英语写作训练（邮件回复+读后续写之正视错误并勇于承担）导学案-黑龙江等多省九师联盟2025-2026学年高三上学期11月质量检测

该高中英语高考复习学案系统覆盖邮件回复与读后续写两大核心写作题型，以“信息告知+感受表达”和“正视错误并勇于承担”为主题构建考点体系，通过写作任务拆解、语法亮点预判、高分句子默写等环节，引导学生自主梳理应用文格式规范与读后续写逻辑层次，形成结构化写作知识网络。 亮点在于自主学习支持与思维品质培养，如设置同义替换练习（目的、参与等词汇拓展）和续写思路分段落引导，学生可通过高分句子默写夯实语言能力，借助续写细节描写训练提升逻辑分析与情感表达能力。学案提供诊断性自测（拓展表达练习）与范文参考，助力学生自主诊断薄弱点，教师可依据学情精准指导，有效培养学生自主复习能力与写作核心素养。

黑龙江省等多省九师联盟2025-2026学年高三上学期11月质量检测英语写作训练（邮件回复+读后续写之正视错误并勇于承担） 一、邮件回复（告知Jim绿色生活行动详情） （一）题型核心考点 本题为应用文之邮件回复，核心考查“信息告知+感受表达”的清晰传达，兼顾交际礼貌性与行文连贯性。评分重点：内容完整性（行动目的、参与的活动及感受）、逻辑层次、格式规范、语法多样性，贴合日常交际场景。 （二）写作任务 假定你是李华，上个月你参加了你市举办的主题为“绿色生活行动(Green Living Initiative)”的系列活动。你的英国朋友Jim对此很感兴趣，特发来邮件询问。请你回复邮件，内容包括：(1)该行动的目的;(2)你参与的一项活动及感受;注意：1．写作词数应为80个左右;2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Dear Jim, ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua （三）语法亮点预判（可借鉴句式） 不定式表目的：用于说明行动目的，如“The purpose of this initiative is to raise people’s awareness of protecting the environment.” 定语从句：用于补充活动细节，如“I participated in a community clean-up activity, which was organized by the city government.” 宾语从句：用于表达感受，如“I felt proud because I knew my small efforts could make a difference to our planet.” （四）高分句子默写 1. 这项“绿色生活行动”的目的是提高人们的环保意识，鼓励大家养成低碳、节约的生活习惯。________________________________________________________________ 2. 我参与了社区垃圾分类宣传活动，向居民讲解如何分类垃圾，倡导绿色生活方式。________________________________________________________________ 3. 虽然活动很累，但看到越来越多的人愿意参与其中，我感到非常自豪和有意义。________________________________________________________________ 4. 我相信只要每个人都付出一点努力，我们的城市和地球将会变得更加美丽。________________________________________________________________ （五）拓展表达练习（同义替换） 目的：purpose = _______ = _______ 参与：participate in = _______ = _______ 鼓励：encourage = _______ = _______ 自豪：proud = _______ = _______ 二、读后续写（正视错误并勇于承担主题） （一）主题分析与续写思路 核心主题：年轻人在工作中犯错后的反思与担当，凸显“正视错误、勇于承担”的成长意义，兼顾善意的巧合与真诚的道歉。 伏笔呼应：前文提到“我”误将冰箱里的面糊当作蓝纹奶酪酱，放在顾客沙拉上却被称赞，还吸引了更多顾客，为续写“发现错误、主动道歉、承担责任”铺垫。 续写思路： Paragraph 1（期待表扬却被质疑）：描写Teri Jo的神情，并未表扬“我”反而提出疑问→ “我”的疑惑与紧张→ Teri Jo指出“我”混淆了酱料和面糊的真相。 Paragraph 2（发现错误后担当）：描写“我”的愧疚与慌乱→ 主动提出道歉并弥补过错→ Teri Jo的态度转变，“我”的成长与感悟，凸显担当的意义。 （二）写作任务 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Last summer, I worked at a small restaurant, where the light was dim (昏暗) in the evening, to save money for my college life. Sally, a waitress, had been training me. One afternoon, I was cleaning the tables for the dinner shift when my manager, Teri Jo, came up to me. “I know you are still learning, but it’s going to be just you, waiting tables, being the cashier and putting the dressings (酱) on the salads, and the one cook,” she said. “Sally just called in sick. My daughter is about to have my first grandbaby in the hospital, or else I’d be here.” Teri Jo assured me I could handle everything and told me, “The salads are already made and in the front refrigerator. All the other dressings are there except the blue cheese, which is in a vat (桶)on the floor of the big walk-in refrigerator past the kitchen.” I made a mental note of that, for the few diners who might want the blue-cheese dressing on their salads. Soon, the cook and I began our dinner shift. At first, some regulars came in for quick meals. After a while, one man I hadn’t seen before ordered the Cobb salad with the blue-cheese dressing. I went to the back to look for the dressing in the large walk-in refrigerator. Thinking how clever I was, I filled a small bowl with some of the dressing and put it in the front refrigerator, where there was a bowl of something I later knew was pancake batter (面糊) just for lunch. That way, I wouldn’t have to go back to the walk-in refrigerator in the dim light again. I put the mixture on the man’s Cobb salad. The man spoke highly of it after tasting it. Five more new customers overheard his words, ordered the same dressing and liked it. The six new customers promised to enjoy it again the next evening. The night shift went smoothly. I thought the manager would praise me for what I had done, especially for saving extra steps for the blue-cheese dressing. 注意：1．续写词数应为150个左右; 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 The next day, when I went in for the lunch shift, I prepared myself for Teri Jo’s praise. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ My heart sank as Teri Jo continued, “I see a similar bowl full of the blue-cheese dressing beside the near-empty bowl of pancake batter.” ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ （三）高分亮点预判 细节描写：通过动作（如“lower my head in shame”）、神态（如“face turned red”）、语言（如“I’m so sorry for my mistake”）凸显愧疚与担当。 语法结构：状语从句、分词作伴随状语、宾语从句，提升句式复杂度与表达流畅度。 情感连贯：从“期待表扬”到“发现错误”再到“主动担当”，呼应前文的失误细节，升华“正视错误、勇于承担就是成长”的主题。 （四）高分句子默写 一、描写类（场景与动作） 1. 我笑着向她打招呼，期待着她的表扬，可她的神情却很严肃，没有一丝笑意。________________________________________________________________ 2. 我羞愧地低下头，脸颊发烫，急忙向经理道歉，并解释了我误将面糊当作酱料的全过程。________________________________________________________________ 二、情感类（感悟与联结） 1. 那一刻我明白，逃避错误只会让后果更糟，而正视错误、勇于担当，才是成长的必经之路。________________________________________________________________ 2. 这次失误让我学会了认真细致，也懂得了工作中每一个小细节都至关重要，不能有丝毫马虎。________________________________________________________________ 参考答案 一、邮件回复（告知Jim绿色生活行动详情） （一）题型核心考点 本题为应用文之邮件回复，核心考查“信息告知+感受表达”的清晰传达，兼顾交际礼貌性与行文连贯性。评分重点：内容完整性（行动目的、参与的活动及感受）、逻辑层次、格式规范、语法多样性，贴合日常交际场景。 （二）高分范文（80词） Dear Jim, I’m glad you’re interested in the Green Living Initiative held in my city last month. Its purpose is to raise people’s environmental awareness and encourage everyone to develop a low-carbon and thrifty lifestyle. I participated in a community garbage classification publicity activity, where I explained how to sort garbage to residents and advocated green living habits. Though tired, I felt proud because I knew my small efforts could contribute to a better planet. I hope we can all take action to protect our home. Yours, Li Hua （三）语法亮点 不定式表目的：Its purpose is to raise people’s environmental awareness...（清晰说明行动目的，句式简洁明了，符合邮件表达习惯。） 定语从句：I participated in a community garbage classification publicity activity, where I explained...（补充活动细节，替代简单句，丰富句式结构，提升表达层次。） 状语从句：Though tired, I felt proud because I knew my small efforts could contribute to a better planet.（让步状语从句省略主语和be动词，原因状语从句衔接感受与原因，逻辑连贯，句式紧凑。） （四）高分句子默写 1. The purpose of this Green Living Initiative is to raise people’s environmental awareness and encourage everyone to develop a low-carbon and thrifty lifestyle. 2. I participated in a community garbage classification publicity activity, explaining how to sort garbage to residents and advocating green living habits. 3. Though the activity was tiring, I felt very proud and meaningful when I saw more and more people willing to participate in it. 4. I believe that as long as everyone makes a little effort, our city and our planet will become more beautiful. （五）拓展表达练习答案 目的：purpose = aim = goal 参与：participate in = take part in = join in 鼓励：encourage = inspire = urge 自豪：proud = honored = pleased with oneself 二、读后续写（成长与担当主题） （一）主题分析与续写思路 核心主题：年轻人在工作中犯错后的反思与担当，凸显“正视错误、勇于承担”的成长意义，兼顾善意的巧合与真诚的道歉。 伏笔呼应：前文提到“我”误将冰箱里的面糊当作蓝纹奶酪酱，放在顾客沙拉上却被称赞，还吸引了更多顾客，为续写“发现错误、主动道歉、承担责任”铺垫。 续写思路： Paragraph 1（期待表扬却被质疑）：描写Teri Jo的神情，并未表扬“我”反而提出疑问→ “我”的疑惑与紧张→ Teri Jo指出“我”混淆了酱料和面糊的真相。 Paragraph 2（发现错误后担当）：描写“我”的愧疚与慌乱→ 主动提出道歉并弥补过错→ Teri Jo的态度转变，“我”的成长与感悟，凸显担当的意义。 （二）高分范文（148词） The next day, when I went in for the lunch shift, I prepared myself for Teri Jo’s praise. I greeted her with a big smile, waiting for her to speak highly of my clever idea of saving extra steps. However, Teri Jo’s face was serious, with no trace of a smile. She pulled me to the front refrigerator and asked in a calm voice, “Do you know what’s in these two bowls?” I felt a sudden panic and my mind went blank, not knowing how to answer. My heart sank as Teri Jo continued, “I see a similar bowl full of the blue-cheese dressing beside the near-empty bowl of pancake batter.” I lowered my head in shame, my face turning red. I quickly apologized and explained that I had mistaken the pancake batter for blue-cheese dressing due to the dim light. I offered to apologize to the customers and make up for my mistake. Teri Jo patted my shoulder gently, saying honesty and courage to take responsibility were more important than never making mistakes. This experience taught me a valuable lesson about carefulness and responsibility. （三）高分亮点 细节描写：greeted her with a big smile, face was serious, lowered my head in shame, face turning red 等动作、神态描写，生动展现“我”从期待到慌乱再到愧疚的心理变化，画面感强。 分词作伴随状语：my face turning red（替代简单句，简洁紧凑，提升语法层次，丰富表达形式，凸显愧疚情绪。） 伏笔呼应：explained that I had mistaken the pancake batter for blue-cheese dressing due to the dim light 呼应前文“餐厅晚上光线昏暗”“我”混淆酱料和面糊的细节，情节连贯，逻辑严谨。 主题升华：以“honesty and courage to take responsibility were more important than never making mistakes”总结，凸显“正视错误、勇于担当”的核心主题，结合自身感悟，符合高考积极价值观导向，贴合成长主题。 （四）高分句子默写 一、描写类（场景与动作） 1. I greeted her with a smile, looking forward to her praise, but her expression was serious without any trace of a smile. 2. I lowered my head in shame, my cheeks burning, and hurried to apologize to the manager, explaining the whole process of my mistaking the batter for the dressing. 二、情感类（感悟与联结） 1. At that moment, I realized that evading mistakes would only make the consequences worse, and facing mistakes bravely and taking responsibility is the only way to grow. 2. This mistake taught me to be careful and made me understand that every small detail in work is crucial and cannot be taken lightly. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $