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On a cold winter day, Li Ming found an injured puppy on his way home from school. The puppy was curled (蜷缩) up beside a snow pile, shaking, with its hind leg seemingly hurt and its tiny body shaking from the cold. Li Ming bent down and gently touched the puppy’s head, noticing the fear and helplessness in its eyes. He felt a burst of sadness and knew he couldn’t leave the little creature there. Immediately, he took off his scarf (围巾), carefully covered the puppy, and held it in his arms.
“Don’t be afraid, I’ll help you,” Li Ming said softly, trying to comfort the shaking puppy. He decided to take the puppy home, even though he knew his parents might not agree to keep a pet. As he walked, he thought about how to convince his parents. “Maybe if I show them how much I care, they’ll understand,” he said to himself.
When he arrived home, Li Ming quietly carried the puppy to his room. He dried its body with a towel (毛巾), making sure to be extra gentle around the injured leg. Then, he found some old clothes and made a plain bed for the puppy in the corner of his room. The puppy seemed to relax a little, its shaking dying. Li Ming also gave it some water and a small piece of bread, which the puppy ate eagerly, wagging its tail (摇尾巴) weakly.
That night, Li Ming lay in bed, staring at the ceiling (天花板), filled with worry. He didn’t know how serious the puppy’s injury was or how his parents would react. He imagined different situations — some where his parents criticized him, others where they allowed him to keep the puppy. But no matter what, he knew he couldn’t give up this poor little life. As he dropped off to sleep, he dreamed of the puppy running happily in a sunny field, its tail wagging joyfully.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para 1. The next morning, Li Ming woke up to find the puppy missing from its bed.
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Para 2. A few days later, the puppy’s condition gradually improved.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角:
第__________________________人称视角
3.时空线:
寒冬里,李明放学路上发现一只受伤的小狗,小狗蜷缩在雪堆旁,后腿受伤、浑身发抖→ 李明心生怜悯,取下围巾包裹小狗,决定带回家,尽管知道父母可能不同意→ 李明悄悄把小狗带回房间,擦干身体、做小床、喂水喂面包,小狗逐渐放松→ 当晚李明忧心忡忡,担心小狗伤势和父母的态度,梦见小狗健康奔跑→ (续写)第二天早上,李明发现小狗不在小床上,焦急寻找→ (续写)
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4.文章线索
(1)“受伤的小狗”是核心线索,这一线索对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
(2)“李明的善意与坚持”与“小狗的状态转变”是关键情节,这一情节为何能强化“善意与责任”的主题?如何塑造李明和小狗的形象?
(3)“小狗蜷缩发抖的细节”“李明取围巾包裹、细心照顾”“李明深夜担忧”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“寻找小狗、伤势好转”做了怎样的铺垫?
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“发现小狗—救助小狗—偷偷照顾—担忧不安—寻找小狗—伤势好转”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
5.情节线
发现救助:寒冬放学路上,李明发现受伤发抖的小狗,心生怜悯,取下围巾包裹,决定带回家→ 偷偷照顾:李明悄悄把小狗带回房间,擦干身体、做小床、喂水喂面包,细心照顾受伤的后腿,小狗逐渐放松→ 担忧不安:当晚李明忧心忡忡,担心小狗伤势和父母的态度,难以入眠,梦见小狗健康奔跑→ (续写)焦急寻找:第二天早上,李明发现小狗不在小床,四处寻找,最终找到,得知小狗的小心思→ (续写)好转陪伴:_____________________________________________________________
6.情感线
李明:怜悯心疼(看到小狗受伤发抖,心生不忍)→ 坚定负责(不顾父母可能反对,坚持带小狗回家)→ 细心温柔(耐心照顾小狗,擦干身体、做小床、喂食)→ 担忧不安(担心小狗伤势和父母态度)→ 焦急紧张(发现小狗失踪,四处寻找)→ 欣慰欢喜(小狗伤势好转,说服父母留下)→ ______________________________
小狗:恐惧无助(受伤蜷缩在雪堆旁,眼神恐惧)→ 放松信任(被李明照顾,停止发抖,主动进食、摇尾巴)→ 依赖亲近(失踪后主动靠近李明,展现依赖)→ 活泼健康(伤势好转,变得活泼,陪伴李明)→ ___________________________
李明的父母:起初可能反对养宠物→ 被李明的善意和坚持打动,同意留下小狗,传递包容与温暖→ ___________________________
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
同位语:
状语从句:
感叹句:
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
Para 1. The next morning, Li Ming woke up to find the puppy missing from its bed.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:李明发现小狗失踪后的反应是什么?最终找到小狗了吗?小狗为何失踪?这一过程展现了李明怎样的性格特点?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文“小狗伤势好转、说服父母”做铺垫?小狗的行为有何核心作用?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “圆满结局、主题升华” 做铺垫:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para 2. A few days later, the puppy’s condition gradually improved.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:小狗好转后有什么变化?李明做了什么?父母的态度如何转变?这些变化体现了“善意与责任”的什么内涵?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“善意暖人心、责任显担当”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
主题:
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三、段落构思
Para 1. The next morning, Li Ming woke up to find the puppy missing from its bed.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写李明发现小狗失踪后的焦急反应;②描写寻找过程及找到小狗的场景;③交代小狗失踪的原因,体现小狗对李明的依赖。
续写:
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Para 2. A few days later, the puppy’s condition gradually improved.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写小狗好转后的状态;②描写李明的照顾及向父母坦诚的过程;③交代父母态度转变,点明“善意与责任”的主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色:
李明,小狗,李明的父母
2.视角:
第三人称视角(客观叙述李明救助、照顾小狗的全过程,清晰展现李明的情感变化和小狗的状态转变,视角全面,让故事更具代入感和感染力)
3.时空线:
寒冬里,李明放学路上发现一只受伤的小狗,小狗蜷缩在雪堆旁,后腿受伤、浑身发抖→ 李明心生怜悯,取下围巾包裹小狗,决定带回家,尽管知道父母可能不同意→ 李明悄悄把小狗带回房间,擦干身体、做小床、喂水喂面包,小狗逐渐放松→ 当晚李明忧心忡忡,担心小狗伤势和父母的态度,梦见小狗健康奔跑→ (续写)第二天早上,李明发现小狗不在小床,焦急寻找,最终在床边找到,得知小狗害怕被抛弃→ (续写)几天后,小狗伤势逐渐好转,变得活泼,李明向父母坦诚,父母被打动,同意留下小狗,小狗成为家庭一员。
4.文章线索
(1)“受伤的小狗”是核心线索,串联起“发现小狗—救助小狗—偷偷照顾—担忧不安—寻找小狗—伤势好转—温馨陪伴”的完整情节链,是推动情节发展的关键。它触发了李明的善意与责任,见证了李明的成长与担当,也展现了家人间的包容与温暖,让“善意暖人心、责任显担当”的主题得以凸显,情节更具温度。
(2)“李明的善意与坚持”与“小狗的状态转变”是关键情节,既展现了李明对弱小生命的关爱与负责,也展现了小狗在关爱下的蜕变,双向的温暖让“善意与责任”的主题具象化。这一情节塑造了立体的人物形象:李明从心生怜悯到主动担当,展现了少年的善良与成长;小狗从恐惧无助到活泼依赖,展现了生命的脆弱与坚韧,让故事更真实动人。
(3)意义:“小狗蜷缩发抖的细节”交代了小狗的困境,奠定了李明救助它的动机,凸显了寒冬里弱小生命的无助;“李明取围巾包裹、细心照顾”的细节,展现了李明的善良与温柔,体现了他的责任心;“李明深夜担忧”的细节,展现了他对小狗的重视和内心的担当,为后续寻找小狗、说服父母做了铺垫。铺垫:这些细节构建了“困境—救助—照顾—担忧—寻找—成长”的逻辑链,让小狗的状态转变和父母的态度转变更自然,也让“善意与责任”的情节更具说服力,为主题升华奠定基础。
(4)情节推进逻辑:以“小狗的伤势变化”为外在线索,以“李明的情感与行动变化”为内在线索,遵循“李明发现受伤小狗→ 主动救助带回家→ 偷偷细心照顾→ 担忧小狗伤势与父母态度→ 发现小狗失踪并寻找→ 小狗伤势好转→ 说服父母留下小狗”的逻辑推进。主题脉络:凸显了“善意能温暖弱小生命,责任能成就成长;真诚与坚持能打动他人,传递人间温情;尊重生命、守护弱小,是最珍贵的品质”的主题脉络。
5.情节线
发现救助:寒冬放学路上,李明发现受伤发抖的小狗,心生怜悯,取下围巾包裹,不顾父母可能反对,坚持把小狗带回家→ 偷偷照顾:李明悄悄把小狗带回房间,用毛巾擦干身体,小心翼翼照顾受伤的后腿,用旧衣服做小床,喂水喂面包,小狗逐渐放松,主动进食、摇尾巴→ 担忧不安:当晚李明躺在床上,忧心忡忡,担心小狗伤势严重,也担心父母发现后反对,难以入眠,梦见小狗健康奔跑→ (续写)焦急寻找:第二天早上,李明发现小狗不在小床,惊慌失措,四处寻找,最终在床边找到蜷缩的小狗,得知小狗害怕被抛弃,内心释然并承诺不放弃它→ (续写)好转陪伴:几天后,小狗伤势逐渐好转,能站立行走,变得活泼,李明向父母坦诚救助小狗的全过程,展现自己照顾小狗的决心,父母被他的善意和责任打动,同意留下小狗,小狗成为家庭一员,带来温暖与欢乐。
6.情感线
李明:怜悯心疼(看到小狗受伤发抖、眼神无助,心生不忍)→ 坚定负责(不顾父母可能反对,坚持带小狗回家,决心帮助它)→ 细心温柔(耐心照顾小狗,擦干身体、做小床、喂食,呵护受伤的后腿)→ 担忧不安(担心小狗伤势,害怕父母反对,彻夜忧心)→ 焦急紧张(发现小狗失踪,惊慌寻找,生怕失去它)→ 欣慰欢喜(找到小狗,看到它逐渐好转,内心踏实)→ 坚定坦诚(向父母说明情况,用决心打动父母,践行责任)。
小狗:恐惧无助(受伤蜷缩在雪堆旁,浑身发抖,充满恐惧)→ 放松信任(被李明细心照顾,停止发抖,主动进食、摇尾巴,放下戒备)→ 依赖亲近(害怕被抛弃,悄悄躲在李明床边,看到李明就摇尾巴)→ 活泼快乐(伤势好转,能站立行走,在房间里奔跑,陪伴李明,充满活力)。
李明的父母:疑惑反对(起初可能不赞同养宠物,担心影响李明,也担心照顾麻烦)→ 理解打动(听完李明的坦诚讲述,看到他的善意与责任心,被深深打动)→ 包容接纳(同意留下小狗,接纳它成为家庭一员,传递温暖)。
7.文章大意概括
中文:寒冬的一天,李明放学路上发现一只受伤的小狗,小狗蜷缩在雪堆旁,后腿受伤、浑身发抖,眼神里满是恐惧与无助。李明心生怜悯,取下围巾包裹小狗,不顾父母可能反对,坚持把它带回家。他悄悄把小狗带回房间,细心擦干身体、做小床、喂水喂面包,小狗逐渐放松。当晚,李明忧心忡忡,担心小狗伤势和父母的态度,梦见小狗健康奔跑。第二天早上,李明发现小狗失踪,焦急寻找,最终在床边找到,得知小狗害怕被抛弃。几天后,小狗伤势好转,李明向父母坦诚一切,用善意和责任心打动父母,父母同意留下小狗,小狗成为家庭的一员,带来温暖与欢乐。
英文:On a cold winter day, Li Ming found an injured puppy on his way home from school. The puppy curled up beside a snow pile, shaking with a hurt hind leg and fear in its eyes. Li Ming felt sorry for it, took off his scarf to wrap it, and decided to take it home even though his parents might disagree. He quietly took care of the puppy in his room, drying its body, making a bed and feeding it. That night, Li Ming worried about the puppy’s injury and his parents’ reaction. The next morning, he was panic-stricken to find the puppy missing, but finally found it beside his bed. A few days later, the puppy got better. Li Ming told his parents the truth honestly, and his kindness and responsibility moved them, who agreed to keep the puppy. The puppy became a family member, bringing warmth and joy.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:He didn’t know how serious the puppy’s injury was or how his parents would react.
同位语:On a cold winter day, Li Ming found an injured puppy on his way home from school — a tiny creature shaking beside the snow pile.
状语从句:He decided to take the puppy home, even though he knew his parents might not agree to keep a pet.
感叹句:Don’t be afraid, I’ll help you!
9.主题归类
善意与温暖:少年的善意能温暖弱小生命,用行动守护无助的小生命,传递人间温情,彰显人性的美好。
责任与担当:面对弱小,主动承担责任,用坚持和细心践行承诺,在守护他人的过程中实现自我成长,凸显少年担当。
包容与陪伴:家人的包容能接纳善意,宠物的陪伴能带来温暖,让家庭充满爱,凸显陪伴与包容的意义。
二、情节构造
Para 1. The next morning, Li Ming woke up to find the puppy missing from its bed.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:李明发现小狗失踪后的反应是什么?最终找到小狗了吗?小狗为何失踪?这一过程展现了李明怎样的性格特点?
答案:李明的反应:惊慌地从床上跳起来,轻声呼唤小狗,在房间里四处寻找,内心焦急。最终找到了小狗,小狗蜷缩在李明的床边。小狗失踪的原因:害怕被李明抛弃,想靠近李明,寻求安全感。这一过程展现了李明细心、负责、重感情的性格特点,体现了他对小狗的重视和担心,也凸显了他的善良与温情。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文“小狗伤势好转、说服父母”做铺垫?小狗的行为有何核心作用?
答案:第一段描写李明寻找小狗的焦急与找到后的释然,以及小狗对李明的依赖,进一步加深了两人之间的情感联结,为后文李明更加用心照顾小狗、坚定说服父母留下它做了铺垫;同时,小狗的依赖行为也凸显了李明救助的意义,让“善意与责任”的主题更具感染力。小狗的行为核心作用:展现了弱小生命对善意的接纳与依赖,反衬出李明善意的价值,推动情节向“圆满结局”发展。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “圆满结局、主题升华” 做铺垫:
答案:第一段中,李明与小狗的情感联结进一步加深,李明更加坚定了照顾小狗的决心,这为第二段他向父母坦诚一切、主动承担责任提供了动力;同时,小狗的依赖的行为,也让李明的父母更能感受到小狗的可怜与李明的善意,为父母态度的转变做了铺垫,让“善意暖人心、责任显担当”的主题更连贯地升华。
Para 2. A few days later, the puppy’s condition gradually improved.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:小狗好转后有什么变化?李明做了什么?父母的态度如何转变?这些变化体现了“善意与责任”的什么内涵?
答案:小狗的变化:能站立行走,变得活泼好动,会在李明的房间里奔跑,对李明更加亲近依赖。李明的行为:更加用心照顾小狗,主动向父母坦诚救助小狗的全过程,展现自己照顾小狗的决心和责任。父母的态度转变:从起初可能反对,到被李明的善意和责任心打动,最终同意留下小狗。这些变化体现了“善意与责任”的核心内涵——善意能治愈弱小,责任能打动他人,坚守善意与责任,能收获温暖与圆满,让每个生命都能被温柔对待。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“善意暖人心、责任显担当”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
答案:结局以小狗伤势好转、成为李明家庭的一员,带来温暖与欢乐收尾,呼应了“善意暖人心”的主题——李明的善意救助,让弱小的小狗重获健康与温暖;呼应了“责任显担当”的主题——李明用坚持和责任,打动父母,践行了对小狗的承诺,实现了自我成长。这一结局为故事画上了圆满温暖的句号,让情节形成了“救助—照顾—成长—圆满”的闭环;同时,传递了“尊重生命、守护弱小、勇于担当”的正向价值观,让主题更深刻、更具教育意义。
主题:
答案:少年的善意是寒冬里最温暖的光,能照亮弱小生命的前路,治愈恐惧与无助;坚守责任、践行承诺,能打动他人,在守护他人的过程中实现自我成长;家人的包容与理解,能让善意延续,让温暖传递,彰显人间温情与美好;每一个弱小生命都值得被温柔对待,每一份善意与责任都能成就圆满。
三、段落构思
Para 1. The next morning, Li Ming woke up to find the puppy missing from its bed.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写李明发现小狗失踪后的焦急反应;②描写寻找过程及找到小狗的场景;③交代小狗失踪的原因,体现小狗对李明的依赖。
续写:The next morning, Li Ming woke up to find the puppy missing from its bed. He jumped out of bed in a panic, calling the puppy softly. He searched every corner of his room until he saw the puppy huddling beside his bed, trying to get close to him. The puppy wagged its tail weakly when it saw him, as if it was afraid of being left alone again. Li Ming picked it up gently, feeling relieved, and promised never to abandon it.
Para 2. A few days later, the puppy’s condition gradually improved.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写小狗好转后的状态;②描写李明的照顾及向父母坦诚的过程;③交代父母态度转变,点明“善意与责任”的主题。
续写:A few days later, the puppy’s condition gradually improved. It could stand up and walk slowly, and it became more lively, running around Li Ming’s room. Li Ming told his parents the whole story honestly, showing his determination to take good care of the puppy. Touched by his kindness and responsibility, his parents agreed to keep it. From then on, the puppy became a member of the family, bringing warmth and joy to everyone.
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