第2章 第4节 10大主题轻松搞定 主题4 和谐社会 -【载望】高中英语高分作文

说不定真能救我们。”怀揣着共同的梦想，iy拒绝 了那家顶级餐厅的邀约，转而在回馈这个见证自己 起步的地方时，找到了真正的满足感。想到 Vittorio's的未来，她心中满是期待，深知自己的人生 道路从此充满了意义与方向。 主题4和谐社会 陌生温情 高分秘籍 1.After a moment of anxious hesitation,she finally spoke,tears welling up in the corners of her eyes. 2.Filled with joy,I took the gift she handed over,held it tightly in my arms,and didn't unpack it until she waved goodbye with a smile. 3.Her cheers echoed from across the playground as I spotted the certificate waving in her hand. 4.That failed experiment had not only taught me the importance of rigor but also brought me a group of partners fighting side by side.The teacher's encouragement had transformed a frustrating setback into the most precious medal in my growth. 实战演练5 At 10:00 a.m.,the doorbell rang,and there was my mother,smiling,with a young man by her side. Though a bit winded,she was in good spirits and clearly unharmed.Before I could speak,the young man explained how he'd found her looking lost and anxious on the unfamiliar streets."I was on my morning run when I came across your mom,"he said, his eyes crinkling with a warm smile."With the only clue that your house was near a park,we managed to find our way back."Despite the two-hour effort,they had made it safe and sound. After learning what had happened,I heartily thanked him.I invited him inside to join us for a cup of coffee,but he politely declined,saying,"I'm glad I could bring your mother home safely.I hope someone will do the same for my parents someday.His face shone with sincerity as he spoke.With a gentle smile, he left without even sharing his name.His heartfelt words went straight to my heart.From that day on, whenever I encounter someone in need,I always extend a helping hand,hoping to pass on the kindness the young man offered us. 上午10点，门铃响了，门口站着妈妈，她面带微 笑，身边还有一个年轻人。妈妈虽然有点气喘，但精 神不错，显然没受什么伤。我还没来得及开口，那个 年轻人就解释说，他是在陌生的街道上发现妈妈茫 然又焦急地站着的。“我早上跑步的时候碰到了你 妈妈，”他说着，眼角泛起温暖的笑意，“只知道你家 在公园附近，我们还是想办法找回来了。”尽管花了 两个小时，他们终究平安到家了。 弄清事情的来龙去脉后，我由衷地向他道谢，还 邀请他进屋喝杯咖啡，但他礼貌地拒绝了：“能把你 妈妈安全送回来，我很高兴。希望有一天，也会有人 这样对待我的父母。”他说这话时，脸上满是真诚。 他温和地笑了笑，甚至没留下名字就离开了。他的 肺腑之言深深触动了我。从那天起，每当遇到需要 帮助的人，我总会伸出援手，希望能把这位年轻人给 予我们的善意传递下去。 邻里互助 高分秘籍 1.An idea for a charity sale was quietly born among the classroom desks. 2.The nervous girl lingered at the stage entrance,but the teacher gave her an "encouraging"hug. 3.After a deep breath,she managed a nervous "Hi everyone-I made cookies,would anyone like a taste?” 4.The bag grew heavier with medicines and clothes from neighbors,while the boy's steps became lighter with the warmth of being cared for. 实战演练6 When Emily left the store and headed to her tent, Lisa stopped her.“Wait,please!'”Lisa said,“Isaw what you did for that elderly man.You gave up the noodles you needed to help him."Lisa handed her the packet of noodles,now a symbol of Emily's generosity. "Why did you do it?"Lisa asked,eyeing Emily's worn clothes."Being homeless taught me that kindness is everything,lady.Someone had to help him."Emily replied,her voice soft but resolute.Touched by her words,Lisa smiled and said,"Come to the store tomorrow morning.I may have an opportunity for you. Emily accepted,hopeful but uncertain. The next morning,Emily approached the store with a mix of anxiety and hope.There,Lisa greeted her warmly,offering a part-time position at the store as a reward for her kindness."It's not much,but it's a start,"Lisa said.Surprise and gratitude flooded Emily's eyes."Thank you,lady,"she managed to say,her voice trembling with emotion.She couldn't believe a small act of humanity would bring her such a big fortune.As she left,her step was lighter,and a brighter future seemed within reach,affirming that deeds of compassion can indeed open doors to a better tomorrow. 当Emily离开商店，朝着她的帐篷走去时，Lisa 叫住了她。“请等一下！”Lisa说道，“我看到你为那 149 位老人所做的一切了。你放弃了自己需要的面条去 帮助他。”Lisa递给她那包面条，此刻这包面条已然 成为Emily慷慨之举的象征。“你为什么要这么做 呢？”Lisa一边问，一边打量着Emily破旧的衣服。 “无家可归的经历让我明白，善良就是一切，女士。 总得有人去帮助他。”Emily回答道，声音轻柔却十 分坚定。被她的话所触动，Lisa微笑着说：“明天早 上来商店吧。我或许能给你提供一个机会。”Emily 接受了，心中满是希望，却也有些不确定。 第二天早上，Emily怀着既焦虑又期待的复杂心 情来到商店。在那里，Lisa热情地迎接了她，并为了 奖励她的善良，给她提供了一份商店的兼职工作。 “这份工作薪水不高，但却是一个开始。”Lisa说道。 惊讶与感激之情涌上Emily的心头。“谢谢你，女 士。”她勉强说出这句话，声音因激动而颤抖。她不 敢相信一个小小的善举竟然给她带来了如此大的好 运。离开商店时，她的脚步变得轻快起来，一个更光 明的未来似乎触手可及，这也印证了善意之举确实 能够为更美好的明天打开大门。 主题5师生情谊 知遇之恩 高分秘籍 1.It was a summer afternoon,and the coach stopped me after training,telling me that I had made the provincial swimming team,a great recognition as someone who had been learning swimming for only two years. 2.Shocked by the unexpected news,I stood there,at a loss,until Mom handed me a cup of warm water and comforted me softly brought me back to my senses. 3.Indeed,through this debate competition,public speaking,which I once found nerve-wracking and frightening,gradually became a new skill I was willing to try,thanks to my teacher's patient guidance. 实战演练7 We sat down next to each other,but David wouldn't look at me.His confidence was in danger of bursting like a bubble.It was clear that he feared he would be judged by his appearance rather than his character.Knowing David trusted me,I cleared my throat and said,"Beautiful forest,isn't it?"Slowly and curiously,he raised his head and looked around.I continued,"Those trees never stop reaching for the sky,regardless of their position or shape.They never let others define them."On hearing this,David got up without a word.But there was a sparkle in his eyes- he had made a decision. I watched as David moved up to the starting line 1504/////W/W0 with the other runners.He received curious glances from other schools'runners but a warm welcome from his schoolmates.Then fired the starting pistol,and David dashed forward,tackling a course that strained even normal children,let alone someone with his condition.He bounded,hobbled,plodded,persistently pursuing his goal.The coach and I followed to the finish line,where classmates lined the track,screaming “Come on！You can make it!”To our delight,.David crossed 20th place,and the big,toothy smile returned to his face,making me feel incredibly proud. 我们并肩坐下，但David不肯看我。他的信心 仿佛一个即将破灭的泡泡，岌岌可危。显然，他担心 人们会因他的外表而非品格对他做出评判。我知道 David信任我，便清了清嗓子说：“这森林真美，不是 吗？”他带着一丝好奇，缓缓抬起头，环顾四周。我 继续说道：“那些树无论生长在什么位置、长成什么 形状，都在不停地向天空伸展。它们从不让别人定 义自己。”听到这话，David一言不发地站了起来。 但他的眼里闪着光—他已经做出了决定。 我看着David走到起跑线上，和其他选手站在 一起。他收到了其他学校选手好奇的目光，却得到 了本校同学热情的鼓励。发令枪响了，David冲了出 去。这段赛程对正常孩子来说都颇具挑战，更不用 说像他这样有特殊情况的人了。他一会儿跳跃，一 会儿蹒跚，一会儿又步履沉重地向前挪，执着地追逐 着自己的目标。我和教练跟随着他来到终点线，只 见同学们在跑道旁列队，大喊着：“加油！你一定 行！”让我们欣喜的是，David获得了第20名。他脸 上重新绽放出灿烂的露齿笑，这让我感到无比自豪。 主题6认知转变 名字的意义 高分秘籍 1.“My name,Mingyue,means‘bright moon'in Chinese.'Ming'symbolizes light and wisdom, while yue'represents tenderness and longing. Together,they create a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere.I like to imagine that each ray of moonlight illuminates a journey of the heart,every full moon holds a longing,and my name is the poetry that gently guards this light and care. 2.As I finished my childhood story,I sensed the atmosphere shift;warmth glowed in my classmates' eyes. 3.A look of pride spread across my face,and a sense of joy bubbled up in my heart as I demonstrated each step of making dumplings slowly,their anticipation shimmering in my fingers. 4.It was then that I realized:by teaching my高中英语高分作文 主题4和谐社会 陌生温情 真题导练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2024年新课标卷I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September.I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference.Due to a big storm,my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half.I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague.The moment I got off the plane,I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.That was when I met Gunter.I told him where I was going,but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station.I thought my pronunciation was the problem,so I explained again more slowly,but he still looked confused.When I was about to give up,Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend.After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century,Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally,with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station.Thankfully,there was a long queue still waiting to board the bus.Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus,turned around,and looked at me with a big smile on his face..“We made it,” he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet.I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.He tried it several times,but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment,Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station.There,at the entrance,was a cash machine.I jumped out of the car,made a mad run for the machine,and popped my card in,only to read the message:"Out of order.Soy.” L//////////1////1//11 M ⊙主题同步 人教版必修第二册Unit2 Morals and Virtues 外研版必修第一册Unit4 Friends Forever 译林版必修第一册 Unit 3 Getting Along with Others ⊙参考译文 九月里一个寒冷、潮湿且令人难忘的夜 晚，我遇见了Gunter。我原本计划飞往维也 纳，再乘巴士去布拉格参加一场会议。由于 一场大风暴，我的航班延误了一个半小时。 我在去布拉格的最后一班巴士发车前30分 钟才抵达维也纳。一下飞机，我就疯狂地跑 过机场大楼，不假思索地跳进了出租车排队 处的第一辆出租车。就在那时，我遇到了 Gunter。我告诉他我要去的地方，但他说没听 说过那个巴士站。我以为是我的发音有问 题，于是更慢地又解释了一遍，可他看起来还 是很困惑。就在我快要放弃的时候，Gunter 掏出他的小手机，给一个朋友打了电话。一 场热烈的讨论持续了仿佛一个世纪之久，之 后Gunter放下手机，发动了汽车。 终于，在仅剩两分钟的时候，我们驶进了 巴士站。谢天谢地，还有一长队人在等着上 车。Gunter把出租车停在巴士后面，转过身， 脸上挂着灿烂的笑容看着我。“我们做到 了，”他说。就在这时，我意识到钱包里一分 现金都没有。我一边歉意地对他笑笑，一边 掏出我的葡萄牙银行卡。他试了好几次，但 刷卡机就是不识别。看着巴士队伍越来越 短，一种无助感涌上我的心头。 就在这时，Gunter指向巴士站的候车大 厅。在入口处，有一台自动取款机。我跳下 车，疯狂地朝取款机跑去，把卡插了进去，结 果却看到这样的提示信息：“故障中。抱歉。” 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised. 