Unit 6 Lei Feng was a model soldier 写作突破（专项训练）-2026-2027学年湘鲁版英语六年级上册

**基本信息** 以“人物介绍+日记写作”为双主线，构建“方法指引-词汇句型-分层练习-范文解析”四维训练体系，系统培养语言表达与逻辑组织能力，渗透文化意识与思维品质。 **专项设计** |模块|题量/典例|方法提炼|知识逻辑| |----|-----------|----------|----------| |写作方法指引|6个核心方法|“经历-品质-事迹-感受”四步写作法，such as举例等技巧|从日记框架到人物描写的递进| |核心词汇与句型|4类词汇/4级句型|按功能分类（品质/行为/日记/经历）|词汇支撑句型，句型构建篇章| |分层写作练习|3个梯度（基础/提高/挑战）|从单一人物到自主选材，从客观介绍到主观感受|难度螺旋上升，覆盖不同写作要求| |范文讲解|3篇对应范文|易错点（give搭配、形容词并列）与结构解析|典例示范方法应用，强化知识迁移|

Unit 6 Lei Feng was a model soldier 写作突破专项训练 | 湘鲁版六年级上册英语 主题：Role models, good deeds and diary writing 写作目标 能围绕“榜样人物”和“好人好事”写作，按照“人物身份 - 品质特点 - 具体事迹 - 自己感受”的顺序介绍人物，也能仿写简单日记。 写作方法指引 - 原文指路 1. 交代参观经历 I went to visit Lei Feng Memorial Hall. I learned a lot about him. 写日记时可以先写自己去了哪里、学到了什么。 2. 概括人物品质 He was hard-working, helpful and kind-hearted. 介绍人物时先用形容词概括品质。 3. 列举具体事迹 He gave his seat to older people. He also gave food and money to poor people. 用具体事例证明人物品质。 4. 补充成长经历 Lei Feng was born in a poor family in Hunan in 1940. 写人物介绍时可以补充出生信息。 5. 写出更多好事 He did many good deeds, such as volunteering to help older people and clean the streets. 用 such as 举例。 6. 表达个人感受 I feel happy when I help others, just like Lei Feng. 结尾联系自己，写出学习榜样后的想法。 一、核心词汇 人物品质类：hard-working, helpful, kind-hearted, faithful, cheerful, a great role model 帮助行为类：help those in need, give his seat, give food, give money, do good deeds, lend a helping hand 日记表达类：Sunday, Sunny, I went to..., I learned a lot about..., I feel happy when... 人物经历类：was born in, poor family, became a soldier, worked very hard, died at 22 二、参考句型 基础句：介绍榜样 • Lei Feng was a model soldier. • He was hard-working, helpful and kind-hearted. • He always helped those in need. 进阶句：写具体事迹 • He gave his seat to older people. • He gave food and money to poor people. • He did many good deeds. 提升句：写经历和精神 • Lei Feng was born in a poor family in Hunan in 1940. • At the age of 20, he became a soldier. • The Lei Feng Spirit still cheers people up in China. 日记句：写感受 • I went to visit Lei Feng Memorial Hall. • I learned a lot about him. • I feel happy when I help others, just like Lei Feng. 三、易错点提示 • give 的搭配：give his seat to older people；give food and money to poor people。 • 形容词并列时用逗号和 and：hard-working, helpful and kind-hearted。 • such as 后面接具体例子：such as helping older people and cleaning the streets。 • 日记开头要有日期、星期和天气，例如 Sunday, 5th November Sunny。 四、写作练习 写作一：Lei Feng, a Role Model 难度：基础 请介绍雷锋。写清楚他是怎样的人，他做过哪些好事。 要求：用 4-5 句话介绍人物品质和具体事迹，不少于40词。 参考词：model soldier, hard-working, helpful, kind-hearted, gave his seat, helped those in need ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作二：A Great Person I Know 难度：提高 请介绍一位你知道的伟人或榜样人物。写清楚他/她是谁、有什么品质、做过什么事。 要求：写出“人物 - 品质 - 事迹 - 评价”，不少于50词。 参考词：great person, role model, helped people, worked hard, kind-hearted, learn from ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作三：A Diary about Helping Others 难度：挑战 请写一篇日记，记录你做过的一件好事。写清楚时间、事情经过和你的感受。 要求：注意日记格式，写出具体行动和感受，不少于60词。 参考词：Sunday, Sunny, helped, gave, cleaned, in need, felt happy, just like Lei Feng ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 五、参考范文一：Lei Feng, a Role Model 参考范文 Lei Feng was a model soldier. He was hard-working, helpful and kind-hearted. He always helped those in need. When he travelled on trains, he gave his seat to older people. He also gave food and money to poor people. I think he was a great role model. 范文讲解 • 这篇是基础版，先用三个形容词概括人物品质，再用两个具体事迹证明。 • 文章用了 gave his seat to 和 gave food and money to，都是本单元核心表达。 • 结尾 I think he was a great role model 完成人物评价。 六、参考范文二：A Great Person I Know 参考范文 Lei Feng is one of the great people in China. He was born in a poor family in Hunan in 1940. At the age of 20, he became a soldier. He worked very hard and did many good deeds. He helped older people, gave food and money to poor people, and cleaned the streets. He loved the country and the people. I want to learn from him and help others in my life. 范文讲解 • 这篇难度更高，因为它加入了出生、成长和参军等人物经历。 • 正文用 helped, gave, cleaned 连续写事迹，说明人物为什么伟大。 • 结尾联系自己 I want to learn from him，让文章从人物介绍过渡到个人态度。 七、参考范文三：A Diary about Helping Others 参考范文 Sunday, 12th March Sunny Today I did a good deed. On my way to the park, I saw an old woman with a heavy bag. She walked slowly, so I went to help her. I carried the bag for her and walked with her to the bus stop. She said thank you to me. I felt very happy. Lei Feng always helped those in need. I want to learn from him and lend a helping hand to more people. 范文讲解 • 这篇是挑战版，使用日记格式，有日期、星期和天气。 • 正文不是泛泛地说 I helped others，而是写清楚地点、人物、事情经过和结果。 • 结尾联系 Lei Feng always helped those in need，呼应单元主题，也写出自己的行动愿望。 写作小结 U6 写作重点是“用具体事迹说明品质”。介绍榜样人物时，先写品质，再用具体行动证明；写日记时，要写清楚时间、人物、经过和感受。参考范文已新起一页，方便学生先完成练习，再对照学习。 Unit 6 Lei Feng was a model soldier 写作突破专项训练 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $