第2章 第4节 10大主题轻松搞定 主题1 家人相处 -【载望】高中英语高分作文

Could we go to the next lecture together instead? The schedule shows another session the following Sunday,which should be just as informative and give us more time to discuss the materials what we have collected.If that suits you,let me know when you'd like to meet. I'm truly sorry for any inconvenience and appreciate your understanding.I'm looking forward to our next meeting. Yours, Li Hua 亲爱的Boyce: 我写信是想为无法按计划在本周日和你一起参 加人工智能讲座向你道歉。我刚刚想起来那天有一 场重要的考试，所以我必须全身心地投入到备考中。 希望这个变动不会给你带来太多麻烦。 我们可以改去参加下一场讲座吗？时间表显示 下周日还有一场，应该内容同样丰富，也能给我们更 多时间讨论所收集的材料。如果你觉得可以，请告 诉我你想什么时候碰面。 对于给你带来的不便，我深表款意，也感谢你的 理解。我很期待我们下次的见面。 你的朋友 李华 主题10求助信 短剧指导 高分秘籍 1.Hope this letter finds you well. 2.whether the colors and layout will attract students' attention 3.Could you drop by the classroom at 10:00 a.m.this Friday to share tips on public speaking with us? 实战演练18 Dear Miss Jenny, Hope this email finds you well.My classmates and I have decided to participate in the school's English poetry recitation contest and would like your kind guidance. We've chosen Robert Frost's "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening".Its quiet winter scene and subtle emotions,we believe,will touch the audience. However,we're unsure how to convey that calm mood. Could you advise us on pronunciation and intonation to stress key words and highlight rhythm?We also need tips on expressions and gestures that match the poem's peaceful tone. Would it be convenient for you to meet us in the library reading room at 4:00 p.m.this Friday? 1462////WH/W10 I'm looking forward to your reply. Yours truly, Li Hua 亲爱Jenny老师： 希望您一切安好。我和同学们决定参加学校的 英文诗歌朗诵比赛，希望能得到您的悉心指导。 我们选了罗伯特·弗罗斯特的《雪夜林边小驻》。 我们相信，诗中宁静的冬日景象与细腻的情感能打 动观众。但我们不确定该如何传递出那种平和的氛 围。您能在发音和语调方面给我们一些建议，以突 出关键词并体现诗歌的节奏吗？我们还需要一些关 于表情和手势的技巧，使其与诗歌宁静的基调相 契合。 本周五下午4点，您方便到图书馆阅览室和我 们碰面吗？ 期待您的回复。 您的学生， 李华 第二章第四节 主题1家人相处 兄弟情深 高分秘籍 1.My sister's tense profile as she left silently with her suitcase at the snowing platform wouldn't fade from my mind. 2."This is for you,"she said,blushing,holding out the gift box."Thanks for remembering,"he took it, voice trembling slightly. 3.The teacher's encouragement "You can do it"finally shattered my timidity. 4.Some confusion,it turns out,is meant to clear especially when hope lies ahead. 实战演练1 I walked out of my room.Not surprisingly,my mother and Max were both covered in mud.It was evident that Max had led my mother on another wild chase through the forest.My frustration melted away instantly as I caught sight of my mother's apologetic expression.“Sweetheart,”my mom said softly,“Im sorry for scolding you earlier."When I served her a warm cup of tea after her quick shower,she then shared her own adventure with Max,including how he had managed to escape from her grasp.It seemed that we were both at our wits'end with this dog. Dad stepped in,suggesting that we work together to train Max.We spent the next few days teaching Max basic commands like“sit”,“stay”and“come back”. It wasn't easy,but gradually,Max started responding better to us.The moment we tried to stop him from pulling,to our surprise,he promptly sat down,looking at us intently with his big,innocent eyes.In the process,not only did Max become more obedient,but our family also grew closer.We realized that every member of our team played an important role,and we needed to support each other to ensure everything ran smoothly. 我走出房间。不出所料，妈妈和Max浑身都是 泥。显然，Max又带着妈妈在森林里狂奔了一阵。 当我看到妈妈脸上充满歉意的表情时，我的沮丧瞬 间消失了。“亲爱的，”妈妈轻声说，“我为之前责骂 你向你道歉。”妈妈快速冲了个澡后，我给她端去一 杯热茶，她随即跟我讲述了她和Max的冒险经历，包 括Max是如何挣脱她的掌控的。看来我们俩都对这 只狗束手无策了。 爸爸出面了，提议我们一起训练Max。接下来 的几天里，我们教Max一些基本的指令，比如“坐 下”“待着”和“回来”。这并不容易，但渐渐地，Max 对我们的指令反应越来越好了。当我们试图阻止它 拉扯时，令我们惊讶的是，它立刻坐了下来，用它那 双又大又无辜的眼睛专注地看着我们。在这个过程 中，不仅Max变得更听话了，我们一家人的关系也更 亲密了。我们意识到，团队中的每一个成员都扮演 着重要的角色，我们需要相互支持，才能确保一切顺 利进行。 节日惊喜 高分秘籍 1.Dad's eyebrows lifted slightly,a hint of pride flickering in his eyes. 2.Kneeling down,eyes fixed on the broken toy,Dad picked up the pieces and started mending it. 3.The living room echoed with children's laughter and clinking cups. 4.As stars twinkled in the sky,the family embraced the sweet moments of the night. 实战演练2 Amy answered the door and was surprised to see Mr.Henderson.His kind eyes and warm smile instantly put her at ease."Hello there,young artist," he greeted her.Amy blushed,her heart fluttering with a mix of excitement and nervousness."Is everything alright,dear?"Bonnie appeared behind Amy.Mr. Henderson introduced himself and explained how he had seen Amy's artwork at the school exhibition."Your granddaughter's sense of composition is remarkable. Her work reminds me of classic cartoon panels,he said,his voice filled with genuine admiration.Bonnie's eyes widened in surprise,her anger beginning to subside. Bonnie hesitated for a long time and decided to ask Mrs.Warren for advice.After a thoughtful conversation,Mrs.Warren helped Bonnie see the value in Amy's passion for art."Bonnie,I called today not just about Amy's homework,but I've notice she's really passionate about drawing.Maybe we can encourage both,"she suggested.With newfound understanding, Bonnie returned home and found Amy in her room,lost in another drawing.This time,Bonnie sat beside her, watching in awe as Amy's imagination unfolded on the paper.As the evening light cast a warm glow on the room,Bonnie felt a sense of peace settle over her, knowing she had made the right choice. Amy开了门，看到Henderson先生时很惊讶。 他友善的眼神和温暖的笑容立刻让她放松下来。 “你好啊，小艺术家。”他跟她打招呼。Amy红了脸， 心里既兴奋又紧张。“没事吧，亲爱的？”Bonnie出 现在Amy身后。Henderson先生做了自我介绍，说 他是在学校展览上看到Amy的作品的。“你孙女的 构图感很棒，她的作品让我想起经典的卡通画格。” 他说，声音里满是真诚的赞赏。Bonnie惊讶地睁大 了眼睛，怒气渐渐消了下去。 Bonnie犹豫了很久，决定向Warren夫人请教。 一番深思熟虑的交谈后，Warren夫人帮Bonnie明白 了Amy对艺术的热爱有其价值。“Bonnie,我今天打 电话不只是说Amy作业的事，还有我留意到她是真 的酷爱画画。或许我们可以两样都鼓励。”她建议 道。带着新的理解，Bonnie回到家，发现Amy正在 房间里埋头画画。这次，Bonnie坐到她身边，惊叹地 看着Amy的想象力在纸上铺展开来。傍晚的光线 给房间镀上一层暖光，Bonnie感到一阵平静笼罩着 她，知道自己做了正确的选择。 主题2责任担当 勇敢少年 高分秘籍 1.In an instant,the stadium erupted in cheers,the joy of victory floating in the air. 2.A wave of panic swept over Linda. 3.Lucy felt a sense of satisfaction,realizing that small kindnesses can bring about big changes. 实战演练3 My mother and I said goodbye and left Maia behind in Arizona while we returned home.The journey back was filled with a sense of urgency and purpose. Over the next few weeks,I threw myself into a whirlwind of activity:classes on foster-parenting to earn 147高中英语高分作文 第四节 10大主题轻松搞定 主题1 家人相处 兄弟情深 真题导练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 ⊙主题同步 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 人教版必修第三册Unit2 Morals and Virtues 2025年全国一卷My wife and I wanted to 外研版必修第一册Unit3 Family Matters share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer.She 译林版必修第一册 had prepared lots of snacks,while my job was to Unit 3 Getting Along with Others have the backyard in order. ⊙参考译文 There was plenty of space for the kids to run 我和妻子想在初夏举办一场小型聚会， and play.There was just one thing I hadn't counted 邀请亲朋好友来家里，一同分享住进新家的 on:My brother chose to bring his dog Toby,a 50- 喜悦。她准备了很多零食，而我的任务是把 pound ball of fire.Though friendly,he could easily 后院整理好。 knock over my niece's small boys and my six-month- 这里有足够的空间让孩子们奔跑玩耍。 old granddaughter.So,when my brother showed up, 但有一件事是我没料到的：我哥哥会选择带 I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside. 他的狗Toy来，这只狗重达50磅，精力极其 My plan was working out just fine.Toby was旺盛。尽管它很温顺，但也可能轻易撞倒我 using up his energy by running back and forth in the :侄女的小儿子和我那六个月大的孙女。所 backyard and giving the kids plenty of room.以，当我哥哥到的时候，我让他看住Toby,别 Unexpectedly,after supper,the weather changed..It让它进屋。 started to rain and everyone went indoors. 我的计划进行得很顺利。Toby在后院来 It was an awkward moment.I didn't want Toby 回跑，把精力都消耗光了，也给孩子们留出了 to be running around in the house,and my brother 足够的空间。没想到晚饭后，天气变了。开 wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. 始下雨了，所有人都进了屋。 Eventually,my brother decided to leave rather than 这就很尴尬了。我不想让Toby在屋里 force the issue. 乱跑，而我哥哥也不想带着一只湿漉漉的狗 A few days passed,and I hadn't heard anything 开车回家。最后，我哥哥决定离开，不想强行 from my brother.I texted him and expressed wishes 解决此事。 for him to come out again.His reply came as a 几天过去了，我没收到哥哥的任何消息。 surprise-a shock,actually:“Not a chance.” 我给他发了短信，希望他再过来。他的回复让我 Clearly,he was unhappy over the way we had 吃惊—一实际上，是震惊：“不可能了。”很明显， parted.After all,I had left him little choice.Well, 他还在为那天不欢而散的事生气。毕竞，我当时 he'll get over it,I reasoned. Two months passed.My wife suggested I get in 没给他太多选择的余地。不过，我心想，他过阵 touch with my brother,but I resisted,thinking he 子总会消气的。 should call first.However,my conscience ( 两个月过去了。我妻子建议我联系哥 kept bothering me.I tried to put myself in my 哥，但我没听，觉得应该他先联系我。然而， brother's shoes.He was facing health issues and his 我的良心一直不安。我试着换位思考。他面 wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few 临着健康问题，而且结婚三十五年的妻子几 months earlier.Toby was his constant companion, 个月前也去世了。Toy是他形影不离的伙 the one who kept him going. 伴，是支撑他活下去的精神寄托。 S////1////////1/1/7/1 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 I realized it was me who was at fault. With the biscuits my wife had made,I arrived at my brother's door. 