Unit 9 I'm sorry 写作（专项训练）-2026-2027学年湘少版（三起）英语五年级上册

**基本信息** 以“事件-感受-补救/结果”四步仿写为核心，系统整合情绪词汇、重点句型与梯度写作训练，构建从单句到篇章的逻辑表达体系，提升语言表达与逻辑思维能力。 **专项设计** |模块|题量/典例|方法提炼|知识逻辑| |----|-----------|----------|----------| |重点句型精讲|5个核心句型|句型功能+替换拓展+易错提醒，如I feel+adj.表感受、事件-感受因果句|情绪词汇与句型绑定，从单句到情景应用| |写作练习|3个梯度任务（感受列举/道歉情景/感受变化故事）|四步仿写框架（事件→感受→补救→结果）|从简单句到完整篇章，构建“起因-经过-结果”逻辑链| |参考范文|3篇范例|结构示范+替换指导，如范文2“犯错-道歉-补救-结果”完整情景|通过范例迁移，实现从模仿到自主表达|

湘少版五年级上英语 Unit 9 I'm sorry 写作训练 主题写作：表达感受、说明原因并礼貌道歉 一、写作目标 1. 能用 I feel... / I'm... 表达 happy, sorry, sad, angry, proud 等感受。 2. 能用原因句说明为什么有这种感受，如 I won the race. I feel proud. 3. 能在小情景中使用 I'm sorry. / Please don't... / Don't worry. 表达歉意或安慰。 4. 能写出感受变化：先发生什么事，再写感受，最后写解决办法或结果。 二、课文仿写思路 第一步，开头先写发生了什么事。感受作文不能只写 I feel happy.，要先交代原因，如 I get a new book. 或 I break my mum's cup. 第二步，写自己的感受。可以用 I feel excited. / I'm sorry. / I feel shy. 这类句子，和前面的事件形成因果关系。 第三步，如果是道歉情景，要写一句补救或礼貌表达。比如 I'm sorry. I can clean it. 或 Don't worry. I can fix it. 这样人物更有责任感。 第四步，结尾写变化或结果。可以写 Now I feel happy. / My mum is happy now. / I learn to be careful. 让文章有完整的发展。 核心词汇 happy 开心的；excited 兴奋的；proud 自豪的；sorry 抱歉的；angry 生气的；sad 伤心的；shy 害羞的；noisy 吵闹的；make too much noise 制造太多噪音；fix it 修好它；be careful 小心 重点句型精讲 重点句型 1: I feel happy. 原句: I'm happy. / I feel happy. 怎么用: 写自己的感受时使用。I feel 后面接形容词，可以表达开心、难过、兴奋、害羞等。 可替换内容: happy -> excited / proud / sorry / angry / sad / shy 仿写例句: I feel excited. / I feel proud. / I feel sad. 易错提醒: feel 后面直接接形容词，不要写 I feel am happy. 重点句型 2: I won the race. I feel proud. 原句: I won the race. I feel proud. 怎么用: 先写事情，再写感受，适合写感受原因。第一句是原因，第二句是结果。 可替换内容: won the race -> get a storybook / meet my friend / tell a story；proud -> excited / happy / shy 仿写例句: I get a storybook. I feel excited. / I meet my good friend. I feel happy. 易错提醒: 如果写过去发生的比赛，可用 won；但五年级短文也可以用简单现在时写日常情景。 重点句型 3: Please don't sing so loudly! 原句: Please don't sing so loudly! 怎么用: 别人影响你时，可以礼貌提醒。Please don't... 比直接命令更礼貌。 可替换内容: sing so loudly -> run in the room / make too much noise / shout here 仿写例句: Please don't make too much noise. / Please don't run in the room. 易错提醒: don't 后面接动词原形，不要写 Please don't sings loudly. 重点句型 4: I'm sorry. 原句: I'm sorry. 怎么用: 做错事或打扰别人时使用。写道歉作文时，后面最好再写补救办法。 可替换内容: I'm sorry. -> I'm very sorry.；补救句 -> I can clean it. / I can fix it. / I will be careful. 仿写例句: I'm sorry. I can clean it. / I'm very sorry. I will be careful next time. 易错提醒: sorry 表示抱歉时前面常用 I'm，不要只写 I sorry. 重点句型 5: Don't worry. I can fix it. 原句: Don't worry. I can fix it. 怎么用: 安慰别人并说明自己能解决问题时使用，适合写事情变好的过程。 可替换内容: fix it -> clean it / help you / try again 仿写例句: Don't worry. I can help you. / Don't worry. I can clean it. 易错提醒: can 后面用动词原形，如 can fix, can help，不能写 can fixes. 句型仿写 1. I feel ______. 词库：happy / excited / proud / sad / shy ________________________________________________________________________ 2. I ______. I feel ______. 提示：写一件事和一种感受。 ________________________________________________________________________ 3. Please don't ______. 提示：礼貌提醒别人不要太吵。 ________________________________________________________________________ 4. I'm sorry. I can ______. 提示：写道歉后的补救办法。 ________________________________________________________________________ 5. Don't worry. I can ______. 提示：安慰别人并说明能做什么。 ________________________________________________________________________ 常见问题提醒 1. I feel 后面接形容词，不能再加 am。 2. Please don't 和 can 后面的动词都用原形。 3. 写道歉不能只写 I'm sorry.，最好再写 I can... 或 I will...，文章才完整。 三、连词成句 1. happy / I / feel / . ________________________________________________________________________ 2. the race / won / I / . ________________________________________________________________________ 3. don't / Please / so loudly / sing / ! ________________________________________________________________________ 4. too much noise / You / making / are / . ________________________________________________________________________ 5. sorry / I'm / . ________________________________________________________________________ 6. fix / can / I / it / . ________________________________________________________________________ 四、写作练习 练习 1: 写三种感受 题目：My Feelings。请写 3-4 句话，写你在不同情况下的感受。 写作提示: 可用 I meet my friend. I feel happy. / I win the race. I feel proud. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 练习 2: 写一次道歉 题目：I'm Sorry。请写 5-6 句话，写你做错一件事、表达歉意并补救。 写作提示: 可用 I break... / My mum is angry. / I'm sorry. / I can... / I will be careful. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 练习 3: 写感受变化的小故事 题目：From Shy to Proud。请写 7-8 句话，写一个人从害羞、难过或抱歉到开心/自豪的过程。 写作提示: 先写事件，再写感受变化，最后写结果。可模仿 Anne 讲故事的阅读材料。 ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 五、参考范文 范文 1: My Feelings I have many feelings. I meet my good friend. I feel happy. I get a new storybook. I feel excited. I win a race. I feel proud. 范文讲解 开头 I have many feelings. 点明主题，后面每两句写一个情景和一种感受，结构很清楚。 范文反复使用“事件 + I feel...”的结构，如 I get a new storybook. I feel excited. 这正是本单元最重要的表达。 happy, excited, proud 三个词难度逐步增加。学生可以直接替换事件和情绪词，写出自己的真实感受。 范文 2: I'm Sorry I break my mum's cup. My mum is angry. I feel sorry. I say, "I'm sorry, Mum." I can clean the floor. I will be careful next time. My mum is happy now. 范文讲解 第一句写发生的事：I break my mum's cup. 这样后面的 angry 和 sorry 都有了原因。 范文用了 My mum is angry. 和 I feel sorry.，把妈妈的感受和自己的感受都写出来，情景更完整。 I'm sorry, Mum. 是礼貌道歉；I can clean the floor. 和 I will be careful next time. 是补救和承诺。结尾 My mum is happy now. 写出了结果。 范文 3: From Shy to Proud Anne likes reading stories. One day, Miss Li asks her to tell a story to the class. Anne feels shy. Miss Li says, "Come on! You can do it." Anne stands in front of the class. She tells a funny story. Everyone enjoys it. Now Anne feels proud. 范文讲解 这篇范文模仿 F Let's Read 中 Anne 的故事，先写人物爱好，再写老师请她讲故事，故事线完整。 文中使用 Anne feels shy. 和 Now Anne feels proud. 写感受变化，开头和结尾形成对比。 Come on! You can do it. 是鼓励句，让故事不只是叙述动作，也有人物互动。学生可以仿写 Now I feel proud. 作为结尾。 六、参考答案 句型仿写参考答案 1. I feel excited. 2. I meet my good friend. I feel happy. 3. Please don't make too much noise. 4. I'm sorry. I can clean it. 5. Don't worry. I can help you. 连词成句参考答案 1. I feel happy. 2. I won the race. 3. Please don't sing so loudly! 4. You are making too much noise. 5. I'm sorry. 6. I can fix it. 写作练习参考要点 练习 1: 能写出事件和对应感受。 练习 2: 能写清犯错、道歉、补救和结果。 练习 3: 能写出感受变化，并有鼓励或结果句。 七、写作小结 写感受作文要记住：先写事情，再写感受，最后写解决办法或结果。 I feel... 可以表达多种情绪；Please don't... 和 I'm sorry. 适合用于礼貌交流。 想让文章更好，可以加入感受变化，如 shy -> proud, sad -> happy, angry -> happy. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $