Week 7 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“逐梦人生 & 悲伤难过”主题展开，共23页内容。包含续写微技能讲解、阅读材料《My Best Examination》、续写任务及要素分析，提供“321原则”“CARE原则”等微技能支架和语料积累，助力学生掌握续写方法。 资料特色突出，融合核心素养，以矿工求学故事为续写材料，通过情节衔接、伏笔协同培养思维品质，用排比描写、心理刻画提升语言能力。结合《小王子》引入文化意识，系统微技能指导增强学习能力。帮助学生提升续写水平，为教师提供同步教学实例和方法支持，适合高三学生升学考试续写专项复习。

Week 7 逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 《小王子》是法国作家安托万·德·圣·埃克苏佩里于1942年写成的著名儿童文学短篇小说。该书的主人公是来自外星球的小王子。书中以一位飞行员作为叙述者,讲述了小王子和他之间的友谊。飞行员是个爱幻想的人,不习惯与那些太讲究实际的大人交往,反而喜欢和孩子们相处。飞行员因飞机故障迫降在撒哈拉大沙漠,在那里遇见了小王子。那次与小王子的相遇让飞行员悲伤,也使其振作。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 好题探索　最好的考试 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My Best Examination One day, while at work in a coalmine in Malden, I happened to overhear two miners talking about a great school for poor people in Virginia. The school was established to provide opportunities for poor but worthy students who could work out all or a part of the cost of board, and at the same time be taught some trade or industry. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 I was on fire constantly with one ambition, and that was to go to school.① I decided at once to go to that school. Finally the great day came and I started for Hampton.② I had only a small, cheap bag that contained what few articles of clothing I could get.③ The distance from Malden to Hampton is about five hundred miles. I had not been away from home many hours before it began to grow painfully evident that I did not have enough money to pay my fare (路费) to Hampton.④ →贫穷、路程遥远,没钱买票 By walking and begging rides in some way, I finally reached the grounds 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 of the school after a number of days, tired and dirty.⑤ As soon as possible after reaching, I presented myself before the head teacher for assignment to a class. Having been so long without proper food, a bath, and change of clothing, I was like a worthless loafer (游手好闲者).⑥ I did not, of course, make a very favourable impression upon her, and I could see at once that there were doubts in her mind about the wisdom of admitting me as a student. I tried to impress her in all the ways I could with my worthiness. How I wished that I could get a chance to show what was in me!⑦ After some time, the head teacher said to me,“The adjoining (隔壁的) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 classroom needs sweeping. Take the broom and sweep it.” 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　It occurred to me at once that here was my chance. The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets. (请参考素材7,素材1,素材9,主题素材3,主题素材5,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 理6要素 ①Who I (a coal miner), the head teacher ②When one day→a number of days later ③Where in a coalmine→in the school 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 ④What My best examination ⑤Problem 没能给校长留下好印象;如何证明自己优秀 ⑥Theme 抓住机会、不畏艰难、全力以赴;通过努力劳动实现梦想 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　It occurred to me at once that here was my chance. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“我的机会来了”:“我”得到机会时难以置信的心情。 ◆过渡句1　“我”高兴地拿起扫把去隔壁教室→干活的场景描写:一遍遍扫地,擦柜子、桌凳等。 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句“校长走进房间,检查地板和柜子”:“我”打扫完成后报告校长。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 Para. 2　The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“校长走进房间,检查地板和柜子”:“我”紧张地看着校长接着检查桌凳(动作描写)。 ◆过渡句2　校长宣布检查的结果(表情、语言描写),“我”被认可后的激动的情绪。 ◆结尾+主题　协同原文标题(My Best Examination):扫地是入学考试,是自己通过的最好的一场考试。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 人设的协同 Para.2 I was on fire constantly with one ambition, and that was to go to school. Para.3 By walking and begging rides in some way, I finally reached the grounds of the school after a number of days, tired and dirty. Para.4 I tried to impress her in all the ways I could with my worthiness.→“我”有梦想、意志坚定,不怕吃苦且渴望证明自己优秀 段一协同描写“我”一遍遍打扫教室、一遍遍擦桌凳和柜子的场景,侧面突出“我”吃苦耐劳;同时添加心理描写:渴望证明自己 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 情节的协同 Para.1 The school was established to provide opportunities for poor but worthy students ... Para.4 How I wished that I could get a chance to show what was in me!→要证明自己的优秀 段二用校长的话协同描写“我”证明了自己的优秀 Para.3 tired and dirty; Having been so long without proper food, a bath, and change of clothing→脏兮兮,衣衫褴褛,饥肠辘辘 段一协同描写“我”忘记了自己又累又饿,全力以赴打扫教室 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇  人设的协同 Para.4 ... there were doubts in her mind about the wisdom of admitting me as a student→校长怀疑“我”的能力 段一可协同描写“我”决定打消校长的怀疑(remove her doubts) 物的协同 特定物的协同, the broom, closets 段一协同描写拿起扫把 段二协同描写校长宣布结果 主题的协同 标题My Best Examination 尾段协同best examination并升华 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.使用并列句(原文①②)和从句(原文③④)。2.形容词短语作状语(原文⑤)描写人物情感。3.非谓语动词短语作状语(原文⑥)说明自身境况。4.感叹句(原文⑦)描写人物内心活动。 续写第一段(场景1 得到打扫任务　场景2 细致打扫　场景3 清扫汇报) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 场景1　得到打扫任务 1.我摆脱了所有的疲惫,抓起扫帚,向教室冲去。 __________________________________________________ 场景2　细致打扫 2.我把教室扫了三遍。然后我拿了块布,把里面的东西擦了四遍。所有的柜子,每条长凳,每张桌子,我都用抹布擦了四遍。(排比) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. Then I got a cloth and I dusted it four times. All the closets, every bench and every desk, I 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   I shrugged off all my exhaustion, seized the broom, and rushed to the classroom. I swept the room three times went over four times with the cloth 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 续写第二段(场景4 细查卫生　场景5 获准入校　场景6 结尾+升华) 场景4　细查卫生 3.我紧张地看着她拿起手帕在桌子和长凳上擦来擦去。 __________________________________________________ 场景5　获准入校(时间状语从句过渡) 4.当她在地板上找不到一点污垢,在家具上找不到一粒灰尘时,她轻声说:“我想你可以入学了。” When she was unable to find one bit of dirt on the floor, or a particle of dust on any of the furniture, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, “I guess you will do to enter this institution.”  I watched nervously as she took her handkerchief and rubbed it over the tables and benches. she quietly remarked 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 场景6　结尾+升华 5.打扫那间教室就是我的大学入学考试!从那以后,我通过了几次考试,但我一直觉得这是我通过的最好的一次考试。 The sweeping of that room was 　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　! I have passed several examinations since then, but I have always felt that 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  6.那一刻,我知道这是我经历过的最好的一场考试,因为我有机会证明我的价值,实现我的梦想。 At that moment, I knew this was the best examination that I had had because I had the opportunity to 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  my college entrance examination this was the best one I had ever passed prove my worthiness and fulfill my dreams 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 It occurred to me at once that here was my chance. Never did I receive an order with more delight. I shrugged off all my exhaustion, seized the broom, and rushed to the classroom. I swept the room three times. Then I got a cloth and I dusted it four times. All the closets, every bench and every desk, I went over four times with the cloth. I had the feeling that in a large measure my future depended upon the impression I made upon the teacher in the cleaning of that room. When I was through, I reported to her. The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets. I watched nervously as she took her handkerchief and rubbed it over the tables 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 and benches. When she was unable to find one bit of dirt on the floor, or a particle of dust on any of the furniture, she quietly remarked, “I guess you will do to enter this institution.” I was one of the happiest souls on earth. The sweeping of that room was my college entrance examination! I have passed several examinations since then, but I have always felt that this was the best one I had ever passed. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 原文续写语料积累 ①be on fire with one ambition 雄心勃勃　　　　　 ②　　　　　　 接收……为  ③I was 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, and that was to go to school.  我一直渴望上学。 admit ... as on fire constantly with one ambition 第 ‹#› 页 Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 $