内容正文:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was a sunny Saturday morning, and Jake had just put on his sneakers when his phone buzzed. It was a message from Ryan: "Meet at the park in 15 minutes?" Jake smiled. It had been a long week of school, and he couldn't wait to play basketball with his friends. Just as he was heading out, his mom called from the kitchen." Jake! Come back! I need your help with the storage room ."
"But Mom, I told Ryan I'd meet him at the park." Jake protested.
"We talked about this. Grandma is moving in this weekend, so we need to clean out the storage room to make space for her."
"Grandma?" Jake thought, the word feeling almost foreign on his tongue. He didn't even know her that well --- it had been years since she last visited , and now she was moving in? He couldn't believe he had to give up his Saturday for someone he barely knew. With complaints and sighs, he kicked at the floor as he walked slowly down the hallway, dragging his feet like they weighed a ton.
Stepping into the storage room, his nose wrinkled in disgust. The place was a disaster. Spiderwebs hung from every corner, and dust swirled in the sunlight like dirty smoke. Boxes shook in unstable stacks, a rolled-up carpet with worn edges lay half-spilled across the floor, and forgotten junk crowded every inch. Jake let out a long, dramatic sigh --- this job was going to take forever.
Just as he was about to give up and send a text to Ryan, a faded blue album folded at the bottom of the suitcase caught his eye. Faint words were marked on its leather cover: Stories with Jake (To Be Continued ...). He pulled it out and turned it open --- the pages were filled with moments of him and his grandmother. On the very first page was a photo: his grandmother, much younger then, cradling a tiny baby wrapped in a soft blanket. At the bottom of the photo he saw some words in careful handwriting: "Glad to meet you, baby Jake."
注意:
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
As he leafed through more photos, his eyes began to mist. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Next morning, when his grandmother stepped into her new room, Jake handed her the album.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角
第__________________人称视角
3.时空线
周六早晨(Jake准备出门与Ryan去公园打篮球,接到母亲电话被要求帮忙整理储藏室)--- 接到母亲指令后(Jake因要放弃玩乐、为不熟悉的祖母整理房间而抱怨,不情愿地前往储藏室)--- 进入储藏室后(对杂乱的环境感到厌恶,抵触情绪加重)--- 整理过程中(发现一本记录与祖母过往的旧相册,看到幼时与祖母的合影及留言)--- (续写)______________(第一段续写场景:Jake的情感从抵触转变为愧疚与温暖,主动投入整理)--- (续写)___________(第二段续写场景:Jake将相册交给祖母,祖孙二人化解生疏,建立亲密联结)
4.文章线索
(1)Jake对“整理储藏室”的“抵触情绪”与“相册唤醒的亲情”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动Jake的情感转变及成长?
(2)“Jake最初对祖母的生疏排斥”与“相册中祖孙的亲密过往”形成情感对比,这一对比为何能成为后续“祖孙和解”的情感基础?如何深化“亲情不会因距离而消散”的主题?
(3)“Jake准备赴朋友之约”“母亲要求整理储藏室”“储藏室的杂乱环境”“旧相册的发现”“相册中的合影与留言”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“祖孙和解”做了怎样的铺垫?
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“准备赴约—抵触整理—发现相册”,再到后续的“翻阅相册—主动改变—见面和解”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
5.情节线
周六早晨:Jake准备出门与Ryan去公园打篮球,接到母亲电话被要求帮忙整理储藏室 → 接到指令后:Jake因要放弃玩乐、为不熟悉的祖母整理房间而抱怨,不情愿前往储藏室 → 进入储藏室:对杂乱环境感到厌恶,抵触情绪加重 → 整理中:发现一本记录与祖母过往的旧相册,看到幼时与祖母的合影及“Glad to meet you, baby Jake”的留言 → (续写)_______________________________ → (续写)___________________________________________________
6.情感线
Jake:期待与朋友打球的愉悦→ 被要求整理储藏室的抵触、抱怨→ 面对杂乱储藏室的厌恶、烦躁→ 发现相册的好奇→ 翻阅相册时的感动、愧疚(抵触情绪消散)→ 整理时的主动、认真→ 期待与祖母见面的忐忑与期待→ 交给祖母相册时的真诚→ ______________________
祖母:对孙子的牵挂→ 入住新房间的期待→ 收到相册时的惊喜、感动→ _____________________
母亲:对家庭和睦的期盼→ ________________________
Ryan:期待与Jake打球的愉悦(侧面衬托Jake最初的抵触)
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
同位语:
状语从句:
比喻:
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:As he leafed through more photos, his eyes began to mist.
