Week 1 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕Week 1“比赛表演 & 高兴篇”展开，以2023新高考Ⅰ卷作文比赛为载体，提供“好题探索”“续写微技能”“情节分析”“范例展示”及语料积累等学习支架，助力学生掌握续写技巧。 资料特色显著，创新分解续写微技能，如“321”原则和CARE原则，通过伏笔协同表格、语言特点分析（短句、重复手法）培养学生语言能力与思维品质，结合“Paul Revere’s horse”视角写作等实例，提升学习能力。能帮助高三学生应对升学考试，为教师提供系统教学策略。

Week 1 比赛表演&高兴篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 好题探索　作文比赛　(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 第一段很重要,暗含重要线索 　　When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 Mary skipped all the way to the secret garden wall. And there was the robin (知更鸟)! He had followed her! Mary was very pleased.① “You showed me where the key was yesterday,”she laughed.②“I’ve got it in my pocket. So you ought to show me the door today!” The robin hopped on to an old climbing plant on the wall, and sang his most beautiful song.③ Suddenly the wind made the plant move, and Mary saw something under the dark green leaves. The thick, heavy plant was covering a door. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did. →不爱写作,语言不通,拒绝参赛 (思考:把要写的内容演出来;“我”的性格, Titanic的协同?) So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply:“Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. →态度过渡:勉强答应参赛(思考:老师喜欢“我”的作品?是因为什么?其他人是否喜欢?) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 选定Paul Revere’s horse为视角写作(思考:马的目的地Lexington是否可暗喻为“我”比赛的终点) 　　I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice. (评价性形容词,用对比强调反差和创意的独特) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them. →“我”沉迷写“马”,与它共情(“我”就如这匹马,疲惫、自我怀疑,却不断前行) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said,“Great. Now, write it again.”I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care. →态度反转, painful→enjoyable,以写为乐, 不在乎比赛结果(思考:真的不在乎吗?) 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. (请参考素材1,素材12,主题素材6,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 理6要素 ①Who I, my social studies teacher ②When When I was in middle school ③Where in middle school 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 ④What Though coming from Brazil, I entered a writing contest and applied myself to writing. ⑤Problem 如何克服自我怀疑,付诸努力,获得写作的乐趣 ⑥Theme 努力、持之以恒、克服困难可协同的“重复”的写作手法 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“the news”:是否有参加颁奖典礼的消息(协同第二段首句中的“the award presentation”)? ◆过渡句1　“我”是什么反应?老师和同学们是什么反应?→如需发言,如何准备获奖感言?“我”发言时是否会提到“马”的写作创意?→同学们是什么反应?老师是什么反应?颁奖人如何夸赞“我”的写作创意?“我”是什么反应?“我”想到了什么?(反复塑造“马”的日子) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation”:是否看到老师参加颁奖典礼?为什么打算去老师办公室? Para. 2　I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“来到老师的办公室”:“我”进老师办公室前听到了什么?(是笑声?或是朗读“我”的作品的声音?) ◆过渡句2　和老师的互动:老师看到“我”的奖杯是什么反应?→老师说了什么?→“我”是什么反应?“我”说了什么?“我”的感受是什么? 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 ◆结尾+主题　与原文首段中的“I did not love writing”形成闭环:“我”由不喜欢写作到热爱写作的历程,犹如奔马坚持前行(升华主旨);协同原文中的Lexington, 以暗喻写开始(embark on)下一段奔向“列克星顿”的写作之旅(高级升华)。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 人设的协同 Para.1 My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language.→“我”的人设 段一可协同描写“我”是唯一一个母语不是英语的获奖者;或“我”用略带巴西口音的英语(a slight Brazilian accent)发表获奖感言,获得全场的掌声 Para.1 No one laughed harder than he did. Para.5 he read it, laughed out loud, and said→老师的人设:大笑;语言的协同 段一可协同描写老师听“我”发表获奖感言时或得知“我”获奖后的反应(none laughed harder than he did) 段二可协同描写他的大笑(be greeted with his loud laughter/he laughed even harder) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 情节的协同 Para.2 “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. Para.5 Great. Now, write it again.→老师的鼓励、鞭策 段二可描写老师说“我”的作品受大家的喜爱;“我”感激老师激励“我”参加写作比赛和对“我”的不断鼓励;老师再次鼓励“我”继续写作 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇  情节的协同 Para.5 the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing→态度的转变,“无灵”主语句 段二可描写“我”告诉老师“我”爱上了写作: my previous dislike for writing gave way to a strong passion for keeping writing 物的协同 “我”参赛作品中的“马” 段一可描写“我”想起努力创作“马”的那些日子 段二尾句可描写“我”化身为“马”,踏上新的“列克星顿”之旅 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.大量短句。如原文第四段用4个问句询问马的感受, 继而用比喻回答设问,描写“我”与马的状态相似:有过疲惫、疑虑和想要放弃的时候;接着继续利用短句描写具体细节: worked, checked, correct, read。2.重复手法。如原文第五段通过 “wrote it again, and again and again”强调“我”不断地重复写作的过程,增加了文章的节奏感。3.强调反差。如原文第三段中的“Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.”,“Not a brilliant idea, but funny”形成对比,说明创意很有趣,继而用unlikely强调创意的独特。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 续写第一段(主要情节:得知获奖　场景1 收到获奖消息　场景2 既惊且喜　场景3 领奖) 场景2　既惊且喜(个人的反应,他人的反应) 1.我既震惊又欣喜,红着脸,听到老师骄傲的大笑声和同学们雷鸣般的掌声。 Half stunned and half overjoyed, I, flushed, was greeted by 　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　.   场景3　领奖(肢体动作、心理描写) my teacher’s proud laughter and my classmates’ thunderous applause 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 2.当我在台上拿着奖杯和其他获奖者并肩而立时,我的思绪回到了我专心创作“里维尔的马”的那些日子,那些完全沉浸于写作的纯粹乐趣中的日子。 As I was standing onstage holding my trophy among fellow prize winners, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 when I applied myself to creating Revere’s horse, the days of fully immersing myself in the pure joy of writing.   my mind travelled back to the days 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 续写第二段(场景4 老师高兴　场景5 感谢老师、老师回应　场景6 老师鼓励、升华) 场景4　老师高兴(动作、神态描写,协同原文的老师标志性的laughed) 3.他端详着我的奖杯和证书,笑得更欢了,对我竖起大拇指:“棒!” Admiring my trophy and certificate, he 　　　　　　　　　　　　and gave me a thumbs-up, “Brilliant!”   场景5　感谢老师、老师回应(协同原文第二段) laughed even harder 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 4.我哽咽着说我很感激他鼓励我参加比赛。 I 　　　　that I owed him much for pushing me to enter the contest.   吸睛结尾句 总结式 5.我咧嘴笑了,发现我以前对写作的厌恶消失了,新生活的篇章正在我面前展开。 Grinning, I found my previous dislike for writing 　　　　　　　, and that a 　　　　　　　　　　was unfolding before me.  choked had faded chapter of a new life 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 6.我的思绪回到了我全身心创作“里维尔的马”的日子,回到了我老师的办公室,那里仿佛承载着激励的低语。 My mind travelled back to the days when I 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, to my teacher’s office seemingly holding the whispers of inspiration.  画面定格式 applied myself to creating Revere’s horse 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 7.我环顾了一下这个办公室,这是一个让我成长和转变的地方,我的作家之旅开始的地方。 I looked around the office, a place of growth and transformation, ________________________________________. where my journey as a writer had begun 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I won first prize! And I was the only winner whose mother tongue wasn't English! Half stunned and half overjoyed, I, flushed, was greeted by teacher's proud laughter and my classmates' thunderous applause. Later at the award presentation, I stood onstage holding my trophy and certificate, my heart hammering hard. My mind travelled back to the days when I applied myself to creating Paul Revere's horse, to my teacher's office seemingly holding the whispers of inspiration. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 Admiring my trophy and certificate, he laughed even harder and gave me a thumbs-up, “Brilliant!See? People love your story as I do.”I choked that I owed him much for pushing me to enter the contest. He replied, “You owe me nothing. You have applied yourself and you have done it.”He added quickly, “Just keep writing.”I nodded. And nodded. I found myself becoming Paul Revere's horse again, tired yet always persistent, speeding for a whole new journey to my next “Lexington”. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　 努力;专心致志　　　　　 ②　　　　　　　　　 尝试……  ③　　　　　　　　　 查看;观察 ④　　　　　　　　　 大笑  ⑤When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. (“无灵”主语句)  当我写完时,获胜的想法已被写作带来的快乐所取代。 apply oneself have a shot at check out laugh out loud given way to the enjoyment of writing 第 ‹#› 页 Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 $