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I’ve recently become interested in mountain climbing. It’s mainly due to my friend Tim, an experienced hiker. Initially, I saw hiking as pointless — exhausting muscles under the burning sun, carrying heavy loads, with no easy way back. Why endure?
Last month, Tim convinced me to join him in climbing a small hill. To my surprise, the view from the top was breathtaking. I witnessed an amazing sunset over the sea. That humble peak offered unexpected joy, awakening a desire for more — cloud seas, sunrises, and bird’s-eye views. After a few more mountain climbing attempts, I declared, “I will challenge the Hero’s Route!” It was a demanding 20-kilometer trail across several high peaks, a test of “heroes.”
But Tim tried to cool me down. “It’s not easy,” he warned. “It requires training, not just enthusiasm.” But I believed “Nothing is impossible in front of a willing heart,” so the following weekend I set off alone without telling Tim. I decided to give him a big surprise.
At the foot of the mountain, I saw some groups of climbers with walkie-talkies. I laughed — real heroes journey alone. The first peak was rewarding, with cool winds and glimpses of the sea. But as I pushed onward, the trail turned wild and rugged. Steep rocks forced me to crawl on all fours. The sky darkened, threatening rain. Tiredness set in, and the other climbers had all overtaken me, leaving me completely alone. The trail seemed endless. Rain soon poured and I was wet through. The rocks became slippery, making every step a struggle. To make matters worse, my phone had no signal. Desperation mounted in me.
Around 5:30 PM, there were still two peaks ahead. Exhausted and having barely progressed, I found a weak signal on my phone and hurriedly called Tim. He was shocked, but after checking my location, he calmly gave me instructions.
“Stop going ahead. You’ve just passed a side trail down to a village. It is marked with a blue ribbon. Find it and take the path — I’ll meet you midway.”
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150个左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: But now I hesitated, because taking the side trail meant failure.
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Paragraph 2: Climbing down the path to the village at night was still very challenging.
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一.文本分析
1.角色
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2.视角
第______人称视角
3.时空线
最近(“我”受朋友Tim影响对登山产生兴趣,最初认为登山无意义)--- 上个月(Tim说服“我”爬小山,山顶美景让“我”爱上登山)--- 几次尝试后(“我”决定挑战难度大的“英雄路线”)--- 接下来的周末(“我”不听Tim警告,独自出发挑战,想给Tim惊喜)--- 山脚下(“我”嘲笑带对讲机的登山队,认为英雄应独行)--- 第一座山顶(“我”享受美景)--- 继续前行(路况恶劣、天气突变、下雨路滑、手机无信号,“我”陷入绝望)--- 下午5点半左右(仍有两座山峰未爬,“我”找到微弱信号致电Tim求助,获指引走蓝丝带标记的岔路下山)--- (续写)_________________(“我”犹豫后决定走岔路)--- (续写)_____________________(“我”夜间下山遇挑战,中途与Tim会合,心生感悟)
4.文章线索
(1)“‘我’盲目挑战英雄路线的热情”与“登山途中的恶劣现实”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动“我”的行动与形象塑造?
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(2)“我”的心理变化(最初不屑登山→爬小山后产生兴趣→挑战前热情高涨且自负→途中陷入绝望→接到指引后犹豫)与“Tim的性格特点(经验丰富、谨慎、冷静可靠)”形成呼应,这一呼应为何能推动情节发展?如何深化“理性冒险”的主题?
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(3)“Tim对英雄路线的警告”“‘我’独自出发”“其他登山队带对讲机”“天气突变与恶劣路况”“蓝丝带标记岔路”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“我”犹豫并决定走岔路做了怎样的铺垫?
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(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“不屑登山→爱上登山→盲目挑战→陷入困境→求助获指引→做出选择”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
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5.情节线
“我”受Tim影响对登山产生兴趣→ 与Tim爬小山爱上登山→ 决定挑战英雄路线→ 不听警告独自出发→ 途中遇恶劣情况陷入绝望→ 致电Tim求助获下山指引→ (续写)_____________________________--- (续写)_______________________________________
6.情感线
“我”:最初对登山的不屑→ 爬小山后的愉悦与兴趣→ 挑战前的热情与自负→ 途中的绝望→ 接到指引后的犹豫→ 决定下山后的____________________→ 与Tim会合后的____________________
Tim:警告“我”时的谨慎与担忧→ 得知“我”独自出发后的震惊→ 指引“我”时的冷静→ 会合时的____________________
其他登山者:登山时的____________________
7.文章大意概括
中文:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
英文:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
8.句式示例
宾语从句:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
同位语:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
状语从句:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
分词作状语:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:But now I hesitated, because taking the side trail meant failure.
