Week 5 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦Week 5“优秀品行 & 失望遗憾”主题，围绕2024新高考Ⅰ卷续写真题“陌生司机的善意”，提供续写微技能支架，包括情节分析、动作链描写、伏笔协同及范文示例，共23页内容。 资料特色突出核心素养培养，通过“321”“CARE”原则构建情节逻辑，用伏笔协同表格衔接原文与续写，结合动作链、地道动词等语言特点提升表达能力，以Gunter善意故事渗透诚信与善意价值观，助力学生掌握高考续写技巧，为教师提供系统教学方案。高三学生面临升学考试，该资料针对高考续写题型设计，能有效提升学生应试能力，也为教师教学提供清晰路径。

Week 5 优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 好题探索　陌生司机的善意　(2024·新高考Ⅰ卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 为何此次经历令人难忘? 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.① That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend.②After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.③ →人物互动场景描写,画面感很强 Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face.④“We made it,”he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.⑥ He tried it several 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out (散去).⑦ At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine.⑧ I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message:“Out of order. Sorry.”⑤ →三连动作链(跳下、狂奔、迅速放卡) +不定式作结果状语: 渲染情势紧急和“我”的焦虑 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. (请参考素材6,素材8,主题素材7,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 理6要素 ①Who I, Gunter ②When a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September→four days later ③Where airport→the bus station ④What Despite catching the last bus to Prague, I failed to pay the taxi fare to Gunter. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 ⑤Problem 无法支付出租车费 ⑥Theme problem→solution:陌生人的善意、诚实守信 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“告诉Gunter坏消息”: “我”说了什么(“我”的解释、计划)? ◆过渡句1　Gunter听到“我”的解释后的反应(担忧、安慰)(可添加神态描写)→“我”许诺四天后回维也纳支付车费(协同段二首句)→Gunter同意“我”的解决办法。 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“给Gunter打电话”:交换电话号码,“我”登上巴士。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 Para. 2　Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“如约给Gunter打电话”:Gunter接到“我”电话的反应(高兴、惊喜)。 ◆过渡句2　见面后发生了什么(拥抱→“我”支付车费, 按照诺言支付小费→Gunter拒绝小费→成为朋友)? ◆结尾+主题　协同原文首段中的a cold, wet and unforgettable evening 和 take a bus to Prague+感悟:Gunter的善意把“我”送到目的地,使在一个寒冷夜晚发生的故事成为“我”温暖而难忘的回忆。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.2 Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. (warm-hearted, kind) Para.3 Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. (标志性笑容) 段一协同描写Gunter接受“我”四天后支付车费的请求 段二协同描写Gunter大大的笑容 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 情节的协同 Para.1 I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. I ran like crazy→时间紧急 段一协同描写“我”不能支付车费的原因和赶车的急迫性 Para.1 The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi ... (见面地点) 段二交代“我”和Gunter在机场见面,并协同the moment时间状语表达法 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 主题的协同 Para.1 I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. (3个形容词描写环境) 段二尾句协同cold (利用warm对比描写), unforgettable (memorable),并协同地点Prague 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.动作链+修饰结构(介词短语/非谓语结构/时间状语从句):双连动作链(原文①②③)、三连动作链(原文④⑤)和时间状语从句(原文⑥)生动呈现人物动作。2.“无灵”主语句(原文⑦)。3.全部倒装句(原文⑧)。4.夸张修辞:like crazy, what seemed like a century。5.地道的具体化动词(短语):fish out, roll into, play along, flash, pop等。6.镜头切换互动交替描写人物互动(原文中已标)。7.简洁的人物对话:直接引语很简洁,大部分为间接引语。 续写第一段(场景1 解释困境　场景2 Gunter应允　场景3 互留电话号码) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 场景2　Gunter应允(肢体动作+神态描写) 1.一阵尴尬的沉默后,他只是点点头,说:“好,我接受这个解决方案,也相信你。”我向他灿烂一笑。 After an uncomfortable pause, he simply nodded, 　　　　, “OK. I accept this solution and trust you.” I 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   场景3　互留电话号码(时间状语从句过渡) 2.我们交换了电话号码后,我上了车,向他挥了挥手。(双连动作链) After we exchanged our phone numbers, I boarded the bus and 　　　　　　　 .   saying flashed him the biggest smile gave a huge wave to him 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 续写第二段(场景4 电话约见　场景5 机场相见　场景6 拒酬约酒) 场景5　机场相见 3.我们一在机场碰面,我就大步走向他,伸出手紧紧地拥抱他。 (三连动作链) The instant we met at the airport, I strode to him, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   reached out and hugged him tightly 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 4.“下次你到维也纳的时候给我打电话,请我喝杯啤酒。”他笑着说。我高兴地点点头。 “Call me and buy me a beer next time you are in Vienna,” __________________________________________________. 吸睛结尾句 主题升华式 he said with a big smile. I happily nodded 场景6　拒酬约酒 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 5.Gunter的善意不仅把我送到了目的地,而且把一个寒冷的夜晚变成了一个温暖且令人难忘的夜晚,我会在未来的岁月中珍惜它。 Gunter’s kindness had not only got me to my destination 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　I would cherish for years to come.  I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. I explained to him the urgency of catching the bus, emphasizing that otherwise I would be forced to stay overnight and buy a new ticket the next morning. He looked at me with concern. I then added I would return to Vienna in 4 days and that I but also turned a cold evening into a warm and memorable one 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 would pay him then with an extra 10. After an uncomfortable pause, he simply nodded, saying, “OK. I accept this solution and trust you.” I flashed him the biggest smile. After we exchanged our phone numbers, I boarded the bus and gave a huge wave to him. Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. Recognizing my voice, he sounded pleasantly surprised. The instant we met at the airport, I strode to him, reached out and hugged him tightly. I handed him the taxi fare and gave him the extra 10 tip I had promised, 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 which he would not accept. “Call me and buy me a beer next time you are in Vienna,” he said with a big smile. I happily nodded. Gunter's kindness had not only got me to my destination but also turned a cold evening into a warm and memorable one I would cherish for years to come. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　降落;着陆　　　　　　　 ②　　　　 掏出,摸出  ③　　　　　　 　　　 　　 向他露出抱歉的微笑 ④　　　　　 配合;假意顺从  touch down fish out flash him an apologetic smile play along 第 ‹#› 页 Week 5　优秀品行&失望尴尬篇 $