八下 Unit12 单元作文训练-【趣味课堂】英语新教材仁爱科普版八年级下册.docx

**基本信息** 以“介绍最喜欢的故事角色”为核心，构建“写前准备-写作过程-技巧提升-典例迁移”的系统性写作方法体系，强化语言能力与思维品质。 **专项设计** |模块|题量/典例|方法提炼|知识逻辑| |----|-----------|----------|----------| |写前准备|孙悟空示例|明确任务与细节梳理|角色要素（出处/性格/行为）的概念生成| |写作过程|汤姆·索亚提纲与范文|审题-提纲-拟稿三步骤|写作结构（开头-主体-结尾）的逻辑推导| |技巧提升|3项核心技巧（具体事例/逻辑连贯/避免重复）|实用写作技巧|从具体角色到通用框架的应用拓展| |典例指导|哪吒思路导引与词句积累|角色介绍框架迁移|从词到句到篇的语言能力进阶|

新仁爱版八下 Unit 12 The Wonderland of Literature 单元作文训练 Reading for Writing My favorite story character Activity 3 Draw a chart about your favorite story character, and then draft your essay. The phrases and sentence patterns may help you. Useful phrase Useful sentence pattern change into... be afraid of... come up with ideas deal with... My favorite story character is... I like... for many reasons. He is also... Maybe few people realize that... In a word, ... 一、Pre - writing（写前准备） 明确任务：围绕“介绍你最喜欢的故事角色”展开写作，内容包括： - 你最喜欢的角色是谁？他/她出自哪部作品？ - 他/她有什么样的性格特点？（如勇敢、聪明、诚实等） - 他/她能做什么？有哪些具体的行为或事迹？ - 你为什么喜欢他/她？ 细节梳理：写作前思考并明确三个核心问题： 1. 我最喜欢哪个故事角色？他/她出自哪本书或哪部作品？ 2. 这个角色有哪些吸引我的性格特点？ 3. 他/她做了哪些事情来体现这些特点？ 示例（以孙悟空为例） 角色 Sun Wukong (the Monkey King) 作品出处 Journey to the West 角色行为 can change into 72 forms; has a golden hoop; fights monsters; protects his master 性格特点 magical, brave, smart, honest 喜欢原因 He never tells lies and always protects his friends. 二、While - writing（写作过程） Step 1：审题 · 主题：我最喜欢的故事角色 · 时态：一般现在时（描述角色性格、事实、作品） & 一般过去时（讲述书中发生的故事举例） · 人称：第三人称（He / him / his）及第一人称（I / my） · 要点布局： 4. 开头：介绍角色及出处。 4. 主体：描述角色的性格特点，并用书中的具体事例支撑。 4. 结尾：总结评价，表达对角色的喜爱之情。 Step 2：列提纲 · Beginning（开头）My favorite story character is Tom Sawyer from Mark Twain’s famous book. I like him for many reasons. · Body（主体）： - Reason 1 – clever: Turns boring work into fun games; loves to come up with ideas to play tricks. - Reason 2 – brave & kind: Saves his friend Becky from a dark cave; often helps others with their problems. - Extra point – loves adventure: Runs away to an island with his friend Huck Finn. · End（结尾）：In a word, Tom is creative, brave, and kind. That is why he is my favorite story character. Step 3：拟稿 依据提纲，填充内容。 写开头段 (Introduction) - 1 min • 核心任务：交代最喜欢的角色名字及出自哪本书。 • 模板句型： - My favorite story character is ________ from ________. - I like him/her for many reasons. 开头段示范： My favorite story character is Tom Sawyer from Mark Twain’s famous book. I like him for many reasons. 写中间段 (Body) - 5 mins • 核心任务: 描述该角色的性格特点，并用书中的具体例子支撑。 • 模板句型： - ______ is a ______ boy/girl who ______. - He/She is also ______. For example, he/she ______. - Maybe few people realize that he/she ______. 中间段示范： Tom Sawyer is a clever boy who can change boring work into fun games and loves to come up with ideas to play tricks. He is brave and never afraid of trouble. For example, he saves his friend Becky from a dark cave. He is also very kind. He often helps others with their problems. Maybe few people realize that Tom loves adventure. He once runs away to an island with his friend Huck Finn, showing us that life is full of excitement. 写结尾段 (Conclusion) - 2 mins • 核心任务：总结角色的核心性格，再次点明为什么喜欢他/她。 • 模板句型： - In a word, ______ is ______, ______, and ______. - That is why he/she is my favorite story character. 结尾段示范： In a word, Tom is creative, brave, and kind. That is why he is my favorite story character. Step 4：（示例） My Favorite Story Character My favorite story character is Tom Sawyer from Mark Twain's famous book. I like him for many reasons. Tom Sawyer is a clever boy who can change boring work into fun games and loves to come up with ideas to play tricks. He is brave and never afraid of trouble. For example, he saves his friend Becky from a dark cave. He is also very kind. He often helps others with their problems. Maybe few people realize that Tom loves adventure. He once runs away to an island with his friend Huck Finn, showing us that life is full of excitement. In a word, Tom is creative, brave, and kind. That is why he is my favorite story character. 三、Post - writing（写后完善） 1. 评价标准（满分 15 分） 内容（6 分）： -- 6-5分：完整涵盖角色、出处、性格、行为、感受，内容详细贴合主题。 - 4-3分：包含主要要点，但细节欠缺。 - 2-0分：要点缺失多，偏离主题。 语言（5 分）： - 5-4分：语法正确，词汇短语运用恰当，句子多样，表达流畅。 - 3-2分：少量语法错误，句子结构较单一。 - 1-0分：语法错误多，句子混乱。 结构（2 分）： - 2-1.5分：开头结尾合理，主体层次清晰，过渡自然。 - 1.4-1分：结构基本完整，但衔接生硬。 - 0.9-0分：结构混乱。 书写（2 分）： - 2-1.5分：书写工整，卷面整洁。 - 1.4-1分：书写较工整，少量涂改。 - 0.9-0分：书写潦草，难以辨认。 2. 作文打分示例（以文中最终稿为例 ） - 内容：完整涵盖角色、出处、性格、行为、感悟，得6分。 - 语言：语法正确，运用丰富短语句式，得5分。 - 结构：开头点题，主体分明，结尾有力，得2分。 - 书写：假设工整整洁，得2分。 单元作文・写作方法指导 —— 如何介绍你最喜欢的某一故事中的角色 1. 构建写作框架 结合以读促写部分的范文，剖析文章写作框架。 - 开头段（身份定位）：介绍角色 + 作品出处 + 文学地位 - Sun Wukong → Journey to the West → one of the Four Classical Novels of Chinese literature - 主体段（特征 + 行为支撑）：喜欢的原因 - I like him because... - 结构：人物 + 行为支撑 → 人物特征 + 独特之处 - Sun Wukong → change into anything → magical - He is also.../Maybe few people realize that.... - 结尾段（评价升华）：大众认可度 + 个人情感联结 - In a word, Sun Wukong is a popular hero. He will always hold a special place in my heart as... 2. 技巧提升 1) 用具体事例支撑观点，避免空泛描述。 - Sun Wukong fought the enemies alone to protect his master. It shows his bravery. 2) 逻辑连贯，灵活运用连接词和过渡语。 - 表顺序：first, besides, finally - 表因果：because, as a result, since, for, therefore, so - 表转折：although, however, but, while, yet, though 3) 避免重复，可用相似意义的词进行替换。 - like → admire/enjoy - good → brave/clever/honest 3. 迁移练习 1) 绘制人物性格或特征图表。 2) 写作（巩固框架）。 - My favorite character is ______ in ______. He/She is ______ (trait). For example, ______ (action). I like him/her because ______. 4. 检查语法和拼写 在完成草稿后，仔细检查语法和拼写错误，确保文章流畅无误。 小结 1. 了解了国内外著名的作家及其作品； 2. 学习了如何绘制“我最喜欢的故事角色”人物特征图表，并依据图表写一篇英语作文。 写作典例指导 以“My Favorite Story Character”为例 请根据以下提示，写一篇短文介绍你最喜欢的故事角色。 1. 点明你最喜欢的故事人物是谁； 2. 说明他/她的性格 (brave, smart, honest, kind...)； 3. 介绍他/她能做什么； 4. 说明你喜欢他/她的原因。 要求：语句通顺，语法正确，词数60-80词左右。 My Favorite Story Character _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 审主题：My Favorite Story Character 审体裁：说明文/记叙文 审时态：一般现在时为主，一般过去时为辅 审人称：第一人称 I / my, 第三人称 he / him 思路导引 段落 内容规划 示例表述方向 开头 介绍最喜欢的角色及出处 My favorite story character is Ne Zha, a well-known hero from Chinese traditional stories. 中间 1. 性格特点 He is a brave and smart boy. He is also kind to the weak. 2. 能力与事迹 He has great power and can control fire and wind freely. He always tries his best to protect them. 3. 面对困难的态度 Even when people misunderstand him and say bad things about him, he never gives up. 结尾 喜欢的原因与感悟 I like him because he teaches me to be brave and never give up when facing difficulties. 词句积累 词汇 性格：brave, smart, honest, kind, determined, magical 能力：change into, fight against, protect, control 感受：like, admire, enjoy, teach, inspire 句子 ・开头句：My favorite story character is... / Let me tell you about... ・中间句：He/She can... / He/She is brave because... ・结尾句：I like him/her because... / He/She teaches me that... 佳作展示 My Favorite Story Character My favorite story character is Ne Zha from traditional Chinese mythology. I like him for many reasons. Ne Zha is a brave boy who never fears powerful enemies. For example, he fights bravely against the Dragon King to protect the people in his hometown. He is also very smart and always finds ways to solve problems. Besides, he has great magical power. He can control fire and wind freely, and he rides on his famous Wind Fire Wheels. Maybe few people realize that Ne Zha has a strong will. He never gives up, even when others misunderstand him or say bad things about him. He once chose to face death alone to save his family, showing us what true responsibility means. In a word, I like him because he teaches me to be brave and never give up when facing difficulties. 名师点评 - 结构清晰：文章按照“开头介绍角色 → 中间描述性格和事迹 → 结尾表达喜欢原因”的顺序展开，逻辑性强，层次分明。 - 内容充实：完整涵盖了题目要求的要点（角色名称、性格、能力、喜欢原因），并使用了“control fire and wind”等词进行合理拓展。 - 语言表达： - 时态运用准确：一般现在时为主，运用得当。 - 句式丰富：运用了让步状语从句“Even when...”。 - 亮点词汇：运用了“well-known hero”“protect them”“never gives up”“teaches me to be brave”等亮点短语，提升了文章档次。 写作训练（以“The Book That Impresses Me Most”为例） 题目：The Book That Impresses Me Most 写作要求： 1. 以The Old Man and the Sea为主题，介绍这本书给你的印象。 2. 文中必须正确使用-ed形容词和 -ing形容词，如：surprised, touched, excited, exciting, inspiring等。 3. 必须至少使用3个宾语从句，如：I think that... /I believe that... /I hope that... 等。 4. 语句通顺，语法正确，篇幅在60--80词左右。 5. 内容要点： （1）点明你最喜欢的书是《老人与海》 （2）简单介绍书中老人的故事 （3）谈谈你从书中学到的道理 （4）写出你的感受 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、话题词汇储备 - -ed/-ing形容词类：surprised, surprised, touched, excited, exciting, inspired, inspiring, interested, interesting - 故事元素类：old fisherman, go fishing, catch nothing, fight with, give up, strong spirit - 感悟类：teach me that, realize that, hope that, be brave, be strong 二、佳句仿写 1. 【原句参考】I think that it is one of the greatest stories. → 仿写：我相信这本书能激励每一个人。 I believe that this book can inspire everyone. 2. 【原句参考】 I feel touched by his strong spirit. → 仿写：我对老人的永不放弃感到惊讶。 I feel surprised at the old man’s never giving up. 3. 【原句参考】 I feel surprised at the old man’s never giving up. → 仿写：我希望我能像他一样坚强。 I hope that I can be as strong as him. 三、完整范文（示例 ） The Book That Impresses Me Most My favorite book is The Old Man and the Sea. I think that it is one of the most inspiring stories. The main character, Santiago, is an old fisherman. He goes fishing alone for many days without catching a single fish, but he never loses hope. One day, he fights an epic battle with a giant marlin. He is exhausted and in pain, yet his spirit remains unshaken. I feel truly touched by his courage. This book teaches us that a man can be lonely, tired, and even beaten, but he can still choose to be brave. This book is inspiring. I realize that we should be strong when we meet trouble. I hope that I can be as brave as the old man. 四、名师点评 1. 结构清晰：文章按照“开头点明书籍 → 主体简述故事和人物精神 → 结尾升华感悟”的顺序展开，要点齐全，条理清晰。 1. 内容充实：准确涵盖了题目所给的要点（最喜欢的书、故事介绍、学到的道理、个人感受），并使用了“fights with a big fish”“never gives up”等细节进行充实。 1. 语言表达： - 语法要求完成度高：正确使用了“touched”“inspiring”等-ed/-ing形容词；准确使用了“I think that...”“He teaches us that...”“I realize that...”“I hope that...”等多个宾语从句。 - 句式丰富：运用了转折连词“but”和时间状语“when”。 - 亮点词汇：运用了“main character”“strong spirit”“in difficult situations”“meet trouble”等亮点短语，提升了文章档次。 1 / 14 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 新仁爱版八下 Unit 12 The Wonderland of Literature 单元作文训练 Reading for Writing My favorite story character Activity 3 Draw a chart about your favorite story character, and then draft your essay. The phrases and sentence patterns may help you. Useful phrase Useful sentence pattern change into... be afraid of... come up with ideas deal with... My favorite story character is... I like... for many reasons. He is also... Maybe few people realize that... In a word, ... 一、Pre - writing（写前准备） 明确任务：围绕“介绍你最喜欢的故事角色”展开写作，内容包括： - 你最喜欢的角色是谁？他/她出自哪部作品？ - 他/她有什么样的性格特点？（如勇敢、聪明、诚实等） - 他/她能做什么？有哪些具体的行为或事迹？ - 你为什么喜欢他/她？ 细节梳理：写作前思考并明确三个核心问题： 1. 我最喜欢哪个故事角色？他/她出自哪本书或哪部作品？ 2. 这个角色有哪些吸引我的性格特点？ 3. 他/她做了哪些事情来体现这些特点？ 示例（以孙悟空为例） 角色 Sun Wukong (the Monkey King) 作品出处 Journey to the West 角色行为 can change into 72 forms; has a golden hoop; fights monsters; protects his master 性格特点 magical, brave, smart, honest 喜欢原因 He never tells lies and always protects his friends. 二、While - writing（写作过程） Step 1：审题 · 主题：我最喜欢的故事角色 · 时态：一般现在时（描述角色性格、事实、作品） & 一般过去时（讲述书中发生的故事举例） · 人称：第三人称（He / him / his）及第一人称（I / my） · 要点布局： 4. 开头：介绍角色及出处。 4. 主体：描述角色的性格特点，并用书中的具体事例支撑。 4. 结尾：总结评价，表达对角色的喜爱之情。 Step 2：列提纲 · Beginning（开头）My favorite story character is Tom Sawyer from Mark Twain’s famous book. I like him for many reasons. · Body（主体）： - Reason 1 – clever: Turns boring work into fun games; loves to come up with ideas to play tricks. - Reason 2 – brave & kind: Saves his friend Becky from a dark cave; often helps others with their problems. - Extra point – loves adventure: Runs away to an island with his friend Huck Finn. · End（结尾）：In a word, Tom is creative, brave, and kind. That is why he is my favorite story character. Step 3：拟稿 依据提纲，填充内容。 写开头段 (Introduction) - 1 min • 核心任务：交代最喜欢的角色名字及出自哪本书。 • 模板句型： - My favorite story character is ________ from ________. - I like him/her for many reasons. 开头段示范： My favorite story character is Tom Sawyer from Mark Twain’s famous book. I like him for many reasons. 写中间段 (Body) - 5 mins • 核心任务: 描述该角色的性格特点，并用书中的具体例子支撑。 • 模板句型： - ______ is a ______ boy/girl who ______. - He/She is also ______. For example, he/she ______. - Maybe few people realize that he/she ______. 中间段示范： Tom Sawyer is a clever boy who can change boring work into fun games and loves to come up with ideas to play tricks. He is brave and never afraid of trouble. For example, he saves his friend Becky from a dark cave. He is also very kind. He often helps others with their problems. Maybe few people realize that Tom loves adventure. He once runs away to an island with his friend Huck Finn, showing us that life is full of excitement. 写结尾段 (Conclusion) - 2 mins • 核心任务：总结角色的核心性格，再次点明为什么喜欢他/她。 • 模板句型： - In a word, ______ is ______, ______, and ______. - That is why he/she is my favorite story character. 结尾段示范： In a word, Tom is creative, brave, and kind. That is why he is my favorite story character. Step 4：（示例） My Favorite Story Character ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 单元作文・写作方法指导 —— 如何介绍你最喜欢的某一故事中的角色 1. 构建写作框架 结合以读促写部分的范文，剖析文章写作框架。 - 开头段（身份定位）：介绍角色 + 作品出处 + 文学地位 - Sun Wukong → Journey to the West → one of the Four Classical Novels of Chinese literature - 主体段（特征 + 行为支撑）：喜欢的原因 - I like him because... - 结构：人物 + 行为支撑 → 人物特征 + 独特之处 - Sun Wukong → change into anything → magical - He is also.../Maybe few people realize that.... - 结尾段（评价升华）：大众认可度 + 个人情感联结 - In a word, Sun Wukong is a popular hero. He will always hold a special place in my heart as... 2. 技巧提升 1) 用具体事例支撑观点，避免空泛描述。 - Sun Wukong fought the enemies alone to protect his master. It shows his bravery. 2) 逻辑连贯，灵活运用连接词和过渡语。 - 表顺序：first, besides, finally - 表因果：because, as a result, since, for, therefore, so - 表转折：although, however, but, while, yet, though 3) 避免重复，可用相似意义的词进行替换。 - like → admire/enjoy - good → brave/clever/honest 3. 迁移练习 1) 绘制人物性格或特征图表。 2) 写作（巩固框架）。 - My favorite character is ______ in ______. He/She is ______ (trait). For example, ______ (action). I like him/her because ______. 4. 检查语法和拼写 在完成草稿后，仔细检查语法和拼写错误，确保文章流畅无误。 小结 1. 了解了国内外著名的作家及其作品； 2. 学习了如何绘制“我最喜欢的故事角色”人物特征图表，并依据图表写一篇英语作文。 写作典例指导 以“My Favorite Story Character”为例 请根据以下提示，写一篇短文介绍你最喜欢的故事角色。 1. 点明你最喜欢的故事人物是谁； 2. 说明他/她的性格 (brave, smart, honest, kind...)； 3. 介绍他/她能做什么； 4. 说明你喜欢他/她的原因。 要求：语句通顺，语法正确，词数60-80词左右。 My Favorite Story Character _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 审主题：My Favorite Story Character 审体裁：说明文/记叙文 审时态：一般现在时为主，一般过去时为辅 审人称：第一人称 I / my, 第三人称 he / him 思路导引 段落 内容规划 示例表述方向 开头 介绍最喜欢的角色及出处 My favorite story character is Ne Zha, a well-known hero from Chinese traditional stories. 中间 1. 性格特点 He is a brave and smart boy. He is also kind to the weak. 2. 能力与事迹 He has great power and can control fire and wind freely. He always tries his best to protect them. 3. 面对困难的态度 Even when people misunderstand him and say bad things about him, he never gives up. 结尾 喜欢的原因与感悟 I like him because he teaches me to be brave and never give up when facing difficulties. 词句积累 词汇 性格：brave, smart, honest, kind, determined, magical 能力：change into, fight against, protect, control 感受：like, admire, enjoy, teach, inspire 句子 ・开头句：My favorite story character is... / Let me tell you about... ・中间句：He/She can... / He/She is brave because... ・结尾句：I like him/her because... / He/She teaches me that... 写作训练（以“The Book That Impresses Me Most”为例） 题目：The Book That Impresses Me Most 写作要求： 1. 以The Old Man and the Sea为主题，介绍这本书给你的印象。 2. 文中必须正确使用-ed形容词和 -ing形容词，如：surprised, touched, excited, exciting, inspiring等。 3. 必须至少使用3个宾语从句，如：I think that... /I believe that... /I hope that... 等。 4. 语句通顺，语法正确，篇幅在60--80词左右。 5. 内容要点： （1）点明你最喜欢的书是《老人与海》 （2）简单介绍书中老人的故事 （3）谈谈你从书中学到的道理 （4）写出你的感受 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、话题词汇储备 - -ed/-ing形容词类：surprised, surprised, touched, excited, exciting, inspired, inspiring, interested, interesting - 故事元素类：old fisherman, go fishing, catch nothing, fight with, give up, strong spirit - 感悟类：teach me that, realize that, hope that, be brave, be strong 二、佳句仿写 1. 【原句参考】I think that it is one of the greatest stories. → 仿写：我相信这本书能激励每一个人。 _________________________________________________________. 2. 【原句参考】 I feel touched by his strong spirit. → 仿写：我对老人的永不放弃感到惊讶。 _________________________________________________________. 3. 【原句参考】 I feel surprised at the old man’s never giving up. → 仿写：我希望我能像他一样坚强。 _________________________________________________________. 1 / 14 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $