内容正文:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
In the Philippines, plain-looking Maria dreamed big in her small village. Yet life was hard: her parents struggled in the fields from dawn till dusk but hardly to make ends meet. As a kid, her mornings were filled with housework before school, and opportunities seemed rare.
One rainy afternoon in class, Maria stared at the blackboard, her mind elsewhere. Her teacher’s voice faded as she pictured her father’s aching back and her mother’s worsening cough. “What’s the point of learning these words?” she thought, “when they’re fighting just to survive?” Her notebook lay open and empty. Dreaming now felt not only impossible, but selfish.
Mr. Reyes, her English teacher, noticed Maria absent-minded over weeks. After class one day, he approached her gently. “Maria,” he began, “Is everything alright?” Staring at her worn shoes. “It’s nothing, sir,” she whispered, voice trembling. “You’ve always been one of my brightest,” he said softly. “But lately, your light seems dim.” Tears fell as she finally admitted: “It’s my family-we can hardly afford anything. How dare I dream while they break their backs just to survive? Maybe I should just quit and help them.” The words tumbled out, heavy with hopeless.
Mr. Reyes listened, his expression softening as he patiently encouraged her, “Look at me-don’t let your circumstances define you. You can make it.” He paused, letting his words sink in. “Your mind is a gift—not just to you, but to your whole family.” Later, Mr. Reyes secured a full scholarship (奖学金) for Mara to a university in the city. And for the first time, Maria realized her hope could become real.
In the city, her perseverance drove her to treat every challenge as a stepping stone. And she did exceptionally well at university. Even before graduation, a famous local company offered her a position. Yet, in their regular phone calls, her parents had expressed their hope that she would return to their hometown to build her future.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As graduation approached, Maria was faced with a tough decision.
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Returning to her village, Maria started doing something special for the children.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角:
第__________________________人称视角
3.时空线:
Maria在菲律宾的小村庄长大,生活艰难,父母辛勤劳作却难以糊口,她从小要做家务再上学,觉得机会渺茫、梦想无望→ 课堂上她心不在焉,纠结于家庭困境,萌生退学念头→ 英语老师Mr. Reyes发现她的异常,耐心鼓励她,为她争取到城市大学的全额奖学金,Maria第一次看到梦想的希望→ 她在城市努力学习,表现优异,毕业前获得知名公司offer,但父母希望她回到家乡→ (续写)Maria面临艰难抉择,在城市发展与回报家乡之间犹豫→ (续写)_____________________
4.文章线索
(1)“Maria的梦想与抉择”是核心线索,这一线索对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
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(2)“Maria的前后转变”是关键情节,这一情节为何能强化“坚持与感恩”的主题?如何塑造Maria的人物形象?
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(3)“Maria的家庭困境”“课堂上的心不在焉”“Mr. Reyes的鼓励”“城市里的努力”“毕业前的抉择”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“Maria回报家乡”做了怎样的铺垫?
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(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“梦想无望—看到希望—努力成长—艰难抉择—回报家乡”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
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5.情节线
梦想无望:Maria在菲律宾小村庄长大,生活艰难,父母田间劳作却难以糊口,她每天先做家务再上学,觉得机会渺茫,课堂上心不在焉,纠结于家庭困境,萌生退学帮助父母的念头,内心充满绝望→ 看到希望:Mr. Reyes发现她的异常,耐心倾听她的烦恼、鼓励她,为她争取到城市大学的全额奖学金,Maria第一次意识到梦想有可能实现→ 努力成长:Maria在城市克服困难,坚持不懈,学习表现优异,毕业前获得当地知名公司的工作机会,同时父母希望她回到家乡→ 艰难抉择:(续写)Maria面临两难,在城市的大好发展机会与回报家乡、陪伴父母之间犹豫不定→ (续写)
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6.情感线
Maria:从小生活艰难的自卑、迷茫,对梦想的渴望与绝望→ 被Mr. Reyes鼓励、获得奖学金后的感动、希望,重拾对生活的信心→ 在城市努力学习时的坚定、坚韧,收获成就后的喜悦→ 面临抉择时的犹豫、纠结→ 回到家乡后的坚定、热忱→ ______________________________
Mr. Reyes:___________________________
Maria的父母:辛勤劳作、朴实善良,疼爱女儿,希望女儿能回到身边,守护家乡→ ___________________________
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
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同位语:
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状语从句:
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比喻:
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9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:As graduation approached, Maria was faced with a tough decision.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:Maria面临怎样的两难抉择?她的心理活动是什么?这一过程展现了Maria怎样的性格特点?
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衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文Maria回报家乡、主题升华做铺垫?Maria的犹豫有何核心作用?
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过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “回报家乡、主题升华” 做铺垫:
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第二段提示句:Returning to her village, Maria started doing something special for the children.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:Maria回到家乡后,为孩子们做了哪些具体事情?这些行动体现了Maria怎样的品质?
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衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“坚持、感恩与回报”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
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主题:
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三、段落构思
第一段:As graduation approached, Maria was faced with a tough decision.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,明确Maria的两难抉择(城市offer与家乡期盼);②刻画Maria的心理活动,体现其犹豫与纠结;③为后文回到家乡做铺垫。
续写:
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第二段:Returning to her village, Maria started doing something special for the children.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写Maria回到家乡的状态;②刻画Maria为孩子们做的具体事情,展现她的热忱;③点明结局,凸显Maria的情感变化与主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色:
Maria:外表普通,出生于菲律宾贫困村庄,从小生活艰难却心怀梦想;起初因家庭困境自卑、迷茫,萌生退学念头,内心充满绝望;被Mr. Reyes鼓励并获得奖学金后,重拾希望,变得坚韧、努力;在城市大学刻苦学习,表现优异,懂得感恩;面临抉择时犹豫纠结,但最终选择回报家乡,变得热忱、有责任感,用自己的力量帮助家乡孩子实现梦想。
Mr. Reyes:Maria的英语老师,细心、善良、有耐心,善于发现学生的异常;真诚鼓励困境中的Maria,为她争取奖学金,是Maria梦想路上的引路人,用自己的善意和鼓励改变了Maria的一生,展现了为人师表的责任与担当。
Maria的父母:朴实、勤劳、善良,常年在田间劳作,虽生活艰难却始终疼爱女儿;希望女儿毕业后回到家乡,既渴望陪伴,也期盼女儿能为家乡带来改变,是Maria坚持下去的动力之一,也体现了平凡人的朴实心愿。
2.视角:
第三人称视角
3.时空线:
Maria在菲律宾的小村庄长大,生活艰难,父母辛勤劳作却难以糊口,她从小要做家务再上学,觉得机会渺茫、梦想无望→ 课堂上她心不在焉,纠结于家庭困境,萌生退学念头→ 英语老师Mr. Reyes发现她的异常,耐心鼓励她,为她争取到城市大学的全额奖学金,Maria第一次看到梦想的希望→ 她在城市努力学习,表现优异,毕业前获得知名公司offer,但父母希望她回到家乡→ (续写)Maria面临艰难抉择,在城市发展与回报家乡之间犹豫,最终决定回到家乡→ (续写)Maria回到家乡,为村里的孩子创办学校、传授知识,鼓励他们追求梦想,用自己的力量改变家乡,实现了自我价值与感恩的初心。
4.文章线索
(1)“Maria的梦想与抉择”是核心线索,串联起“梦想无望—看到希望—努力成长—艰难抉择—回报家乡”的完整情节链,是推动情节发展的关键。它触发了Maria的多次情感转折,从绝望到重拾希望,从纠结到坚定,既展现了Maria的成长,也凸显了“坚持、感恩与回报”的主题,让情节更具层次感,情感更具感染力。
(2)“Maria的前后转变”是关键情节,展现了一个贫困女孩在他人帮助下,凭借自身努力摆脱困境,最终选择回报家乡的成长历程,反衬出坚持与善意的强大力量,让主题具象化。这一情节塑造了Maria立体的人物形象——从自卑迷茫到坚韧热忱,从渴望改变自己到主动帮助他人,展现了她内心的善良与感恩,让人物更真实可感,也让读者感受到平凡人也能通过努力与抉择实现非凡价值。
(3)意义:“Maria的家庭困境”交代了她最初绝望的原因,奠定了故事的情感基调,也反衬出后续她努力成长、改变命运的不易;“课堂上的心不在焉”展现了她的内心挣扎,为后文Mr. Reyes的介入做铺垫;“Mr. Reyes的鼓励”是Maria命运的转折点,让她重拾梦想,也为她后续懂得感恩、传递善意埋下伏笔;“城市里的努力”体现了Maria的坚韧,让她有能力回报家乡;“毕业前的抉择”展现了Maria的感恩之心,推动情节向“回报家乡”发展。铺垫:这些细节构建了“困境—救赎—成长—回报”的逻辑链,让Maria的抉择与行动更具合理性,也为后续主题升华奠定了情感与情节基础。
(4)情节推进逻辑:以“Maria的成长与情感变化”为内在线索,以“梦想的追求与抉择”为外在线索,遵循“Maria贫困迷茫、梦想无望—Mr. Reyes鼓励、获得奖学金,看到希望—城市努力学习、收获成就—毕业面临抉择(城市vs家乡)—下定决心回到家乡—用行动回报家乡、帮助他人”的逻辑推进。主题脉络:凸显了“坚持就能改变命运;善意与鼓励能照亮他人前行的路;懂得感恩、学会回报,才能实现真正的自我价值;个人梦想与家乡发展相结合,才能绽放更耀眼的光芒”的主题脉络。
5.情节线
梦想无望:Maria在菲律宾小村庄长大,生活艰难,父母田间劳作却难以糊口,她每天先做家务再上学,觉得机会渺茫,课堂上心不在焉,纠结于家庭困境,萌生退学帮助父母的念头,内心充满绝望→ 看到希望:Mr. Reyes发现她的异常,耐心倾听她的烦恼、鼓励她,为她争取到城市大学的全额奖学金,Maria第一次意识到梦想有可能实现→ 努力成长:Maria在城市克服困难,坚持不懈,学习表现优异,毕业前获得当地知名公司的工作机会,同时父母希望她回到家乡→ 艰难抉择:(续写)Maria面临两难,在城市的大好发展机会与回报家乡、陪伴父母之间犹豫不定,反复回想自己的成长历程与Mr. Reyes的教诲,最终下定决心回到家乡→ (续写)回报家乡:Maria回到家乡后,利用自己的知识和资源,为村里的孩子创办了小型学校,教他们英语、分享自己的经历,鼓励他们坚持梦想,帮助更多孩子摆脱困境,实现了自我价值。
6.情感线
Maria:从小生活艰难的自卑、迷茫,对梦想的渴望与绝望,担心自己的梦想是一种自私→ 被Mr. Reyes鼓励、获得奖学金后的感动、重拾希望,对未来充满期待,变得坚定而坚韧→ 在城市努力学习时的刻苦、执着,克服困难后的成就感,面对城市机会的心动→ 面临抉择时的犹豫、纠结,既想改善父母生活,又想回报家乡的感恩→ 回到家乡后的坚定、热忱,帮助孩子时的满足与幸福→ 实现自我价值后的从容、自豪,深刻理解感恩与奉献的意义。
Mr. Reyes:细心、温和、有责任感,对待学生充满耐心与善意→ 发现Maria异常后的担忧,倾听时的真诚,鼓励时的坚定→ 为Maria争取奖学金时的用心,展现了为人师表的担当,以及希望帮助困境学生改变命运的初心。
Maria的父母:辛勤劳作、朴实善良,面对贫困生活的坚韧,对女儿的疼爱与期盼→ 希望女儿回到家乡的牵挂,既想陪伴女儿,也希望女儿能为家乡带来改变→ 看到女儿的成就与奉献后的骄傲、欣慰,为女儿的选择感到自豪。
7.文章大意概括
中文:Maria出生在菲律宾一个贫困的小村庄,生活艰难,父母辛勤劳作却难以糊口,她从小要先做家务再上学,一度对梦想感到绝望,萌生退学念头。她的英语老师Mr. Reyes发现她的异常后,耐心鼓励她,并为她争取到城市大学的全额奖学金,让她重新看到梦想的希望。Maria在城市刻苦学习,表现优异,毕业前获得了知名公司的工作机会,但父母希望她回到家乡。面临艰难抉择,Maria最终决定放弃城市的机会,回到家乡,为村里的孩子创办学校,传授知识、鼓励他们追求梦想,用自己的力量回报家乡,实现了自我价值与感恩的初心。
英文:Maria was born in a poor village in the Philippines, where life was hard. Her parents worked hard in the fields from dawn till dusk but could barely make ends meet. She had to do housework before going to school every day and once despaired of her dreams, even thinking about dropping out of school. Her English teacher, Mr. Reyes, noticed her abnormality, encouraged her patiently, and secured a full scholarship for her to a university in the city, making her see the hope of her dreams again. Maria studied hard in the city and performed exceptionally well. Before graduation, she got an offer from a famous local company, but her parents hoped she would return to her hometown. Faced with a tough decision, Maria finally decided to give up the city opportunity and go back to her hometown. She set up a small school for the children in the village, taught them knowledge, encouraged them to pursue their dreams, and repaid her hometown with her own strength, realizing her self-worth and the original intention of gratitude.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:Maria finally admitted that her family was too poor and she wanted to quit school to help them.
同位语:Mr. Reyes, a kind and patient English teacher, secured a full scholarship for Maria to a university in the city.
状语从句:When she pictured her father’s aching back and her mother’s worsening cough, she couldn’t concentrate on her studies.
比喻:Her perseverance in the city was like a bright light, guiding her to achieve her dreams step by step.
9.主题归类
坚持与成长:困境中的坚持能改变命运,每个人都能通过自身努力摆脱困境,实现自我成长与突破;无论身处何种逆境,都不能放弃对梦想的追求。
善意与鼓励:一句真诚的鼓励、一份无私的善意,能照亮他人前行的路,改变一个人的命运;为人师表的责任与担当,能成为他人梦想路上的引路人。
感恩与回报:懂得感恩他人的帮助,学会用自己的力量回报家乡、回馈社会,才能实现真正的自我价值;个人的成长与家乡的发展紧密相连,奉献才能让梦想更有意义。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:As graduation approached, Maria was faced with a tough decision.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:Maria面临怎样的两难抉择?她的心理活动是什么?这一过程展现了Maria怎样的性格特点?
答案:Maria面临的两难抉择是:接受城市知名公司的offer,拥有高薪工作和光明的个人发展前景,快速改善父母的生活;或是放弃城市机会,回到贫困的家乡,满足父母的期盼,帮助家乡的孩子。她的心理活动是纠结而矛盾的,既心动于城市的机会,又难忘父母的牵挂和自己的成长历程,更想回报家乡的养育之恩。这一过程展现了Maria善良、感恩、有责任感的性格特点,也体现了她不贪图名利、重视亲情与奉献的品质。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文Maria回报家乡、主题升华做铺垫?Maria的犹豫有何核心作用?