审题构思 VVV0180000801809081000000108000180870008801080100180000000010100080810 ⑨信息萃取 1.wo:“我”、妻子、哥哥、哥哥的狗Toby、侄女家的孩子、“我”六个月大的孙女、哥哥已故的 妻子 2.where:“我”的新家 3.when:初夏（聚会时）、聚会几天后、两个月后 4.what:哥哥带狗Toby来“我”家聚会，“我”因担心Toby碰伤孩子让它待在室外。聚会时突 然下雨，众人进屋，哥哥无奈带狗离开。之后“我”与哥哥交流遇冷，“我”开始反思 5.wy:“我”为保护孩子限制哥哥的狗进屋，哥哥不满离开，二人产生矛盾，后因良心不安开始 体谅哥哥（身体状况差、丧妻，Toby是他的精神寄托） 6.how:①“我”：坚持自己没错、认为哥哥会消气→妻子建议联系哥哥，“我”却抗拒→良心不 安，尝试换位思考 ②哥哥：带Toy赴约→因狗的安置问题不满→离开后冷战，拒绝再到访 7.theme:亲情中的理解与包容、换位思考的重要性、沟通对及时化解矛盾的意义 ⑨情节设计 首句I realized it was me who was at fault.) 承接句(“我”的反思) 一所想（心理） 第一段 （“我”意识到过错 并准备弥补) 尾句(“我”决定道歉) 所想（心理） 写 架 首句(With the biscuits my wife had made,I arrived at my brother's door.) 第二段 “我”与哥哥和解)》 承接句Toby的反应) 所做（动作） Toby 尾句（感悟亲情） 所想（心理） HO79. 高中英语高分作文 初稿搭建 VVVV1788V00010187010017698111971011100110007700810090101770081007000170 我意识到是我错了。Toy在他妻子去世后帮他缓解了悲伤。我心里很不好受。他身 体也不太好。我让妻子做了Toy爱吃的饼干。我想向他道歉。 我带着妻子做的饼干，来到了哥哥家门口。Toby开心地叫了起来。哥哥看着饼干盒。 我向他道了歉，把盒子递给他。我们愉快地度过了那个下午。 I realized it was me who was at fault.Toby helped him feel better after his wife died.I felt bad.He had health troubles.I asked my wife to make Toby's favorite biscuits.I wanted to apologize to him. With the biscuits my wife had made,I arrived at my brother's door.Toby barked happily. My brother looked at the box.I apologized to him and gave him the box.We spent the afternoon happily 高分润色 I realized it was me who was at fault.My brother's hunched shoulders as he left with Toby in the rain wouldn't fade.How had I SEAL四维元素 overlooked that Toby was his comfort after losing his wife?Guilt 氛围衬托句： stung-he faced health battles alone,while I'd worried over a ①以“hunched shoulders..wouldn't dog in the house.@My wife's family-first reminder finally pierced fade”的具象画面承载情绪。 my pride.I asked her to bake Toby's favorite biscuits,determined ⑤“excited bark”从声音的角度衬 to bridge the gap..④“He'll get this,”she said,handing me a 托即将发生的场景。 warm tin.Apologies had never come easily,but this was worth it. ⑤“sprawling contentedly”衬托出 弟兄俩相处时温馨、和谐的氛围。 With the biscuits my wife had made,I arrived at my brother's door.Toby's excited bark preceded the door opening.My 心理刻画句： brother's eyebrows rose at the tin:"Peace Treats:Toby's ②“Guilt stung”将抽像的情感具象化。 Favorite(and Yours).”⑦“1 was a fool,”@l blurted,offering it.. ③“pierced my pride”直接刻画了 “我”的心理变化。 ⑨“Took you long enough,”⑧he muttered,lips twitching.AsI ①“sighed”体现出哥哥的悲伤与 gave Toby a biscuit,my brother sighed.I overreacted too. 反思的心理。 Just...miss her."I clapped him on the shoulder.You're not 动作设计句： alone.And Toby's family-always."We spent the afternoon ⑥“rose”生动地展现出哥哥看到 over coffee and memories,Toby sprawling contentedly between 饼干罐时惊讶的动作反应。 us.Some fences,it turns out,are meant to fall-e specially ⑧“blurted”“offering it”这两个动作体 when love waits on the other side. 现出“我”急于向哥哥道歉的状态。 我意识到，错的人是我。哥哥冒雨带着Toy离开时，那 ⑩“muttered”“lips twitching”形象 佝偻的背影在我脑海里挥之不去。我怎么就没意识到，失 描绘出哥哥说话时的动作和状态。 去妻子后，Toby是他唯一的慰藉呢？愧疚感刺得我生 g“clapped him on the shoulder'”表 疼—他独自与病痛抗争，我却还在为家里多了只狗而斤 现出“我”对哥哥的安慰和支持。 斤计较。妻子那句“家人至上”的提醒，终于戳破了我的自 言语设计句： ④凄子的话语充满对“我”的支 尊心。我让她烤了Toby最爱吃的饼千，决心要弥补这段裂 持和鼓励。 痕。“他会明白的。”妻子把温热的点心盒塞进我手里说。 ⑦“我”的话语直接表达出自己的 道歉对我来说向来不易，但这次值得。 懊悔。 带着妻子做的饼千，我来到哥哥家门口。门还没开，就传 ⑨哥哥的话语体现出他的懊悔和 来Toby兴奋的叫声。哥哥看到盒子上“和解点心：Toby的最 对“我”来迟的不满。 爱（也是你的）”的字样，眉毛一挑。“我之前太蠢了。”我脱 ②哥哥的话语表达出他对妻子的 思念以及对自己之前行为的反思。 口而出，把盒子递过去。“你总算想通了。”他嘟囔着，嘴角却 ④“我”的话语给予哥哥安慰和 微微抽动。我给Toby递了块饼千，哥哥叹了口气：“我也反应 支持。 过度了。只是…太想她了。”我拍了拍他的肩膀：“你不是 FEST结尾仪式 一个人。Toby也是家人一永远都是。”那个下午，我们喝着 ⑥“Some fences.are meant to fall'” 咖啡，聊着往事，Toy惬意地趴在我们中间。原来有些隔阂 点明主旨，说明爱可以化解矛盾，强 注定要消融—一尤其是当爱就在另一边等候时。 调了亲情和爱的力量。 0802/W 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 规范誊写 W I realized it was me who was at fault. With the biscuits my wife had made,I arrived at my brother's door. 高分秘籍 A1110030003133008333100001110013333030001100 1.【氛围衬托句（无灵主语句）】原句：My brother's hunched shoulders as he left with Toby in the rain wouldn't fade. 仿写：姐姐在飘雪的站台拎箱沉默离去时，那紧绷的侧脸在我脑海里总挥之不去。 2.【动作+言语设计句】原句：“I was a fool,”I blurted,offering it.“Took you long enough,” he muttered,lips twitching. 仿写：“这是给你的，”她红着脸说，递过礼盒。“谢谢你还记得，”他接过时，声音有些发颤。 3.【心理刻画句（无灵主语句）】原句：My wife''s family-first reminder finally pierced my pride. 仿写：老师那句“你可以的”鼓励，终于击碎了我的怯懦。 4.【结尾升华句（哲理箴言式）】原句：Some fences,it turns out,are meant to fall一especially when love waits on the other side. 仿写：有些迷茫，其实本就该消散一尤其是当希望在前方时。 081. 高中英语高分作文 实战演练1 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was a kid,my parents and I lived near the forest.They often told me that our family was a team that needed to work together for the household to function smoothly.There was always an abundance of work to do-cooking,cleaning,and walking dogs.I volunteered to walk our dog, Max,who had been adopted one month before.I never dared let this giant dog off the lead 绳)，just in case he took off.. One morning,we were walking along in the forest when Max started pulling on the lead.At first,I was able to hold on despite the wet ground from a recent shower.But the more I tried to stop him pulling,the more it turned into a tug of war.And thanks to the slippery ground,I lost. Pulling his lead,Max shot off like a bullet,leaving me screaming behind.I chased him but lost my footing and fell face-first into some mud.I stumbled (to my feet,but looking ahead, I found him running back towards me.I thought he was going to stop and give me his "Sorry"look But instead,the dog shot past me and returned after a while. As soon as we got home,my mother immediately attended to Max with a warm towel and a doggy treat.I thought seeing me stumbling and covered in mud,I would also get a warm cup of tea and a motherly kiss.Instead,I got a very loud lecture about letting the dog loose in the forest. I felt frustrated.It wasn't fair that she didn't understand how difficult it was to control Max.I fought back,"Stop lecturing me!Why is everything my fault?"With these words,I stormed into my bedroom and slammed the door shut. In the evening,I heard my mother call Max and take him out.It wasn't long before I heard my mother screaming and the door opening again. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 I walked out of my room. Dad stepped in,suggesting that we work together to train Max. SL1//////////////11/77/7 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 节日惊喜 真题导练 VV0001190000088100870000101110010801190080011000000181000011000110190800 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头 ⊙主题同步 语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE 人教版必修第三册Unit1 Festivals and Celebrations 2021年新高考卷The twins were filled with 外研版必修第二册Unit2Let's Celebrate！ excitement as they thought of the surprise they were 译林版必修第二册Unit3 Festivals and Customs planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud ⊙参考译文 Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in 母亲节惊喜 bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken 双胞胎一想到正在筹划的母亲节惊喜， porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff 就兴奋不已。要是他们把早餐端到床上给妈 knew exactly what to do. 妈，妈妈该有多开心、多骄傲啊。他们打算做 The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 法式吐司和鸡肉粥。他们观察过妈妈在厨房 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the 做饭的样子，觉得这事儿简单极了。Jenna和 kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first. Jeff清楚地知道该怎么做。 They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to 这个重要的日子终于到了。早上6点， boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two 闹钟响了。姐弟俩悄悄下楼来到厨房。他们 eggs into a plate and added in some milk..Jenna决定先煮粥。他们往锅里倒了些米，加水后 found the bread and put two slices into the egg 就放那儿煮，接着去做法式吐司。Jeff把两个 mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove 鸡蛋打到盘子里，加了些牛奶。Jenna找出面 burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. 包，把两片面包放进蛋液里。接着，Jef打开 The pan was too hot and the bread turned black 第二个炉子，预热煎锅。一切都进行得很顺 within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the 利，可Jef开始煎面包时，意外出现了。煎锅 sink and put in the other slice of bread..This time,太热，面包几秒钟就变黑了。Jenna把烧焦的 she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. 面包片扔进水槽，换上另一片面包。这次，她 Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot 把火调小，面包煎得恰到好处。 and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the 这时，Jef注意到锅里冒出蒸汽，锅盖也开 porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna 始晃动。紧接着，粥溢了出来，把火浇灭了。 panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned Jenna慌了神。幸好，Jeff保持冷静，迅速关掉 off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now. 了燃气。可炉灶现在一片狼藉。Jenna让Jeff Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff's hand 把炉灶清理干净，这样他们就能继续煮剩下的 touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. 粥。可Jef的手碰到了滚烫的炉子，疼得叫出 Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then 了声。Jenna让他把手放进冷水里。随后，她 she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece 闻到了烧焦的味道。哎呀！煎锅里的面包片 of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 也变黑了。 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. O83. 高中英语高分作文 审题构思 VVV101F0310311107011317633711177073170171113773011031701711130017111730 ⑨信息萃取 1.who:双胞胎(Jenna、Jeff)、妈妈、爸爸 2.where:家中厨房 3.when:母亲节当天早上6点后 4.what:双胞胎在母亲节当天计划做早餐给母亲惊喜，过程中因操作不当多次出错（吐司烤 焦、粥溢出浇灭火、Jeff烫到手等) 5.wy:双胞胎想给妈妈惊喜但缺乏烹饪经验，导致早餐制作接连失败 6.how:双胞胎最初兴奋期待→制作时起初顺利→出错后Jenna慌乱、Jeff相对冷静→Jeff烫到 手，二人持续面对失败 7.theme:孩子对母亲的爱与行动力、尝试过程中的挫折与坚持 ©情节设计 (As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.) 承接句父亲的反应) —所做（动作 第一段 )the father (父亲出现帮助双胞 胎挽救早餐) 所做（动作） the twins 尾句（双胞胎和爸爸完成早餐 所想（情绪）】 the twins 后的表现) 续 所说（言语） the father 写 架 (The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.) 第二段 承接句（双胞胎给妈妈送 上早餐) 所做（动作） the twins (双胞胎给母亲送早 所说（语言） 餐及后续) 尾句（家人共度节日的温馨氛围） 所见（画面定格） the family 初稿搭建 双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，爸爸出现了。他看出了孩子们的问题，然后开始教Jenna搅粥，教 Jf试锅的温度。他们也把炉子打扫干净了。很快，厨房里就飘起了粥和吐司的香味。 双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了妈妈。他们把托盘递给妈妈，妈妈又开心又惊讶。双胞 胎很高兴自己的努力有了回报。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.He saw their problems.And then he began to teach Jenna to stir porridge and Jeff to test the pan's heat.They also cleaned the stove.Soon,the kitchen smelled of porridge and toast. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.They gave her the tray. Their mother was happy and surprised.The twins were happy that their work paid off. SL///////////////1//11 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 高分润色 11111ML1V1001HID As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their ⊙SEAL四维元素 father appeared.He leaned against the door-frame,a soft smile 心理刻画句： playing on his lips-he'd been watching long enough to see their struggles..②“Tough start,huh？”he said,rolling up his sleeves.. ①借“soft smile'”刻画出父亲看到 He showed Jenna how to stir the porridge gently to stop it boiling 孩子们努力时欣慰又关切的心理。 over,and taught Jeff to test the pan's heat with a drop of water. ⑦“sparkled”将母亲内心的惊喜具 Together,they scraped the burnt bits from the stove,andsoon 象化。 the kitchen smelled of creamy porridge and golden toast.The ⑩“beamed''展现出双胞胎感到开 twins grinned as their father winked,Now that's a Mother's Day 心、自豪的心理。 feast..” 动作串联句： The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.⑥“Surprise!”they chorused,holding out the tray-one ③用“showed”“taught'”等动作生 toast slightly lopsided,porridge a little thick,but steaming with 动展现父亲帮助孩子们解决烹饪 pride.Their mother's eyes sparkled with surprise and joy. 难题的过程。 Sitting up,hand to her mouth,she took a bite,and then pulled ⑧运用“Sitting up”（非谓语动 them into a hug..⑨“This is the best surprise ever,,”she said,her 词)、“hand to her mouth”(独立主 voice choked up.The twins beamed,glad their efforts had paid 格)与（谓语动词）“took”“pulled'” off,and the room felt cozy with the warmth of their love.As 展现了连贯的动作序列与场景的 sunlight spilled through the window,the family embraced the perfect Mother's Day. 真实感。 双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，爸爸出现了。他倚在门框 氛围衬托句： 上，唇边漾着温柔的笑意—一他已经看了好一会儿，目睹了 ④借锄“creamy porridge”“golden toast'” 他们的种种努力。“开局有点棘手，是吧？”他一边说，一边 烘托出厨房内充满食物香气的温 卷起袖子。他教Jenna如何轻轻搅动粥，防止粥溢出来，还 馨氛围。 教Jf用一滴水来测试平底锅的温度。他们一起刮掉了炉 ①以“cozy”“warmth of their love” 子上烧焦的残渣，很快，厨房里就弥漫开奶油粥和金黄吐司 营造一种温馨、充满爱意的氛围。 的香气。爸爸眨了眨眼说：“这才是母亲节该有的盛宴嘛。” 言语设计句： 双胞胎听了，开心地笑了起来。 ②简洁的话语自然且富有深意。 双胞胎端着早餐上楼，叫醒了妈妈。“惊喜！”他们齐 ⑤这句调侃恰当且增添欢乐。 声喊道，递过托盘一一片吐司有点歪歪扭扭，粥也稍显浓 ⑥“Surprise”使用得形象又生动。 稠，但都冒着热气，满是他们的心意。妈妈的眼里闪烁着惊 ⑨这句话完美体现母亲的心情。 讶与喜悦的光芒。她坐起身，手轻轻挡在嘴边，尝了一口， ©FEST结尾仪式 随即一把将他们揽进怀里。“这是最棒的惊喜了。”她哽咽 ②a通过“sunlight spilled through 着说。双胞胎露出了灿烂的笑容，为自己的努力没有白费 the window”的环境描写，搭配 而开心，房间里满是爱意，温馨极了。阳光透过窗户洒进 “the family embraced”的场景，将 温馨氛围推向高潮。 来，一家人一同迎接了这个完美的母亲节。 O85. 高中英语高分作文 规范誊写 F1F0350000170031703370037707770017101771090779071700070107170101 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 高分秘籍 VVU1111A01013100713111371131107101310138313001011010111111371011731133 1.【心理刻画句(“独立主格”结构)】原句：He leaned against the door--frame,a soft smile playing on his lips... 仿写：爸爸眉毛微微扬起，眼里闪过一丝骄傲。 2.【动作串联句（非谓语动词短语+“独立主格”结构+主句）】原句：Sitting up,hand to her mouth,she took a bite,and then pulled them into a hug. 仿写：爸爸跪下身，眼睛盯着坏掉的玩具，捡起碎片开始修补。 3.【氛围衬托句（无灵主语句）】原句：Soon the kitchen smelled of creamy porridge and golden toast. 仿写：客厅里回荡着孩子们的笑声和杯碟碰撞声。 4.【结尾升华句（画面定格式）】原句：As sunlight spilled through the window,the family embraced the perfect Mother's Day. 仿写：星星在天空中闪烁，一家人享受着夜晚的美好时光。 SL1////////////11/7/1 第二章手把手教你写好读后续写 实战演练2 R0900000019079808890000001008080087708008018110070078090090970700100 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Bonnie raised her granddaughter alone after the girl's parents died.She hated her granddaughter's art and wanted her to stop drawing.But everything changed when Mr.Henderson,a famous cartoonist,appeared at her doorstep. One day,Bonnie called out to Amy as she took the chicken out."Dinner is ready,honey! Come soon！”But Amy didn't answer.. Bonnie finished setting the table and served them dinner,but she still didn't hear a response from Amy."Amy?Honey,your dinner is getting cold!Are you coming?"she asked her 10-year-old granddaughter again. When Amy didn't respond,Bonnie climbed the stairs to the girl's room and pushed the door open.Amy sat at her desk,with her headphones on.At first,Bonnie thought Amy was studying, but then she noticed the drawing sheet on the table in front of Amy.Bonnie frowned (in anger "Amy!"Bonnie screamed,and the girl turned around and removed her headphones. “Granny?I..I was just...”Amy said. Bonnie stormed up to Amy's desk,and the little girl tried to cover the drawing,but it was too late. "Did you finish your math homework,little girl?Mrs.Warren called me today.And she told me you've been ignoring her assignments!"Bonnie said angrily. "I'll finish the homework,"Amy said."I was planning on doing it once I finished the sketch (素描)I was working on,.Granny.” “I'm tired of that hobby of yours,Amy！You're no longer doing those drawings！”Bonnie went on."Those things you draw are not going to help you in the future!You finish your dinner,and then you'll be doing your homework.You're not leaving the house to play with your friends until you finish your homework.Am I clear?"Bonnie said and stormed out of Amy's room. Minutes later,Amy walked into the kitchen and quietly sat at the table.They began eating dinner in silence.Bonnie was already in a terrible mood,so she didn't ask about Amy's day like she usually did.Suddenly,the doorbell rang. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 Amy answered the door and was surprised to see Mr.Henderson. Bonnie hesitated for a long time and decided to ask Mrs.Warren for advice. .O87.