第2章 第4节 10大主题轻松搞定 主题8 动物情缘 -【载望】高中英语高分作文

主题8动物情缘 人鸟情未 真题导练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2023年浙江1月卷I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in western Washington.I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years.A noise at a window caught my attention,so I entered it.It was a hummingbird(蜂鸟)，desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider--webs（蛛网)and was barely able to move her wings.She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up. With the bird in my cupped hand,I looked around to see how she had gotten in.The broken window glass was the likely answer.I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside,closing the door securely behind me. When I opened my hand,the bird did not fly away;she sat looking at me with her bright eyes.I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings.Still,she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired?Or too thirsty? As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle,she began to move.I stopped,and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.Hovering（悬停)，she approached within six inches of my face.For a very long moment,this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side.Then she flew quickly out of sight. During the cookout,I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident.They promised to fix the window.As I was departing,my friends walked me to my car.I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering.She turned from person to person until she came to me.She again looked directly into my eyes,then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment,all were speechless.Then someone said,“She must have come to say goodbye.” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 A few weeks later,I went to the farm again. I was just about to leave when the hummingbird a 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 VIVUUUUVVV100V08000000808008008048000 ⊙主题同步 人教版必修第二册Unit2 Wildlife Protection 外研版必修第一册Unit5 Into the Wild 译林版必修第三册Unit 1 Nature in the Balance ⊙参考译文 我受邀去华盛顿州西部一位老朋友的农 场参加户外野餐会。我把车停在农场外，走 过一座显然已多年未用的挤奶房。一扇窗户 传来的声响引起了我的注意，于是我走了进 去。原来是一只蜂鸟，正拼命想要挣脱。它 浑身裹满蛛网，翅膀几乎动弹不得。我一把 将它抱起，它立刻就不再挣扎了。 我双手捧着这只鸟，环顾四周，想弄清楚 它是怎么进来的。答案很可能是那扇破碎的 窗户玻璃。我往洞口塞了一块布，然后带着 它走到外面，随手把身后的门牢牢关上。 我张开手时，鸟儿并没有飞走；它就那么 坐着，用明亮的眼睛望着我。我把襄在它头 部和翅膀上黏糊糊的蛛网弄掉。可它还是没 打算飞。也许它挣扎着想要挣脱窗户太久， 累坏了？又或者是太渴了？ 我沿着两旁长满黑莓的小径朝我的车走 去，车上放着我的水瓶，走在路上时，它开始 动弹起来。我停下脚步，不一会儿它就振翅 起飞，但并没有马上飞走。它悬停着，飞到离 我脸不到六英寸的地方。在很长一段时间 里，这个小生灵凝视着我的眼睛，脑袋左右转 动。然后它迅速飞走，消失在视野中。 野餐期间，我跟主人家讲了这只蜂鸟的 事。他们答应把窗户修好。我要离开的时 候，朋友们陪我走到车旁。我正站在车边，一 只蜂鸟飞到我们这群人中间，开始悬停。它 从一个人飞到另一个人身边，直到飞到我面 前。它又直直地望着我的眼睛，接着发出一 声吱吱的鸣叫，然后飞走了。一时间，所有人 都默默无言。过了一会儿，有人说道：“它肯 定是来告别的。” ppeared. a123. 高中英语高分作文 审题构思 M ⑨信息萃取 1.who:“我”、老友（农场主人）、其他客人、蜂鸟 2.where:朋友的农场 3.when:野餐当天 4.what:“我”在农场发现被困蛛网的蜂鸟，解救了它，蜂鸟短暂停留后飞走，“我”离开时，蜂鸟 再次飞来与“我”告别 5.wy:蜂鸟被困蛛网，“我”出于善意解救了它，蜂鸟两次与“我”互动 6.how:①“我”：发现被困蜂鸟后进入挤奶房救助→清理其身上的蛛网→带它找水时蜂鸟飞 走→离开时被蜂鸟再次找到，感到意外 ②蜂鸟：被困时拼命挣扎→被救后安静待在“我”手中→清理后飞走前与“我”对视→ 离开时飞回，在众人中找到“我”对视后离开 ③朋友及客人：承诺修好窗户一→见证蜂鸟道别，感到惊讶 7.theme:人与动物之间的善意与连结，以及救助行为带来的温暖回应 @情节设计 首句(A few weeks later,.I went to the farm again..) 承接句(“我”路过牛奶房时的心情) 所做（动作） 第一段 所想（心理） “我”对蜂鸟的回忆) 尾句(“我”离开牛奶房时的感受) 所做（动作） 续 所想（情绪） 框 (I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.) 第二段 承接句蜂鸟的状态) —所做（动作） the hummingbird (蜂鸟出现，“我”与 之互动) 尾句(“我”对这段经历的感悟) 所想（心理） 初稿搭建 几周后，我又去了农场。路过挤奶房时，我的情绪很复杂。我还能见到“她”吗？我打 开门，发现窗户上的洞已经补好了，却没看到她的踪影。 我正准备离开，蜂鸟出现了。她在我身前悬停。我满心欢喜。她落在我的掌心，随后就 飞走了。我望着她离去的身影，为生命的奇迹而惊叹。 A few weeks later,I went to the farm again.When passing the milking house,I had mixed feelings.Would I see "her"again?I opened the door and found the window hole was fixed,but there was no sign of her. I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.She was hovering before me.I felt delighted.She rested in my hands and then flew off.I watched,amazed by life's miracle. 24/I/I/II0 高分润色 W A few weeks later,I went to the farm again.When I walked past the milking house,my gaze unconsciously fell on it, and mixed feelings washed over me.Was another little creature trapped？Or would I meet“her”again？Every nerve in my body screamed for me to step inside.hesitated,and then pushed the door open.The air was thick with dust and the scent of old wood.I scanned the room:the hole in the window had been neatly patched,and there was no sign of her.Maybe she'd nested in a safer place.Disappointed,I lingered for a moment,an odd emptiness rising within me. I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. There she was,her green wings shining in the sunlight,hovering right in front of me..⑦A cry of joy escaped my throat.®“Hey,old gil！How's everything？”I whispered..⑩She settled into my cupped hands and looked up at me,just like before.I felt her tiny body tremble,then she let out a soft squeak and vanished into the sky.I watched her disappear,awestruck by the miracle of life.Right then I knew every heartbeat was precious,deserving kindness;even the smallest gesture could light up a creature's whole world. 几周后，我又去了那个农场。路过挤奶屋时，目光不自 觉地落在了那里，百感交集涌上心头。会不会又有小生灵 被困住了？能再见到“她”吗？身体里的每根神经都在驱 使我进去看看。我犹豫了一下，推开了门。空气中弥漫着 浓重的灰尘和旧木头的味道。我环顾房间：窗户上的破洞 已经被仔细补好了，却没有她的踪迹。或许她在更安全的 地方筑了巢吧。我失望地驻足片刻，心里升起一种莫名的 空落。 就在我准备离开时，那只蜂鸟出现了。她就在那儿，翠 绿的翅膀在阳光下闪闪发亮，就在我面前悬停着。我不禁 发出一声喜悦的惊呼。“嘿，老伙计！一切都好吗？”我轻 声说。她像上次一样，落在我托着的手掌里，抬头望着我。 我能感觉到她小小的身体在微微颤抖，接着她发出一声轻 柔的鸣叫，消失在天空中。我望着她远去的身影，对生命的 奇迹由衷敬畏。那一刻我明白，每一次心跳都弥足珍贵，都 值得被善待；哪怕是最微小的善举，也能照亮一个生命的整 个世界。 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 SEAL四维元素 心理刻画句： ①通过“unconsciously fell'”“mixed feelings”外化“我”对挤奶屋的特殊 关注，连续设问进一步展现内心的 矛盾与牵挂。 ⑤“Disappointed”直抒胸臆，“lingered” 的动作与“odd emptiness”的心理感受 相呼应。 ⑦以“A cry of joy”生理反应具象 化内心的狂喜，“escaped”生动表 现出情感的自然流露。 ①“awestruck”直接点出对生命 的敬畏之情。 动作设计句： ②“hesitated”与“pushed”呼应 “mixed feelings'”的心理矛盾，又暗 含“我”对生命的持续关注。 ④“scanned”展现“我”的急切寻 找，而“neatly patched”呼应原文主 人的承诺，“no sign of her'”则强化 了未见蜂鸟的失落感。 ⑥通过“shining”“hovering”刻画蜂 鸟的灵动，“right in front of me”的空 间定位凸显重逢的惊喜与亲近感。 ⑨“settled”“looked up”复刻了前 文互动场景。 ①“tremble'”“let out a soft squeak” “vanished”引发对生命相遇与离 别的感慨。 氛围衬托句： ③通过“thick with dust'”“scent of old wood”与前文“多年未用”的设定呼 应，同时以环境的“静”反衬“我”内 心的“动”（对生命的牵挂）。 言语设计句： ⑧“Hey,old girl”的称呼亲昵自 然，“whispered”表现“我”的珍视 (不忍惊扰)。 ⊙FEST结尾仪式 ②“every heartbeat was precious”点 明“敬畏生命”的核心，“smallest gesture could light up.”则强调善 举对生命的意义。 L125 高中英语高分作文 规范誊写 w A few weeks later,I went to the farm again. I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. 高分秘籍 1.【动作设计+心理刻画句】原句：When I walked past the milking house,my gaze unconsciously fell on it,and mixed feelings washed over me. 仿写：当我翻开那本泛黄的日记时，指尖不自觉地摩挲着封面，万千思绪在心底翻涌。 2.【心理刻画句】原句：Disappointed,I lingered for a moment,.an odd emptiness rising within me. 仿写：欣慰之余，我在原地静立片刻，一股温暖的暖流在胸中缓缓涌动。 3.【动作设计句】原句：There she was,her green wings shining in the sunlight,hovering right in front of me. 仿写：它就在那儿，橘色的皮毛在月光下泛着柔光，静静地蹲坐在我的车旁边。 4.【结尾升华句（内心感悟式）】原句：Right then I knew every heartbeat was precious,deserving kindness;even the smallest gesture could light up a creature's whole world. 仿写：那一刻我明白，每一段相遇都值得珍惜，都应被温柔以待；哪怕是一句简单的问候，也 能温暖一个人的漫长岁月。 ///////7/7//77777777 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 实战演练10 VVVUB180010017801100701103007801000311110001311010018110001831001110 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Our family has two dogs,Bella and Bandit.We took in both the mixed breed dogs after they were abandoned in the country.We live in an area between city and country.This area is rich with farmland,woods,and various animals.Both of our dogs constantly want to run and will do so at any given opportunity.I have to keep them chained,even though my yard is fenced,so that I do not have to pay any fines for recovering them from the city pound(流浪狗收留所). This morning I made the silly mistake of waiting until the last possible minute to put the dogs out.As I was walking the first one out,the second ran past me in a surprisingly fast move and she was gone.I called for her to return,but she chose to ignore my commands and headed off for a day of joy.Having a disobedient(不服从的)dog really upset me.I said goodbye to the dog and went about my business.Anyway,when I picked up my daughter from school,I just happened to mention that Bella might be missing.“I'll tell you this！If she has been caught by the cops(警察)，I will not be paying her fines this time,"I said. I noticed that my daughter had her head turned away from me and was silent for over 5 minutes. I asked,“Are you mad at me?”“Yes,Iam,”she replied,now looking at me calmly.“Why does this upset you so much?"I wondered out loud."Bella obviously does not care for her living arrangements here,or she would not run off every time she has a chance,would she?"I cleverly remarked. I have never noticed my daughter spending much time with this dog,so I could not imagine that the thought of losing her would be so painful.In my mind,I have given Bella a nice home.If she is silly enough to leave all that behind to chase some neighbor's cows,then "goodbye"is my attitude. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 I saw tears welling up in my daughter's eyes. After a long,stressful night,we finally received a call from the city pound. 127Kim和Echo放松地坐下，欣赏着周围的森林。 阳光透过树叶洒下来，他们打开午餐时，衬衫上印着 斑驳的光点。潺潺的溪流声当作背景音乐，三明治 吃起来格外香甜。“真高兴有你在，我的大朋友！” Kim咧嘴笑着，对Echo轻声说。Echo笑了起来，扔 给他一个苹果：“跟你说过—一我们是超棒的搭 档。”起身准备出发时，Kim的脚步轻快了许多，仿佛 自信化作了靴底的一，点弹跳力。“准备好迎接下一 场冒险了吗？”Echo问。Kim点点头，眼中闪烁着崭 新的勇气：“有你在身边？随时都准备着。” 主题8动物情缘 人鸟情未了 高分秘籍 1.When I opened the yellowed diary,my fingertips brushed its cover unconsciously,and a flood of thoughts surged within me. 2.Grateful,I lingered for a moment,a warm current flowing slowly in my chest. 3.There it was,its orange fur glowing softly in the moonlight,sitting quietly at my car. 4.Right then I knew every encounter was precious, deserving tenderness;even a simple greeting could warm a person's long years. 实战演练10 I saw tears welling up in my daughter's eyes. "Dad,don't you know how Bella greets me every day after school and comforts me when I'm sad?If Bella's at the pound,no one will adopt her,and they might have to put her down."She sobbed.It hit me then that Bella was more than just a pet to her-she was a friend.I felt a wave of guilt washing over me,my resolve melting like ice in the sun.We searched high and low for Bella,but night seeped in,leaving us empty-handed.Eventually,my daughter fell asleep, exhausted by her tears,in my comforting arms. After a long,stressful night,we finally received a call from the city pound.Bella had been found!My daughter sprang up,her sneakers thudding against the floor.We rushed to the pound,and the moment Bella bounded into her arms,licking her cheek-no words could hold that warmth.Back home,I immediately strengthened the fence,determined to prevent any more escapes.That afternoon,as we sat on the porch with Bella at our feet,basking in the warm golden sunlight, we were filled with gratitude and a newfound appreciation for the love and loyalty our pets brought into our lives.We grinned,hearts brimming with happiness. 我看见女儿眼里噙满了泪水。“爸爸，你难道不 1522/////WW 知道Bella每天放学都来接我，在我难过的时候安慰 我吗？要是Bela被送到收容所，没人会收养它的， 他们可能会把它安乐死的。”她抽泣着说。那一刻 我才意识到，对女儿来说，Bela绝不仅仅是一只宠 物—一而是一个朋友。一阵愧疚涌上心头，我的固 执像阳光下的冰雪般消融了。我们四处寻找Bela, 可夜色渐渐弥漫开来，最终还是一无所获。女儿哭 得力竭，在我安抚的臂弯里沉沉睡去。 熬过了漫长又揪心的一夜，我们终于接到了市 流浪狗收容所的电话一找到Blla了！女儿猛地 跳起来，运动鞋在地板上咚咚作响。我们飞奔到收 容所，Blla一跃扑进她怀里，舔着她的脸颊—一那 份温暖，任何言语都难以形容。回到家，我立刻加固 了围栏，下定决心绝不能再让它跑出去了。那天下 午，当我们坐在门廊上，Bela趴在脚边，沐浴在温暖 的金色阳光里时，心中满是感激，也重新体会到宠物 带给我们生活的爱与忠诚。我们相视而笑，心里洋 溢着满满的幸福。 主题9同学交往 项目合作 高分秘籍 1.In the empty studio,I picked up the faded paintbrush,the memory of his old words "you have no talent"echoing:I'd never be a painter. 2.We shared one umbrella,swapping hands as if passing a silent care.Each time I stepped into a puddle,she leaned the umbrella toward me,not away. 3.The awkwardness between us gradually turned into wordless glances and the rustle of pen tips brushing against workbooks. 4.I understood then:the championship trophy we would share mattered less than the friendship we'd built.Real victory isn't the rank on the medal,but the moment two people stop seeing“rivals”and start seeing partners. 实战演练11 Then suddenly,I thought of Lucas.Could he pay the extra dollar for the class picture?I remembered the thin shirt under his coat.The bell rang;I sprinted to my friends.We emptied our pockets:two quarters, three dimes,and a handful of cents-just enough. "This time,let's give Lucas a reason to smile."I whispered.We took the coins to Miss Carter and asked her to keep our secret.She smiled and nodded. Walking back to class,I felt lighter,as if the laughter we once aimed at Lucas had turned into something warm.Two days later,the pictures arrived.