答案:第一段描写Maria的两难抉择与内心纠结,以及最终下定决心回到家乡的过程,自然引出后文她为家乡孩子所做的努力,为“回报家乡、传递善意”的情节做铺垫,让后文的行动更具合理性。Maria的犹豫起到了制造情感冲突、凸显人物品质的核心作用,既展现了选择的艰难,也反衬出她最终选择的坚定,让“感恩与回报”的主题更具感染力,为后续主题升华奠定基础。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “回报家乡、主题升华” 做铺垫:
答案:第一段中,Maria最终决定放弃城市机会、回到家乡的抉择,是第二段她为孩子做事的前提的动力;同时,第一段中Maria回想自己的成长历程、铭记Mr. Reyes的教诲,也为她后续传授知识、鼓励孩子追求梦想的行动埋下伏笔。Maria的抉择展现了她的感恩之心,与第二段她的奉献行动相呼应,让“感恩—回报—传递善意”的逻辑更连贯,为主题升华提供了情节支撑,让“坚持与奉献”的主题更具说服力。
第二段提示句:Returning to her village, Maria started doing something special for the children.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:Maria回到家乡后,为孩子们做了哪些具体事情?这些行动体现了Maria怎样的品质?
答案:Maria回到家乡后,用自己的积蓄和当地政府的支持创办了小型学校,教孩子们英语,分享自己在城市努力学习、克服困难的经历,耐心鼓励孩子们坚持梦想、努力学习,不要被贫困的环境打败。这些行动体现了Maria热忱、善良、有责任感、懂得感恩、乐于奉献的品质,也展现了她坚韧、有爱心,愿意用自己的力量传递善意、改变他人命运的初心。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“坚持、感恩与回报”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
答案:结局以Maria帮助越来越多的家乡孩子重拾希望、获得村民和父母的认可,实现自我价值收尾,呼应了“坚持”的主题(Maria坚持追求梦想、坚持回报家乡),呼应了“感恩”的主题(感恩Mr. Reyes的鼓励、感恩父母的养育),也呼应了“回报”的主题(用自己的知识和力量回报家乡、帮助他人)。这一结局为故事画上了圆满的句号,让情节形成“困境—救赎—成长—回报”的闭环;同时,将Maria的个人成长升华为“传递善意、助力家乡发展”的大爱,让主题更深刻、更具感染力,传递了正向的价值观。
主题:
答案:坚持能突破困境、成就梦想,善意与鼓励能照亮他人前行的路;懂得感恩、学会回报,才能实现真正的自我价值;个人的成长与家乡的发展紧密相连,奉献与担当能让平凡的人生绽放不平凡的光芒;无论身处何种境遇,都要坚守初心、心怀善意,用自己的力量温暖他人、改变世界。
三、段落构思
第一段:As graduation approached, Maria was faced with a tough decision.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,明确Maria的两难抉择(城市offer与家乡期盼);②刻画Maria的心理活动,体现其犹豫与纠结;③为后文回到家乡做铺垫。
续写:As graduation approached, Maria was faced with a tough decision. She was torn between the well-paid job in the city and returning to her hometown. The famous company’s offer promised a bright future and a chance to improve her parents’ life soon, which tempted her greatly. However, she couldn’t forget her parents’ hopeful voices in phone calls and the difficult life in her village. Every night, she recalled Mr. Reyes’ encouragement and her own struggle—she was lucky to have a chance to change her life, but many kids in her village still had no hope. After careful consideration, she made a firm decision to go back home and help those kids.
第二段:Returning to her village, Maria started doing something special for the children.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写Maria回到家乡的状态;②刻画Maria为孩子们做的具体事情,展现她的热忱;③点明结局,凸显Maria的情感变化与主题。
续写:Returning to her village, Maria started doing something special for the children. She used her savings and asked for support from the local government to set up a small school. Every day, she taught the children English carefully and shared her stories of studying in the city, encouraging them to work hard and never give up their dreams. She also bought books and stationery for the poor kids with her first salary. With her help, more and more children became confident and began to pursue their dreams. Her parents were proud of her, and the whole village respected her. Maria finally found her true value in helping others.
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