读后续写：圣诞节助人故事续写课件-山东省青岛市2024-2025学年高一下学期期中学业水平检测英语试题

这是一份高中英语高一下期中读后续写教学课件，包含题目解析、续写步骤（读文、构思、成文）、故事要素与双线情节分析、写作素材（动作心理描写、情绪主题句）、范文示例及注意事项，为学生提供结构化学习支架，引导掌握读后续写全流程。 资料特色显著，融合核心素养，语言能力上提供动作心理描写模板如“His hands trembled with hope”，文化意识通过圣诞节情境渗透分享与善意主题，思维品质引导分析情节发展与人物反应，学习能力强调“2-3-15”时间分配。创新采用情节线与情感线表格、情绪万能句等工具，帮助学生提升写作逻辑与表达，也为教师提供系统教学资源。高一学生处于初高中过渡阶段，需培养逻辑思维和写作规范，该资料助力其建立结构化写作习惯与核心素养。

高一下期中模拟考试 —读后续写（续写一段） 第二节（满分15分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Yesterday afternoon, students rushed out of the school gate and greatly rejoiced (高兴) at the arrival of Christmas holiday. They gathered at the flower store to buy flowers for their friends or relatives with pocket money. Opposite the door of the store stood a very small boy named Jim. His face was dirty, with one arm resting against the wall, and his head supported on it, crying sadly. Two or three of the girls came to Jim and asked, “What is the matter that you cry like this?” But he made no reply. Soon many children gathered there out of curiosity. “Come, tell us what is the matter with you and why you are crying,” one girl repeated softly. And then Jim lifted his face from his arm and said through his tears that he had lost the twenty dollars his parents had given him to buy presents for his grandmother who lived in a nursing home. It had escaped through a hole in his pocket and he showed the hole to them. Jim didn’t want to go home because he was afraid of disappointing his parents. They lived a poor life, and that money meant a lot to them. Saying that, Jim again dropped his head upon his arms and cried in deep sadness. 读后续写题目 2 注意： （1）续写词数应为 80 个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The children felt sorry for Jim and tried to find a way to help him out. ___________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 读后续写题目 3 第一步：读文 (2分钟) 目标：快速把握主旨、人物情感及核心冲突。 方法：圈画关键信息，梳理5W1H和双线情节。 作用：为后续构思打下坚实基础。 第二步：构思 (3分钟) 目标：基于段首句，预测合理的情节发展。 方法：预判结局，设计关键情节，构思人物动作与心理。 作用：搭建故事骨架，避免偏离主题。 第三步：成文 (15分钟) 目标：将构思转化为流畅、生动的文字。 方法：活用动作心理描写，保持时态一致，检查修改。 作用：呈现高质量的最终写作成果。 续写步骤 1.7.2013 ‹#› 读文，获故事要素和双线情节 第一步 Who：一群放学的学生 + 小男孩 Jim What：Jim 弄丢了给奶奶买圣诞礼物的 20 美元，不敢回家，在商店门口哭泣 When/Where：圣诞节前夕放学后 / 花店门口 Why：钱是家境贫困的父母给的，对他意义重大，害怕让父母失望 How：学生们看到了他的困境，想要帮助他 5 读文，获故事要素和双线情节 第一步 Para. 情节线 情感线 1 学生们放学，聚集在花店买花 兴奋、期待（Christmas holiday） 2 发现门口哭泣的 Jim，上前询问 好奇 → 同情 3 Jim 说明钱丢了，钱对他和家人很重要 悲伤、绝望 6 构思，审阅段首句，创编续写情节 第二步 段首句是 “The children felt sorry for Jim and tried to find a way to help him out.”，可发散： 1. 孩子们具体会怎么帮 Jim？ 行动 1：大家一起在地上、Jim 的口袋周围帮他找钱 行动 2：提议凑钱帮他补上这 20 美元 行动 3：带他进花店，帮他挑便宜又合适的礼物 2. Jim 的反应是什么？ √从一开始的不敢相信、犹豫，到被大家的善意打动，接受帮助 √从悲伤绝望，到惊喜、感动、重拾希望 3. 故事的结局与主题？ Jim 买到了礼物，开心地回家了 主题升华：圣诞节的意义是分享与善意，微小的帮助也能带来温暖 7 写作素材整理 1. 动作描写 His hands trembled（颤抖） with hope. The children bent down（弯腰） and searched the ground carefully. He wiped his tears（擦掉眼泪） with the back of his sleeve（袖子）. They put the coins and bills（硬币和钞票） into Jim's palm（手掌）. 2. 心理描写 His eyes widened with surprise.（他惊讶地睁大了眼睛。） A great warmth filled him./A warm feeling spread through his chest. He felt a surge of gratitude welling up inside him. (他感到一股感激之情涌上心头。) The children were determined to help the poor boy. 1.7.2013 ‹#› 写作素材整理 3. 情绪与主题句 情绪万能句1：某人感到...或一阵/一种...向某人袭来 1.7.2013 ‹#› 写作素材整理 3. 情绪与主题句 情绪万能句2：某人感到一股强烈的...在内心升腾奔涌。 主题句：The true spirit of Christmas lies in giving and kindness. (圣诞节的真正精神在于给予和善意。) 主题句：Small acts of kindness can make a big difference. 1.7.2013 ‹#› 成文，丰富续写内容，协同语言风格 第三步 The children felt sorry for Jim and tried to find a way to help him out. They first knelt down（跪下） and searched the ground near the flower store, hoping to find the lost money. （现在分词做状语）When they failed, they decided to pool their pocket money together（把零花钱凑一起）. One by one, they took out their coins and bills, soon collecting enough to cover the 20 dollars. Jim stared at the money in his palm, his eyes filling with tears of joy（独立主格结构做状语）. He thanked them over and over again, then ran into the store to buy a small, warm scarf for his grandmother. The children smiled as they watched him leave. That day, they learned that the true spirit of Christmas is not just about receiving, but about sharing love and kindness with others.（那一天，他们了解到圣诞节的真正精神不仅仅是接受，而是与他人分享爱和善良。） 11 注意事项 务必紧扣所给的段首句进行续写，确保内容不偏离主题。 段落衔接 使用恰当的过渡词（如However, Finally等），使行文更流畅。 语言协同 检查续写部分的人称、时态是否与原文保持一致。 控制词数 确保续写词数在110词左右，不要过多或过少。 时间分配 卷面整洁 书写工整，保持卷面干净，这是给阅卷老师的第一印象。 仔细审题 严格遵守“2-3-15”的时间分配原则，留足检查时间。 Polish your writing. 13 $