衔接句 1—— 对 “‘我’的心理挣扎与决策过程” 提问:“我”会在“坚持挑战”与“选择下山”间产生怎样的纠结?是什么促使“我”最终做出决定?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何承接前文的“求助获指引”并引出后文的“夜间下山”?“我”的决策是否为第二段的“挑战与会合”做铺垫?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “夜间下山挑战” 做铺垫:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句:Climbing down the path to the village at night was still very challenging.
衔接句 1—— 对 “夜间下山的具体场景” 提问:夜间下山会遇到哪些具体困难?“我”如何克服?中途与Tim会合时会有怎样的互动?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:“我”最终是否安全抵达村庄?这次经历让“我”有何感悟?这一结局如何呼应“理性冒险”的核心主题?
主题:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
三、段落构思
第一段:But now I hesitated, because taking the side trail meant failure.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,刻画“我”的心理挣扎;②描写“我”纠结的原因(不甘放弃挑战、担心被Tim嘲笑等);③借助环境或回忆推动决策(如天气恶化、想起Tim的警告);④以“我”决定走岔路收尾,引出第二段情节。
续写:
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第二段:Climbing down the path to the village at night was still very challenging.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写夜间下山的困难(黑暗、路滑、疲惫等);②刻画“我”克服困难的努力(如借手机灯光、缓慢前行);③描写与Tim会合的场景及互动;④以“我”的感悟收尾,升华“理性冒险、珍惜友情”的主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一.文本分析
1.角色
“我”:热爱探索但初期盲目自负,后在困境中学会理性抉择的登山初学者。最初对登山不屑,受朋友影响产生兴趣后,因一时热情盲目挑战高难度路线,独自出发显自负;陷入困境后懂得求助,接到指引时虽犹豫但最终能认清现实,展现出知错能改、懂得变通的特质。
Tim:经验丰富、谨慎可靠、重情重义的资深登山者。提前警告“我”路线难度,体现其谨慎;得知“我”独自出发后虽震惊仍冷静指引,中途等候会合,展现其冷静、负责与对朋友的关心。
其他登山者:注重团队协作、理性登山的群体(从携带对讲机可看出)。
2.视角
第一人称视角
3.时空线
最近(“我”受朋友Tim影响对登山产生兴趣,最初认为登山无意义)--- 上个月(Tim说服“我”爬小山,山顶美景让“我”爱上登山)--- 几次尝试后(“我”决定挑战难度大的“英雄路线”)--- 接下来的周末(“我”不听Tim警告,独自出发挑战,想给Tim惊喜)--- 山脚下(“我”嘲笑带对讲机的登山队,认为英雄应独行)--- 第一座山顶(“我”享受美景)--- 继续前行(路况恶劣、天气突变、下雨路滑、手机无信号,“我”陷入绝望)--- 下午5点半左右(仍有两座山峰未爬,“我”找到微弱信号致电Tim求助,获指引走蓝丝带标记的岔路下山)--- 半山坡(续写)(“我”犹豫后决定走岔路)--- (续写)下山途中(“我”夜间下山遇挑战,中途与Tim会合,心生感悟)
4.文章线索
(1)“‘我’盲目挑战英雄路线的热情”与“登山途中的恶劣现实”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动“我”的行动与形象塑造?
作用:这一核心矛盾是情节发展的核心驱动力,推动情节从“盲目出发挑战”向“陷入困境求助”再到“犹豫抉择”逐步推进,让故事形成“热情起势—现实受阻—寻求突破”的完整情节链,增强了故事的张力与可读性。推动“我”的行动与形象塑造:矛盾迫使“我”从盲目自信中清醒,面对恶劣现实不得不放下自负向Tim求助,接到指引后在坚持与放弃间挣扎,最终做出下山的理性选择;这一系列行动让“我”的形象从“冲动自负的初学者”转变为“懂得认清现实、理性变通的成长者”,形象更丰满立体。
(2)“我”的心理变化(最初不屑登山→爬小山后产生兴趣→挑战前热情高涨且自负→途中陷入绝望→接到指引后犹豫)与“Tim的性格特点(经验丰富、谨慎、冷静可靠)”形成呼应,这一呼应为何能推动情节发展?如何深化“理性冒险”的主题?
