Week 10 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“友谊感悟与肢体动作”主题，以“深夜营救”友谊续写题为例，提供6要素分析、微技能指导（如“321”原则“CARE”原则）、协同伏笔方法、语言特点解析及续写范例，构建完整学习支架。 资料特色鲜明，融合核心素养，通过结构化微技能培养思维品质，如用“321”原则指导情节衔接，协同伏笔（手链象征友谊暴雨推动和解）提升逻辑能力，语料积累增强语言表达，主题渗透沟通与包容的文化意识。能帮助学生掌握续写技巧，为教师提供系统教学实例。

Week 10 友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 好题探索　深夜营救,从“误会”到“和解”的友谊 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 　　Emily and Zoe had been best friends since second grade. They went to the same school, played on the same soccer team, and even wore matching bracelets (手链). Everyone around them said they were like two sides of the same coin.12 They believed nothing could come between them.⑦ But things started to change when a new girl Daisy came to their class.⑤ One day, their teacher, Mr. Lynn, announced a big group project.①“Pick a partner,”he said. Emily immediately turned to Zoe, expecting her usual smile and a quick“yes”.⑧ But to her surprise, Zoe was already talking to Daisy.“I’m going to work with Daisy this time,”Zoe said to Emily, almost too casually. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) Emily felt like the air had been knocked out of her. She nodded and forced a smile, but inside, she was confused and hurt.③ That night, she stared at her phone screen, hoping for a message that never came.⑨ Over the next few days, she avoided Zoe. Their texts stopped, they no longer sat together during lunch, and the bracelets they once wore daily were now left at home. Even during class, Emily found it hard to focus, her mind replaying the moment when Zoe chose someone else.⑩ Weeks passed.② The school organized a three-day camping trip in the mountains. Students were divided into several groups. Emily and Zoe ended up in the same 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) one, along with Daisy and two other classmates. Though they barely spoke, they worked together to put up tents and gather firewood.⑥ Their conversations were limited to short, polite exchanges—nothing like before. On the second night, dark clouds rolled in and heavy rain soon followed.④ Everyone rushed into their own tents. Emily quickly discovered that hers was leaking. Cold and upset, she went outside, seeking for help.11 The wind howled around her, and each raindrop felt like a tiny needle against her skin.13 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 　Just then, she saw a flashlight approaching. With Zoe’s help, they soon fixed the tent. (请参考素材5,素材8,素材11,主题素材10,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二)   理6要素 ①Who Emily, Zoe, Daisy, Mr. Lynn ②When one day→over the next few days→weeks passed→on the second night ③Where classroom→campus→campsite 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) ④What Best friends Emily and Zoe broke up after Zoe partnered with new classmate Daisy for a project, hurting Emily deeply. ⑤Problem Emily与Zoe之间的友谊危机(信任破裂、误解、被冷落感) ⑥Theme 友谊的真谛与考验、沟通的重要性、成长与包容 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　Just then, she saw a flashlight approaching. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“此时,她看到一个手电筒靠近”:是谁拿着手电筒过来?(协同段二首句中的Zoe)应描写Zoe主动前来帮助。 ◆过渡句1　Zoe过来说了什么?做了什么(如表达关切,主动检查帐篷)?→如何修补帐篷(如用备用雨衣修补)? 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句“在Zoe的帮助下,她们很快修好了帐篷”:两人开始合作修帐篷,在合作过程中发生了什么?她们此时情绪如何(如尴尬消失, Emily感受到Zoe的关心,意识到误会似乎在消失)? Para. 2　With Zoe’s help, they soon fixed the tent. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“在Zoe的帮助下,她们很快修好了帐篷”:在修好的帐篷内,Emily鼓起勇气表达被伤害的感受(项目组队)。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) ◆过渡句2　Zoe如何解释自己的初衷(想帮助新同学融入)?Zoe是否道歉?→两人敞开心扉,消除所有误会→两人有什么感悟(如认识到“沟通”对友谊的关键作用)? ◆结尾+主题　友谊不仅恢复,而且更加牢固,两人重新戴上象征友谊的手链。 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Emily:敏感、珍视友谊、内心受伤 段二描写Emily主动说出被伤害的感受 Zoe:选择Daisy组队,主动伸出援手(打手电过来)→关心、责任感、解决问题的能力 段一可描写Zoe检查帐篷,提出修补方案 段二可描写她在Emily倾诉后真诚道歉并解释 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 情节的协同 Para.2 I’m going to work with Daisy this time→项目组队事件,冲突的起点 段二协同描写Emily向Zoe倾诉此事,Zoe解释和道歉,解决冲突 Para.3 ... avoided Zoe; no longer sat together during lunch; the bracelets they once wore daily were now left at home→冷战状态,两人疏远 段一描写暴雨导致的帐篷漏雨打破了这种尴尬僵局,两人最初的尴尬在合作修帐篷时消散 段二描写两人最终敞开心扉、重新戴上手链,表现了从冷战到和解的转变 Para.4 Their conversations were limited to short, polite exchanges→两人分在同一组露营但交流有限 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 物的协同 手链(bracelets):友谊的象征,冷战期被摘下 暴雨(heavy rain):环境危机,帐篷漏雨,迫使Emily求助 段二尾句可描写两人和解后,重新戴上手链,误解消除、信任重建、友谊回归 段一可描写暴雨“冲走误会(washed away the misunderstandings)” 主题的协同 友谊面临考验(“believed nothing could come between them”vs“things started to change”),缺乏沟通导致关系恶化(冷战) 通过共同面对困境(修帐篷)和沟通(倾诉、解释、道歉),友谊经受住考验并变得更牢固 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.简单句(原文①②)与并列句(原文③④)为主,描写人物动作和环境。2.时间状语从句(原文⑤)、让步状语从句(原文⑥)和宾语从句(原文⑦),突出重点与情感。3.非谓语动词短语、独立主格(原文⑧⑨⑩)和形容词短语作状语(原文1113) ,描写人物动作或状态。4.比喻、拟人的修辞手法(原文1213)描写曾经的深厚友谊和环境的恶劣。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 续写第一段(场景1 来人是Zoe,满脸担忧　场景2 Zoe 检查漏雨帐篷, 提出解决方案　场景3 共同修帐篷) 场景1　来人是Zoe,满脸担忧(时间状语从句过渡) 1.看到艾米丽在寒风中挣扎,她满脸担忧。(“无灵”主语句) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 when she saw Emily struggling in the cold.   Her face was filled with concern 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 2.艾米丽睁大眼睛,既惊讶又宽慰。(“无灵”主语句) __________________________________________________ 场景2　Zoe 检查漏雨帐篷, 提出解决方案 3.佐伊一言不发地走上前检查帐篷。(双连动作链) Without a word, Zoe 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   Emily’s eyes widened with a mix of surprise and relief. stepped forward and examined the tent 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 场景3　共同修帐篷 4.两人协作时,尴尬渐渐消散。艾米丽意识到佐伊仍关心她,雨水似乎冲走了彼此间的误会。(“无灵”主语句+拟人) As they worked together, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. Emily realized that Zoe still cared and the rain seemed to have _____________________________________________________________.   the awkwardness gradually melted away washed away the misunderstandings between them 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 续写第二段(场景4 进帐篷,Emily倾诉委屈,Zoe道歉　场景5 坦率交谈,消除误会　场景6 戴回友谊手链) 场景4　进帐篷,Emily倾诉委屈,Zoe道歉 5.回到帐篷里,艾米丽深吸一口气说:“你选黛西做项目时,我很难过。” Back inside the tent, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, “I was so hurt when you chose Daisy for the project.”   Emily took a deep breath and said 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 6.佐伊满怀歉意地看着她,回答道:“对不起,我只是想照顾新同学,从没想伤害你。” (动词+副词) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 and replied, “I’m sorry. I just thought it would be better to include the new comer, but I never meant to hurt you.”  满分结尾句 场景6　戴回友谊手链(时间状语从句过渡) 7.直到那时,她们才明白朋友需要坦诚沟通,而且她们的友谊也因此变得更 Zoe looked at her apologetically 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 加牢固。从此,她们重新戴上了配对手链——这份牢不可破的友谊的象征。 (倒装句+名词短语作同位语) Until then　　　　　　　　 　　　　and that their bond became even stronger. From then on, they wore their matching bracelets again, 　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　. did they realize that friends need open communication a symbol of their unbreakable friendship 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) Just then, she saw a flashlight approaching. In the dim light, Emily recognized it was nobody else but Zoe. Her face was filled with concern when she saw Emily struggling in the cold. “I thought you might need help,”Zoe said softly. Emily's eyes widened with a mix of surprise and relief. Without a word, Zoe stepped forward and examined the tent. She explained that she could fix it with the spare raincoat she had brought. As they worked together, the awkwardness gradually melted away. Emily realized that Zoe still cared and the rain seemed to have washed away the misunderstandings between them. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) With Zoe's help, they soon fixed the tent. Back inside the tent, Emily took a deep breath and said, “I was so hurt when you chose Daisy for the project.”Zoe looked at her apologetically and replied, “I'm sorry. I just thought it would be better to include the new comer, but I never meant to hurt you.”That night, they had an open-hearted conversation, clearing up all the confusion. Until then did they realize that friends need open communication and that their bond became even stronger. From then on, they wore their matching bracelets again, a symbol of their unbreakable friendship. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　 vt. 重放;重播 ②　　　　　　　　　强作笑颜;强装欢笑  ③(情感描写)Emily felt like the air had been 　　　　　　　　　　　her. 艾米丽感觉像被人一拳打中,瞬间喘不上气。  ④(环境描写)On the second night, dark clouds 　　　　and heavy rain soon 　　　　. The wind 　　 　around her, and each raindrop felt like 　　 　against her skin. 第二天夜里,乌云密布,紧接着暴雨倾盆而至。狂风在她四周呼啸,密集的雨点打在她的身上,每个雨点都像针扎般刺痛皮肤。  replay force a smile knocked out of rolled in followed howled a tiny needle 第 ‹#› 页 Week 10　友谊感悟&肢体动作(二) $