安徽省华师联盟2025-2026学年高三上学期1月质量检测英语写作训练导学案（短文写作+读后续写之邮差的善意）

安徽省华师联盟2025-2026学年高三上学期1月质量检测英语写作训练（短文写作+读后续写之邮差的善意） 一、短文写作（满分15分）—— 最令我感动的经历 （一）题型核心考点 本题为口语课分享类短文，核心考查“故事梗概+个人感悟”的清晰表达，兼顾真挚自然的语气（口语分享场景）。评分重点：内容完整性（故事梗概+个人感悟）、行文逻辑连贯、语言简洁易懂及语法多样性。 （二）写作任务 假定你是李华，请你用英语撰写一篇短文用于下周口语课分享，主题为“最令我感动的经历”。内容包括：（1）故事梗概；（2）个人感悟。 注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 My Most Touching Experience ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （三）语法亮点预判（可借鉴句式） 非谓语动词：用于补充故事细节，如“Walking home in the heavy rain, I felt helpless until a stranger offered me his umbrella.” 宾语从句：表达个人感悟，如“I realized that a small act of kindness can warm a person’s heart and make the world a better place.” 并列结构：描述故事过程，如“He helped me carry my books, walked me to the bus stop and told me to take care of myself.” （四）高分句子默写 1. 去年冬天的一个傍晚，我放学回家时突然生病发烧，一位路过的老师发现后，立即送我去医院，还一直照顾我直到我妈妈赶来。________________________________________________________________ 2. 她没有丝毫怨言，还不停地安慰我不要害怕，给我倒热水、量体温，就像我的家人一样温柔。________________________________________________________________ 3. 这次经历让我深深感动，我明白善意不分大小，每一份真诚的帮助都能给人带来温暖和力量。________________________________________________________________ 4. 从那以后，我也学着去帮助身边有需要的人，希望能把这份温暖传递下去。________________________________________________________________ （五）拓展表达练习（同义替换） 感动的：touching = _______ = _______ 帮助：help = _______ = _______ 温暖：warm = _______ = _______ 真诚的：sincere = _______ = _______ 二、读后续写（满分25分）—— 邮差的善意主题 （一）主题分析与续写思路 核心主题：平凡人的善意与坚守，无声的守护与温暖，彰显人性之美，从“隐瞒”到“坦诚”的情感递进，诠释善意的真正含义。 伏笔呼应：前文Amma对儿子的思念、收到“汇款”和“通话”后的喜悦、坚持给Viki报酬、Viki的犹豫与无奈，为续写“Viki坦诚真相、诉说缘由”铺垫。 续写思路： Paragraph 1（Taking a deep breath, Viki told him the truth.）：描写Viki坦诚的神态与语气→ 讲述真相（Amma儿子的真实情况、他隐瞒的原因）→ 补充细节（第一次发现Amma的困境、决定守护她的初心），体现Viki的善良。 Paragraph 2（Viki nodded slowly, a sad look in his eyes.）：描写Viki的伤感与坚定→ Ramu的反应（震惊、理解、愧疚）→ 两人达成默契，延续这份善意→ 点明主题（善意无需张扬，守护也是一种温暖），呼应前文Amma的喜悦与Viki的坚守。 （二）写作任务 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Under the hot afternoon sun, Amma waited beside her mud-walled house. Then Viki, the postman, arrived on his bicycle with a money order. Seeing him, Amma’s tired eyes instantly shone with life. She pushed herself up, her movements slow but eager. “Viki!” she called out, her voice thin but filled with joy. She forgot everything else, wanting nothing more than to hear his voice. “Let me talk to my boy first.” “Amma, I really don’t have much time today,” Viki said gently, knowing how delicate her happiness was. “Just for a minute! It will only take a minute, Viki!” Viki pulled out his old mobile phone. “Alright, but please be quick,” he said, handing her the device. With trembling fingers, Amma answered. After a brief exchange filled with her side of the conversation—questions about health, food, and when he would visit — she ended the call and her face lit up. A wide, genuine smile spread across her wrinkled face, making her look years younger. Viki handed her the money. “Here you go, Amma. Ten hundred dollars.” She counted the notes carefully, her thumb brushing against the paper. Selecting one, she folded it neatly and pressed it into Viki’s hand. “This is for you,” she insisted. “Why, Amma?” he protested, trying to push it back. She smiled warmly. “You brought