推动情节发展:“我”的心理变化是情节推进的内在逻辑,从不屑到热情、从自负到绝望、从犹豫到抉择,让“我”的每一步行动都有合理的心理支撑;Tim的冷静可靠则为“我”陷入困境后提供了外部解决方案,两者呼应让情节从“陷入绝境”自然过渡到“获得指引”再到“做出选择”,避免了情节断层。深化主题:“我”的盲目冲动与Tim的理性谨慎形成鲜明对比,通过“我”在Tim的帮助下认清现实、理性抉择的过程,突出了“冒险需理性,不可盲目冲动”的主题,让主题更具说服力。
(3)“Tim对英雄路线的警告”“‘我’独自出发”“其他登山队带对讲机”“天气突变与恶劣路况”“蓝丝带标记岔路”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“我”犹豫并决定走岔路做了怎样的铺垫?
意义:“Tim的警告”埋下“我”盲目出发会陷入困境的伏笔,暗示了后续险情的必然性;“‘我’独自出发”交代了陷入困境后孤立无援的原因;“其他登山者带对讲机”从侧面反衬出“我”的自负与不理性;“天气突变与恶劣路况”是“我”陷入绝望、不得不求助的直接诱因;“蓝丝带标记岔路”为“我”提供了摆脱困境的具体路径,是情节转向“安全下山”的关键。铺垫:这些细节从“隐患铺垫—困境成因—解决路径”三个层面,让“我”从“盲目挑战”到“陷入绝望”再到“犹豫后选择下山”的过程逻辑连贯,为“我”的最终抉择提供了充分的现实依据,让情节发展更合理自然。
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“不屑登山→爱上登山→盲目挑战→陷入困境→求助获指引→做出选择”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
情节推进逻辑:以“我”对登山的态度与行动变化为核心,从“初始不屑”到“产生兴趣”,再到“盲目挑战”,因现实受阻陷入“困境求助”,最终“理性抉择”,形成“态度转变—行动尝试—遭遇挫折—寻求帮助—成长抉择”的完整逻辑链。主题脉络:凸显了“成长与蜕变”的主题脉络,通过“我”从盲目自负到理性变通的过程,传递出“冒险需结合自身能力,理性判断比一腔热血更重要”“正视自身局限、懂得求助也是一种成长”的核心思想。
5.情节线
“我”受Tim影响对登山产生兴趣→ 与Tim爬小山爱上登山→ 决定挑战英雄路线→ 不听警告独自出发→ 途中遇恶劣情况陷入绝望→ 致电Tim求助获下山指引→ (续写)“我”在犹豫后认清现实,决定沿蓝丝带标记的岔路下山→ (续写)“我”夜间艰难下山,中途与Tim会合,收获成长与感悟
6.情感线
“我”:最初对登山的不屑→ 爬小山后的愉悦与兴趣→ 挑战前的热情与自负→ 途中的绝望→ 接到指引后的犹豫→ 决定下山后的坚定与释然→ 与Tim会合后的愧疚与感激
Tim:警告“我”时的谨慎与担忧→ 得知“我”独自出发后的震惊→ 指引“我”时的冷静→ 会合时的关切与释然
其他登山者:登山时的谨慎与协作
7.文章大意概括
中文:“我”近期受资深登山者朋友Tim影响对登山产生兴趣,最初认为登山无意义,后在Tim的带领下爬小山,被山顶美景吸引,从而爱上登山。几次尝试后,“我”决定挑战难度极大的“英雄路线”,不顾Tim的警告独自出发。途中,“我”遭遇路况恶劣、天气突变、手机无信号等困境,陷入绝望。下午5点半左右,“我”找到微弱信号致电Tim求助,Tim冷静指引“我”沿蓝丝带标记的岔路下山,并约定中途会合。
English: Recently, I have become interested in mountain climbing mainly due to my friend Tim, an experienced hiker. Initially, I thought hiking was pointless, but later Tim convinced me to climb a small hill. Attracted by the breathtaking view at the top, I fell in love with mountain climbing. After several more attempts, I decided to challenge the demanding Hero’s Route and set off alone despite Tim’s warning. On the way, I encountered harsh conditions such as rugged trails, sudden bad weather and no mobile phone signal, falling into despair. Around 5:30 PM, I found a weak signal and called Tim for help. Tim calmly instructed me to take the side trail marked with a blue ribbon down the mountain and agreed to meet me midway.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:I wondered if he’ll be a pilot someday.(if引导宾语从句,作wondered的宾语)
同位语:It’s mainly due to my friend Tim, an experienced hiker.(an experienced hiker作Tim的同位语,补充说明Tim的身份)
状语从句:But I believed “Nothing is impossible in front of a willing heart,” so the following weekend I set off alone without telling Tim.(so引导结果状语从句,表“我”的信念带来的行动结果)
分词作状语:Tiredness set in, and the other climbers had all overtaken me, leaving me completely alone.(leaving me completely alone为现在分词短语作结果状语,表其他登山者超过“我”后产生的结果)
9.主题归类
1. 成长与蜕变:正视自身局限、理性抉择是成长的重要标志;2. 理性冒险:冒险需结合自身能力,不可仅凭热情盲目行动;3. 友情的力量:真挚的友情能在困境中提供支撑与指引;4. 正确的求助观:懂得正视困境、向他人求助也是一种智慧。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:But now I hesitated, because taking the side trail meant failure.
