Week 9 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，共22页，围绕“家庭亲情 & 肢体动作”主题，以2021新高考Ⅰ卷“母亲节的惊喜”续写题为例，构建从审题（理6要素）、情节构思（“321”“CARE”原则）到语言表达（动作链、无灵主语句）的完整学习支架，含参考范文及语料积累。 资料特色突出，聚焦核心素养：通过伏笔协同表格训练思维逻辑，用双连动作链、倒装句等提升语言能力，借家庭亲情主题渗透文化意识，微技能分步指导培养学习策略。实例丰富如“父亲出现后指导收拾厨房”情节设计，能帮助学生掌握高考续写技巧，为教师提供系统教学资源。

Week 9 家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 好题探索　母亲节的惊喜　(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE 　　The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.⑦ How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.⑧ They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.④ Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.① Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.② Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.⑤ Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.③ This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.⑥ → 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 虽然慌乱但还算可控的场面 Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked.⑨ Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. →手忙脚乱的场面 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. (请参考素材2,素材8,素材13,主题素材9,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 理6要素 ①Who Jenna and Jeff (twins), Mother, Father ②When at 6 a.m. ③Where at home ④What the twins’Mother’s Day surprise: breakfast 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) ⑤Problem 双胞胎Jenna和Jeff准备爱心早餐时遇到的困难 ⑥Theme 亲情、温暖、爱、劳动快乐 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“他们的父亲出现了”:父亲看了一下厨房,说了什么,使早餐制作的尴尬局面出现了转机? ◆过渡句1　双胞胎如何解释送惊喜的计划?父亲是否指导他们做早餐?还是父亲直接帮他们做早餐? 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“双胞胎把早餐端上楼”:双胞胎如何布置早餐托盘? Para. 2　The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“双胞胎把早餐端上楼,叫醒了母亲”:双胞胎叫醒母亲说了什么? ◆过渡句2　母亲看见了什么?→她的反应(惊讶?惊喜?激动?)? ◆结尾+主题　全家吃早餐的温暖有爱的画面,父亲和孩子的眼神交流、双胞胎的自豪等。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.1 How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. 段二可写母亲看到早餐被端到床前时的惊喜和骄傲 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 情节的协同 Para.2-3面包煎煳了,粥溢出来了,厨房应该是很乱的情况 段一可写父亲建议双胞胎收拾厨房 Para.3 Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. 段一可描写父亲如何处理这锅没煮好的粥 Para.3 But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. 段二可写母亲看到Jeff的手,落下泪来 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 物的协同 pot, pan, eggs, milk 段一可描写孩子们和父亲再次做早餐的场景 主题的协同 标题A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE 段二可写母亲看到早餐时的surprise(惊喜) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.双连动作链(原文①②③)描写人物动作。2.并列句(原文④⑤⑥)生动描写人物做饭的场景。3.简单句(原文⑨)和时间状语从句(原文⑦⑧)生动描写人物的情感和心理活动。 续写第一段(场景1 父亲明白状况　场景2 做好早餐　场景3 布置餐盘) 场景2　做好早餐 1.很快,厨房里弥漫着一股香味。(“无灵”主语句) __________________________________________________ Soon, sweet smell filled the air in the kitchen. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 场景3　布置餐盘 2.双胞胎准备好早餐托盘,加上一张他们做的漂亮的卡片,走出厨房。(三连动词构成动作链) The twins prepared the breakfast tray, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, and stepped out of the kitchen.   续写第二段(场景4 母亲的惊喜　场景5 品尝早餐　场景6 父女互动) 场景4　母亲的惊喜(时间状语从句过渡) added a beautiful card they had made 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 3.当她看到眼前完美的早餐时,她的脸上闪过一丝惊喜。(“无灵”主语句) When she saw the perfect breakfast in front of her, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   4.空气中弥漫着诱人的早餐香味,她的目光落到了早餐托盘上。 (“无灵”主语句) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, and her eyes fell on the breakfast tray.  a spark of surprise flashed across/crossed her face An inviting smell of breakfast filled the air 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 5.她惊喜极了,于是兴奋地摇醒正假装睡觉的父亲。 (1)　　　　　　　　　　　 that she excitedly shook Father, who was pretending to be asleep. (so ... that ... 结果状语从句)  (2)__________________________________________________ (倒装句) 6.他看到早餐时佯装惊讶。(fake) __________________________________________________ 满分结尾句 The surprise was so sweet So sweet was the surprise that she excitedly shook Father, who was pretending to be asleep. He faked astonishment when he saw the breakfast. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 场景6　父女互动 7.Jenna察觉到她父亲的目光,他们会意地眨了眨眼。 Jenna caught her father’s eye and they exchanged ____________________. a knowing wink 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. One look and he knew what they were up to. Seeing their disappointed faces, he advised them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twins almost jumped with joy. Within half an hour, the kitchen was cleaned. At the same time, Father had made some French toast and got the chicken porridge done. Then he tiptoed back to bed. The twins prepared the breakfast tray, added a beautiful card they had made, and stepped out of the kitchen. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They cried, “Happy Mother's Day! Dear Mummy!” Mother hugged the twins, sleepy-eyed. An inviting smell of breakfast filled the air, and her eyes fell on the breakfast tray. So sweet was the surprise that she excitedly shook Father, who was pretending to be asleep. He faked astonishment when he saw the breakfast. Mother bit into the toast, announcing it was the best she had ever tasted. Jeff instantly begged to have a bite. Jenna caught her father's eye and they winked at each other secretly. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　 很简单的。　　　　 ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　 冒出来  ③_________________________________________ as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. 想着为母亲节准备的惊喜,双胞胎满心欢喜。 There was nothing to it. shoot out of The twins were filled with excitement 第 ‹#› 页 Week 9　家庭亲情&肢体动作(一) $