专题01 读后续写五步实战法---10天突破高考英语读后续写 课件 -2026届高三英语三轮复习专项

五步实战法 Continuation Writing 01 读后续写的评分标准 02 读后续写的五步实战法 03 读后续写之读什么？ 04 读后续写之写什么？ 05 06 读后续写之怎么写？ 读后续写的高频句式 Continuation Writing Content 2 评分标准 1.本题总分为25分，按五个档次进行评分。 2.评分时，应从内容、词汇、语法和语篇结构三个方面考虑，具体为： （1）续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。 （2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性，恰当性和多样性。 （3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。 3.评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来 综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 4.评分时还应注意：（1）词数少于120的，酌情扣分。 （2）书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分。 （3）单词拼写和标点符号视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 评分标准 情节 语言 衔接 1.不符合基本要求 词数少于120；两段的词数比例不均衡；随意分段；时态错误；抄袭原文等。 2.内容不合逻辑 缺乏合理的想象；续写部分与给定材料之间的逻辑不连贯，或者续写两段内容之间的逻辑以及续写内容与所给段落开头语的逻辑脱节。 3.语言不够丰富恰当 语法结构和词汇使用不够丰富或准确；刻意追求使用生僻词汇和复杂句式，忽略了与原文语言风格的一致性。 4.脑洞开太大 想象不够合理，导致续写部分与原文情节脱节；立意不高；价值观存在争议，影响文章的整体质量。 失分原因 评分标准 一般来说，高考读后续写内容在续写内容情节的构思上难度不大，大部分考生都能比较合理地续写故事。从阅卷情况来看，写得好的考生主要表现为续写内容符合逻辑和常理，与所给的段首句衔接自然，篇章连贯，内容丰富，充分运用了动作、心理、环境等描写手法；语言功底扎实，词法句法丰富，能恰当使用高级词汇和高级句型，包括一些特殊句型，时态人称都能准确把握。在平时练习中，考生可以比照下面这个评分标准来对写作进行自检：20分（内容顺，细节比较多，有些许错误）；18分（内容顺，细节较少，语言有些错误）；13分（内容可读，语言错误较多）；8分（内容不够完整，错误较多）。 五步实战法 读全文，抓主线 Step 1. 标记关键词：圈出文中出现的人物、地点和重要事件。 梳理情节：用简单的句子概括原文的起因、经过和结果。 把握情感基调：注意文中人物的情绪变化，为后续的情感描写做铺垫。 核心要点：快速通读原文，理解故事的背景、情节和人物关系。 例如：➡️ 如果原文是一个关于友情的故事，标记出主要人物（如Alice和Bob）、关键事件（如Bob生病）和情感基调（如Alice的担忧）。 五步实战法 找线索，挖伏笔 Step 2. 关注未解决的情节：文中是否有未完成的任务或未解决的冲突？ 寻找情感暗示：人物的情绪是否暗示了后续的发展？ 留意细节描写：文中是否有看似无关紧要的细节，可能成为续写的关键？ 核心要点：在原文中寻找线索和伏笔，为续写提供方向。 例如：➡️ 如果原文中提到Bob的房间里有一张未寄出的明信片，这可能是一 个伏笔，暗示Bob有未了的心愿。 五步实战法 巧构思，定情节 Step 3. 设计合理的情节：续写部分要自然衔接原文，情节合理且有起伏。 设置冲突或转折：增加故事的趣味性和悬念，避免平铺直叙。 明确情感走向：人物的情感如何发展？是和解、成长还是新的冲突？ 核心要点：根据原文和伏笔，构思续写的大致情节和情感走向。 例如：➡️ Alice决定帮助Bob完成心愿，但过程中遇到了困难，最终通过努力 解决了问题，两人的情感也得到了升华。 五步实战法 定锚点，搭框架 Step 4. 选择情节锚点：确定续写中的几个关键情节，确保故事有层次感。 规划段落结构：每个段落围绕一个核心内容展开，逻辑清晰。 过渡自然：确保续写部分与原文过渡自然，衔接紧密。 核心要点：确定续写中的关键节点（如情节转折），搭建文章框架。 例如：➡️ 开头：Alice发现Bob的心愿（明信片）。 过程：Alice试图完成心愿，但遇到困难。 结尾：Alice克服困难，Bob的心愿得以实现，两人的情感升华。 五步实战法 精打磨，润色文 Step 5. 丰富词汇和句式：使用高级词汇和多样化的句式，提升文章档次。 增加情感细节：通过人物的心理、表情动作等描写，增强故事的感染力。 检查语法和逻辑：确保文章语法正确，逻辑连贯。 核心要点：对续写内容进行润色，提升语言表达和情感细节。 例如：➡️ Alice的脸上露出一丝微笑，她轻轻地握住Bob的手，轻声说道： “我会帮你完成这个心愿。”（细节描写） 在一个小镇上，住着一位名叫Tom的男孩。他一直梦想成为一名音乐家，但他的父亲却希望他继承家族生意。一天，Tom收到了一所音乐学院的录取通知书…… 读全文，抓主线： 找线索，挖伏笔： 巧构思，定情节： 定锚点，搭框架： 精打磨，润色文： Tom收到音乐学院的录取通知书，内心充满激动和恐惧。他热爱音乐，但父亲希望他继承家族生意。这是一个关于梦想与责任的冲突。 原文中提到Tom对音乐的热爱和父亲的期望，暗示了父子之间的矛盾和Tom的内心挣扎。 续写中，Tom需要在梦想和家庭责任之间做出选择，而父亲的态度将成为关键转折点。 第一段的核心是Tom的内心挣扎，以及父亲意外发现录取通知书的时刻。 增加情感细节和心理描写，让情节更加生动。 Paragraph 1 Tom stared at the acceptance letter, his heart pounding with excitement and fear. He had always been passionate about music, but his father had always insisted that he take over the family business. The letter felt like a lifeline, but he knew his father would never understand. Just as he was about to make a decision, his father walked in and saw the letter. Tom's heart sank. He braced himself for the inevitable argument, but instead, his father's face softened with a mixture of surprise and curiosity. 在一个小镇上，住着一位名叫Tom的男孩。他一直梦想成为一名音乐家，但他的父亲却希望他继承家族生意。一天，Tom收到了一所音乐学院的录取通知书…… 读全文，抓主线： 找线索，挖伏笔： 巧构思，定情节： 定锚点，搭框架： 精打磨，润色文： 父亲读了录取通知书后，父子之间的关系和情感成为续写的核心。 父亲的表情从惊讶到柔和，暗示他可能理解Tom的梦想。 续写中，父亲的支持将成为情节的转折点，Tom的情感也会从紧张转向感激。 第二段的核心是父亲的支持和Tom的情感释放，以及父子关系的和解。 增加对话和情感细节，让情节更加感人。 Paragraph 2 His father read the letter in silence, his expression unreadable. Finally, he looked at Tom and said, “This is your dream. If you really want it, I’ll support you.” Tom felt a wave of gratitude wash over him. He hugged his father tightly, realizing that sometimes, dreams and family can go hand in hand. “Thank you, Dad,” Tom whispered, tears of relief in his eyes. His father patted him on the back, a rare smile spreading across his face. “Just promise me you’ll give it your all,” he said. Tom nodded, feeling a newfound sense of determination and love. 读后续写之读什么？ beginning development climax ending turning point falling action Read for plot 读后续写之读什么？ Read for characters negative positive confused anxious take it seriously unhappy not discouraged worried happy optimistic 读后续写之读什么？ （1）边读边想象场景，在大脑屮勾勒出画面，为下一步的情景创设做好铺垫。( 自我代入, 做个”戏精”) （2）边读边用中文把主要情节写下来。特别注意明线(情节发展)和暗线(情绪变化), 总结人物性格。 （3）主要情节即“记叙文六要素”：人物、时间、地点、起因 、经过、结果（谁在什么时间、什么地方，因为什么、做了什么、最终怎样。) 读之三步骤 读后续写之读什么？ 1.首句定位法 给定续写段的首句往往暗示情节方向，需分析其与原文的逻辑衔接： 时间/空间线索：如As night fell...，需描写夜晚相关事件。 情感转折：如Tears blurred her eyes...，需解释哭泣原因及后果。 2.双线交织原则 情节线(外部事件) + 情感线(内心变化)需同步推进： 例：主角“寻找出路(情节)”的同时“回忆父亲的鼓励(情感升华)”。 3.避免逻辑硬伤 禁止引入超现实元素(如突然出现魔法)、违背前文人设的行为。 Read for plot What's Bernard's family condition? How did Meredith's family help him? One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish .” The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. I'll tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of com Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.” What Read for plot One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish .” The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. I'll tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of com Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.” Writing materials What's Bernard's family condition? How did Meredith's family help him? What Read for plot Story When Where Who What As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs. Meredith's home kind and thoughtful/She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor/earn some money;sprang to his feet and cried/ jumped up all attention/As the economy…… What's Bernard's family condition? How did they help him? writing materials Read for characters Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish.” kind thoughtful kind, caring, active, enthusiastic, intelligent Mrs.Meredith John, Harry, Clara. Read for characters Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish.” Writing materials Read for characters The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. …… warm-hearted, united, caring Villagers Read for characters The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. …… Writing materials 读后续写之读什么？ Useful expressions: kind and thoughtful / earn some money Vivid description:sprang to his feet(一跃而起) and cried/ jumped up all attention Useful sentences: ♦Meredith spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. ♦There was a man sick in bed, his wife, could not go out to work ♦As the economy was in decline, …… People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. ♦“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it. Writing Materials——原文中的写作素材 读后续写之写什么？ 利用“两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量”确定续写方向： ①两段首句定一框:根据第一段首句关键信息与第二段首句关键信息确定续写部分第一段的续写框架，同时注意情节发展合情合理; ②二框二首正能量:根据第二段首句关键信息推测第二段情节和情感发展,并结合正能量结尾的续写原则确定第二段的续写框架。 读后续写之写什么？ 读后续写之写什么？ Focus on two given sentences Para.1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Para.2 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. They succeed in making popcorn They put their good idea into practice Bernard sold popcorn Did he earn money? Para.1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Para.2 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 巧用原文，构造情节--Brainstorming Writing materials（原文素材） Useful expressions: kind and thoughtful / earn some money earn some money Vivid description:sprang to his feet(一跃而起) and cried/ jumped up all attention Useful sentences: ♦Meredith spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. ♦There was a man sick in bed, his wife, could not go out to work ♦As the economy was in decline, …… People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. ♦“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? we can make popcorn, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it. Plot analysis Plot analysis 读后续写之写什么？ Para.1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Some detailed information of Mrs. Meredith Her reaction 衔接首句主人公——Well begun is half done Para.1 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Write and polish para1 ♦Mrs. Meredith's reaction? ♦What did Meredith's children do next? ♦Bernard's reaction? Tip: Use advanced sentence patterns Tip：Add detailed description ♦The result——successful ♦All things ready——their reaction ♦How to to make everthing ready? Useful expressions: kind and thoughtful / earn some money Vivid description:sprang to his feet(一跃而起) and cried/ jumped up all attention Useful sentences: ♦“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it. Writing materials（原文素材） Use detailed description &advanced sentences Excitement 1. His face lit up with excitement. 2. Hugging the gift to her chest, she looked up excitedly and her eyes welled up with tears. 3.Unable to contain her excitement, she jumped with joy. 4.When she heard the news, her heart pounded with excitement. 5. Looking at the beautiful sight, Mom could hardly conceal her excitement. Happiness 1. Relief filled his heart, with a bright smile spreading across his face. 2. Norah was so happy that she almost jumped up and tears filled her eyes. 3.When Santa walked into the room, my daughter clapped and jumped up and down. 4.Jennifer’s sleepy eyes opened wide and her face wore a smile that brightened up the whole room. Stand up—Read Sit down—Polish 读后续写之写什么？ When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. “What a wonderful plan! I will give you a hand.” she said, with her face lighting up. Soon they hurried to see Bernard and told him their plan excitedly. Hearing that, Bernard jumped wildly into air with his hands waving. Then the four kids took out the big box of corn sent by Uncle John. Mother was responsible for making paper bags. John and Bernard were occupied in popping the corn while Harry and Clara put it into the paper bags. Everyone was devoted to their job. Seeing all paper bags filled with delicious popcorn, they wiped the sweat on the face with a bright smile spreading across their face. 细节描写&高级句型 原文素材改编复现 读后续写之写什么？ Para.2 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 衔接首句主人公 Writing materials（原文素材） Useful expressions: earn some money/ kind and thoughtful kind and thoughtful Vivid description:sprang to his feet(一跃而起) and cried/ jumped up all attention Useful sentences: ♦Meredith spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. ♦There was a man sick in bed, his wife, could not go out to work ♦As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. ♦“…… Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it. ♦How did he sell popcorn? ♦Did he earn money? ♦What about his father? ♦When Mrs Meredith came to visit them again, what happened? 读后续写之写什么？ With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He visited the neighbors from door to door to sell his popcorn. In spite of struggling to make ends meet, people in the small community were willing to do everything in their power to help Bernard. Owing to countless helping hands, the little boy gradually earn some money. As a result, his dad who was sick in bed received timely medical treatment. The poor family was brightened up day by day. When Mrs. Meredith came to visit them again, Bernard hugged her tightly with tears streaming down his face. Together, little love can make a difference. 细节描写&高级句型 原文素材改编复现 读后续写之怎么写？ 02 Then, A did ... 01 B’s response 假设提示句是：A did sth. Explanation 03 Cause-effect 04 B did sth / felt ... in response to A’s behavior. （针对A的行为，B做什么或B什么感受？） Then, how did A do it? (即A如何做那件事？） What was sth? (具体解释提示句中的某一个关键词内容） based on A’s behavior: Why (did A do it)? / What (is the result)? （即因果推理，A为什么这样做？或者A这样做带来什么结果？） 第一&二段开头→ 回应段首句→ 语义连贯 读后续写之怎么写？ 1、重现改写原文关键 (尤其续写第1句) (句式：even more...; do sth again...) 2、评价 (评价前动作/前情节) (句式: ...,which worked/which made sb.../which turned out) 3、后悔感叹 (当初就../要是..就好了) (句式: 虚拟语气，should/shouldn’t have done; if only) 4、动作链 (单动作，拆成多动作) (句式: 动词排比 / Doing sth, sb do sth. / Having done sth, sb do sth.) 5、角色分工 (同时空下，不同角色的行动) (句式: While/When/As..., sb do sth. / Meanwhile, sb do sth.) 读后续写之怎么写？ writing method: triggers+details magnifier domino 触发 反应 具体表现 01 B’s response Explanation 02 03 Then, A did ... 直接说 间接说 读后续写之怎么写？ 增加细节 在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所说、所思、所做，选择性地加入多角度的细节描写，给每段增加约 5 至 8 个具体细节。 One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. 原文找：5W1H2P+特点+描写占比 读后续写之怎么写？ 真题运用： [2020.07浙江卷] 尾段：...The spray burns the bears’eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. *尾段关键词：The spray burns the bears’ eyes; an angry roar; fierce; push fence (喷雾灼伤了熊的眼睛; 愤怒的咆哮; 凶猛; 推栅栏) *Paragraph 1 给定句：A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. (几分钟后，熊回到了我们的营地) 续写范文：Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. (红字: 原文词/改写；绿字: 改写润色) 然后我们意识到，喷雾只会让他更加愤怒， 因为这次他似乎更猛烈了，像疯了一样猛烈地推着栅栏。 原文尾段关键句+P1首句：组合改写 读后续写之怎么写？ 同时空下，不同角色的行动 常用句式：While/When/As sb1 do sth, sb2 do sth. (当...时，某人做某事) Meanwhile, / In the meantime, sb do sth. (同时，某人做某事) At that critical moment, sb do sth. (在那关键时刻, 某人做某事) 真题运用： [2020.07浙江卷] * P1段续写情节：熊洗完眼睛回来，我们害怕。 * 扩写构思： 我感到我的心跳加速，不知道该怎么办。在这个关键时刻， 艾丽抓起几块大蒜面包，把它们扔到了栅栏上。 I felt my heart racing wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. 读后续写之怎么写？ N 需求: 脱险(对抗熊30分钟)；拍照；熊:吃到食物 (线索在：首尾段+P1/P2给定句) D 困难: 熊凶猛、执着；武器只能用普通物品 （线索在：5w1H+角色特点） S 方法: 等直升机；Elli 行动:喷雾+面包 （线索在：P1/P2给定句+角色事物） E 结局: 登机脱险 - 熊破栅栏吃食物 - 我拍照 （线索在：需求解决+呼应原文） P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ① 接着P1 （心理/动作链） ② ③ ④ ⑤ 根据P2 P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ⑥ 接着P2 （心理/动作链） ⑦ ⑧ ⑨ 结局 （需求解决） ⑩ 升华 （归类+总结共性） 读后续写之怎么写？ N 需求: 脱险(对抗熊30分钟)；拍照；熊:吃到食物 (线索在：首尾段+P1/P2给定句) D 困难: 熊凶猛、执着；武器只能用普通物品 （线索在：5w1H+角色特点） S 方法: 等直升机；Elli 行动:喷雾+面包 （线索在：P1/P2给定句+角色事物） D 结局: 登机脱险 - 熊破栅栏吃食物 - 我拍照 （线索在：需求解决+呼应原文） P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ① 接着P1 （心理/动作链） ② ③ ④ ⑤ 根据P2 P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ⑥ 接着P2 （心理/动作链） ⑦ ⑧ ⑨ 结局 （需求解决） ⑩ 升华 （归类+总结共性） 熊更愤怒，我们意识到喷雾无用 惊险时刻 我们很开心，因为得救了 熊冲破栅栏，吃到食物 我拍照 Elli行动：扔面包 登机脱险 读后续写之怎么写？ N 需求: 脱险(对抗熊30分钟)；拍照；熊:吃到食物 (线索在：首尾段+P1/P2给定句) D 困难: 熊凶猛、执着；武器只能用普通物品 （线索在：5w1H+角色特点） S 方法: 等直升机；Elli 行动:喷雾+面包 （线索在：P1/P2给定句+角色事物） D 结局: 登机脱险 - 熊破栅栏吃食物 - 我拍照 （线索在：需求解决+呼应原文） P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ① 接着P1 （心理/动作链） ② ③ ④ ⑤ 根据P2 熊更愤怒，我们意识到喷雾无用 惊险时刻 Elli行动：扔面包 （角色互动）熊跑去吃面包，但吃完折回 我紧急拿到辣椒喷雾尝试击退它 （惊险时刻）Unfortunately,熊更怒了，直接扑过来 读后续写之怎么写？ N 需求: 脱险(对抗熊30分钟)；拍照；熊:吃到食物 (线索在：首尾段+P1/P2给定句) D 困难: 熊凶猛、执着；武器只能用普通物品 （线索在：5w1H+角色特点） S 方法: 等直升机；Elli 行动:喷雾+面包 （线索在：P1/P2给定句+角色事物） D 结局: 登机脱险 - 熊破栅栏吃食物 - 我拍照 （线索在：需求解决+呼应原文） P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ① 意识到喷雾无用，熊更凶狠 ② 我害怕，不知咋办 ③ Elli 行动，扔面包 ④ 行动有用，熊跑去吃面包 ⑤ 不幸运的是，熊吃完又折回 P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ⑥ 我们开心.因为得救了(心理+语言) ⑦ 登直升机脱险（动作+心理） ⑧ ⑨ 熊冲破栅栏, 吃食物 ⑩ 我拍照， 俯瞰营地，发现惊人一幕 心想“熊得逞了” Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he ate up all the bread and came back again. Para 2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene — we were robbed by a polar bear! (153 words) 高频句式 句式一：From then on…+表示行动或决心的句子 【示例】从那时起，我在我的车里放了一个千斤顶（jack）和一些常见的工具。当我在路上遇到需要帮助的人时，我会尽力像家人一样帮助他们。 From then on, I placed a jack and some common tools in my car. When meeting people in need on the road, I would try my best to help them like the family. 【仿写1】From that day on, every time I meet someone who needs help, I always reach out to them, hoping to pass on the kindness that the Mexican family offered me. 从那天起，每次我遇到需要帮助的人，我总是联系他们，希望把墨西哥家庭给我的善意传递给我。 高频句式 句式二：Only+状语/Never…/Not until…/Had it not been for…+did he…(倒装句) 【示例】讲述了作者和杰西卡一起去远足，他们蹚水穿过池塘，作者陷了进去，作者内心以为自己可能熬不过去了，但是勇敢克服恐惧，最终得到救援。 Finally, I was saved out of the quicksand. Tears welling up in our eyes, Jessica and I thanked the team with all our hearts gratefully. Only then did I realize that bravery can overcome any difficulties. 【仿写1】直到通过这次经历我才意识到，只有勇敢和决心才能克服一切困难。 Only through this experience did I realize that it was bravery and determination that can conquer all the difficulties. 高频句式 句式三：It is/was+被强调部分+that…（强调句型） 【示例】 三个孩子在有限的条件下，通过爆米花制作，帮助了另一个想要帮助父母维持生活的小男孩Bernard的故事。在社会经济萧条的环境下，大家仍保留自己的善良。 All this was because of John’s bright idea, and the way he carried it out. It was small acts of kindness that made a big difference. Hard work pays off! 【仿写1】正是这种独特的经历使我理解了我们所面临的任何困难，我们不能放弃我们的希望 It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with, we mustn’t give up our hope. 高频句式 句式四：It dawned on sb/It occurred to sb/It turned out that…（It形式主语） 【示例】多么难忘的经历啊！事实证明，只要我们不放弃希望，就总有办法摆脱困境。 What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any dilemma as long as we never give up hope. 【仿写1】我突然想到，我父亲教我的宝贵的一课肯定会指引我未来的道路。 It occurred to me that the precious lesson taught by my Dad would definitely guide the way of my future.  高频句式 句式五：现在分词/过去分词短语，sb did sth…（非谓语作状语） 【示例】看到那架直升机，简觉得它好像在用雷鸣般的声音安慰她,“你的坚持是有回报的。” Seeing the helicopter, Jane felt as if it had been comforting her with its thunderous voice, "Your persistence pays off." 【仿写1】再次看到字母表，我觉得它好像在鼓励我并说,“学习永远不会太晚”。 Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, “it's never too late to learn.” 高频句式 句式六：With sb doing, sb. did…（with复合结构营造气氛） 【示例】阳光温暖又温柔地笼罩着她，她抬起头，脸上挂着灿烂的微笑。 With the sunlight greeting her gently and warmly, she raised up her head, wearing a shining smile on her face. ​​【仿写1】清晨的阳光照进来，全家人沉浸在幸福和爱中。 With the early sunlight streaming in, the whole family was bathed in happiness and love. Thank You 感谢观看 $