衔接句 1—— 对 “‘我’的心理挣扎与决策过程” 提问:“我”会在“坚持挑战”与“选择下山”间产生怎样的纠结?是什么促使“我”最终做出决定?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何承接前文的“求助获指引”并引出后文的“夜间下山”?“我”的决策是否为第二段的“挑战与会合”做铺垫?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “夜间下山挑战” 做铺垫:第一段核心是“我”的犹豫与最终抉择,通过描写“我”认清现实决定下山的过程,明确了后续行动方向(沿蓝丝带岔路下山),自然引出第二段“夜间下山”的情节;同时,第一段可通过刻画“我”的疲惫状态、天黑的环境背景,为第二段“夜间下山的挑战性”埋下伏笔,让第二段的困难描写更具合理性;此外,“我”决定下山的坚定态度,也为第二段“克服困难坚持下山”提供了心理支撑。
第二段提示句:Climbing down the path to the village at night was still very challenging.
衔接句 1—— 对 “夜间下山的具体场景” 提问:夜间下山会遇到哪些具体困难?“我”如何克服?中途与Tim会合时会有怎样的互动?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:“我”最终是否安全抵达村庄?这次经历让“我”有何感悟?这一结局如何呼应“理性冒险”的核心主题?
主题:理性冒险是成长的重要课题,盲目自负只会陷入困境;正视自身局限、懂得变通与求助,才能收获真正的成长;真挚的友情是困境中最坚实的支撑。
三、段落构思
第一段:But now I hesitated, because taking the side trail meant failure.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,刻画“我”的心理挣扎;②描写“我”纠结的原因(不甘放弃挑战、担心被Tim嘲笑等);③借助环境或回忆推动决策(如天气恶化、想起Tim的警告);④以“我”决定走岔路收尾,引出第二段情节。
续写:
But now I hesitated, because taking the side trail meant failure. I had dreamed of completing the Hero’s Route to prove myself, and giving up halfway felt like admitting defeat. However, the darkening sky, pouring rain, and my exhausted body kept reminding me of the danger of continuing. Suddenly, Tim’s warning echoed in my mind — “It requires training, not just enthusiasm.” Realizing that stubbornness would only lead to more trouble, I made up my mind. I searched carefully and soon found the blue ribbon fluttering in the wind. I took a deep breath and stepped onto the side trail.
第二段:Climbing down the path to the village at night was still very challenging.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写夜间下山的困难(黑暗、路滑、疲惫等);②刻画“我”克服困难的努力(如借手机灯光、缓慢前行);③描写与Tim会合的场景及互动;④以“我”的感悟收尾,升华“理性冒险、珍惜友情”的主题。
续写:
Climbing down the path to the village at night was still very challenging. The trail was narrow and slippery, and I had to use my phone as a flashlight to see the way. My legs were trembling with tiredness, but I kept going. Just as I felt desperate again, a familiar voice called my name. It was Tim, holding a flashlight and waiting for me. Tears of relief and guilt welled up in my eyes. “I’m sorry for not listening to you,” I said. Tim patted my shoulder gently. “It’s okay, I’m glad you’re safe.” Walking down the mountain together, I realized that true bravery isn’t about being reckless, but about making rational choices.
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