Week 4 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦“战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧”主题，以2022新高考Ⅰ卷越野跑比赛续写真题为载体，构建“理6要素—微技能训练—语料积累”的学习支架，涵盖原文分析、情节衔接、伏笔协同及语言表达等续写指导内容。 资料特色突出核心素养培养，通过“321”“CARE”原则训练思维品质，结合双连动作链、“无灵”主语句等语言特点提升语言能力，以David克服恐惧参赛的情节为例，协同原文伏笔（如坚定决心、肢体动作）优化续写细节，助力学生掌握高考续写策略，为教师提供系统教学步骤，适合高三学生备考使用。

Week 4 战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 好题探索　越野跑比赛　(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　 It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.① He was small for ten years old. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 His usual big toothy smile was absent today.⑤ I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.②“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,”he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.” 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 I bit back my frustration (懊恼).④ I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.③ 　　David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. (请参考素材4,素材10,素材12,主题素材2,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 理6要素 ①Who David, I, the school’s coach, classmates ②When the day of the big cross-country run ③Where the route through thick evergreen forest ④What David, who had a brain disease, participated in a cross-country race. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 ⑤Problem 害怕被嘲笑,放弃参赛 ⑥Theme problem→solution:挑战自我、克服恐惧、勇敢 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“David不看我”:David低着头,“我”说了什么? ◆过渡句1　“我”如何安慰并鼓励David?→David是什么反应? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“David和其他选手一起走到起跑线”:David最终决定参赛。 Para. 2　I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“走到起跑线”:比赛开始是什么场面? ◆过渡句2　David在比赛中的表现→同学们加油、喝彩、鼓励→David中途是否遇到困难?克服困难,完成比赛→比赛结果。 ◆结尾+主题　David的比赛感受+升华主题:战胜自己的勇气和决心。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.6 I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 段一添加契合David性格的、表坚定的神态描写 Para.5 his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward 段二可描写David跑步的动作 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 情节的协同 Para.6 He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. 段一可添加对话描写,写“我”鼓励David参赛的理由 Para.1 the route through thick evergreen forest 段二可添加场景描写,写同学们在赛道旁为David加油喝彩的场面 Para.2 His usual big toothy smile was absent today. 段二可添加David“露齿一笑”的描写 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.双连动作链(原文①②)生动描写人物动作。2.独立主格+从句(原文③)描写David的肢体动作。3.简单句(原文④)描写人物情感。4.“无灵”主语句(原文⑤)描写David招牌式的笑容,可协同描写。 续写第一段(场景1 David低头不安　场景2 安慰鼓励David　场景3 David决定参赛) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 场景3　大卫决定参赛 1.大卫很受鼓励,他瞥了一眼赛跑路线,坚定地说:“我要跑。”(形容词作状语+动作链+对话描写) 　　　　, __________________________________________________,  “I will run.” 续写第二段(场景4 David赛道奔跑　场景5 加油中冲线　场景6 互动) Inspired David glanced at the running route and said with determination 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 场景4　大卫赛道奔跑 2.发令枪一响,除了大卫之外,赛跑者们像子弹一样飞奔而去。(明喻) As the starter’s gun sounded, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, except David.   3.其他学校的观众的目光落在了大卫身上。(“无灵”主语句) __________________________________________________ 4.他努力往前跑,小小的身子随着奔跑的节奏摇晃着。 (1)He struggled to run forward, and his small body __________________________________________________. (肢体动作,并列句) runners shot out like bullets The eyes of the audience from other schools fell upon David. rocked with the rhythm of his run 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 (2)He struggled to run forward, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 . (with复合结构)  场景5　加油中冲线 5.最后,尽管大卫是最后一个,但他在热烈的欢呼和掌声中冲过了终点线。(省略句+肢体动作+场景描写) Finally, though the last one, David 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. 吸睛结尾句 主题升华式 with his small body rocking with the rhythm of his run crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 场景6　互动 6.我迎上他的目光,向他竖起大拇指。他咧嘴报以一笑,脸上满是自豪。 I caught his eye and gave him a 　　　 　. He 　　　　back, his face 　　　　with pride.  We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He lowered his head and wriggled his hands. “Do you fear the audience will laugh at you? ” I asked. He nodded with shame and guilt. It suddenly struck me that he was ashamed of his physical condition. I hugged him tightly, “I am always proud of your strong determination. I know you will thumbs⁃up grinned glowing 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 always participate to the best of your ability in whatever you are doing. Just be yourself and you will not be looked down upon.” Shortly afterwards, inspired, David glanced at the running route and said with determination, “I will run.” I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. As the starter's gun sounded, runners shot out like bullets, except David. The eyes of the audience from other schools fell upon David. He struggled to run forward, with his small body rocking with the rhythm of his run. Classmates all appeared on the racing route, cheering for him enthusiastically, “Come on, 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 David!” Finally, though the last one, David crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause. I caught his eye and gave him a thumbs-up. He grinned back, his face glowing with pride. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 左右摇晃　　　 ②swing one’s feet forward 双脚向前摆动  ③to the best of one’s ability 竭尽全力 ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　 我强忍住懊恼。  rock from side to side I bit back my frustration. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 4　战胜挑战/歧视等&恐惧篇 $