陕西省安康市2024-2025学年高三下学期第二次质量联考英语写作训练导学案（建议类书信+读后续写之数字断联后自然治愈）

陕西省安康市2024-2025学年高三下学期第二次质量联考英语写作训练（建议类书信+读后续写之数字断联后自然治愈） 一、书信写作（对校英文报增设艺术栏目的建议） （一）题型核心考点 本题为应用文之建议类书信，核心考查“个人看法+合理化建议”的清晰表达，兼顾礼貌得体、诚恳恳切的语气（面向校英文报编辑）。评分重点：内容完整性（看法+建议）、行文逻辑、格式规范及语法多样性，建议需具体可行。 （二）写作任务 假定你是李华，校英文报正在筹划增设艺术栏目，并向广大师生征求意见和建议。请你对此谈谈自己的看法并提出合理化建议。 注意：1. 写作词数应为80左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Dear Editor, ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua （三）语法亮点预判（可借鉴句式） 非谓语动词：用于补充看法，如“Considering the importance of art, I think adding an art column to our school English newspaper is a great idea.” 宾语从句：表达建议，如“I suggest that the column include works of students’ paintings, introductions to famous artists and art appreciation guides.” 并列结构：说明栏目意义，如.It can not only enrich our campus life but also help us improve our aesthetic ability and English expression. （四）高分句子默写 1. 我认为校英文报增设艺术栏目非常有意义，它能丰富我们的校园生活，也能让我们在学习英语的同时接触艺术。________________________________________________________________ 2. 对于这个栏目，我有一些建议：可以刊登学生的艺术作品，介绍中外著名艺术家，并开设艺术欣赏小技巧板块。________________________________________________________________ 3. 我希望这个栏目能吸引更多师生关注，成为连接英语学习与艺术欣赏的桥梁。________________________________________________________________ 4. 增设艺术栏目不仅能提升我们的审美素养，还能为有艺术特长的同学提供展示自我的平台。________________________________________________________________ （五）拓展表达练习（同义替换） 建议：suggest = _______ = _______ 增设：add = _______ = _______ 有意义的：meaningful = _______ = _______ 展示：show = _______ = _______ 二、读后续写（数字断联后自然治愈主题） （一）主题分析与续写思路 核心主题：摆脱数字依赖，感受现实生活的美好，从“沉迷虚拟”到“拥抱现实”的情感递进。 伏笔呼应：前文“我”沉迷电脑、依赖网络，对农场度假毫无兴趣，到达后发现无Wi-Fi的沮丧，以及农场的自然风光、农场男孩的出现，为续写“融入农场生活、摆脱数字依赖”铺垫。 续写思路： Paragraph 1（Early next morning the boys came to invite me to breakfast.）：描写“我”的状态（低落、抵触）→ 男孩们热情邀请，主动搭话→ 早餐时的温馨场景，男孩们介绍农场生活，勾起“我”的兴趣。 Paragraph 2（Surprisingly, I never thought of my laptop that week.）：描写“我”参与的农场活动（喂动物、摘蔬果等）→ 感受自然与陪伴的快乐，心态发生变化→ 领悟摆脱数字依赖、珍惜现实生活的道理，升华主题。 （二）写作任务 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It all started with the gift. A few months before I began college, my parents surprised me with the one thing every young adult desires: a brand new laptop. That summer, I was glued (全神贯注于) to the screen, living in a digital world. I spent hours on social media, chatting with friends, and ignoring the real one around me. I was more concerned with the virtual interactions than the actual people and places around me. Being online was more important than anything else. So, when I heard my dad’s plan for our family vacation that year, I was less than thrilled. “This year,” he announced, “we’re going to try something different. We’re going to a farm.” A farm wasn’t my ideal vacation, but it was still a break from the routine. I went through the packing up and planning, barely listening to the instructions. My mind was elsewhere, on the Internet, where my conversations never stopped. I was so absorbed in my digital world that the first time I really paid attention to the real world was when we get to our destination — a remote farm. I stared out the window to see the breathtaking views outside. The air coming through the open windows was warm and carried the fresh smell of the forest. But the view wasn’t what caught my attention. The moment I got off the car, I rushed into the farmhouse. The real shock came when I tried to check my e-mail and found that I had no Internet connection. “We have no Wi-Fi here” a boy said softly. He might be the oldest of the 3 kids on the farm. I looked at him, too depressed to say anything. My laptop would be completely useless. I would live in the wilderness for a week with no way to connect to the online world. I was close to tears, afraid of the boredom I had to tolerate in the coming days. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Early next morning the boys came to invite me to breakfast. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Surprisingly, I never thought of my laptop that week. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （三）高分亮点预判 细节描写：通过动作（如“drag myself out of bed”“feed the chickens”“pick fresh vegetables”）、神态（如“with a dull look”“eyes shining with excitement”）、环境（如“warm sunlight”“fresh air”）凸显场景与情感变化。 语法结构：定语从句、分词作伴随状语、状语从句，提升句式复杂度。 情感连贯：从“沮丧抵触”到“逐渐感兴趣”再到“彻底投入”，呼应前文“我”的数字依赖，升华“拥抱现实、感受生活本真”的主题。 （四）高分句子默写 描写类（场景与动作） 1. 我带着低落的神情慢吞吞地起床，跟着男孩们来到厨房，餐桌上摆满了新鲜的牛奶、面包和自家种的水果，充满了烟火气。________________________________________________________________ 2. 饭后，男孩们拉着我去喂小鸡、摘草莓，阳光温暖地洒在身上，空气中弥漫着青草和果实的清香。________________________________________________________________ 情感类（感悟与联结） 1. 我渐渐忘记了网络的存在，全身心投入到农场生活中，才发现现实世界的快乐，远比虚拟世界的互动更真实、更温暖。________________________________________________________________ 2. 这次农场之旅让我明白，我们不应该被数字世界束缚，学会放下电子设备，才能真正感受生活的美好与陪伴的珍贵。________________________________________________________________ 参考答案 一、书信写作（对校英文报增设艺术栏目的建议） （一）题型核心考点 本题为应用文之建议类书信，核心考查“个人看法+合理化建议”的清晰表达，兼顾礼貌得体、诚恳恳切的语气（面向校英文报编辑）。评分重点：内容完整性（看法+建议）、行文逻辑、格式规范及语法多样性，建议需具体可行。 （二）高分范文（80词） Dear Editor, I’m writing to share my views on adding an art column to our school English newspaper. I think it is a meaningful and wonderful idea, as it can enrich our campus life and help us combine English learning with art appreciation. I have some suggestions for the column. It can include students’ art works, introductions to famous artists at home and abroad, and small guides on art appreciation. I hope this column will attract more teachers and students and become a bridge between English and art. Yours, Li Hua （三）语法亮点解析 非谓语动词（现在分词作状语）：as it can enrich our campus life and help us combine English learning with art appreciation（as引导原因状语从句，清晰说明看法的理由，语气诚恳）。 宾语从句：I think it is a meaningful and wonderful idea（表达个人看法，简洁明了，符合书信语气）。 并列结构：It can include students’ art works, introductions to famous artists... and small guides...（三个并列宾语，使建议具体清晰，句式工整）。 （四）高分句子默写 1. I think it is very meaningful to add an art column to our school English newspaper. It can enrich our campus life and allow us to get in touch with art while learning English. 2. I have some suggestions for this column: it can publish students’ art works, introduce famous Chinese and foreign artists, and set up a section on art appreciation skills. 3. I hope this column can attract more teachers and students’ attention and become a bridge connecting English learning and art appreciation. 4. Adding an art column can not only improve our aesthetic literacy but also provide a platform for students with artistic talents to show themselves. （五）拓展表达练习 建议：suggest = advise = propose 增设：add = set up = establish 有意义的：meaningful = significant = rewarding 展示：show = display = present 二、读后续写（数字断联后自然治愈主题） （一）主题分析与续写思路 核心主题：摆脱数字依赖，感受现实生活的美好，从“沉迷虚拟”到“拥抱现实”的情感递进。 伏笔呼应：前文“我”沉迷电脑、依赖网络，对农场度假毫无兴趣，到达后发现无Wi-Fi的沮丧，以及农场的自然风光、农场男孩的出现，为续写“融入农场生活、摆脱数字依赖”铺垫。 续写思路： Paragraph 1（Early next morning the boys came to invite me to breakfast.）：描写“我”的状态（低落、抵触）→ 男孩们热情邀请，主动搭话→ 早餐时的温馨场景，男孩们介绍农场生活，勾起“我”的兴趣。 Paragraph 2（Surprisingly, I never thought of my laptop that week.）：描写“我”参与的农场活动（喂动物、摘蔬果等）→ 感受自然与陪伴的快乐，心态发生变化→ 领悟摆脱数字依赖、珍惜现实生活的道理，升华主题。 （二）高分范文（149词） Early next morning the boys came to invite me to breakfast. I dragged myself out of bed with a dull look, still upset about the lack of Wi-Fi. But their warm smiles and enthusiastic greetings made me feel a little better. At the kitchen table, there was fresh milk, homemade bread and fruits picked from the farm. The oldest boy talked about their daily life on the farm, and I listened carefully, my curiosity gradually growing. Surprisingly, I never thought of my laptop that week. The boys took me to feed chickens, pick fresh strawberries and walk in the forest. I enjoyed the warm sunlight, fresh air and the joy of playing with them. I felt a sense of happiness I had never experienced in the digital world. When the vacation ended, I realized that we shouldn’t be trapped by electronic devices. Letting go of the virtual world, we can truly feel the beauty of real life and the value of companionship. （三）高分亮点解析 细节描写：dragged myself out of bed, talked about their daily life, feed chickens, pick fresh strawberries 等动作描写，以及with a dull look, warm smiles 神态描写，清晰展现“我”的情感变化，场景真实生动。 非谓语动词：my curiosity gradually growing（独立主格结构）、Letting go of the virtual world（现在分词作状语），替代简单句，提升语法层次，使句子衔接更自然。 伏笔呼应：描写“我”忘记电脑、享受农场生活，呼应前文“我”对网络的依赖和无Wi-Fi的沮丧，情节连贯，凸显主题转变。 主题升华：以“I realized that we shouldn’t be trapped by electronic devices... we can truly feel the beauty of real life and the value of companionship.”总结，点明摆脱数字依赖、拥抱现实的核心，符合积极价值观导向。 （四）高分句子默写 描写类（场景与动作） 1. I got up slowly with a depressed look and followed the boys to the kitchen, where the table was full of fresh milk, bread and home-grown fruits, full of a warm atmosphere. 2. After breakfast, the boys took me to feed the chickens and pick strawberries. The warm sun shone on me, and the air was filled with the fresh smell of grass and fruits. 情感类（感悟与联结） 1. I gradually forgot about the Internet and devoted myself to the farm life. I found that the happiness in the real world is far more real and warm than the interactions in the virtual world. 2. This farm trip made me understand that we should not be bound by the digital world. Learning to put down electronic devices can help us truly feel the beauty of life and the preciousness of companionship. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $