Unit4知识点 Writing写作讲义 2025-2026学年沪教版七年级英语下册

七年级英语下册Unit4知识点-Writing写作讲义 Writing a story about an animal（写一个关于动物的故事） 一、写作任务分析 Teen Life 杂志正在征集关于神奇动物的故事。你的故事可以是基于新闻报道，也可以是基于真实经历。 写作要点： - 故事要有清晰的时间、地点、人物 - 故事要有开头、经过、结尾 - 故事要有冲突或悬念（如危险情况） - 故事要突出动物的神奇之处（如何帮助人） 二、写作指导：用提纲组织故事 在写作前，可以通过以下问题来组织你的故事： 要素 你的答案 要素 Time（时间） _____________ Time（时间） Place（地点） _____________ Place（地点） Characters（人物/动物） _____________ Characters（人物/动物） Beginning（开头：发生了什么？） _____________ Beginning（开头：发生了什么？） Middle（经过：动物做了什么？） _____________ Middle（经过：动物做了什么？） 三、范文学习 Saved by a dolphin Yesterday, a news report caught my attention. Something very scary happened to a boy named Sam. Last month, Sam went for a swim in the sea. He swam far out into the sea. Then he saw something moving near him. It was huge and grey, with a large fin. It was a shark! Sam began to swim back, but the beach was too far away. The shark was getting closer. Sam was really scared. Suddenly a big animal appeared next to Sam in the water. It was a dolphin! It pushed him away from the shark. Sam sat on the dolphin's back and it took him back to the beach. Luckily, the shark did not follow Sam. As soon as he was safe on the beach, the dolphin swam away. Sam said he would always remember this friendly dolphin—it saved his life! 四、范文解析 1. 故事结构分析 部分 内容 作用 开头 Sam去海里游泳，遇到鲨鱼 引入人物和危险 经过 海豚出现，推开鲨鱼，驮Sam回岸边 动物出手相救 结尾 Sam安全上岸，海豚游走 结局圆满，点题 2. 时间线索词 Yesterday 昨天 Last month 上个月 Then 然后 Suddenly 突然 As soon as 一……就…… 3. 描述危险情况的句型 Something scary happened to ... ……发生了可怕的事 He saw something moving near him. 他看到有个东西在靠近他 It was huge and grey, with a large fin. 它又大又灰，有个大鳍 Sam began to swim back, but ... Sam开始往回游，但是…… The shark was getting closer. 鲨鱼越来越近了 Sam was really scared. Sam真的很害怕 4. 描述动物帮助的句型 Suddenly a big animal appeared. 突然出现了一个大动物 It pushed him away from the shark. 它把他从鲨鱼身边推开 Sam sat on its back. Sam坐在它的背上 It took him back to the beach. 它把他带回了海滩 It saved his life! 它救了他的命！ 5. 故事结尾句型 Luckily, the shark did not follow him. 幸运的是，鲨鱼没有追来。 As soon as he was safe, ... 他一安全下来，…… He would always remember this ... 他会永远记住这个…… 五、写作词汇库 1. 时间词汇 last week 上周 last month 上个月 yesterday 昨天 one day 有一天 suddenly 突然 then 然后 finally 最后 as soon as 一……就…… 2. 地点词汇 in the sea 在海里 in the forest 在森林里 in the park 在公园里 near the river 在河边 on the beach 在海滩上 at home 在家 3. 动物词汇 dolphin 海豚 shark 鲨鱼 dog 狗 cat 猫 bird 鸟 horse 马 elephant 大象 lion 狮子 tiger 老虎 snake 蛇 4. 描述动物帮助的动词短语 push away 推开 take ... to ... 把……带到…… save one's life 救某人的命 help ... out of danger 帮……脱离危险 carry ... on its back 把……驮在背上 show ... the way 给……指路 protect ... from ... 保护……免受…… 5. 描述情绪的词 scared 害怕的 frightened 受惊的 surprised 惊讶的 happy 高兴的 lucky 幸运的 thankful 感激的 六、写作框架 标题： [动物] Saved [人名] / A Story about a [动物] 开头段：引入故事 - Yesterday / Last month / One day, something [scary/surprising] happened to [人名]. - [人名] was [做什么] when he/she saw [什么]. 经过段：描述危险和动物的帮助 - [描述危险情况]. He/She was really [情绪]. - Suddenly, [动物] appeared. - The [动物] [做了什么] to help him/her. - He/She [做了什么] and the [动物] took him/her to [地点]. 结尾段：结局和感受 - Luckily, [危险] did not follow him/her. - As soon as he/she was safe, the [动物] [做了什么]. - He/She said he/she would always remember this [形容词] [动物]—it saved his/her life! 七、写作练习 Step 1: Plan（计划） 用提纲组织你的故事： Time _____________ Place _____________ Characters _____________ Beginning _____________ Middle _____________ End _____________ Step 2: Write（写作） 根据你的提纲，写一个关于动物的故事。给故事起一个吸引人的标题。 标题： ________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ ________________________________________________ Step 3: Check and revise（检查与修改） 完成写作后，用下面的清单检查你的文章： 检查项目 是否完成 故事有时间、地点、人物 □ 故事有开头、经过、结尾 □ 故事有危险或悬念 □ 动物帮助了人物 □ 我用了本单元学到的单词和表达 □ 我检查了拼写、语法和标点符号是否正确 □ 八、范文参考 My Dog Saved Me One day, I went for a walk in the forest with my dog, Max. Suddenly, I saw a snake on the path. It was long and brown, and it was moving towards me. I was very scared and didn't know what to do. Suddenly, Max jumped in front of me. He barked loudly at the snake. The snake stopped and then went away. Max pushed me away from the snake and showed me the way back home. Luckily, the snake did not follow us. As soon as we got home, I hugged Max. I was so thankful. Max saved my life! I will always remember this brave dog. A Brave Dolphin Last summer, my family went to the beach. My little brother Tom went swimming in the sea. He swam too far out. Then he saw a big shark near him. He was very scared and cried for help. Suddenly, a dolphin appeared. It pushed Tom away from the shark and let him sit on its back. The dolphin took Tom back to the beach quickly. As soon as Tom was safe, the dolphin swam away. Tom said, "The dolphin saved my life! I will never forget it." We were all so thankful to the brave dolphin. 教师版（含答案） 一、写作指导要点 - 写故事要有清晰的六要素：时间、地点、人物、开头、经过、结尾 - 故事要有冲突（危险）和解决（动物帮助） - 使用时间线索词使故事连贯 - 使用生动的形容词和动词描述场景和动作 - 结尾要点明主题，表达感受 二、范文解析答案 范文结构分析： 开头 Sam去海里游泳，遇到鲨鱼 经过 海豚出现，推开鲨鱼，驮Sam回岸边 结尾 Sam安全上岸，海豚游走，Sam永远记得 时间线索词： Yesterday, Last month, Then, Suddenly, As soon as 描述危险的句型： - Something scary happened to ... - He saw something moving near him. - It was huge and grey, with a large fin. - The shark was getting closer. - Sam was really scared. 描述动物帮助的句型： - Suddenly a big animal appeared. - It pushed him away from the shark. - Sam sat on its back. - It took him back to the beach. - It saved his life! 三、写作练习（参考范文） A Friendly Dog Last week, a nice thing happened to my friend Lily. She was playing in the park when she fell down and hurt her leg. She couldn't walk and started to cry. Suddenly, a big dog came to her. The dog licked her face and then ran away. Soon it came back with a man. The man helped Lily and called her mom. Lily said the dog saved her. 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