Week 3 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“个人成长 & 焦虑紧张”主题展开续写微技能训练。包含阅读材料分析、续写任务解析、微技能分解（如理情线、思情节“321”原则）、伏笔协同表格及场景描写示例等学习支架。 资料特色显著，融合核心素养。通过“无灵”主语句、动作描写等语言特点指导提升语言能力，用“CARE”原则培养逻辑思维与情节构思的思维品质，结合自然治愈与家庭关爱主题渗透文化意识，提供可迁移的续写策略助力学习能力发展。具体如伏笔协同表格细化原文线索，场景描写模板直观示范，能有效提升学生续写得分，为教师教学提供系统指导。适合高三学生针对升学考试强化续写技能，帮助其掌握高分策略。

Week 3 个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 好题探索　在阳光下重生的抑郁心灵 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 阅读下面的节选部分(选自牛津英语6 《雾都孤儿》),学习仿效文中利用(肢体)动作、神态、语言等描写表现人物的担心的手法。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 Have you ever been so depressed that you can’t sleep?④ You also can’t eat.⑤ You can’t read.⑥ You have no friends to call up and nothing is good on TV. So you sigh, press your face down harder into your pillow, and shed a few tears. This was my life two years ago. I had just turned 14 but already found life a struggle. As I lay in my bed one Saturday, Mom peeked (瞄) into my room to make her regular“Is Emily still alive”check.① I knew that if I spent more time like this, she would begin dusting me. After suggesting a few things for me to do that I immediately rejected, Mom made her move, 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 “Emily! Get dressed! I’m taking the dog out for a walk, and you’re coming with me!”“Why?”I protested.“Because it’ll make you feel better.” The thought of moving was unbearable.③ I felt as if all of my body parts were weighed down by tons of bricks. I couldn’t remember the last time I had gone outside.⑦ Somehow I found the strength to slip on a pair of jeans and a black sweatshirt. Mom was waiting at the door, leash (狗绳) in hand and dog at her side.② →“我”抑郁的具体表现,可以协同到续写部分,写“我”的情况如何改善 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 Then, we stepped outside. It was a warm March day and it had been a long time since the warmth of the sun had touched my cheeks.⑨ Mom led the dog and me down some dirt paths, through a big field and reached Halsey Pond. But the signs of spring had yet to appear and the scene was rather colorless throughout the entire journey.→春天象征着蓬勃的生命力,此时出门,看春意未浓,预示续写春意会更浓　　 “I’m tired! It’s boring, Mom! When can we go home?”“Not yet,”she’d say. Mom stopped to say hi to every jogger, dog walker, runner, and bicyclist who passed us. Sometimes she would get into a conversation. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 They would talk about weather, dogs, and all small talk topics. She seemed happy, and was literally glowing (容光焕发). After walking for what seemed an age, Mom finally said it was time to go back.⑧ 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. (请参考素材3,素材10,素材13,主题素材2,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 理6要素 ①Who I, Mom ②When two years ago ③Where home→outside 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 ④What I regained new enthusiasm for life as I felt the warmth of the spring sun. ⑤Problem 抑郁 ⑥Theme 希望与改变,通过自然的治愈力量和运动的力量,走出抑郁和绝望,找到新的希望和活力,家人的关爱助力走出困境 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“一种新的感觉似乎被唤醒了”,是什么样的new feeling:对妈妈遛狗社交的看法;“我”内心的变化,对自己的生活有了一点期待(心中的砖头落地)。 ◆过渡句1　这种新的感觉是什么?感受到一丝新的希望和活力或睡得好、吃饭香了,有兴趣做事情了。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“我问妈妈我能不能带狗出去”:感觉到外面的温暖并意识到自己应该多出去走走。 Para. 2　A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“我问妈妈我能不能带狗出去”:妈妈的回复(有些惊喜,并且问要不要和“我”一起出去)或“我”在得到妈妈的同意后出门遛狗。 ◆过渡句2　注意到春意更浓,外在自然环境发生变化,“我”内在的情绪也在发生积极的变化。 ◆结尾+主题　(协同原文第一段)开始一点点恢复内心的平静,逐渐走出抑郁的困境+感悟新生。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.1 Have you ever been so depressed that you can’t sleep? You also can’t eat. You can’t read. Para.2 found life a struggle Para.3 The thought of moving was unbearable. →睡不着、吃饭不香、注意力不集中,生活无趣,内心孤独空虚 在户外找到乐趣,建立与大自然的联系,从而建立与人的联系,睡得香、吃得香 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇  人设的协同     Para.2 Mom made her move,“Emily! Get dressed! I’m taking the dog out for a walk, and you’re coming with me!”妈妈用温和的方式劝“我”出去散步 Para.5 Sometimes she would get into a conversation. They would talk about ... She seemed happy, ...有活力,阳光 阳光、充满正能量的妈妈引导“我”从忧郁变得阳光 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 情节的协同 Para.4 It was a warm March day and it had been a long time since the warmth of the sun had touched my cheeks. 段一协同描写新的感觉(阳光的温暖,妈妈与路人友好交谈的声音) Para.4 But the signs of spring had yet to appear and the scene was rather colorless throughout the entire journey. Para.5 Mom stopped to say hi to every jogger, dog walker, runner, and bicyclist who passed us. 段二可描写看到春意盎然,问候路人,聆听鸟鸣 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 Para.2“Emily! Get dressed! I’m taking the dog out for a walk, and you’re coming with me!”