Week 8 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“善行助人 & 感恩温暖”主题展开，包含续写微技能指导、卖爆米花计划好题探索，通过六要素分析、“321”“CARE”原则等学习支架，提供伏笔协同、语言特点解析及续写示例，助力学生掌握叙事续写。 资料特色显著，以微技能分层指导为核心，融合核心素养，通过“伏笔协同”“CARE原则”等创新策略，结合Bernard卖爆米花案例，用“无灵主语句”“倒装句”等模板提升语言能力，社区互助情节深化文化意识与思维品质，助力高三学生应对升学考试续写题型，为教师提供系统教学支架，提升教学效率。

Week 8 善行助人&感激温暖篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 好题探索　卖爆米花计划 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs.② Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. →故事背景:经济形势不佳、失业、互助渡过难关 Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 all kinds of help.⑦ When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.③ One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy.⑤ The little boy—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much. →一个需要帮助的家庭 “I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara.“He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.”⑧ 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried,①“I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).” The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one.④“I tell you what we can do,”said John.“You know 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 that big box of corn Uncle John sent us?⑥ Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.” 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. (请参考素材1,素材12,主题素材7,高分句式1-55, 附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 理6要素 ①Who a helpful family: Mrs. Meredith, John, Harry and Clara; a family in need: Bernard (the son), the sick man and his wife ②When one morning ③Where in a small community 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 ④What The Meredith family’s popcorn plan ⑤Problem 如何完成卖爆米花计划,帮助Bernard赚钱 ⑥Theme 爱、帮助和善行、解决问题 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“Mrs. Meredith认为John的主意不错”:Mrs. Meredith说了什么?做了什么? ◆过渡句1　孩子们如何行动(动作、场景描写)?→如何让Bernard知道计划?他会有什么反应?→孩子们如何制作爆米花? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“everything ready”:准备得如何? 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 Para. 2　With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“Bernard开始他的新营生”:Bernard 去哪里卖爆米花? 卖给谁? ◆过渡句2　Bernard 顺利卖完爆米花了吗?(可以是很顺利,也可以是开始不顺利,但在孩子们的帮助下克服了困难)→Bernard 的收获、感受和对 Mrs. Meredith 一家的感激。 ◆结尾+主题　主题升华式结尾,社区温暖氛围对Bernard的影响,邻里间的关爱,善良的重要性等。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Mrs. Meredith: kind, thoughtful; John, Harry, Clara: clever, sympathetic 一家人帮助做爆米花,如售卖过程中有问题,还会提供帮助 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 情节的协同 Para.1 People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. 段二可描写社区居民乐意帮忙,购买爆米花的场面 Para.8 and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it 段二可交代Bernard卖爆米花的地方,协同该处伏笔,from door to door Para.3 she told her children about a family she had visited 段一可描写再次拜访Bernard一家,pay another visit Para.4 He wants very much to earn some money 段二可描写Bernard卖完爆米花,赚了些钱 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 物的协同 that big box of corn Uncle John sent us, paper bags 段一在描写做爆米花需要准备的材料时,可提及叔叔送的玉米,用纸袋装爆米花 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.双连动作链(原文①)描写John机灵活泼的形象。2.并列句和复合句,如并列句(原文⑦⑧)、时间状语从句(原文②③④)和定语从句(原文⑤⑥)推动故事情节发展。 续写第一段(场景1 准备材料　场景2 告知计划　场景3 制作爆米花) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 场景2　告知计划(时间状语从句过渡) 1.伯纳德得知他们的计划时,笑逐颜开,双眸闪烁着喜悦和感激的光芒。(神态描写,“无灵”主语句) As Bernard learned about their plan, his face 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, and his eyes 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   场景3　制作爆米花 2.孩子们在满是欢声笑语的小院里制作和打包爆米花。(“无灵”主语句) The yard filled with laughter 　　　 　the children popping and packaging the popcorn.  broke into a wide grin shone with joy and gratitude saw/witnessed 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 续写第二段(场景4 售卖爆米花　场景5 卖完爆米花　场景6 Bernard的感激) 场景4　售卖爆米花 3.他兴奋地提着篮子,去挨家挨户地卖爆米花。 (1)He 　　　　　　　　　　　, and set off to sell the popcorn from door to door. (动作描写+副词)  (2)　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　, he set off to sell the popcorn from door to door. (非谓语动词短语作状语+介词短语)  carried the basket excitedly Carrying the basket with excitement 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 场景6　Bernard的感激 4.他的心里满是对善良的Meredith一家的感激。 　　　　　　　　 　　 　　　　　　　　 to the kind Merediths.  吸睛结尾句 主题升华式 5.他们不仅帮助了这个需要帮助的男孩,自己也品尝到了帮助别人的甜蜜味道。 (1)　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　the sweet taste of helping others. (not only ... but also ...)  (2)__________________________________________________ (倒装句) His heart was overwhelmed/filled with gratitude They not only helped the boy in need, but also gave themselves Not only did they help the boy in need, but they also gave themselves the sweet taste of helping others. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. She nodded with a smile, “Let's get started!” Immediately, Clara volunteered to find the materials to make popcorn. Meanwhile, John went to purchase some paper bags and arranged all the stuff in place. Mrs. Meredith, along with Harry, paid another visit to the Bernard's and shared their popcorn plan with them. At it, Bernard's face broke into a wide grin, and his eyes shone with joy and gratitude. Time had wings, and the yard filled with laughter saw the children popping and packaging the popcorn. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. Carrying the basket with excitement, he set off to sell the popcorn from door to door. Touched by such a little boy's efforts to support his family, people were glad to buy one bag or two. Soon, Bernard had an empty basket with some coins jingling in his pocket. His heart was overwhelmed with gratitude to the kind Merediths. Not only did they help the boy in need, but they also gave themselves the sweet taste of helping others. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　 下降　　　　　　 ②　　　　　　　　 勉强维持生计  ③　　　　　　　　　 一跃而起 ④　　　　　　　　　　 立即全神贯注  in decline make ends meet spring to one’s feet jump up all attention 第 ‹#› 页 Week 8　善行助人&感激温暖篇 $