me my son’s money, and you let me talk to him. Your kindness costs something, doesn’t it? Please, keep it.” Though he continued to refuse, she insisted. Finally, he pocketed the note, accepting her gift along with her blessings. He waved goodbye and mounted his bicycle. He had pedalled only a short distance when a familiar voice stopped him. “Viki!” It was Ramu, Viki’s workmate. “What are you doing? Why do you do this every single month?” Ramu asked with curiosity keeping his voice low. “You bring her your own money and pretend it’s from her son. Not only that, you give me money to talk to her on phone as her son! Why?” Viki hadn’t expected anyone to notice. He looked away, his eyes fixed on the horizon. “It’s... complicated.” “Tell me,” Ramu pressed. 注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Taking a deep breath, Viki told him the truth. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ Viki nodded slowly, a sad look in his eyes. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ （三）高分亮点预判 细节描写：通过动作（如“take a deep breath”“clench his fists”“pat on the shoulder”）、神态（如“eyes filled with sadness”“voice trembling”“smile faintly”）、心理（如“a heavy feeling in his heart”“moved deeply”）凸显情感。 语法结构：分词作伴随状语、定语从句、宾语从句、让步状语从句，提升句式复杂度，贴合高分要求。 情感连贯：从“Viki被追问”到“坦诚真相”，再到“两人达成默契”，呼应前文Amma的思念、Viki的善意与隐瞒，升华“平凡善意，温暖人间”的主题。 （四）高分句子默写 描写类（场景与动作） 1. 他深吸一口气，握紧拳头，声音有些颤抖地告诉Ramu，Amma的儿子一年前意外去世了，他偶然发现老人独自生活、思念儿子，便决定用这种方式守护她的希望。________________________________________________________________ 2. Ramu听完后愣住了，眼里满是震惊和愧疚，他轻轻拍了拍Viki的肩膀，低声道歉，为自己之前的追问感到抱歉。________________________________________________________________ 情感类（感悟与联结） 1. Viki明白，Amma真正需要的不是钱，而是儿子的牵挂，他的小小善意，能让老人在孤独的晚年感受到温暖，这就足够了。________________________________________________________________ 2. 那一刻，Ramu终于懂得，善意从来都不是轰轰烈烈的举动，而是默默的守护，是用微小的行动，为别人撑起一片温暖的天地。________________________________________________________________ 参考答案 一、短文写作（满分15分）—— 最令我感动的经历 （一）题型核心考点 本题为口语课分享类短文，核心考查“故事梗概+个人感悟”的清晰表达，兼顾真挚自然的语气（口语分享场景）。评分重点：内容完整性（故事梗概+个人感悟）、行文逻辑连贯、语言简洁易懂及语法多样性。 （二）写作任务 假定你是李华，请你用英语撰写一篇短文用于下周口语课分享，主题为“最令我感动的经历”。内容包括：（1）故事梗概；（2）个人感悟。 注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 My Most Touching Experience Last winter evening, I suddenly felt sick and had a fever on my way home from school. A passing teacher noticed me and immediately took me to the hospital. She looked after me carefully, gave me hot water and took my temperature until my mom arrived. Her kindness touched me deeply. I realized that a small act of kindness can bring great warmth to others. From then on, I try my best to help people in need, hoping to pass on this warmth and make the world better. （三）语法亮点预判（可借鉴句式） 非谓语动词：用于补充故事细节，如“Walking home in the heavy rain, I felt helpless until a stranger offered me his umbrella.” 宾语从句：表达个人感悟，如“I realized that a small act of kindness can warm a person’s heart and make the world a better place.” 并列结构：描述故事过程，如“He helped me carry my books, walked me to the bus stop and told me to take care of myself.” （四）高分句子默写答案 1. One evening last winter, I suddenly fell ill and had a fever when I went home from school. A passing teacher found me, immediately sent me to the hospital, and took care of me until my mom came. 2. She had no complaint at all, and kept comforting me not to be afraid, gave me hot water and took my temperature, as gentle as my family. 