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十句话搞定读后续写 十句五定法 第二节　(满分25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Kenneth is now a science researcher at Harvard University. But he first came into the spotlight for a button-sized warning device he created at 15, one that greatly eased the burden on caregivers. Back then, Kenneth lived with his family, including his grandfather, who had Alzheimer’s disease. Late one night, his grandfather was found wandering on a highway. Kenneth’s mother, the main caregiver, had fallen asleep for only a few minutes after days of constant care. Seeing her exhaustion, Kenneth decided to do something. He wanted to keep his grandfather safe while giving his mother some relief. To learn more, Kenneth visited a local care center and met Ms. Brown, the head of the center. She told Kenneth that many elderly people had the same problem, and their families were under great pressure as well. Kenneth searched for a device that could warn the caregivers when the elderly residents got out of bed. But nothing on the market met the needs. So he was determined to take advantage of his strength in science to make one himself. Night after night, Kenneth tested sensors and circuits, but the design failed again and again. Yet whenever he thought of his demanding grandfather, his tired mother, and other elderly people in need, he returned to his desk. A year later, Kenneth finally created a pair of sensor socks. One night, he helped his grandfather put them on and waited with his mother. When his grandfather got out of bed, an alert sounded on his mother’s phone. Overjoyed, his mother said, “You made it! This will be a great help to me!” Believing that what had helped his family might also help others, Kenneth returned to the care center to introduce the socks. Many caregivers showed interest, but the elderly were less enthusiastic. Ms. Brown asked, “Do they have to wear the socks while sleeping?” Kenneth nodded. “Yes, that’s how it works.” 　　　　　　　　　 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Ms. Brown frowned, saying many elderly people were not used to sleeping with socks on. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ While reflecting on Ms. Brown’s suggestions, Kenneth suddenly noticed a button. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1、读要素，弄懂故事大意 哈佛大学科研员Kenneth 十五岁时研发出纽扣大小的预警装置。Kenneth 为缓解照顾阿尔茨海默症祖父的母亲的压力，发明了一双传感器袜子，能在老人下床时向护理人员手机发送警报。但在养老院推广时，因老人不习惯穿袜子睡觉，难以被老年人接受。 写作步骤1——通读全文，理清脉络 2、读人物，抓住关键人物 3、读时态，确定主题时态 Kenneth，发明者（15岁学生），聪明、有责任感、坚持、善于观察、愿意帮助他人 妈妈，照顾者，疲惫、默默付出、为家人牺牲 爷爷，阿尔茨海默症患者，需要保护、无法控制自己的行为、不是故意添麻烦 Ms. Brown，养老院负责人，有经验、了解老人真实需求、愿意提建议（不是反对者） 一般过去时 写作步骤1——通读全文，理清脉络 1. 续写要点： 第一段：①Ms.Brown 指出问题后，Kenneth 的反应（如失望、思考或询问替代方案）； ②与Ms.Brown 进一步沟通,了解真实需求，决心改进。 第二段：①从“纽扣”获得灵感，重新设计、制作纽扣式警报装置的改进过程； ②新装置被接受，发明获得认可。 注意：两段续写需形成完整闭环，第一段铺垫问题与反思，第二段实现转折与解决。 写 学生续写情节可能出现以下几方面的问题： ①内容方面： ●忽略伏笔：忽略前文“a button-sized warning device he created at 15”续写仅简单改良感应袜或研发其它类型的装置，未呼应、回扣纽扣式装置这一关键设定，割裂故事情节，导致文章首尾不呼应、内容不完整。（建议最高不超过18 分） ●逻辑漏洞： 脱离原文逻辑，出现不合理情节，例如凭空新增改良设备的功能、随意添加他人帮助、或直接跳过思考与实验过程，瞬间完成装置改良，违背原文Kenneth 反复试验、潜心钻研的人物设定与故事逻辑。（建议最高不超过18 分） 写 学生续写情节可能出现以下几方面的问题： 角色缺失：续写中遗漏关键人物Ms.Brown，完全舍弃其提出的改良建议，无任何内容承接前文对话与提示，情节断层，无法合理引出后续装置优化的情节，故事推进生硬突兀。（建议最高在第四档） ●人称错误：误用第一人称叙述。 ●缺乏细节：描写过于笼统，仅平铺直叙改写发明、收获成功，无具体动作、情绪等细节。无具体思考、试验、调整设备的细节支撑，文章感染力不足 ②衔接方面： ●无法自然承接段首句，续写内容与段首句无关联。 ●续文与原文科学精神与人文关怀衔接断裂。 十 句 五 定 法 写 概述 "十句五定法"是指读后续写两段共10句话中，有5句话的位置和内容是相对固定的，其余5句可根据具体情境调整。这种方法通过固定关键句的结构，帮助学生快速搭建续写框架，避免偏离主题。 Para 1. Para 2. 定 句1: 衔接提示句--心理/动作链 定句6:衔接提示句--心理/动作链 句2: 句7: 句3: 句8： 句4:。 定句9:紧贴原文，交代结局 定句5: 过渡到P2首句 定句10:升华主题 两段十句五定法的思路 剩余五句 补齐细节 情绪 动作 心理 语言 环境 描写 他意识到发明的缺点 Kenneth决定改进设计。 他突然想到什么 改进后的设计赢得了广泛的认可 关怀技术将人类联系在一起 Ms.Brown的建议 仔细倾听 他了解到老人的真实需求 多次的测试和调整 他发明了纽扣式预警装置 第一句话：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第二句话：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 他意识到，他的设计虽然有效，但远非完美。（宾语从句） 布朗建议较小或不太明显的东西会是更好的选择。（宾语从句） He realized that his design,although effective,was far from perfect. 十句五定法： Ms.Brown suggested that something smaller or less noticeable would be a better option. 第三句话 肯尼斯仔细地听着，他知道，为了让这种设备被广泛接受，它必须是老年人穿着舒适而不会扰乱日常生活的东西。（非谓语作状语） ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Kenneth listened carefully,knowing that in order to make the device widely accepted,it had to be something elderly people would feel comfortable wearing without disrupting their routine 第四句话： ______________________________________________________________ 他明白，解决方案必须自然地融入他们的日常生活——技术应该为人民服务，而不是强迫他们改变。(宾语从句) He understood that a solution had to fit naturally into their everyday lives—technology should serve people,not force them to change. 第五句话：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第六句话：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thanking her sincerely,Kenneth rushed back home with the firm resolve to improve his design. 肯尼斯真诚地感谢她，带着改进设计的坚定决心赶回了家。（非谓语做状语） What if he could design a button-sized device that could be attached to people’s clothing and still function just as effectively? 如果他能设计一个纽扣大小的设备可以附着在人们的衣服上，并且仍然有效地工作？（定语从句） 第七句话：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第八句话：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 他致力于持续日夜测试和精细调整。 最后，他制作了一种新的纽扣形状的装置，效果很好。 （定语从句） He devoted himself to continuous tests and delicate adjustments day and night. Finally,he produced a new button-shaped device that worked well. 第九句话：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第十句话：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 这种温暖实用的设计赢得了老年人及其护理人员的广泛认可。 他突然意识到，关怀技术将人类联系在一起，这一信念将指导他未来的科学追求。（“升华主题”） This warm practical design won wide recognition from elders and their caregivers. It struck him that caring technology connects humanity,and this belief would guide his future scientific pursuit. Paragraph 1 Ms.Brown frowned,saying many elderly people were not used to sleeping with socks on.He realized that his design,although effective,was far from perfect.Ms.Brown suggested that something smaller or less noticeable would be a better option.Kenneth listened carefully,knowing that in order to make the device widely accepted,it had to be something elderly people would feel comfortable wearing without disrupting their routine.He understood that a solution had to fit naturally into their everyday lives—technology should serve people,not force them to change. Paragraph 2 While reflecting on Ms.Brown 's suggestions,Kenneth suddenly noticed a button.What if he could design a button-sized device that could be attached to people’s clothing and still function just as effectively?He devoted himself to continuous tests and delicate adjustments day and night.Finally,he produced a new button-shaped device that worked well. This warm practical design won wide recognition from elders and their caregivers. It struck him that caring technology connects humanity,and this belief would guide his future scientific pursuit. step1 认真剖析首句，构思段落内容 step2 十句五定法 展开剧情 para1 para2 考虑与上下文的融洽衔接 和续写第二段开头语的呼应和衔接 关注与文章开头的遥相呼应 根据具体语境弘扬感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美 第1句：接着para1首句(心理/动作链） 第5句：根据para2首句 第6句：接着para2首句(心理/动作链） 第9句：结局 第10句：升华 20 $