“Because it’ll make you feel better.” 段一协同描写这次散步带来了久违的平静,“我”的心情变得轻松愉快 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 物的协同 dirt paths, a big field, Halsey Pond 池塘景色的细化描写,走过的田野 主题的协同 The thought of moving was unbearable. 段二尾句:即使小的移动(moving)也能照亮生活/带来大改变 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.动作谓语+修饰语:修饰动作时,用非谓语、独立主格结构和时间状语从句(原文①②),使动作描写更生动。2.“无灵”主语句描写人物情感(原文③)。3.修辞手法:如排比(原文④⑤⑥)、夸张(原文⑦⑧)、拟人(原文⑨)。4.简短对话:如原文第二段和第五段中对人物对话的描写。 续写第一段(场景1 压抑稍减　场景2 不断回忆　场景3 户外生机带来希望) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 场景1　压抑稍减 1.之前压在我身上的沉重感似乎减轻了,哪怕只是一点点。 The heaviness that 　　　　　 　before seemed to have lifted, if only slightly.   had weighed me down 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 场景2　不断回忆 2.在接下来的几天里,妈妈的闲聊、狗欢快的奔跑和每个人容光焕发的脸不断地在我脑海中闪现。(“无灵”主语句) For the next few days, scenes of my mother’s small talks, the dog’s cheerful running and everyone’s glowing face 　　　　　　　　 .  constantly flashed through my mind 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 场景3　户外生机带来希望(描写自然环境) 3.在户外,感受温暖的阳光,聆听鸟儿的鸣叫,这些简单的行为激发了我内心的激情。 (分词短语作状语) The simple act of being outside, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, and hearing the chirping of birds sparked something inside me.   4.这是一丝希望,是我抑郁的黑暗中的一丝微光。我意识到,也许还有值得我为之而活的东西。 It was 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　in the darkness of my depression. I realized that maybe there was still something worth living for.  续写第二段(场景4 沿途所见春景　场景5 内心新生　场景6 感悟新生) feeling the warmth of the sun a glimmer of hope, a tiny ray of light 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 22 场景4　沿途所见春景 5.当我们漫步在熟悉的小路上时,我注意到景色的微妙变化。树木开始发芽,花朵开始绽放,池塘里充满了青蛙和昆虫的声音。(排比) As we strolled through the familiar paths, I noticed the subtle changes in the scenery. The trees were starting to bud, 　　　　　　　 　　　　　, and the pond was alive with the sounds of frogs and insects.   flowers were beginning to bloom 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 场景5　内心新生 6.就好像大自然本身活过来了,反映出我内心涌动的新生。每走一步,我都觉得更轻松了一点,更有活力了一点。(分词短语作状语+排比) It was as if nature itself was coming alive, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　stirring within me. With each step, I felt a little lighter, 　　　　　　　　.   吸睛结尾句 mirroring the newfound sense of life; a little more alive 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 场景6　感悟新生 7.那时我确切意识到大自然给我带来了某种变化,就像春天的到来一样确定无疑。 It was then that I knew for sure nature had 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, as certain as the arrival of spring.  8.当我们回到家时,我意识到,有时候,最平凡的时刻会对我们的生活产生最深远的影响。 And as we returned home, I realized that sometimes, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　.   brought a certain change to me the simplest moments can have the most profound impact on our lives 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 25 When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. The heaviness that had weighed me down before seemed to have lifted, if only slightly. For the next few days, scenes of my mother's small talks, the dog's cheerful running and everyone's glowing face constantly flashed through my mind. The simple act of being outside, feeling the warmth of the sun, and hearing the chirping of birds sparked something inside me. It was a glimmer of hope, a tiny ray of light in the darkness of my depression. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 I realized that maybe there was still something worth living for. A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. This time, it was I who suggested the walk. As we strolled through the familiar paths, I noticed the subtle changes in the scenery. The trees were starting to bud, flowers were beginning to bloom, and the pond was alive with the sounds of frogs and insects. It was as if nature itself was coming alive, mirroring the newfound sense of life stirring within me. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 With each step, I felt a little lighter, a little more alive. And as we returned home, I realized that sometimes, the simplest moments can have the most profound impact on our lives. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　 　　 　　 把脸更用力地压在枕头上 ②　　　　　　　　　　　 流下几滴泪  ③　　　　　　　　　　　 偷看,窥视 ④　　　　　　　　　　　 迅速穿上  ⑤　　　　　　　　　　　 压得……难以移动;压弯 ⑥　　　　　　　　　　　 找到做某事的力量  ⑦It was a warm March day and __________________________________________________. 温暖的三月天,温暖的阳光很久没抚摸过我的脸了。 press one’s face down harder into one’s pillow shed a few tears peek into slip on weigh ... down find the strength to do sth.　 it had been a long time since the warmth of the sun had touched my cheeks 第 ‹#› 页 Week 3　个人成长&焦虑紧张篇 29 $