内容正文:
阅读下列材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之成为一篇完整的知文。
Lily was a high school student who loved complaining herself with others. She always cared about the latest clothes, expensive phones, and designer bags. Whenever someone showed off a new item, she would feel jealous (妒忌的) and want to buy something better. Her parents often told her, “True value isn’t in what you own,” but she never listened.
One day, Lily noticed a girl from another class, whose name was Mary. Mary’s family was wealthy, but she always wore simple clothes and carried an old schoolbag. Unlike Lily, Mary never joined in the students’ discussions about brands or prices. Instead, she spent her time helping classmates with math problems or volunteering in the school library. Her grades were always at the top of the class, and everyone respected (尊重) her.
Lily couldn’t understand why Mary didn’t care about material things. One afternoon, Lily saw Mary sitting alone under a tree, reading a book. She decided to talk to her. “Why don’t you buy nicer things?” Lily asked. “Your family has enough money.” Mary looked up with a smile.“I’d rather spend money on things that matter,” she said. “Like helping others or buying books.”
That night, Lily thought about Mary’s words. She realized that she had been looking for things that didn’t bring real happiness. The next day, she made a decision: she would stop comparing herself with others and start focusing on what truly mattered.
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1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题纸相应位置作答。
The following week, Lily began to learn from Mary.
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Months later, teachers and classmates all praised Lily.
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一.文本分析
1.角色
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2.视角
第______人称视角
3.时空线
梳理故事的时间与空间变化,按顺序填写:
时间线:过去(Lily热衷攀比物质,忽视父母劝告)→ 现在(Lily注意到家境优渥却朴实的Mary,产生疑惑并与之交谈)→ 交谈后(Lily反思自身,决心改变)→ 续写情节(Lily向Mary学习,专注有意义的事→ 数月后Lily蜕变获众人认可)→ ____________________(Lily明白真正价值,收获内心幸福)。
空间转换:高中校园(日常学习场景)→ 校园树下(Lily与Mary交谈)→ 续写场景(教室、图书馆、社区等,Lily践行改变)→ __________________________(数月后Lily获师生称赞)。
4.文章线索
(1)核心矛盾是什么?这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动主要人物的行动与形象塑造?
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(2)主要人物的心理/状态变化有哪些?这些变化如何形成呼应,推动情节发展并深化主题?
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(3)文本中的关键细节有哪些?它们有何意义?为后续情节发展做了怎样的铺垫?
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(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
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5.情节线
Lily是高中生,总爱和他人攀比物质,执着于新款服饰、昂贵手机等,看到别人炫耀就心生妒忌,即便父母劝说“真正的价值不在拥有之物”也不听→ 某天Lily注意到邻班的Mary:家境优渥却衣着朴素、背着旧书包,从不参与品牌价格讨论,反而常帮同学补数学、去图书馆做志愿者,成绩稳居榜首且深受大家尊重→ Lily不解,主动在树下与Mary交谈,得知Mary更愿把钱花在有意义的事上(帮助他人、买书)→ 当晚Lily反思,意识到自己追求的并非真正幸福,决心改变→ 续写情节(Lily开始向Mary学习,不再向父母索要奢侈品,把积攒的零花钱捐给山区孩子,课间主动帮同学讲解难题,周末去社区图书馆做志愿者,成绩也逐步提升→ 数月后,Lily的蜕变被师生看在眼里,大家纷纷称赞她的善良与进步)→ 最终Lily彻底摆脱攀比心态,明白真正的价值源于内在的成长与对他人的善意,收获了踏实而长久的幸福。
6. 情感线
梳理主要人物的情感变化轨迹:
Lily:虚荣攀比(执着物质,嫉妒他人)→ 疑惑不解(好奇Mary家境优渥却朴实)→ 反思顿悟(听Mary话语后醒悟自身问题)→ 坚定改变(决心摆脱攀比,专注有意义的事)→ 踏实满足(践行改变过程中收获快乐)→ 最终心情/态度→ __________。
Mary:从容淡然(不执着物质,专注内心追求)→ 友善真诚(耐心解答Lily疑问,用言行影响他人)→ 最终心情/态度→ __________。
Lily的父母:关切担忧(担心Lily陷入物质攀比误区,耐心劝说)→ 欣慰自豪(看到Lily的积极转变)→ 最终心情/态度→ __________。
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
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同位语:
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状语从句:
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定语从句:
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9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:The following week, Lily began to learn from Mary.
衔接句 1—— 对 “Lily的改变行动及细节” 提问:Lily具体向Mary学习了哪些事?她放弃了哪些旧习惯?这些行动体现了她怎样的决心?
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衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何承接前文“Lily决心改变”的情节?又如何为后续“获师生称赞”做铺垫?
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过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “Lily获称赞” 做铺垫?
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第二段提示句:Months later, teachers and classmates all praised Lily.
衔接句 1—— 对 “师生称赞的原因及Lily的反应” 提问:师生们为何称赞Lily?Lily听到称赞后内心有何感受?她对“真正的价值”有了怎样更深的理解?
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衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:故事结局如何体现核心主题?这场改变给Lily带来怎样的成长与启示?
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主题:
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三、段落构思
第一段:The following week, Lily began to learn from Mary.
梳理第一段写作思路:① 承接提示句,具体描写Lily的改变行动(放弃攀比、参与有意义的事);② 补充细节(如拒绝索要奢侈品、帮同学讲题等),体现改变的决心;③ 为后续“获师生称赞”埋下伏笔。
续写:
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第二段:Months later, teachers and classmates all praised Lily.
梳理第二段写作思路:① 承接提示句,描写师生称赞Lily的场景及原因;② 刻画Lily的内心感受(踏实、幸福);③ 点明Lily对“真正价值”的领悟,升华主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一.文本分析
1.角色
Lily:性格特点为初期虚荣攀比、执着物质,后期善于反思、勇于改变,内心善良;核心诉求是初期追求他人认可,后期渴望实现真正的自我价值;在故事中的作用是核心主角,其成长转变推动情节发展,凸显“拒绝攀比、追寻真正价值”的主题。
Mary:性格特点为从容淡然、不慕虚荣、热心善良、专注内在成长,家境优渥却低调朴实;核心诉求是追求有意义的生活,用行动传递正能量;在故事中的作用是Lily的榜样,其言行触发Lily的改变,深化主题。
Lily的父母:性格特点为开明理性、关爱孩子,善于引导;核心诉求是希望Lily树立正确的价值观,远离虚荣攀比;在故事中的作用是侧面烘托主题,其劝说为后续Lily的醒悟埋下伏笔,体现家庭引导的重要性。
2.视角
第__三__人称视角(以旁观者视角叙述Lily与Mary的故事,客观展现人物成长与情节发展)
3.时空线
梳理故事的时间与空间变化,按顺序填写:
时间线:过去(Lily热衷攀比物质,忽视父母劝告)→ 现在(Lily注意到家境优渥却朴实的Mary,产生疑惑并与之交谈)→ 交谈后(Lily反思自身,决心改变)→ 续写情节(Lily向Mary学习,专注有意义的事→ 数月后Lily蜕变获众人认可)→ 最终(Lily明白真正价值,收获内心幸福)。
空间转换:高中校园(日常学习场景)→ 校园树下(Lily与Mary交谈)→ 续写场景(教室、图书馆、社区等,Lily践行改变)→ 校园各处(数月后Lily获师生称赞)。
4.文章线索
(1)核心矛盾是什么?这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动主要人物的行动与形象塑造?
核心矛盾是Lily“执着于物质攀比、追求表面认可”与“内心深处渴望真正幸福”之间的矛盾,以及她对“价值”的错误认知(认为价值源于物质)与正确认知(价值源于内在与善意)之间的冲突。作用:这一矛盾是情节发展的核心动力,促使Lily主动与Mary交谈、反思自身问题,进而做出改变。推动人物形象塑造:通过矛盾的化解,展现Lily从虚荣肤浅到成熟踏实的成长,让其形象更立体,凸显主题。
(2)主要人物的心理/状态变化有哪些?这些变化如何形成呼应,推动情节发展并深化主题?
Lily:虚荣攀比(执着物质,嫉妒他人)→ 疑惑不解(好奇Mary家境优渥却朴实)→ 反思顿悟(听Mary话语后醒悟自身问题)→ 坚定改变(决心摆脱攀比,专注有意义的事)→ 踏实满足(践行改变过程中收获快乐)→ 最终心情/态度→ 豁然开朗,明白真正的价值不在物质,而在内在成长与善意付出。Mary:从容淡然(不执着物质,专注内心追求)→ 友善真诚(耐心解答Lily疑问,用言行影响他人)→ 最终心情/态度→ 欣慰,为能带动他人成长而开心。两者呼应:Mary的从容淡然与Lily的虚荣形成鲜明对比,触发Lily的改变;Lily的成长又印证了Mary价值观的正确性,让情节从“Lily陷入攀比误区”走向“Lily实现自我成长”,深化“真正的价值源于内在”的主题。
(3)文本中的关键细节有哪些?它们有何意义?为后续情节发展做了怎样的铺垫?
① Lily“总攀比物质、嫉妒他人,不听父母劝告”:意义在于凸显Lily初期的虚荣心态;铺垫:为后续她被Mary影响、产生改变的反差做铺垫,让成长更具张力。② Mary“家境优渥却衣着朴素,专注助人与学习”:意义在于展现正确的价值观,塑造榜样形象;铺垫:为Lily产生疑惑、主动交谈埋下伏笔,是触发Lily改变的关键。③ Mary说“我更愿把钱花在有意义的事上”:意义在于点明核心观点,引导Lily反思;铺垫:直接推动后续Lily决心改变,为情节转折提供支撑。④ Lily“意识到自己追求的并非真正幸福”:意义在于体现Lily的初步觉醒;铺垫:为她后续向Mary学习、践行改变提供心理基础。
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
情节推进逻辑:以“Lily的价值观转变”为核心,围绕“陷入物质攀比误区→ 遇见榜样Mary产生疑惑→ 交谈后醒悟决心改变→ 践行改变实现成长→ 收获认可领悟真谛”的逻辑展开,通过对比与反思推动情节。主题脉络:从“执着表面物质”,到“疑惑榜样的选择”,再到“醒悟后主动改变”,最终凸显“真正的价值不在于外在物质的拥有,而在于内在的成长、对他人的善意以及有意义的追求”的核心主题。
5.情节线
Lily是高中生,总爱和他人攀比物质,执着于新款服饰、昂贵手机等,看到别人炫耀就心生妒忌,即便父母劝说“真正的价值不在拥有之物”也不听→ 某天Lily注意到邻班的Mary:家境优渥却衣着朴素、背着旧书包,从不参与品牌价格讨论,反而常帮同学补数学、去图书馆做志愿者,成绩稳居榜首且深受大家尊重→ Lily不解,主动在树下与Mary交谈,得知Mary更愿把钱花在有意义的事上(帮助他人、买书)→ 当晚Lily反思,意识到自己追求的并非真正幸福,决心改变→ 续写情节(Lily开始向Mary学习,不再向父母索要奢侈品,把积攒的零花钱捐给山区孩子,课间主动帮同学讲解难题,周末去社区图书馆做志愿者,成绩也逐步提升→ 数月后,Lily的蜕变被师生看在眼里,大家纷纷称赞她的善良与进步)→ 最终Lily彻底摆脱攀比心态,明白真正的价值源于内在的成长与对他人的善意,收获了踏实而长久的幸福。
6. 情感线
梳理主要人物的情感变化轨迹:
Lily:虚荣攀比(执着物质,嫉妒他人)→ 疑惑不解(好奇Mary家境优渥却朴实)→ 反思顿悟(听Mary话语后醒悟自身问题)→ 坚定改变(决心摆脱攀比,专注有意义的事)→ 踏实满足(践行改变过程中收获快乐)→ 最终心情/态度→ 豁然开朗,懂得真正的幸福源于内在价值的实现,而非外在物质的堆砌。
Mary:从容淡然(不执着物质,专注内心追求)→ 友善真诚(耐心解答Lily疑问,愿意分享自己的价值观)→ 最终心情/态度→ 欣慰自豪,看到Lily的积极转变,为自己的言行能带来正面影响而开心。
Lily的父母:关切担忧(担心Lily陷入物质攀比误区,耐心劝说)→ 欣慰自豪(看到Lily主动改变,变得善良踏实)→ 最终心情/态度→ 安心释然,为女儿树立正确价值观而高兴。
7.文章大意概括
中文:
高中生Lily热衷与他人攀比物质,执着于新款服饰、昂贵手机等奢侈品,对父母“真正的价值不在拥有之物”的劝告置之不理。后来,她注意到家境优渥却衣着朴素的邻班女生Mary,Mary从不参与品牌讨论,反而热心帮助同学、参与志愿活动,成绩优异且受人尊重。Lily心生疑惑并与Mary交谈,得知Mary更愿把钱花在有意义的事上。这番话让Lily醒悟,决心改变自己。她开始向Mary学习,专注于有意义的事,最终收获了师生的称赞,也明白了真正的价值所在。
英文:
Lily, a high school student, was fond of comparing herself with others in terms of material things. She was obsessed with the latest clothes, expensive phones and other luxury goods, and ignored her parents' advice that "true value isn't in what you own." Later, she noticed Mary, a classmate from another class who was wealthy but dressed simply. Mary never joined discussions about brands; instead, she enthusiastically helped classmates, participated in volunteer activities, and achieved excellent grades, earning respect from everyone. Puzzled, Lily talked to Mary and learned that Mary preferred to spend money on things that mattered. These words made Lily realize her mistake and decide to change. She began to learn from Mary, focusing on meaningful things, and finally won praise from teachers and classmates, also understanding the true meaning of value.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:
Her parents often told her that true value isn’t in what you own.
同位语:
One day, Lily noticed a girl from another class, Mary, who was wealthy but dressed simply.
状语从句:
Whenever someone showed off a new item, she would feel jealous and want to buy something better.
定语从句:
Mary, whose family was wealthy, always wore simple clothes and carried an old schoolbag. 9.主题归类
结合故事内容,从不同角度提炼主题关键词(至少3个):拒绝攀比、真正的价值、内在成长、善意与奉献、榜样的力量(任选3个及以上即可)
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:The following week, Lily began to learn from Mary.
衔接句 1—— 对 “Lily的改变行动及细节” 提问:Lily具体向Mary学习了哪些事?她放弃了哪些旧习惯?这些行动体现了她怎样的决心?
答案:Lily具体学习Mary专注有意义的事,比如把零花钱捐给公益项目、主动帮同学讲解数学难题、周末去学校图书馆做志愿者;她放弃了索要新款奢侈品、参与品牌攀比讨论的旧习惯。这些行动体现了她摆脱虚荣、追求真正价值的坚定决心,也展现了她改变的诚意。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何承接前文“Lily决心改变”的情节?又如何为后续“获师生称赞”做铺垫?
答案:第一段以“Lily开始向Mary学习”直接承接前文“Lily决心停止攀比、专注有意义的事”,让情节自然过渡;同时,通过具体描写Lily的改变行动(助人、参与志愿等),展现了她的成长与进步,为后续“数月后获师生称赞”提供了合理依据,让称赞的情节不突兀。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “Lily获称赞” 做铺垫?
答案:第一段详细刻画了Lily的改变行动——放弃物质攀比、主动助人、参与志愿活动,这些具体行动让Lily的形象从虚荣攀比转变为善良踏实。正是这些持续的努力与成长,被师生看在眼里、记在心里,才为第二段“师生纷纷称赞Lily”奠定了基础,让称赞的情节顺理成章,形成“付出→成长→认可”的完整逻辑链。
第二段提示句:Months later, teachers and classmates all praised Lily.
衔接句 1—— 对 “师生称赞的原因及Lily的反应” 提问:师生们为何称赞Lily?Lily听到称赞后内心有何感受?她对“真正的价值”有了怎样更深的理解?
答案:师生称赞Lily是因为她彻底摆脱了虚荣攀比的心态,变得善良、热心且勤奋,不仅主动帮助同学,还积极参与志愿活动,成绩也有了明显提升。Lily听到称赞后内心满是踏实与幸福,她更深切地理解到:真正的价值从不是外在物质的堆砌,而是源于对他人的善意、自身的成长以及为身边人带来的温暖。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:故事结局如何体现核心主题?这场改变给Lily带来怎样的成长与启示?
答案:故事结局中,Lily凭借自身改变收获认可与幸福,完美体现了“真正的价值在于内在与善意”的核心主题。这场改变让Lily成长:她学会了摒弃虚荣、专注内在,明白了幸福的真谛不是超越他人的物质拥有,而是通过自身努力创造价值、温暖他人;同时,她也懂得了倾听他人的合理建议,成长为更成熟、更有温度的人。
主题:
答案:真正的价值不在于外在物质的炫耀,而在于内在的成长与对他人的善意付出;远离攀比,专注有意义的事,才能收获长久的幸福与认可。
三、段落构思
第一段:The following week, Lily began to learn from Mary.
梳理第一段写作思路:① 承接提示句,具体描写Lily的改变行动(放弃攀比、参与有意义的事);② 补充细节(如拒绝索要奢侈品、帮同学讲题等),体现改变的决心;③ 为后续“获师生称赞”埋下伏笔。
续写:She stopped asking her parents for expensive things and even gave away some of her unused designer bags to charity. After class, she no longer joined discussions about brands but instead helped classmates with their lessons. On weekends, she volunteered at the school library with Mary, sorting books and assisting younger students. Every small act of kindness made her feel a sense of fulfillment she had never experienced before.
第二段:Months later, teachers and classmates all praised Lily.
梳理第二段写作思路:① 承接提示句,描写师生称赞Lily的场景及原因;② 刻画Lily的内心感受(踏实、幸福);③ 点明Lily对“真正价值”的领悟,升华主题。
续写:They admired her for being no longer vain but kind and hard - working. Her grades had improved greatly, and she was always ready to help others. When Lily heard the praise, she smiled happily. She finally understood her parents' words: true value isn't in what you own, but in what you do for others. This change made her find the real happiness that material things could never bring.
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