审题构思 VVV000001000001001170068007070000001000100190807001700001901107000171070 ⑨信息萃取 1.who:“我”、出租车司机Gunter 2.where:维也纳机场、出租车内、维也纳巴士站 3.when:九月的一个寒冷夜晚 4.what:“我”因航班延误急需赶最后一班去布拉格的巴士，打车时司机Gunter起初不熟悉车 站位置，经电话询问后及时将“我”送到；但“我”遇到支付问题（无现金、银行卡在司机 的刷卡机中无法使用、取款机故障) 5.wy:“我”急需赶巴士却面临交通（航班延误、司机不熟悉公交车站）和支付（无现金、银行 卡无法使用)双重难题 6.ow:①“我”：因航班延误焦急赶时间→因司机不熟悉车站而担忧→及时到达后因支付问题 陷入困境 ②Gunter:从困惑（不熟悉车站）→积极求助朋友→成功送达后开心→面对支付问题的 表现（过程中配合尝试刷卡）》 7.theme:旅途中的意外与困境、陌生人的帮助与善意、紧急情况应对方式 @情节设计 (I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. 所说（语言） 承接句(Gunter的反应) 第一段 Gunter (“我”告知Gunteri这 所感（情绪） 个坏消息及达成约定) 尾句(“我”坐上巴土离开) 所做（动作） 续 架 (Four days later back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised.) 第二段 承接句(Gunter接到电话的反应) 所做（动作） Gunter （“我”回维也纳联 系GunterZ及后续见面) 尾句(“我”的感悟) 一所感（心理） 1111111111111111111440 高中英语高分作文 初稿搭建 \ 我跑回Gunter身边，把坏消息告诉了他。他的脸色沉了下来。我恳求着要赶上那班公 交车，保证回来后就还他钱。他同意了。我向他道了谢，我们互留了电话号码，然后我匆匆 上了车。 四天后，我回到了维也纳，按约定给Gunter打了电话。我们在咖啡馆见了面。Gunter 收下了出租车费。这次相遇不仅解决了我的困境，还让我收获了一位终生挚友。 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.His face fell.I begged to catch the bus, and promised to repay him as soon as I got back.He agreed.I thanked him,we swapped telephone numbers,and I hurried on the bus. Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised.We met at the cafe.Gunter took the taxi fare.This encounter not only solved my crisis,but also gave me a lifelong friend. 高分润色 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.His face SEAL四维元素 fell for a moment,but he soon regained his composure.I really 心理刻画句： need to catch this bus,"I pleaded,explaining the importance of ①通过面部表情变化(“face fell” “regained his composure”)直观展现 the conference and promising to repay him within four days of my Gunter从失望到强装镇定的心理 return.After a moment of tense silence,he finally nodded,a 转折。 wide grin spreading across his face.I trust you.Go catch your ④“tense silence”与“wide grin” bus."Overwhelmed with gratitude,I thanked him with a smile 形成对比，凸显Gunter决定信任 “我”的心理变化。 that matched his in warmth,and we exchanged phone numbers ⑥“Overwhelmed with gratitude”直 before I hurried onto the bus. 接点明“我”的心理状态， Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter “matched his in warmth'”通过动作 细节外化内心的感动与共鸣。 as promised.His laughter echoed through the phone as he 动作设计句： recognized my voice.We met at the appointed cafe and hugged ③通过“pleaded”“explaining” like old friends upon arrival.Then I handed him an envelope “promising'”三个连续动作展现 “我”为说服Gunter而急切表达 containing the money I owed,plus a little extra to express my 的状态。 appreciation.Gunter,however,only accepted the taxi fare. ⑥“exchanged phone numbers”“hurried "Buy me a beer next time you're in Vienna,"he said with a oto”两个动作强化场景的紧迫感与 warm smile.This unexpected encounter had not only solved my 真实感。 ⑧“met”“hugged”两个动作简洁有 crisis but also gifted me a friend for life.Gunter's kindness had 力，“like old friends”蕴含情感变化。 transformed a potentially disastrous evening into a cherished ⑨“handed'”这一动作承载着感恩 memory that I would treasure forever. 与承诺的分量，“envelope “money”“extra'”等细节补充，使 我跑回Gunter身边，把这个坏消息告诉了他。他的脸 动作更具画面感与叙事价值。 色沉了片刻，但很快便镇定下来。“我真的得赶上这班车，” 氛围衬托句： ⑦通过“laughter echoed”这一听 我恳求道，一边解释着那场会议的重要性，一边保证回来后 觉描写，营造轻松温暖的氛围。 的四天内就还他钱。一阵令人紧张的沉默过后，他终于点 言语设计句： 了点头，脸上绽开大大的笑容。“我相信你。快去赶车吧。” ②“really need”强调紧迫性，展现 “我”的焦急与诚恳。 我心中满是感激，用同样温暖的笑容向他道谢，交换了电话 ⑤“trust'”是核心词，为全文信任主题 号码后，我便匆匆上了车。 的直接载体，语言虽短却意味深张。 SL4777777777777777777777 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 四天后，我回到维也纳，如约给Gunter打了电话。他听 0幽默又亲切的邀约为结尾升华 出了我的声音，笑声从电话那头传来。我们在约定的咖啡 埋下伏笔。 馆碰面，刚一到就像老友般相拥。随后我递给他一个信封， FEST结尾仪式 里面装着我欠他的钱，还多放了一点以表谢意。但Gunter ①i通过“not only..but also..”递 只收下了出租车费。“下次来维也纳，给我买杯啤酒就行，” 进结构，将事件意义从解决危机提 他笑着说，笑容温暖。这场意外的相遇不仅化解了我的危 升到收获友谊；“transformed. 机，更让我收获了一位终生挚友。Gunter的善意将那个本 into.”强调善意的力量，以 可能糟糕透顶的夜晚，变成了一段我会永远珍藏的宝贵 “cherished memory”“treasure 回忆。 forever'”结尾，点明信任与善意的 永恒意义。 规范誊写 VVV0B10800811700700111080077000918000100101000110000008101817000008110 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised. 高分秘籍 1.【心理刻画句(“独立主格”结构)】原句：After a moment of tense silence,he finally nodded, a wide grin spreading across his face. 仿写：在一阵不安的犹豫后，她终于开口，眼角泛起了泪光。 2.【动作设计句（连贯动作）】原句：Overwhelmed with gratitude,I thanked him with a smile that matched his in warmth,and we exchanged phone numbers before I hurried onto the bus. 仿写：满心欢喜，我接过她递来的礼物，紧紧抱在怀里，直到她笑着挥手离开才舍得拆开。 3.【氛围衬托句】原句：His laughter echoed through the phone as he recognized my voice. 仿写：当我看到她手中挥舞的奖状时，她的欢呼声从操场那头回荡开来。 4,【结尾升华句（内心感悟式）】原句：This unexpected encounter had not only solved my crisis but also gifted me a friend for life.Gunter's kindness had transformed a potentially disastrous evening into a cherished memory that I would treasure forever. 仿写：那次失败的实验不仅教会我严谨的重要性，更让我收获了一群并肩作战的伙伴。老师 的鼓励将原本令人祖丧的挫折变成了我成长路上最珍贵的勋章。 101 高中英语高分作文 实战演练5 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Many years ago,my mother,who was 75 at the time,arrived for her regular one-week visit to my home in Sydney.She lived with my older sister in Melbourne most of the time and had developed a routine of taking an hour-long morning walk to stay fit.In Melbourne,she would walk around a park near my sister's house.Naturally,she was eager to continue her morning walks with us in Sydney. Our favorite park is a 2-km walk from my house,and it has a 1-km walking track.However,I couldn't drive her there every day as I had to leave for work when she wanted to go for her walk. Since there were hardly any sidewalks in Sydney,my mother said she was happy to walk on the road,confident that there wouldn't be much traffic in the morning. I was less certain,so I suggested it might be safer if she changed her walking time to the evening.That way,I could take her to the park after work.However,my mother-a determined person-refused to change her routine for just a few days and insisted that she would leave the house every day at 7 a.m.and return by 8 a.m.She began doing this and stuck firmly to her schedule.One day,when she hadn't returned by 8:30 a.m.,my wife,Sarah,called me in a panic.Anxious,I immediately drove home,taking the same route my mother would have taken for her walk. Not seeing her anywhere,I went to the local police station to report my mother's disappearance. The officer on duty advised me to wait until midnight before filing a report.Since it was only 9:00 a.m.,I drove back to the park,hoping to find some clues,but in vain.Completely at a loss for what to do next,I returned home and waited anxiously,pacing back and forth in the house. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 At 10:00 a.m.,the doorbell rang,and there was my mother,smiling,with a young man by her side. After learning what had happened,I heartily thanked him. 477J777777777777 邻里互助 真题导练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2020年新高考卷The Meredith family lived in a small community.As the economy was in decline,some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs.Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman.She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed,his wife,who took care of him and could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy-his name was Bernard-had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara."He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I don't see what he can do. After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard."I wish we could help him to earn money,"said Clara."His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them." For some moments,John said nothing,but, suddenly,he sprang to his feet and cried,"I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).” The other children also jumped up all their attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one."I tell you what we can do,"said John. "You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well,we can make popcorn(爆米花)，and put it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it. 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 VVU00UN80000000001000000000000000000 ⊙主题同步 人教版必修第三册Unit2 Morals and Virtues 外研版必修第三册Unit6 Making a Difference 北师大版必修第一册 Unit 3 Celebrations Occasions ⊙参考译文 Meredith一家住在一个小社区里。由于 经济衰退，镇上一些人丢了工作。他们中许 多家庭都难以维持收支平衡。人们正努力互 相帮助，共同应对挑战。 Meredith夫人是个非常善良、体贴的女 人。她花大量时间去探访穷人。她知道他们 面临难题，需要各种各样的帮助。只要有时 间，她就会给他们送去食物和药品。 一天早上，她跟自己的孩子们说起前一天 探访过的一个家庭。家里有个男人卧病在床， 他的妻子要照顾他，没法外出工作，还有他们 年幼的儿子。这个小男孩一他叫 Bernard-—让她很感兴趣。 “我真希望你们能看看他，”她对自己的 孩子John、Harry和Clara说，“他可真是他妈 妈的好帮手。他特别想挣些钱，可我想不出 他能做什么。” 妈妈离开房间后，孩子们坐着，想着 Bernard的事。“我希望我们能帮他挣到钱，” Clara说，“他家的日子太艰难了。” “我也这么想，”Harry说，“我们真该做 些事来帮他们。” 有一会儿，John没说话，可突然，他一下 子站起来，大声说：“我有个好主意！我想到 一个办法，咱们都能帮忙完成。” 其他孩子也都跳起来，全神贯注地听着。 John要是有主意，那肯定是个好主意。“我告 诉你们咱们能做什么，”John说，“你们知道 John叔叔给咱们寄来的那一大箱玉米吧？咱 们可以做成爆米花，装到纸袋里，然后让 Bernard拿到各家去卖。” 103. 高中英语高分作文 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea,she thought it was a good one,too. With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business 审题构思 LVVV1181AJ00101011001110111111007100000071111001371100011011071113800 ⑨信息萃取 1.who:Meredith夫人及她的孩子们(John、Hary、Clara)、Bernard及其父母、John的叔叔 2.where:Meredith家、小镇社区 3.when:某天早晨 4,what:经济衰退的小镇上，Meredith夫人向孩子们讲述Bernard家的困境（父亲生病、母亲无 法工作)，John想出做爆米花让Bernard售卖挣饯的主意 5.why:Bernard家因父亲生病、母亲无法工作陷入困境，Bernard想挣钱却没有途径；Meredith 家的孩子们希望帮助他解决这个难题 6.how:①Meredith夫人：探访Bernard家→告知孩子们Bernard的困境 ②孩子们：同情Bernard想帮忙→John提出做爆米花让Bernard售卖→孩子们积极关注 并认可这个主意 7.theme:孩子们的善意和行动力、社区互助的温暖、微小善举的价值 ⑨情节设计 (When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea,she thought it was a good one,too. 承接句（计划制订） Mrs.Meredith 第一段 所做（动作） and her kids (帮助Bernard的计划 开展) 尾句(Bernard封装好爆米花) 续 所做（动作）】 Bernard 写 架 (With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.) 第二段 所做（动作） 承接句Bernardt的反应) Bernard,the (Bernardt售卖爆米花 Meredith kids 的过程与收获) 所想（情绪） 尾句(Bernardf的心情与状态) 所见（画面定格）Bernard SL7777777777777777777777 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 初稿搭建 Mrs.Meredith听到John的想法后，也觉得这是个好主意。他们制订了计划，开始着手 准备。之后，孩子们去找了Bernard。大家在厨房里开始制作爆米花。Bernard把装满爆米 花的袋子放进了他的篮子里。 一 切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意。走到第一户人家门口时，他有些害羞。 Meredith家的孩子们鼓励了他。他敲了门，勇敢地开口询问。很多邻居都买了爆米花。 Bernard感到特别开心。 When Mrs.Meredith heard John's idea,she thought it was a good one,too.They made a plan and began to prepare for the work.Then the children went to find Bernard.They began to make popcorn in the kitchen.Bernard put the bags full of popcorn in his basket. With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.He felt shy at the first door. The Meredith kids encouraged him.He knocked and asked bravely.Many neighbors bought popcorn.Bernard felt very happy. 高分润色 1 When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea,she thought it was a good one,too.A plan was quickly hatched at the kitchen SEAL四维元素 table..②“Pot first！”③Mrs.Meredith said,pulling out her largest 氛围衬托句： ①“quickly hatched”(快速酝酿) pot.John fetched oil and corn from the pantry;Harry and Clara 营造出积极、高效的合作氛围。 lined up paper bags.Then the children dashed off to get ⑤通过“kernels rattled”“oil hissed” Bernard.The boy arrived,words of thanks stuck in his throat, “laughter popped'”等听觉细节以及 only able to nod.In a heartbeat the kitchen turned into a “turned into a workshop”的比喻强 workshop:kernels rattled,oil hissed,and laughter popped louder 化忙碌又温馨的氛围。 than the corn.The aroma spread far and wide,and neighbors ①“more doors opened”与“less lifted their curtains.Once the last bag was sealed,Bernard privileged households...fair trades" nestled them in his basket. 烘托和谐美好的整体氛围。 With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new 言语设计句： business.The shy boy hesitated at the first door,but the ②简短有力的指令式对话体现计 Meredith kids gave him a“go for it'”tap.⑧After a gentle knock, 划推进的紧迫感。 he managed a nervous "Hello-I made popcorn,would you like ⑧句式略显卡顿（用破折号连 a bag?"The door opened,and a friendly face emerged. 接)，贴合Bernard紧张时的语言 状态。 W“Absolutely！That smells fantastic一one bag,please,”the ⑩“Absolutely！”“smells fantastic” neighbor replied.As they went down the street,more doors 等词充满热情。 opened.Even the less privileged households offered to make fair 心理刻画句： trades with their extra food.The basket grew heavier with coins, ④“words of thanks stuck in his foods and other necessities,while Bernard's steps became lighter throat'”和“only able to nod”等动 with joy and relief. 作更显真实细腻。 Meredith夫人听到John的主意后，也觉得这是个好想 ⑦“hesitated”直接点明Bernard 法。厨房餐桌旁，一个计划很快就酝酿好了。“先拿锅！” 的胆怯心理，“‘go for it’tap”则 Meredith夫人一边说，一边拿出自己最大的锅。John从食品 通过他人动作侧面烘托其被鼓励 后的微小勇气。 储藏室取来油和玉米，Hary和Clara则把纸袋排好。接着， ⑧“managed a nervous”精准捕捉 孩子们飞奔着去找Bernard。男孩来了，千言万语的感谢堵在 Bernard开口时的紧张感。 喉咙里，只能不住地，点头。转眼间，厨房变成了小作坊：玉米 动作设计句： 粒噼里啪啦作响，油滋滋冒着泡，笑声比爆米花的爆裂声还要 ③“pulling out”“fetched”“lined 响亮。香气飘得很远很远，邻居们纷纷掀开了窗帘。最后一 up”一系列连贯动作展现分工协 作的场景。 袋爆米花封好后，Bernard小心翼翼地把它们放进篮子里。 L105 高中英语高分作文 一切准备就绪，Bernard开始了他的新生意。这个腼腆 ⑥“sealed'”“nestled”两个动作凸 的男孩在第一扇门前犹豫着，Meredith家的孩子们轻轻碰了 显Bernard对成果的珍视。 他一下，用“加油”的手势鼓励他。轻轻敲了敲门后，他鼓 ⑨“pened”“emerged”两个简单 起勇气，带着一丝紧张说：“您好一我做了爆米花，要买一 动作极具画面感。 袋吗？”门开了，一张友善的面孔探了出来。“当然要！闻 CFEST结尾仪式 起来太香了一来一袋，谢谢。”邻居回答道。沿街走下去， ②通过“basket grew heavier'”与 “steps became lighter'”的对比，将物 更多的门打开了。就连不那么宽裕的家庭，也拿出多余的 质收获(coins,foods)与精神变化 食物来公平交换。篮子里渐渐装满了硬币、食物和其他必 (joy and relief)相联系，以具象化的 需品，越来越沉，而Bernard的脚步却因喜悦和释然变得越 动作与状态升华主题—善意与勇 来越轻快。 气带来的不仅是物质满足，更是内 心的蜕变与快乐。 规范誊写 When Mrs.Meredith heard of John's idea,she thought it was a good one,too. With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business. 高分秘籍 VV1FD101000000017100000018010000170007091807000017081001007071701017000 1.【氛围t衬托句】原句：A plan was quickly hatched at the kitchen table. 仿写：一场义卖活动的想法在班级的课桌间悄然诞生。 2.【心理刻画+动作设计句】原句：The shy boy hesitated at the first door,but the Meredith kids gave him a“go for it'”tap. 仿写：那个紧张的女孩在舞台入口处徘徊，但老师给了她一个“加油”的拥抱。 3.【心理刻画+对话设计句】原句：After a gentle knock,he managed a nervous“Hello一I made popcorn,would you like a bag?" 仿写：深吸一口气后，她勉强挤出一句紧张的“大家好一一我做了手工饼干，有人想尝 尝吗？” 4.【结尾升华句（画面定格式）】原句：The basket grew heavier with coins,foods and other necessities,while Bernard's steps became lighter with joy and relief. 仿写：袋子里塞满了邻居们送来的药品和衣物，而男孩的脚步却因被关怀的温暖而愈发 轻快。 E/7JJ777J7/7/777777 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 实战演练6 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Emily was homeless,living in an old tent near a convenience store with her husband and their two sons.One afternoon,she held her plastic container with a few coins as she entered the store to buy a packet of instant noodles her son had been longing for days.She was near an aisle ( when a loud voice caught her attention.She noticed a queue of angry shoppers waiting behind an elderly man who had difficulty hearing. "I'm sorry,young lady.What did you say about the milk being funny?"the elderly man asked of the cashier. “Money！”she replied.“I said you don't have enough money,sir!" "You need more cash!For the milk!"A man in line,impatient,grabbed the elderly man's arm and shouted into his ear,causing him to flinch () Emily noticed everything.She was tempted to step in,but hesitated,fearing the anger of the other customers.At that moment,the elderly man explained that he didn't have enough cash,asking if he could get a smaller carton of milk since he needed it for his meal. "If you can't pay,you'll have to leave!"the cashier barked. "I can leave?"He smiled,preparing to go,but the cashier snatched the milk carton from his grasp..“Just leave,old man！”she yelled.“You're too much trouble！” Emily had had enough.She strode up to the cashier and offered to pay for the old man. "Have a heart,lady,"Emily said,and emptied her container onto the counter.The cashier glanced at Emily with disdain（鄙视)before counting the coins. "That should cover it,"the cashier said,taking all the money,including Emily's last few dollars."Now move along.You're holding up the queue. Emily left the instant noodles on the counter as she handed the milk to the older man. A short distance away,a pair of eyes had been closely monitoring the unfolding drama.It was Lisa,the store manager. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 When Emily left the store and headed to her tent,Lisa stopped her. The next morning,Emily approached the store with a mix of anxiety and hope. .a107