一人称()为主，呼吁部分可用第一人 save water,so I close the tap after washing 人称 称复数(we) hands.I also use paper on two sides.I give 1.介绍旅游、阅读的爱好并说明理由； money to help poor students,and I help 2.写清注重礼仪的具体例子，自拟一个良 classmates with study.Being a popular student 好的行为习惯； are easy if we try our best.Let's do it together. 3.给出节约用水的具体例子，自拟一个绿 Thank you! 要点 色生活做法； [名师点评]本文完整涵盖了题目要求的所有 4.提及捐钱助学，自拟一个助人为乐的具 要点，结构清晰，围绕“成为受欢迎的学生”展开 体行为； 各维度表述，符合演讲稿的基本要求，但存在明 5.所有要点衔接自然，符合词数要求。 显问题且表达较为生硬，具体如下：语法错误： 23 薯期升级训练英语（译林版）八年级 ①②③处存在不同类型的语法错误，涉及非谓 keep a good habit of finishing homework on 语、动词辨析、主谓一致，是基础表达漏洞；句式 time.For green life,I save water by turning 表达：全文以简单句为主，句间无衔接词（如 off the tap after washing hands and use paper besides、.what's more等)，读起来生硬不连贯； on both sides.What's more,I often donate 细节发挥：部分要点表述过于简略，如help money to help poor students buy stationery, classmates with study未具体说明，缺少简单发 and I also help my classmates work out difficult 挥；用词单一：无复杂词汇，语言表现力不足。 problems. [升格专练] Being a popular student is easy if we try A,单句改错：请找出并改正下列句子中的错误。 our best.Let's work hard together to be 1.I like travel and read. popular students! Thank you! 2.I save water,so I close the tap after washing ©自主训练 hands. 假设你是阳光中学的学生Tom,请你根据 以下提示，写一篇演讲稿谈一谈如何成为优秀 3. Being a popular student are easy if we try 的青少年。 our best. Manners Spare time A good B.句式升级：请根据要求完成下列句子。 Study time teenager 1.I like travelling and reading.They make me 要求：1.文章内容包含图中所有要点，省 know more things..(用which合并为定语从 略部分要有适当发挥；2.词数90左右，文章的 句，丰富表达) 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；3.语义通 顺，意思连贯，条理清晰，字迹工整；4.文中不 2.I am polite.I say hello to teachers.I also 得出现真实的姓名，校名及地名。 finish homework on time,(加衔接词，丰富 Good morning,everyone!I'm Tom from 表达) Sunshine Middle School.Today I am very happy to be here to give you a speech about 3.I give money to help poor students,and I how to be a good teenager. help classmates with study.(具体化，加衔接词) [高分范文]Being a popular student Hello,everyone.My name is Li Hua.I want to be a popular student with my classmates and teachers.I'm glad to make a speech here. I like travelling and reading,which help me broaden my horizons and enrich my knowledge.Besides,I am polite and always say hello to teachers when I meet them.I also That's all.Thanks for listening! 249.will be passed主语good manners与pass为被 动关系，此处表达将来的情况。 10.a此处表示“成为一个有礼貌的人”，person的 发音以辅音音素开头，用不定冠词a。 B.1.and并列连词and连接两个并列名词；bring hope and warmth表示“带来希望和温暖”。 2.to support“Itis+adj.+to do sth.”表示“做 某事是…的”；t作形式主语，真正的主语是后面 的动词不定式，故填to support。 3.for“Itis+adj.+for sb.to do sth.”表示“对 某人来说做某事是…的”；形容词necessary描述 事情，用for引出逻辑主语，故填for。 4.to give“too+ad.+to do sth.”表示 “太…而不能…”；此处指“太忙而不能伸出援 手”，故填to give. 5.to join“adj.+enough+to do sth.”表示“足 够…可以做某事”；此处指“年龄足够大可以参加 慈善活动”。 6.are held主语events与hold为被动关系；every year表示经常性动作，时态用一般现在时；主语是复 数，be动词用are,故填are held. 7.was started时间状语last month为过去的时 间；project与start为被动关系；主语是单数，be动 词用was,故填was started。 8.have raised标志词so far强调从过去到现在的 结果，时态用现在完成时，主语是W,助动词用 have,故填have raised。 9.will be built时间状语soon表将来， programmes与build为被动关系，故填will be built。. 10.a固定搭配make a big difference意为“产生很 大影响，起重要作用”；difference是可数名词单数， 故填a。 第12天写作专题（二) 【典题在线】 A.1.I like travelling and reading. 2.I save water,so I turn off the tap after washing hands. 3.Being a popular student is easy if we try our best. B.1.I like travelling and reading,which help me broaden my horizons and enrich my knowledge. 2.Besides,I am polite and always say hello to teachers when I meet them.I also keep a good habit of finishing homework on time. 3.What's more,I often donate money to help poor students buy stationery,and I also help my classmates work out difficult study problems. 【自主训练】 One possible version: Good morning,everyone!I'm Tom from Sunshine Middle School.Today I am very happy to be here to give you a speech about how to be a good teenager. Above all,to be a good teenager,behaving politely is important.For example,when you are in a queue,you must be polite enough to wait for your turn. Next,you must listen carefully in class.It is nice of you to work hard and listen carefully to teachers. Third,you can enjoy yourselves by reading books and doing some voluntary work when you are free.Reading books can improve your knowledge. Doing some voluntary work can make you feel happy. Last but not least,please stay away from computer games.Playing too many computer games does harm to your health.Moreover,it's also bad for your eyes! That's all.Thanks for listening! >