3. This experience moved me deeply. I understood that kindness has no size, and every sincere help can bring warmth and strength to people. 4. Since then, I have also learned to help people around me who are in need, hoping to pass on this warmth. （五）拓展表达练习答案 感动的：touching = moving = heart-warming 帮助：help = assist = aid 温暖：warm = warm-hearted = gentle 真诚的：sincere = genuine = honest 二、读后续写（满分25分）—— 邮差善意主题 （一）主题分析与续写思路 核心主题：平凡人的善意与坚守，无声的守护与温暖，彰显人性之美，从“隐瞒”到“坦诚”的情感递进，诠释善意的真正含义。 伏笔呼应：前文Amma对儿子的思念、收到“汇款”和“通话”后的喜悦、坚持给Viki报酬、Viki的犹豫与无奈，为续写“Viki坦诚真相、诉说缘由”铺垫。 续写思路： Paragraph 1（Taking a deep breath, Viki told him the truth.）：描写Viki坦诚的神态与语气→ 讲述真相（Amma儿子的真实情况、他隐瞒的原因）→ 补充细节（第一次发现Amma的困境、决定守护她的初心），体现Viki的善良。 Paragraph 2（Viki nodded slowly, a sad look in his eyes.）：描写Viki的伤感与坚定→ Ramu的反应（震惊、理解、愧疚）→ 两人达成默契，延续这份善意→ 点明主题（善意无需张扬，守护也是一种温暖），呼应前文Amma的喜悦与Viki的坚守。 （二）写作任务 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。（材料同无答案版，此处省略） 注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Taking a deep breath, Viki told him the truth. He said Amma’s son had died in an accident a year ago. He accidentally found Amma living alone, missing her son day and night, and even refusing to eat sometimes. Fearing that the truth would break her, he decided to pretend to bring her money from her son and asked Ramu to play the role of her son on the phone. His voice trembled as he spoke, full of sympathy for Amma. Viki nodded slowly, a sad look in his eyes. Ramu stood silently, shocked and guilty for his thoughtless questions. He patted Viki’s shoulder gently and apologized. “I’m sorry, I didn’t know the truth,” he said softly. He then insisted on helping Viki continue the kindness without getting paid. Viki smiled faintly, feeling relieved. From then on, the two postmen took turns to guard Amma’s hope, letting her feel the warmth of “her son’s” love silently. （三）高分亮点解析 细节描写：Taking a deep breath, voice trembled, patted Viki’s shoulder gently, smiled faintly 等动作、神态描写，让场景更真实，情感更真挚，贴合善意守护的主题。 语法结构：分词作伴随状语（Fearing that the truth would break her）、宾语从句（He said Amma’s son had died...）、状语从句（Fearing that...），提升句式复杂度，符合高分要求。 情感连贯：从Viki坦诚真相，到Ramu理解并加入善意的行列，呼应前文Amma的思念、Viki的坚守，完美升华“平凡善举，守护温暖，彰显人性之美”的核心主题。 （四）高分句子默写答案 描写类（场景与动作） 1. Taking a deep breath, he clenched his fists and told Ramu with a trembling voice that Amma’s son had died in an accident a year ago. He accidentally found the old woman living alone, missing her son, so he decided to guard her hope in this way. 2. Ramu was stunned after hearing this, his eyes filled with shock and guilt. He patted Viki’s shoulder gently and apologized in a low voice, feeling sorry for his previous questioning. 情感类（感悟与联结） 3. Viki understood that what Amma really needed was not money, but the care from her son. His small kindness could make the old woman feel warm in her lonely old age, and that was enough. 4. At that moment, Ramu finally realized that kindness was never a grand act, but a silent guard — using small actions to hold up a warm world for others. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $