Week 13 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“险境求生&能‘看’会‘说’”主题，以2020浙江卷“北极熊遇险”续写真题为载体，构建包含原文六要素分析、续写微技能（“321”“CARE”原则）、伏笔协同（人设/情节/物品）、语言表达（动作链/情感描写）及范文示例的学习支架。 资料特色突出，创新采用微技能分层教学，如通过“熊砸围栏”“胡椒喷雾”等原文伏笔设计续写情节，培养思维品质；强调双连/三连动作链及形容词作状语，提升语言能力；渗透人与动物和谐共处主题，涵养文化意识；提供语料积累与高分句式，发展学习能力。能帮助学生提升续写逻辑与表达，为教师提供可操作的教学步骤和资源。高三学生可借其强化高考续写应试能力，高一高二学生能夯实基础，培养综合语言运用能力。

Week 13 险境求生&能“看”会“说” Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 好题探索　不速之客之北极熊　(2020·浙江卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside“the polar bear capital of the world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears—like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.① The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire.② He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.③ Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.⑤ We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.④ Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though—he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子). 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter, I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burned the bear’s eyes, but didn’t hurt him. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.⑥ 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 　A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. (请参考素材4,素材9,素材10,素材15,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 理6要素 ①Who my wife, I, camp manager, a young male polar bear ②When one fall ③Where at a research camp ④What an encounter with the polar bear 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” ⑤Problem 摄影爱好者如何免受北极熊的攻击自救脱险,饥饿的北极熊如何获取食物并自保 ⑥Theme 险境求生、解决问题、人与动物 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“北极熊返回营地”:被胡椒喷雾剂刺痛眼睛的北极熊是否被激怒了?是否会更猛烈地撞击围栏? ◆过渡句1　“我” 和妻子看到发怒的北极熊的反应?→如何利用随身物品应对北极熊的攻击?采取什么新的办法有效避险? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“就在那一瞬间”,营造人与北极熊之间的对峙氛围,如北极熊马上要破栏而入。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” Para. 2　At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“直升机赶到”:如何利用直升机脱险(直升机发出的巨大声响吓走北极熊)? ◆过渡句2　安全脱险→看到北极熊做了什么(协同原文的garlic bread)? ◆结尾+主题　(协同原文首段提到的to photograph polar bears)拍照成功。主题可升华为意识到与野生动物相处的危险性和对大自然力量的敬畏。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.4 He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. Para.5 he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws 段一尾句可描写北极熊用巨大的熊爪撕破铁丝网,营造危急场面 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 情节的协同 Para.5 Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. 段二开头可写直升机发出的巨大声音吓退北极熊 Para.1 to photograph polar bears 段二尾句可协同描写用相机抓拍北极熊,首尾呼应 Para.7 With an angry roar, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. 段一开头可描写北极熊愤怒地发动攻击和眼部发红受伤的状况 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 物的协同 our garlic bread, camera, pepper spray 段一描写“我们”与北极熊对峙时可写用bread投喂北极熊以拖延时间,或再次尝试用胡椒喷雾剂自救 段二尾句可写拿起相机拍摄北极熊 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.原文侧重动作和场景描写。2.双连或三连动作链(原文①②③④),描写人和北极熊的具体动作。3.形容词或介词短语作状语(原文⑤⑥),描写人和北极熊的情感。 续写第一段(场景1 熊吼叫、猛砸围栏　场景2 应对熊攻击　场景3 出现危机) 场景1　熊吼叫、猛砸围栏 1.他红肿的眼睛里满是愤怒,他咆哮着,疯狂地用有力的爪子砸着铁丝栅栏。 (情感名词+双连动作链+副词) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 　　　　 filling his red swollen eyes, he 　　　　, and smashed his powerful paws 　　　　against the wire fence.   场景2　应对熊攻击 2.埃莉显然比我冷静,她抓起蒜蓉面包朝北极熊扔去。 (1)Elli was apparently 　　　　　than me, so she and 　　　　　it at the bear. (情感形容词+双连动作链) (2)__________ (形容词短语置于句首+双连动作链) 场景3　出现危机 Anger roared madly calmer grabbed the garlic bread threw Apparently calmer than me, Elli grabbed the garlic bread and threw it at the bear. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 3.“咔嚓”一声巨响,他扯坏栅栏冲进来,径直朝我们扑来! (三连动作链) With a loud crack, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　straight for us!  4.寒风呼啸,除了心怦怦猛跳的声音,我们什么也听不见。 (被动句,场景描写,间接烘托人物内心的恐惧) The icy wind howling, 　　　　　　　　　　　but the beat of our hearts thumping.   续写第二段(场景4 引擎噪音作用　场景5 安全脱险　场景6 空中观察熊,拍照记录) he tore down the fence, rushed in and charged nothing could be heard 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 场景4　引擎噪音作用(驱散恐惧、吓退熊) 5.它的引擎声立刻驱散了令人窒息的恐惧,也吓坏了北极熊,他迟疑地后退了几步。 (1)The noise of its engine 　　　　　　　　　　　　immediately and 　　　　　　　　. He took a few hesitant steps back. (并列句)  (2)The noise of its engine 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　. (非限制性定语从句)  swept away our fear immediately and frightened the bear swept away our choking fear frightened the bear who took a few hesitant steps back 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 场景5　安全脱险 6.我们激动的同时也松了一口气,紧紧抓住绳子,最后安然无恙地登上了直升机。 (1)　　　　　　　　　　　　　, we caught the rope tightly and eventually landed on the helicopter, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. (非谓语动词+形容词短语作状语)  (2)__________________________________________________ ___________________________________________(形容词短语作状语) Feeling thrilled but relieved safe and sound Thrilled but relieved, we caught the rope tightly and eventually landed on the helicopter, safe and sound. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Anger filling his red swollen eyes, he roared and smashed his powerful paws madly against the wire fence. I froze with terror, my palms sweating. Apparently calmer than me, Elli grabbed the garlic bread and threw it at the bear. He stopped, sniffed and then wolfed it down. However, in not even a minute he banged again. With a loud crack, he tore down the fence, rushed in and charged straight for us! Elli and I huddled together. The icy wind howling, nothing could be heard but the beat of our hearts thumping.At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. The noise of its engine swept away our 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” choking fear immediately and frightened the bear, who took a few hesitant steps back. Out of the helicopter descended a rope to pull us up. Thrilled but relieved, we caught the rope tightly and eventually landed on the helicopter, safe and sound. What a thrilling experience! While overlooking the camp from aboard, I was amazed to spot the bear clumsily ran towards the leftovers of our dinner. Without delay, I reached into my backpack, pulled out the camera, and froze the impressive moment. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　 n. 粗暴对待;糟蹋　 ②　　　　　　　　 把……吓跑  ③　　　　　　　　　 近距离接触 ④on one’s way 即将到来  ⑤　　　　　　　　　　　, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.  熊怒吼一声,跑到湖边洗眼睛。 punishment scare ... off close encounter With an angry roar 第 ‹#› 页 Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” $