Week 12 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦Week 12志愿服务/社区力量主题，围绕高考续写题型构建学习支架，包含原文材料分析、续写微技能指导（如“321”与CARE原则）、情节协同策略、语言表达示例及语料积累，助力学生掌握续写逻辑与表达。 资料特色鲜明，有机融合核心素养，通过分析无家可归者描写培养同理心（文化意识），运用伏笔协同与逻辑衔接提升思维品质，提供倒装句等地道表达训练语言能力，微技能分步指导强化学习能力。创新的“以旧带新”情节设计和场景化续写示例，能帮助学生提升高考续写得分，为教师提供系统教学方案。高三学生面临升学考试，需重点关注高考题型技巧，该资料针对续写高频主题，通过实战案例与方法指导，有效提升学生应试能力与综合素养。

Week 12 志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 好题探索　社区服务　(2022·浙江高考) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I needed to do something in my community in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do. →不了解(为了完成社区服务) I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner.① We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering.② It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner. →所为(准备食物,调制沙拉,分离冻肉) As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared.④ I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act? How would they treat me? Would they hate me for having more than they did? While some of the people looked 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous.⑤ I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.⑥ I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking.③ Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.⑦ →所见(源源不断的流浪者排着队等着食物。他们有的衣衫褴褛,有的亲切友善,有的面露凶相,或目光呆滞,或苦中作乐)　→了解参与服务 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. 　　I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. (请参考素材3,素材8,主题素材7,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 理6要素 ①Who I, the lady, the homeless people ②When before graduation ③Where in my community ④What I joined in the community service to graduate from high school. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 ⑤Problem 完成社区服务 ⑥Theme 体会助人工作的不易,有同理心,懂得感恩,尽自己所能贡献力量、守望相助 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“当他们朝我走来时”:“我”开始忐忑地分发食物。 ◆过渡句1　(协同上文中自己的几个疑问)无家可归者的表现(看起来危险的人其实特别友好)让“我”放下戒备之心→在服务的过程中,the lady一直协助“我”,给了“我”很多的帮助。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“获得了服务时间”:社区服务进展顺利,“我”开始享受社区活动。 Para. 2　I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“我很高兴我用这种方式获得了服务时间”:(与happy协同)简单回顾并对这样的社区服务持肯定态度。 ◆过渡句2　“我”主动和无家可归者交流→对他们看法的改变、情感的变化(不再害怕)。 ◆结尾+主题　(协同原文提到的the lady) “我”与the lady创建了慈善小组,去更好地帮助无家可归者。点出公益服务的深层意义。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.1 had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen Para.2 I thought that we would just be passing out dinners→对社区服务的态度 Para.4 It saddened me to think of ... who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.→“我”的同理心和怜悯 段一协同描写“我”态度的另一个转变:“我”开始喜欢社区服务 段二协同描写“我”呼吁或主动组织大家参与社区服务 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 人设的协同   Para.3 I was assigned to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.→忙前忙后,微笑待人 段一可协同描写the lady对“我”的帮助 段二可协同描写“我”对the lady的感谢 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 情节的协同 Para.2 We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. 段一协同描写发放肉三明治 Para.3 I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act? How would they treat me? Would they hate me for having more than they did?→“我”心中的顾虑:如何行动?会被如何对待?无家可归者是否会为难“我”? 段一交代消除了心中的顾虑,改变了态度 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 Para.3 While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. 段二协同描写看似危险的人其实很友好 主题的协同 原文提及从对社区服务的“不了解”到“了解”,结合首段中的“It seemed like a good thing to do”,暗示这次社区服务对“我”的积极影响 段二可协同描写a good thing;尾句可协同描写“我”组织活动帮助无家可归者 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.并列句(原文①②③)。2.从句,如状语从句、定语从句和宾语从句(原文④⑤⑥⑦) 描写“我”的社区服务经历,并推动情节发展。 续写第一段(场景1 分发领取食物　场景2 打破“以貌取人”的偏见　场景3 内心温暖快乐) 场景1　分发领取食物(有序排队的人群、不同人吃饭) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 1.有些人太饿了,他们拿到食物后就开始狼吞虎咽,而有些人则直接把食物拿走。(倒装句+并列句) So hungry were some 　 　　　　　　　　 　　　, while some just took it away.  场景3　内心温暖快乐 2.虽然我四肢酸痛,但我的心里满是温暖和喜悦。(“无灵”主语句) Though my limbs were stiff, 　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　.  续写第二段(场景4 肯定这次经历的意义　场景5 主动尝试和他们交流　场景6 恐惧消失) that they began to wolf the food after getting it my heart was filled with warmth and joy 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 场景6　恐惧消失 3.我先前的恐惧和担心逐渐消失了。(“无灵”主语句) __________________________________________________ 吸睛结尾句 感悟式,点出公益服务的深层意义 4.通过这次经历,除了服务时间,我也收获了更有价值的东西:虽然我们不能给那些有需要的人一个温暖的家,但我们至少可以尽自己的一份力,用一点同情、一点善良、一个灿烂快乐的微笑温暖他们的心。 My previous fear and concern gradually melted away. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 Through the experience, aside from the service hours, I also 　　　　　　　: while we can’t give those needy soul 　　　　　　　　, at least we can contribute our share to warm their hearts by a touch of sympathy, 　　　　　　 　　, and 　　　　　　　　　　.   5.我也对帮助我的女士说了一声“谢谢”,因为我知道,正是我们共同的善意——不仅是为了毕业,而且是在相互温暖——使我们更紧密地联系在一起。 earned something a warm home a touch of kindness a bright happy smile more valuable 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 I also 　　　　　　　　　 　　　who helped me out, for I knew it was the kindness we shared together, not only for graduating but also for 　　　　　　　　, that bonded us closer together.  6.希望在不久的将来,我们社区的施食处不只是让他们吃饱,还能提供慰藉心灵的“汤”。 Hopefully, in the near future, our community’s soup kitchen would 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, but also offer “soup” to feed their souls.  said a “thank you” to the lady warming each other not only just serve food to feed their stomachs 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. With a little nervousness, I began to distribute hamburgers with the meat, which were badly in need. But to my great relief, those homeless were in a quiet well-ordered queue, waiting for the food to be served. So hungry were some that they began to wolf the food after getting it, while some just took it away. What touched me was that hundreds left with friendly thanks. Indeed, one couldn't be judged by his clothes. Though my limbs were stiff, my heart was filled with warmth and joy. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. It was truly a good thing to do! Taking the lady's advice, I even tried to befriend them. And it turned out that those seemingly dangerous people were actually quite friendly. My previous fear and concern gradually melted away. Through the experience, aside from the service hours, I also earned something more valuable: while we can't give those needy soul a warm home, at least we can contribute our share to warm their hearts by a touch of sympathy, a touch of kindness, and a bright happy smile. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　　　 面对　　　　　　　　 ②　　　　　　　　　　　 放弃生活  ③　　　　　　　　　 　　 最大限度地利用现状 ④　　　　　　　　　　　 使某人悲伤;使某人难过  ⑤As the line of people came toward me, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  当这队人朝我走来,我有点害怕。 face to face with give up on life make the best of the situation sadden sb. I got a little scared 第 ‹#› 页 Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 $