衔接句 1—— 对 “翻阅相册时Jake的心理与状态” 提问:Jake眼睛湿润的原因是什么(如被过往温暖瞬间打动、愧疚自己对祖母的排斥、遗憾与祖母疏远的时光等)?翻阅过程中他会有怎样的表现?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何引出“主动整理储藏室”的情节?Jake的心理变化是否会为第二段“交给祖母相册、主动亲近”做铺垫?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “交给祖母相册” 做铺垫:
第二段提示句:Next morning, when his grandmother stepped into her new room, Jake handed her the album.
衔接句 1—— 对 “见面时的具体场景” 提问:见面时Jake与祖母的初始状态是怎样的(如Jake紧张忐忑、祖母略带生疏与期待等)?两人会如何开启对话(如Jake提及相册的由来、祖母看到相册后的反应、回忆照片中的场景等)?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:祖孙俩最终是否实现和解?和解的关键是什么(如相册的情感纽带作用、Jake的主动亲近、祖母的温情回应等)?这一结局如何呼应“亲情唤醒与接纳”的核心诉求?Jake会有怎样的感悟?
主题:
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________三、段落构思
第一段:As he leafed through more photos, his eyes began to mist.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写Jake翻阅相册时的具体场景与内心触动,点明眼睛湿润的原因(被过往温暖打动、愧疚自己的排斥);②刻画他的动作与心理变化(如轻轻抚摸照片、回忆过往、收起抱怨);③以他主动整理储藏室、期待与祖母见面收尾,为第二段“交给祖母相册”做铺垫。
续写:
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第二段:Next morning, when his grandmother stepped into her new room, Jake handed her the album.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写见面时的初始氛围(如轻微生疏、Jake的紧张)与祖母看到整洁房间的反应;②刻画祖母看到相册后的惊讶、感动,以及两人围绕相册回忆过往的对话;③描写和解后的温馨场景(如祖母拥抱Jake、讲述照片背后的故事);④以Jake的感悟收尾,升华“亲情珍贵、主动接纳”的主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色
Jake:青春期少年,活泼好动,重视与朋友的约定,起初因不熟悉祖母、需放弃玩乐时间帮忙整理储藏室而心生抱怨,内心纯真善良,在看到与祖母的旧相册后逐渐唤醒对亲情的感知,学会理解与接纳。
祖母:在Jake幼年时给予疼爱,因久未探望与Jake关系生疏,内心藏着对孙子的牵挂,是亲情联结的重要一方。
母亲:温柔且有责任感,兼顾家庭和睦,推动Jake与祖母重新建立联系,是亲情修复的引导者,内心期盼祖孙二人能融洽相处。
Ryan:Jake的朋友,是Jake玩乐需求的代表,衬托出Jake最初对整理储藏室任务的抵触。
2.视角
第 一 人称视角(第一人称视角,聚焦“Jake”的心理活动与情感变化,串联与祖母关系的初始状态及态度转变过程)
3.时空线
周六早晨(Jake准备出门与Ryan去公园打篮球,接到母亲电话被要求帮忙整理储藏室)--- 接到母亲指令后(Jake因要放弃玩乐、为不熟悉的祖母整理房间而抱怨,不情愿地前往储藏室)--- 进入储藏室后(对杂乱的环境感到厌恶,抵触情绪加重)--- 整理过程中(发现一本记录与祖母过往的旧相册,看到幼时与祖母的合影及留言)--- (续写)翻阅相册时(第一段续写场景:Jake的情感从抵触转变为愧疚与温暖,主动投入整理)--- (续写)次日早晨(第二段续写场景:Jake将相册交给祖母,祖孙二人化解生疏,建立亲密联结)
4.文章线索
(1)Jake对“整理储藏室”的“抵触情绪”与“相册唤醒的亲情”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动Jake的情感转变及成长?
作用:这一核心矛盾是情节发展的核心驱动力,推动故事从“Jake抵触整理、排斥祖母”走向“主动接纳、亲近祖母”;同时,矛盾的缓解过程让“亲情唤醒”的情节更具合理性,凸显主题。推动情感转变:抵触情绪让Jake最初消极对待任务,而相册中承载的祖孙过往温暖瞬间,打破了他对祖母“生疏”的认知,让抵触逐渐转化为愧疚与期待,推动他主动改变态度。推动成长:Jake从只关注自身玩乐需求,到学会体谅家人、接纳生疏的亲人,实现了心智的成熟,懂得了亲情的珍贵。
(2)“Jake最初对祖母的生疏排斥”与“相册中祖孙的亲密过往”形成情感对比,这一对比为何能成为后续“祖孙和解”的情感基础?如何深化“亲情不会因距离而消散”的主题?
