第2章 第4节 10大主题轻松搞定 主题5 师生情谊 -【载望】高中英语高分作文

高中英语高分作文 主题5 师生情谊 知遇之恩 真题导练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 ⊙主题同步 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2023年新课标卷When I was in middle 人教版必修第一册Unit1 Teenage Life school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a 北师大版必修第三册Unit7Art writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not 译林版必修第二册Unit4 Exploring Literature love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English ⊙参考译文 was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had 我上中学时，社会研究课老师让我参加 allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the 一场写作比赛。我想都没想就拒绝了。我不 Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the 喜欢写作。我们全家来自巴西，所以英语只 parts.No one laughed harder than he did. 是我的第二语言。写作对我来说既困难又痛 So,why did he suddenly force me to do 苦，以至于老师允许我通过表演一出戏剧来 something at which I was sure to fail?His reply: 呈现关于泰坦尼克号沉没的论文，剧中所有 "Because I love your stories.If you're willing to 角色都由我扮演。没人比他笑得更厉害。 apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at 那么，他为什么突然强迫我去做一件我 this."Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a 肯定会失败的事呢？他的回答是：“因为我喜 try. 欢你写的故事。如果你愿意努力，我觉得你 I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject.Paul 很有机会在这场比赛中取得好成绩。”听了 Revere was a silversmith (in Boston who rode 他的话，我受到鼓舞，同意试一试。 a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to 我选了Paul Revere的马作为写作主题。 warn people that British soldiers were coming.My Paul Revere是波士顿的一名银匠，1775年4 story would come straight from the horse's mouth. 月18日夜里，他骑马前往列克星敦，警告人 Not a brilliant idea,but funny,and unlikely to be 们英国士兵即将来袭。我的故事将通过这匹 anyone else's choice. 马的视角来讲述。这主意不算绝妙，但很有 What did the horse think,as he sped through 趣，而且不太可能被别人选到。 the night?Did he get tired?Have doubts?Did he 当这匹马在夜色中疾驰时，它在想什么 want to quit?I sympathized immediately.I got tired.呢？它会疲惫吗？会有疑虑吗？会想放弃 I had doubts..I wanted to quit..But,like Revere's吗？我立刻产生了共鸣。我会疲惫，会有疑 horse,I kept going.I worked hard..I checked my虑，会想放弃。但就像Revere的马一样，我继 spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my续坚持着。我努力写作，检查拼写，让姐姐帮 grammar.I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul我纠正语法错误，从图书馆借了六七本关于 Revere from the library.I even read a few of them. Paul Revere的书，还真读了几本。 When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he 我把文章交给老师时，他读了之后大声笑 read it,laughed out loud and said,“Great..Now,起来，然后说：“很棒。现在，重新写一遍。”我 write it again."I wrote it again,and again and 写了一遍又一遍。当我最终完成时，对获奖的 again.When I finally finished it,the thought of 渴望已经被写作的乐趣取代。就算没获奖，我 winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If 也不在乎了。 I didn't win,I wouldn't care. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. SL////////77/7/7777771 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 审题构思 VVV101F0310311107011317633711177073170171113773011031701711130017111730 ⑨信息萃取 1.who:我、社会研究课老师、“我的”姐姐、Paul Revere 2.where:学校、家、图书馆 3.when:中学时期 4.what:中学时，“我”不擅长写作，但在社会研究课老师的鼓励下参加写作比赛，以Paul Revere的马为视角创作，多次修改后，从在意输赢转变为享受写作过程 5.wy:“我”因英语是第二语言而畏惧写作，对参加比赛缺乏信心；老师的鼓励和自身的坚持 让“我”克服恐惧，投入创作 6.how:“我”本能拒绝写作比赛→被老师鼓励后尝试→以独特视角（马的视角）创作，努力查 资料、修改拼写及语法→多次修改后，从在意输赢转为享受写作 7.theme:老师的鼓励帮助“我”克服自我怀疑，并激发写作热情，知遇之恩不可忘 ⑨情节设计 (A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news. 所做（动作） 承接句（老师让“我”去他的办公室） 第一段 my social studies teacher (得知竞赛获奖及参 所说（言语） 加颁奖典礼)】 尾句(“我”领奖的场景) 所见（视觉） I,my social studies teacher 框 (I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.) 第二段 所做（动作） 承接句（老师的反应） my social studies (“我”去老师办公 teacher 室致谢) 所想（心理） 尾句(“我”的感悟) 一 所想（心理）I 初稿搭建 UV000080188008080808010118180080878800880181809049899000008878007178880 几周后，就在我快要忘记那场比赛的时候，消息传来了。老师告诉我，我在写作比赛中 得了第一名。我很震惊。第二天的颁奖仪式上，当我领奖时，很多人都用力鼓起了掌。老师 看起来非常自豪。 颁奖结束后，我去了老师的办公室。我向他道了谢。“做得好，孩子！”他说。他的话让 我更想写作了。我一直坚持写，我的更多作品被发表。这一切都要归功于我的社会研究课 老师。 A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.My teacher said I got first place in the writing contest.I was shocked.At the ceremony the next day,many people clapped loud when I got the prize.My teacher looked really proud. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.I expressed my gratitude to him. "Good job,my kid!"he said.His words made me want to write more.I kept writing and had more pieces printed.All of this was due to my social studies teacher. 109. 高中英语高分作文 高分润色 AVVU787800090078700009808080081811000071894709011070000714900170111900918 A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there SEAL四维元素 came the news.It was a Monday morning in spring,and my teacher called me to his office,telling me that I had taken first 氛围衬托句： place in the writing contest,a unigue achievement as a non-native ①时间与环境描写奠定了清新、充 English speaker.Stunned by the announcement,I stood there, 满希望的基调；并通过事件本身的 dumbfounded,until his laughter and a hug reassured me of my “独特性”，烘托出消息的意外与 victory.The next day,at the ceremony,thunderous applause 珍贵。 erupted as I accepted my award.Crowded as the audience was, I could clearly see the lovely guy clapping his hands excitedly,his ③以“thunderous applause”衬托 face beaming with pride. “我” 获奖时的荣耀感与现场的欢 I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. 庆感。 My teacher was there waiting for me,with a broad smile on his 心理刻画句： face.I expressed my gratitude to him:Without your ②通过“Stunned”“dumbfounded”直 encouragement,I wouldn't have been awarded the trophy. ⑦“Well done,my little horse！”he said.“Believe in yourself and 接刻画“我”得知获奖时震惊、难 keep writing.You will be a good writer!I replied with 以置信的心理状态。 determination,⑧“Thank you,sir.Iwil.”Inspired by his words,I ④以“beaming with pride”刻画 kept writing and published more pieces.Indeed,through the 内心的喜悦与认可。 contest,writing,which I once found tough and painful,gradually ⑤以老师“灿烂的笑容”传递出 became my lifelong pursuit,thanks to my social studies teacher's unyielding encouragement. 对“我”的肯定与关怀。 几周后，当我几乎都快忘了那场比赛时，消息传来了。 动作串联句： 那是春日里的一个周一早晨，老师把我叫到他的办公室，告 ②“stood there”“until his laughter 诉我在那次写作比赛中我获得了第一名，对于一个母语非 and a hug'”让场景更具连贯性。 英语的人来说，这可是一项了不起的成就。听到这个消息， ④“clapping”配合“beaming with 我惊呆了，愣愣地站在那儿，直到老师的笑声和一个拥抱让 pride”使动作与心理相互呼应。 我确信自己真的获胜了。第二天，在颁奖典礼上，当我上台 言语设计句： 领奖时，台下爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。尽管台下观众众多，但 我能清楚地看到那个可爱的家伙正兴奋地鼓掌，脸上洋溢 ⑥用虚拟语气表达对老师的感激。 着自豪的神情。 ⑦“用亲切的昵称“little horse”拉近 颁奖仪式结束后，我去了老师的办公室。老师就在那 距离，后续“Believe in yourself.”则 儿等着我，脸上挂着灿烂的笑容。我向他表达了感激之情： 充满鼓励与期许。 “要是没有您的鼓励，我不可能拿到这个奖杯。”“干得好，我 ⑧对话简洁却充满力量。 的小家伙！”他说道，“相信自己，继续写作，你会成为一名 ⊙FEST结尾仪式 优秀的作家的！”我坚定地回答：“谢谢您，老师，我会的。” ⑨通过对比“我”对写作态度的转变 受他话语的鼓舞，我坚持写作，发表了更多的作品。确实， 点明比赛与老师鼓励的深远影响； 通过那次比赛，曾经让我觉得艰难又痛苦的写作，渐渐成了 “thanks to..unyielding encouragement'” 我毕生的追求，这都要归功于我的社会研究课老师那始终 如一的鼓励。 升华主题，赋予故事更深层的意义。 1102//W//I/0 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 规范誊写 W A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. 高分秘籍 VA11810830700701107771101700013137381110770000787743800017300037178110 1.【氛围衬托句（时间+环境描写奠定基调）】原句：It was a Monday morning in spring,and my teacher called me to his office,telling me that I had taken first place in the writing contest,a unique achievement as a non-native English speaker. 仿写：那是夏日的一个午后，教练在训练结束后叫住我，说我入选了省游泳队，对于一个学游 泳才两年的人来说，这是一份莫大的肯定。 2.【心理刻画+动作串联句】原句：Stunned by the announcement,I stood there,dumbfounded, until his laughter and a hug reassured me of my victory. 仿写：听到这个意外的消息，我愣在原地，不知所措，直到妈妈递来一杯温水，轻声安慰，我才 缓过神来。 3.【结尾升华句（内心感悟式）】原句：ndeed,through the contest,.writing,which I once found tough and painful,gradually became my lifelong pursuit,thanks to my social studies teacher's unyielding encouragement. 仿写：的确，经过这场辩论赛，曾经让我感到紧张害怕的当众表达，慢慢成了我乐于尝试的新 技能，这都要归功于我的老师的耐心指导。 111. 高中英语高分作文 实战演练7 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2022年新高考卷It was the day of the big cross--country run.Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route ( through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David,who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong?He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened."I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,"he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not,and let him decide. I bit back my frustration ()I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted,I turned to find him coming towards me,his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children,but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer-that's all.David had not missed a single practice,and although he always finished his run long after the other children,he did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school,I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 We sat down next to each other,but David wouldn't look at me. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. W////7/77777777777777位老人所做的一切了。你放弃了自己需要的面条去 帮助他。”Lisa递给她那包面条，此刻这包面条已然 成为Emily慷慨之举的象征。“你为什么要这么做 呢？”Lisa一边问，一边打量着Emily破旧的衣服。 “无家可归的经历让我明白，善良就是一切，女士。 总得有人去帮助他。”Emily回答道，声音轻柔却十 分坚定。被她的话所触动，Lisa微笑着说：“明天早 上来商店吧。我或许能给你提供一个机会。”Emily 接受了，心中满是希望，却也有些不确定。 第二天早上，Emily怀着既焦虑又期待的复杂心 情来到商店。在那里，Lisa热情地迎接了她，并为了 奖励她的善良，给她提供了一份商店的兼职工作。 “这份工作薪水不高，但却是一个开始。”Lisa说道。 惊讶与感激之情涌上Emily的心头。“谢谢你，女 士。”她勉强说出这句话，声音因激动而颤抖。她不 敢相信一个小小的善举竟然给她带来了如此大的好 运。离开商店时，她的脚步变得轻快起来，一个更光 明的未来似乎触手可及，这也印证了善意之举确实 能够为更美好的明天打开大门。 主题5师生情谊 知遇之恩 高分秘籍 1.It was a summer afternoon,and the coach stopped me after training,telling me that I had made the provincial swimming team,a great recognition as someone who had been learning swimming for only two years. 2.Shocked by the unexpected news,I stood there,at a loss,until Mom handed me a cup of warm water and comforted me softly brought me back to my senses. 3.Indeed,through this debate competition,public speaking,which I once found nerve-wracking and frightening,gradually became a new skill I was willing to try,thanks to my teacher's patient guidance. 实战演练7 We sat down next to each other,but David wouldn't look at me.His confidence was in danger of bursting like a bubble.It was clear that he feared he would be judged by his appearance rather than his character.Knowing David trusted me,I cleared my throat and said,"Beautiful forest,isn't it?"Slowly and curiously,he raised his head and looked around.I continued,"Those trees never stop reaching for the sky,regardless of their position or shape.They never let others define them."On hearing this,David got up without a word.But there was a sparkle in his eyes- he had made a decision. I watched as David moved up to the starting line 1504/////W/W0 with the other runners.He received curious glances from other schools'runners but a warm welcome from his schoolmates.Then fired the starting pistol,and David dashed forward,tackling a course that strained even normal children,let alone someone with his condition.He bounded,hobbled,plodded,persistently pursuing his goal.The coach and I followed to the finish line,where classmates lined the track,screaming “Come on！You can make it!”To our delight,.David crossed 20th place,and the big,toothy smile returned to his face,making me feel incredibly proud. 我们并肩坐下，但David不肯看我。他的信心 仿佛一个即将破灭的泡泡，岌岌可危。显然，他担心 人们会因他的外表而非品格对他做出评判。我知道 David信任我，便清了清嗓子说：“这森林真美，不是 吗？”他带着一丝好奇，缓缓抬起头，环顾四周。我 继续说道：“那些树无论生长在什么位置、长成什么 形状，都在不停地向天空伸展。它们从不让别人定 义自己。”听到这话，David一言不发地站了起来。 但他的眼里闪着光—他已经做出了决定。 我看着David走到起跑线上，和其他选手站在 一起。他收到了其他学校选手好奇的目光，却得到 了本校同学热情的鼓励。发令枪响了，David冲了出 去。这段赛程对正常孩子来说都颇具挑战，更不用 说像他这样有特殊情况的人了。他一会儿跳跃，一 会儿蹒跚，一会儿又步履沉重地向前挪，执着地追逐 着自己的目标。我和教练跟随着他来到终点线，只 见同学们在跑道旁列队，大喊着：“加油！你一定 行！”让我们欣喜的是，David获得了第20名。他脸 上重新绽放出灿烂的露齿笑，这让我感到无比自豪。 主题6认知转变 名字的意义 高分秘籍 1.“My name,Mingyue,means‘bright moon'in Chinese.'Ming'symbolizes light and wisdom, while yue'represents tenderness and longing. Together,they create a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere.I like to imagine that each ray of moonlight illuminates a journey of the heart,every full moon holds a longing,and my name is the poetry that gently guards this light and care. 2.As I finished my childhood story,I sensed the atmosphere shift;warmth glowed in my classmates' eyes. 3.A look of pride spread across my face,and a sense of joy bubbled up in my heart as I demonstrated each step of making dumplings slowly,their anticipation shimmering in my fingers. 4.It was then that I realized:by teaching my