第2章 第4节 10大主题轻松搞定 主题10 险境求生 -【载望】高中英语高分作文

主题10 险境求生 熊口脱咚 真题导练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2020年浙江7月卷·改编0 ne fall,my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears.We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”一the town of Churchill in Manitoba,Canada. Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous.Polar bears -like all wild animals- should be photographed from a safe distance.When I'm face to face with a polar bear,I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens.But sometimes,that is easier said than done.This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner,a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed,and smelled our garlic bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence.He pulled and bit the wire.He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. Terrified,Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.We yelled at the bear,hit pots hard,and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help.He told me a helicopter was on its way,but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived.Making the best of this close encounter(相遇)，I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment.The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray.The spray burns the bears'eyes,but doesn't hurt them.So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and,through the fence,sprayed him in the face.With an angry roar（吼叫)，the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our At that very moment,the helicopter arrived. 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 VV00008088800810000801807818088007800 ⊙主题同步 人教版必修第一册Unit4 Natural Disasters 外研版必修第三册Unit6 Disaster and Hope 北师大版必修第二册Unit5 umans and Nature ⊙参考译文 一个秋天，我和妻子Ei有一个明确的 目标：拍摄北极熊。我们住在“世界北极熊之 都”—一加拿大马尼托巴省丘吉尔镇外的一 个研究营地。 拍摄北极熊是件奇妙的事，但也很危险。 北极熊和所有野生动物一样，应该在安全距 离外进行拍摄。当我与北极熊面对面时，我 希望是通过装有长焦镜头的相机（来实现这 种接触)。但有时，说起来容易做起来难。这 次就是这样的情况。 我和Ei做晚餐时，一只在附近湖里玩 耍的年轻雄性北极熊闻到了气味，嗅到了我 们的蒜香面包。 这只饥饿的熊循着气味来到我们的营 地，营地周围围着高高的铁丝网。它又拉又 咬铁丝网，还后腿站立，用力推木质的栅栏柱。 我和Ei吓坏了，使出了我们所知的所有 防熊招数。我们朝熊大喊，用力敲锅，还朝空中 发射空炮弹。通常这样的巨响能把熊吓跑。但 这只北极熊不吃这一套，它一直用巨大的爪子试 图拆毁围栏。 我用对讲机向营地管理员求助。他告诉 我一架直升机正在赶来，但要30分钟后才能 到达。我充分利用了这次近距离接触的机会， 给这只熊拍了些照片。 我和Ei担心围栏撑不住这只熊接下来 30分钟的折腾。营地管理员建议我使用胡椒 喷雾。这种喷雾会让熊的眼睛有灼烧感，但 不会伤害它们。于是我慢慢靠近这位不速之 客，隔着围栏，朝它的脸喷了喷雾。伴随着一 声愤怒的吼叫，熊跑到湖里去洗眼睛了。 camp. 133 高中英语高分作文 审题构思 M ⑨信息萃取 1.who:“我”、妻子Eli、一只年轻的雄性北极熊、营地管理员 2.where:加拿大马尼托巴省丘吉尔镇外的北极熊研究营地 3.when:秋天（拍摄北极熊期间） 4.what:“我”和妻子Ei在加拿大丘吉尔镇的研究营地拍摄北极熊时，一只雄性北极熊被食 物香味吸引，试图冲破营地围栏闯入，两人尝试多种驱熊方法无效，最终用胡椒喷雾暂 时逼退北极熊，等待直升机救援 5.wy:蒜香面包气味吸引了饥饿的北极熊，试图冲破营地围栏，“我”和Eli面临被熊闯入的 危险，需在直升机到达前阻止它 6.ow:①“我”和Ei:做饭时被熊吸引→因熊试图破栏而恐惧→尝试吼叫、敲击锅、鸣枪等方 法驱熊→担心围栏撑不住→按建议用胡椒喷雾逼退熊 ②北极熊：被香味吸引到营地→撕咬、推撞围栏→被喷雾后愤怒吼叫着跑去湖边洗 眼睛 ③营地经理：通过无线电告知直升机将至，建议使用胡椒喷雾 7.theme:自然环境中近距离接触野生动物的危险与挑战、紧急情况下的应对与求生 @情节设计 (A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. 承接句（北极熊的举动） 一所做（动作）the polar bear 第一段 (北极熊重返营地后我 们的举动) 尾句危机持续上演) 所做（动作）the polar bear 写 架 (At that very moment,the helicopter arrived. 第二段 承接句（北极熊见到直升机的反应） 所做（动作） the polar bear (直升机抵达，我们脱 险及感悟) 尾句（我们的感悟） 所想（心理） I,Elli 初稿搭建 几分钟后，北极熊回到了我们的营地。喷雾让它更愤怒了。我们害怕极了。Ei把蒜 香面包扔过围栏。北极熊停止攻击，跑向面包吃起来。但没过多久，它吃完面包又回来了。 就在这时，直升机到了。直升机的噪音吓到了北极熊。我拉着E朝直升机跑去。北 极熊吼叫着，在我们登上直升机时冲破了围栏。我意识到，敏捷的思维和彼此间的信任把恐 惧转化为了生存的希望。 A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp.The spray angered him.We were extremely scared.Elli threw garlic bread over the fence.The bear stopped attacking,ran to the bread,and ate it.But soon,he finished the bread and came back. At that very moment,the helicopter arrived.Its noise scared the bear.I pulled Elli to the helicopter.The bear roared,breaking the fence as we climbed on.I realized quick thinking and trust turned fear to the hope of survival. L//////////////////71 高分润色 I A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. The spray had only made him angrier-he hit the fence harder, growling loud enough to make the ground shake.My heart raced,and I gripped the pepper spray tight..③“Try this！”④Eli cried,snatching several pieces of garlic bread and tossing them over the fence.⑤It worked！⑥The bear stopped the attack,ran to the bread,nose to the ground,and gobbled them up.But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again, slamming the fence once more.The bread had only bought us moments. At that very moment,the helicopter arrived.Its loud noise scared the bear..⑨“EIi,quick！”I pulled her toward the helicopter.The bear let out a loud roar,finally breaking through the fence as we climbed aboard.Looking down,we saw it tearing at our camp supplies.Who knew a little bread could stall a polar bear？:”Elli panted,still shaky.⑤t hit us then:nature never acts as we plan-one minute the fence held.the next it didn't.But in that chaos,quick thinking and trust turned fear to survival.We came to photograph wildness,but left learning to respect its power. 几分钟后，那头熊回到了我们的营地。喷雾反倒让它 更愤怒了一它更用力地撞击围栏，咆哮声大得仿佛能让 地面震动。我的心跳得飞快，紧紧攥着防熊喷雾。“试试这 个！”E大喊着，抓起几块蒜香面包扔过围栏。这招奏效 了！熊停下攻击，朝面包跑去，鼻子贴着地面，狼吞虎咽地 吃了起来。可没过多久，它就吃光了所有面包，再次折返， 又一次猛撞围栏。面包只给我们争取了片刻时间。 就在这时，直升机到了。巨大的声响吓到了熊。“E, 快！”我拉着她朝直升机跑去。熊发出一声巨吼，就在我们爬 上飞机时，它终于撞破了围栏。往下看，我们看见它正在撕扯 营地的补给品。“谁能想到几小块面包竟能拖住一头北极熊 呢？”气喘吁吁地说，声音还在发颤。那一刻我们突然明 白：大自然从来不会按我们的计划行事一前一秒围栏还好 好的，下一秒就被撞破了。但在这样的混乱中，敏捷的思维与 彼此的信任将恐惧化为了生存的希望。我们来是为了拍摄野 生动物的野性，离开时却学会了敬畏它的力量。 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 SEAL四维元素 心理刻画句： ②“My heart raced”直抒内心慌 乱，“gripped..tight”以动作强化 紧张感。 ④“panted,still shaky'”用呼吸与 肢体状态的细节，传递E刚从危 机中脱身的余悸。 动作设计句： ①“hit the fence harder”“growling” “make the ground shake”凸显危机 升级。 ④“snatching'”“tossing”刻画Eli 临危时的果断。 ⑥“stopped the attack”“ran to the bread”“gobbled them up”三个连 贯动作，清晰呈现熊被食物吸引的 转变，又以“nose to the ground”的 细节增强画面感。 ⑩“pulled her toward”体现“我” 在获救时机出现时的本能反应。 ①“let out a loud roar”“breaking through”与“we climbed aboard” 形成对照，强化脱险的紧迫感。 ②“tearing at our camp supplies” 呼应前文北极熊对食物的渴望。 氛围衬托句： ⑤“It worked!”以简短感叹打破 紧绷的节奏。 ⑦用转折否定前文的短暂平静， “slamming the fence once more'”凸 显困境的反复与绝望感。 ⑧以直升机的声响营造转折氛围。 言语设计句： ③“Try this！”短句急促有力，推动 情节转向关键行动。 ⑨以祈使句传递紧迫感，强化获救 瞬间的张力。 ⑧用反问带出生动的自嘲，让人物 互动更显真实。 FEST结尾仪式 ⑤以“nature never acts as we plan” 总结自然的不可预测，用“quick thinking and trust'”回扣前文Eli的 应变与两人的协作，最终落点 “respect its power'”,升华对野生动物 与自然的敬畏主题，呼应原文“拍 摄需保持安全距离”的初衷。 135 高中英语高分作文 规范誊写 N A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. At that very moment,the helicopter arrived. 高分秘籍 VVVD111100131071101010300000110000070131110100110000113017001170100 1.【动作设计句】原句：The spray had only made him angrier一he hit the fence harder,growling loud enough to make the ground shake. 仿写：驱赶反倒让蜜蜂更狂躁一它们扑得更猛，嗡嗡声大得能盖过说话声。 2.【氛围t衬托句】原句：But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again, slamming the fence once more.The bread had only bought us moments. 仿写：可没过多久，风又卷着雨点砸来，窗户被打得噼啪作响。刚才的停雨不过是给了我们 片刻喘息。 3.【言语+动作设计句】原句：“Who knew a little bread could stall a polar bear??”Elli panted, still shaky. 仿写：“你慢点跑！别摔了！”他喊着，脚步却不由自主地加快跟上。 4.【结尾升华句（内心感悟式）】原句：It hit me then:nature never acts as we plan一one minute the fence held,the next it didn't.But in that chaos,quick thinking and trust turned fear to survival.We came to photograph wildness,but left learning to respect its power. 仿写：那一刻我突然明白：生活从不会按计划进行一前一秒还一帆风顺，下一秒就可能遇 到阻碍。但在这种变数里，坚持与互助能把困境变成成长。我们本是为了完成任务，却最终 学会了拥抱变化的勇气。 L41/////////////7777777 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 实战演练12 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My cousin Max was the most admired person in all of Boston.By the age of 19,he was a star basketball player at Harvard University.I wanted to be just like him.So when Max asked me to join him on a spring hiking trip in the White Mountains of New Hampshire,I said yes! After planning the trip,we gathered clothes and supplies and then set off on our adventure.We reached the White Mountains National Forest by early evening.On the way to our campsite,Max pointed to a small house far away in one of the mountains,saying that it was the ranger station where the foresters worked. Max knew all the tricks of an experienced camper.After we gathered enough wood from the forest floor,he started the campfire using only a flint and steel-no matches.After a day of traveling,we were very hungry.We ate chicken and pasta and some stew as well. Exhausted,we crawled into our sleeping bags early.Max was still talking about his past camping adventures when a chilling wind picked up from the north.The temperature dropped,and it began to snow.Max knew of a way to increase the temperature inside the tent.He dragged a log from the woods and placed it near the campfire,using a fire reflector to direct the heat into the tent. Soon,the tent was warm again,and thoughts of the mountain trails filled my dreams. I was still dreaming when Max woke me up in a panic.Our tent was on fire!The snow had stopped during the night,but the wind had fanned the flames of the fire towards our tent.Frightened by the flames,I ran out of the tent immediately.The tent collapsed with Max inside.Without any hesitation,I reached into the burning tent,grabbed him,and dragged him to the frozen lake.We checked each other to make sure neither of us was hurt. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 Later,as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm,we considered our situation. Suddenly,we heard a noise in the forest. .137Lucas was frozen in shock when the teacher handed him that class picture.He stood up slowly,the envelope trembling in his hands."No,I didn't...,"he murmured,cheeks reddening.Miss Carter smiled, "Your classmates did."Lucas raised his head;his gaze swept across the room until it found mine.I gave him a small wave.Around us,everyone began to clap-some knowing the whole story,others just sharing the joy. Lucas's eyes brimmed,but this time they were tears of gratitude.A surge of warmth filled my chest.I finally got Mom's words:when you look with your heart,even a single dollar can wrap a friend in lasting warmth. 突然，我想到了Lucas。他能付得起那额外一美 元的班级合影钱吗？我记起他外套里那件单薄的衬 衫。铃声一响，我就朝走廊里的朋友们飞奔过去。 我们掏空了口袋：两个25美分硬币、三个10美分硬 币，还有一把1美分硬币—刚好够。“这次，咱们 给Lucas一个笑的理由。”我轻声说。我们把硬币拿 给Carter老师，让她保密。她笑着点了，点头。走回 教室时，我感觉轻松了些，仿佛从前我们对Lucas的 嘲笑，都变成了某种温暖的东西。两天后，照片 到了。 老师把那张班级合影递给Lucas时，他惊得一 动不动。他慢慢站起身，信封在手里微微发抖。他 喃喃道：“不，我没…”，脸颊泛红。Carter老师笑 了：“是你的同学们付的。”Lucas抬起头，目光在教 室扫视着，直到与我的目光相遇。我朝他轻轻挥了 挥手。周围的人都鼓起掌来—有的知道前因后 果，有的只是分享这份喜悦。Lucas眼眶湿润了，但 这次是感动的泪水。一股暖意涌上我的心头。我终 于懂了妈妈的话：用心去看，哪怕是一美元，也能给 朋友带去长久的温暖。 主题10险境求生 熊口脱险 高分秘籍 1.Swatting had only made the bees more excited- they swarmed harder,buzzing loud enough to drown out the talking. 2.But it wasn't long before the wind brought rain again, slamming against the windows.The brief pause of the rain had only given us a short breath. 3.“Run slower！Don't fall！”he called,his steps speeding up involuntarily to keep up. 4.It hit me then:life never goes as planned-one minute everything is smooth,the next obstacles appear.But in that uncertainty,persistence and mutual help turn difficulties into growth.We came to finish a task,but left learning the courage to embrace change. 实战演练12 Later,as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm,we considered our situation.Surrounded by the vast White Mountains National Forest and with all our supplies consumed by the fire,we felt utterly isolated. Wearing only thin underwear,we shivered violently.Our cries for help went unanswered,echoing in vain through the trees.“The ranger station！”Max exclaimed,his voice a mix of desperation and hope."We've got to get the foresters'attention!"We fed more wood into the fire, pinning all our hopes on someone noticing the smoke. After waiting what seemed like centuries,we were on the edge of mental collapse. Suddenly,we heard a noise in the forest.With it becoming louder and closer,a dark shape approached us一it was a forester！“That smoke was a pretty clear call for help,"he grinned,tapping his flashlight.We gratefully climbed into his warm vehicle as he put out the fire.On the way to the ranger station,we briefly explained what had happened and expressed our sincere gratitude for his prompt assistance.At the station,we put on some warm clothes and called our parents.Only then did I realize:survival isn't just luck it's the courage to act,even when all feels lost. 后来，我们站在燃烧的帐篷旁取暖，盘算着眼下 的处境。四周是广袤的怀特山国家森林，所有补给 都被大火吞噬，我们感到彻底的孤立无援。由于只 穿着单薄的内衣，我们被冻得瑟瑟发抖。呼救声没 有得到任何回应，只是徒劳地在树林里回荡。“护林 站！”Max惊呼，声音里夹杂着绝望与一丝希望，“我 们得让护林员注意到我们！”我们往火里添了更多 木柴，把所有希望都寄托在有人能看到这烟上。等 待仿佛持续了几个世纪，我们的精神已经濒临崩溃。 突然，我们听到森林里传来声响。随着声音越 来越近、越来越清晰，一个黑影朝我们走来一是护 林员！“那烟雾可是个相当明确的求救信号啊，”他 咧嘴一笑，用手电筒轻轻敲了敲手心。当他扑灭了 余火时，我们满怀感激地钻进了他那辆温暖的车里。 去护林站的路上，我们简单说了一下事情的经过，并 对他及时的帮助表达了诚挚的谢意。到了站里，我 们换上暖和的衣服，给父母打了电话。那一刻我才 明白：生存不只是靠运气—一即便在一切都看似无 望的时候，敢于行动的勇气至关重要。 153.