情感基础:相册中的亲密过往证明祖孙二人原本存在深厚的亲情联结,只是因时间和距离变得生疏;这种对比让Jake意识到自己对祖母的排斥是片面的,唤醒了他内心深处对亲情的渴望,也为祖母回应Jake的亲近提供了情感依据。深化主题:对比凸显了“时间与距离无法真正割裂亲情”的核心,即便Jake与祖母久未相见、关系生疏,一本承载过往的相册就能唤醒温暖的记忆,让亲情重新流动,让读者深刻体会到亲情是跨越时光的羁绊。
(3)“Jake准备赴朋友之约”“母亲要求整理储藏室”“储藏室的杂乱环境”“旧相册的发现”“相册中的合影与留言”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“祖孙和解”做了怎样的铺垫?
意义:“Jake准备赴约”交代了他抵触整理任务的原因,体现其少年心性;“母亲要求整理”引出核心事件,点明祖母即将入住的背景;“储藏室杂乱”强化Jake的抵触情绪;“旧相册发现”是情节的转折点,打破了Jake的消极心态;“相册中的合影与留言”是唤醒亲情的关键,展现祖孙过往的亲密。铺垫:这些细节让“祖孙和解”的情节层层递进、逻辑顺畅——Jake的抵触让后续的态度转变更具感染力,相册的发现为和解提供了情感纽带,过往的亲密记忆让Jake主动迈出亲近祖母的一步,也让祖母感受到孙子的接纳,为后续见面和解奠定基础。
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“准备赴约—抵触整理—发现相册”,再到后续的“翻阅相册—主动改变—见面和解”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
情节推进逻辑:Jake准备赴朋友篮球之约(情节起点,展现其玩乐需求)→ 母亲要求整理储藏室为祖母腾空间,Jake心生抵触(情节发展,矛盾出现)→ 进入杂乱储藏室,抵触情绪加剧(情节升级,消极心态强化)→ 整理中发现记录与祖母过往的旧相册(情节转折,亲情线索出现)→ 翻阅相册,唤醒温暖记忆,态度转变(情节铺垫,情感升温)→ 主动完成整理,期待祖母到来(情节过渡,行动落地)→ 次日将相册交给祖母,祖孙和解(情节结局,亲情回归)。主题脉络:从“少年的自我中心与亲情疏离”到“亲情唤醒与主动接纳”,凸显了“亲情是生命中不可割裂的羁绊,即便因时光生疏,也能被温暖的过往唤醒;成长是学会跳出自我,接纳并珍惜身边的亲人”的主题脉络。
5.情节线
周六早晨:Jake准备出门与Ryan去公园打篮球,接到母亲电话被要求帮忙整理储藏室 → 接到指令后:Jake因要放弃玩乐、为不熟悉的祖母整理房间而抱怨,不情愿前往储藏室 → 进入储藏室:对杂乱环境感到厌恶,抵触情绪加重 → 整理中:发现一本记录与祖母过往的旧相册,看到幼时与祖母的合影及“Glad to meet you, baby Jake”的留言 → (续写)翻阅相册时:Jake内心受到触动,抵触情绪消散,心生愧疚,主动认真整理储藏室,还期待与祖母见面 → (续写)次日早晨:Jake将相册交给祖母,祖母回忆过往,祖孙二人亲切交流,化解生疏,建立亲密联结
6.情感线
Jake:期待与朋友打球的愉悦→ 被要求整理储藏室的抵触、抱怨→ 面对杂乱储藏室的厌恶、烦躁→ 发现相册的好奇→ 翻阅相册时的感动、愧疚(抵触情绪消散)→ 整理时的主动、认真→ 期待与祖母见面的忐忑与期待→ 交给祖母相册时的真诚→ 和解后的温暖、愉悦
祖母:对孙子的牵挂→ 入住新房间的期待→ 收到相册时的惊喜、感动→ 与Jake交流时的温情、欣慰
母亲:对家庭和睦的期盼→ 看到Jake态度转变的欣慰
Ryan:期待与Jake打球的愉悦(侧面衬托Jake最初的抵触)
7.文章大意概括
中文:
周六早晨阳光明媚,Jake刚穿上运动鞋,手机就响了,是朋友Ryan发来的消息,约他15分钟后去公园见面打球。Jake很高兴,一周的学习下来,他迫不及待想和朋友们打篮球。就在他准备出门时,母亲从厨房喊他回去,让他帮忙整理储藏室。Jake提出抗议,说自己已经答应了Ryan去公园。母亲解释说祖母这周末要搬来住,需要清理储藏室给祖母腾地方。Jake对祖母感到很生疏,毕竟她已经好几年没来看过自己了,他无法相信自己要为一个几乎不认识的人放弃周六的玩乐时间。他满是抱怨地叹着气,慢吞吞地走向走廊,脚步沉重得像灌了铅。进入储藏室后,Jake厌恶地皱起了鼻子,这里杂乱不堪,每个角落都挂着蜘蛛网,灰尘在阳光下像脏烟一样飘动,箱子堆得摇摇欲坠,一卷边缘磨损的地毯半摊在地上,到处都堆满了被遗忘的杂物。Jake夸张地长叹一声,觉得这份工作永远也做不完。就在他准备放弃并给Ryan发消息时,行李箱底部一本折叠的褪色蓝色相册引起了他的注意。相册的皮质封面上有淡淡的字迹:《与Jake的故事(未完待续……)》。他把相册抽出来翻开,里面全是他和祖母的瞬间。第一页是一张照片:那时年轻许多的祖母抱着一个裹在柔软毯子里的小婴儿。照片底部有一行工整的字迹:“很高兴见到你,小Jake。”
英文:
On a sunny Saturday morning, Jake was about to meet friend Ryan for basketball when his mom asked him to clean the storage room for his unfamiliar grandma who was moving in. Annoyed, Jake reluctantly went there. The room was messy. Just as he was about to give up, he found a faded blue album with photos of him and his grandma, including one of her holding baby Jake with a warm message.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:He couldn't believe he had to give up his Saturday for someone he barely knew.
同位语:It had been a long week of school, a week full of exams and homework.(逗号后内容补充解释“a long week of school”,属于同位语)
状语从句:Just as he was heading out, his mom called from the kitchen.
比喻:dust swirled in the sunlight like dirty smoke
9.主题归类
亲情是跨越时光的羁绊,即便因距离和时间变得生疏,也能被温暖的过往唤醒;成长不仅是年龄的增长,更是学会跳出自我中心,接纳并珍惜身边的亲人;理解与包容是维系亲情的关键,主动靠近才能打破亲情中的隔阂;过往的温暖记忆是亲情的纽带,能唤醒内心的柔软,让疏远的关系重归亲密;家庭的和睦需要每个成员的主动付出与接纳,亲情是生命中最珍贵的财富。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:As he leafed through more photos, his eyes began to mist.
衔接句 1—— 对 “翻阅相册时Jake的心理与状态” 提问:Jake眼睛湿润的原因是什么(如被过往温暖瞬间打动、愧疚自己对祖母的排斥、遗憾与祖母疏远的时光等)?翻阅过程中他会有怎样的表现?
答案:Jake眼睛湿润的原因是被相册中与祖母的亲密过往深深打动:照片里有祖母陪他学走路、喂他吃饭、带他放风筝的瞬间,这些温暖的画面让他意识到祖母曾经如此疼爱自己,而自己却因生疏而排斥她,内心满是愧疚;同时也为自己错过多年与祖母相处的时光而遗憾。翻阅过程中,他会放慢动作,轻轻抚摸照片,嘴角不自觉地泛起微笑,随后又因愧疚而微微低头,原本烦躁的情绪逐渐平复,取而代之的是感动与自责,甚至会小声念出照片上的留言。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何引出“主动整理储藏室”的情节?Jake的心理变化是否会为第二段“交给祖母相册、主动亲近”做铺垫?
答案:第一段通过描写Jake翻阅相册后的情感转变(从抵触到感动、愧疚),自然引出“主动整理储藏室”的情节(如“他擦干眼角的泪水,收起相册,站起身主动整理起杂乱的储藏室,不再抱怨”)。Jake的心理变化(抵触消散、心生愧疚与期待)为第二段“交给祖母相册”做了充分铺垫——这份愧疚与期待让他主动想要弥补,希望通过赠送相册的方式拉近与祖母的距离,也让他在与祖母见面时能以真诚、亲切的态度相处,为后续和解奠定基础。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “交给祖母相册” 做铺垫:
答案:第一段聚焦Jake翻阅相册后的情感转变,从最初的抵触排斥转变为感动、愧疚与期待,让他重新认识到祖母对自己的疼爱,也让他产生了主动亲近祖母、弥补疏远时光的想法。他会小心翼翼地收好相册,将其视为联结自己与祖母的重要纽带;同时,他主动认真整理储藏室,为祖母营造整洁的居住环境,这一行动也体现了他对祖母态度的转变。这种情感上的铺垫和行动上的准备,让第二段“主动将相册交给祖母”的行为顺理成章,也让Jake在赠送相册时更具真诚,为祖孙二人的顺畅交流和和解做好了充分准备。
第二段提示句:Next morning, when his grandmother stepped into her new room, Jake handed her the album.
衔接句 1—— 对 “见面时的具体场景” 提问:见面时Jake与祖母的初始状态是怎样的(如Jake紧张忐忑、祖母略带生疏与期待等)?两人会如何开启对话(如Jake提及相册的由来、祖母看到相册后的反应、回忆照片中的场景等)?
答案:见面时,Jake的初始状态是紧张又期待的,手心微微出汗,递出相册的动作有些拘谨;祖母则带着些许生疏与期待,看到整洁的房间时面露欣慰,目光落在Jake身上时满是温柔。开启对话会围绕“相册”展开:祖母看到相册时会先是惊讶,随后伸手轻轻接过,指尖抚摸着褪色的封面,当翻开看到里面的照片时,眼中泛起泪光,轻声说出照片中的场景(如“这是你三岁时,我们在院子里放风筝的那天”),Jake则会主动回应,讲述自己发现相册的过程,表达自己的愧疚与想要亲近祖母的心愿,打破初始的生疏氛围。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:祖孙俩最终是否实现和解?和解的关键是什么(如相册的情感纽带作用、Jake的主动亲近、祖母的温情回应等)?这一结局如何呼应“亲情唤醒与接纳”的核心诉求?Jake会有怎样的感悟?
答案:祖孙俩最终实现了和解。和解的关键是“相册承载的温暖记忆”与“Jake的主动亲近”:相册唤醒了两人共同的温暖回忆,打破了生疏的壁垒;Jake主动递出相册、表达心意,祖母以温情回应,让亲情重新流动。这一结局完美呼应了“亲情唤醒与接纳”的核心诉求——原本生疏的祖孙因相册重燃亲情,Jake从排斥到主动接纳,祖母从期待到温情回应,让家庭回归和睦。Jake的感悟是:亲情从未真正消失,只是被时光暂时遮蔽,主动靠近、珍惜过往的温暖,就能打破隔阂,拥有亲情的温暖;放弃一时的玩乐,换来的是更珍贵的亲情陪伴。
主题:
温暖的过往记忆是唤醒生疏亲情的纽带,主动亲近与接纳是打破亲情隔阂的关键;亲情是生命中最珍贵的财富,即便因时光疏远,也能在彼此的真诚与温情中重归亲密;成长是学会跳出自我,珍惜身边的亲人,主动为家庭和睦付出努力。
三、段落构思
第一段:As he leafed through more photos, his eyes began to mist.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写Jake翻阅相册时的具体场景与内心触动,点明眼睛湿润的原因(被过往温暖打动、愧疚自己的排斥);②刻画他的动作与心理变化(如轻轻抚摸照片、回忆过往、收起抱怨);③以他主动整理储藏室、期待与祖母见面收尾,为第二段“交给祖母相册”做铺垫。
续写:
As he leafed through more photos, his eyes began to mist. There were photos of Grandma teaching him to walk, feeding him homemade cookies, and even accompanying him on his first trip to the zoo. Every page was filled with warm smiles and happy moments he’d long forgotten. He felt a surge of guilt—how could he have resented someone who once loved him so deeply? He gently stroked the photos, wiping away the dust carefully. The complaints in his heart faded completely, replaced by regret and eagerness to know Grandma again. He put the album aside and rolled up his sleeves, starting to tidy the storage room seriously. No longer dragging his feet, he sorted boxes, swept the floor, and cleared the spiderwebs, determined to make a cozy space for Grandma.
第二段:Next morning, when his grandmother stepped into her new room, Jake handed her the album.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写见面时的初始氛围(如轻微生疏、Jake的紧张)与祖母看到整洁房间的反应;②刻画祖母看到相册后的惊讶、感动,以及两人围绕相册回忆过往的对话;③描写和解后的温馨场景(如祖母拥抱Jake、讲述照片背后的故事);④以Jake的感悟收尾,升华“亲情珍贵、主动接纳”的主题。
续写:
Next morning, when his grandmother stepped into her new room, Jake handed her the album. Grandma’s eyes widened in surprise as she took it, her fingers brushing the faded cover gently. When she flipped through the pages, tears welled up in her eyes. “Oh, my little Jake,” she whispered, pointing to a photo of them flying a kite. “You fell down and cried, but refused to let me carry you.” Jake smiled shyly, “I found it in the storage room yesterday. I’m sorry I was so rude before.” Grandma pulled him into a warm hug. “It’s okay, my boy. I’m just glad we can make new memories now.” Jake felt a warm glow in his heart—he realized that giving up a morning of basketball was the best decision he’d ever made. Nothing was more precious than the bond between family.
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