内容正文:
Unit 7 Space exploration
八年级英语写作学案 (强化练兵版)
Writing an Article about a Chinese Astronaut
设计理念:结构化输入 ➔ 递进式微练 ➔ 多维挖空仿写 ➔ 诊断性评价
【学习目标】
1. 结构识别:通过解码教材范文,理清描写宇航员“梦想-经历-荣誉”的三段式结构。
2. 核心微练:在语境中精准运用过去时态及基本句型,纠正中式英语习惯。
3. 阶梯产出:借助高提示性的多维挖空脚手架,独立仿写出一篇关于王亚平的短文。
探究任务一:解码范文(Decode the Model Text)
【探究指引】仔细阅读课本108-109页关于聂海胜的范文,观察作者是如何将枯燥的“笔记”转化为生动的“文章”的。
1. 连连看:信息的华丽变身
请找出左边笔记信息对应的英文句子,将字母填在括号内。
( ) loved planes, dreamt of flying A. On 12 October 2005, he finally went on his first space flight...
( ) 12 October 2005 - Shenzhou-6 B. Nie was given the title "Heroic Astronaut" to recognize...
( ) 2013 and 2021 - Shenzhou-10 & 12 C. When Nie Haisheng was little, he loved planes and often...
( ) Honours - "Heroic Astronaut" D. Then, in 2013 and 2021, Nie served as commander on...
2. 批判性思维(思维碰撞)
思考:范文里为什么没有写笔记中的“1998年被选入中国航天计划”?这给你什么写作启示?
我的发现:写作时不需要____________所有的材料,而要根据主题选择最重要、最闪光的事实!
探究任务二:搭建脚手架与基础微练(Build & Practice)
【语言武器库】我们把文章拆开,看看描写人物时有哪些可以闭眼背诵的万能句型:
文章结构 (Structure)
段落大意 (Main Idea)
🌟 必备万能句型 (Useful Expressions)
Beginning (开头段)
童年与梦想
(Childhood & Dream)
• When ... was little, he/she loved...
• He/She dreamt of doing sth. (dreamt of flying)
• He/She was determined to make his/her dream come true.
Body (正文段)
主要太空任务经历
(Space Missions)
• On + 具体日期, he/she went on his/her first space flight in...
• Then, in + 年份, he/she served as commander on...
• It lasted for ... days. / He/She did a spacewalk.
Ending (结尾段)
所获荣誉与精神
(Honours & Quotes)
• He/She was given the title "...".
• To recognize his/her great work, the asteroid was named after him.
• He/She once said, "..."
【强化微练 1:核心短语与时态通关】
写作前,先过短语和时态关!请用正确的英语形式完成下列句子(注意过去时态):
1. 当林涛小的时候,他非常喜欢科学。
When Lin Tao ________ ________ , he ________ science very much. (was little / loved)
2. 他过去常常梦想飞向太空。
He often ________ ________ ________ into space. (dreamt of flying -> 注意dream的过去式和of后加ing)
3. 2023年,他进行了他的第一次太空飞行。
In 2023, he ________ ________ his first ________ ________. (went on / space flight)
4. 他在神舟十六号任务中担任指令长。
He ________ ________ ________ on the Shenzhou-16 mission. (served as commander)
5. 由于他的杰出工作,他被授予了“英雄航天员”的称号。
Because of his great work, he ________ ________ the ________ "Heroic Astronaut". (was given / title)
【强化微练 2:精准诊断——告别“中式英语 (Chinglish)”】
请仔细观察以下基础薄弱学生常犯的错误,用红笔在横线上修改:
• [典型错句1] He very liked flying. ➔ (错误原因:very不能修饰动词)
[地道改写] He ________________________________________. (loved flying / liked flying very much)
• [典型错句2] He dream of become a pilot. ➔ (错误原因:时态漏掉,of后应用动名词)
[地道改写] He ________________________________________. (dreamt of becoming a pilot)
探究任务三:实战演练——阶梯式仿写(Step-by-Step Writing)
【实战目标】现在轮到你了!请根据“太空教师”王亚平的信息卡,完成一篇结构完整的文章。
Step 1: 读懂信息卡 (Wang Yaping's Profile)
• Childhood: Born in Jan 1980; loved sports (喜欢运动); dreamt of becoming a pilot (梦想成为飞行员).
• Missions:
- June 2013 (Shenzhou-10): went on space flight (太空飞行); gave the first space lecture (进行第一堂太空授课).
- Oct 2021 (Shenzhou-13): served on the mission (执行任务); first Chinese woman to do a spacewalk (第一位进行太空行走的中国女性).
• Honours: Given the title "Heroic Astronaut" (被授予“英雄航天员”标题).
Step 2: 连句成篇(多维挖空与中文提示版)
请根据括号内的中文提示,在横线上填写正确的英文单词或短语,补全你的文章(注意时态!)。
Wang Yaping: An Excellent Female Astronaut
When Wang Yaping 1.________________________ (当她小的时候), she 2.________________________ (非常喜欢运动) and often 3.________________________ (梦想成为) a pilot. She studied hard and 4.________________________ (下定决心) to make her dream come true.
In June 2013, she 5.________________________ (进行了她的第一次太空飞行) in the Shenzhou-10 spacecraft. During the mission, she 6.________________________ (进行了第一堂太空授课). Then, in October 2021, she 7.________________________ (作为指令长服役/执行任务) on the Shenzhou-13 mission. She successfully became the first Chinese woman 8.________________________ (进行太空行走).
Because of her great work, she 9.________________________ (被授予……称号) "Heroic Astronaut". She is 10.________________________ (我心目中一位伟大的英雄)!
探究任务四:自主检查与评价(Check and Revise)
写完后,请对照下表认真检查你的文章。符合要求的在方框内打钩(✓):
[ ] 结构完整:我的文章分为了三段(童年与梦想 ➔ 太空经历 ➔ 荣誉与评价)。
[ ] 时态正确:我全篇描写过去的事情,正确使用了过去式(如 loved, dreamt, went, was, served)。
[ ] 纠错到位:我没有写出 "very liked" 或 "dream of do" 这样的中式英语错误。
[ ] 细节完美:我检查了专有名词(如 Wang Yaping, Shenzhou-10)的大写和句尾句号。
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