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Lila grew up with her grandmother in the countryside. Her favorite moments were singing traditional folk songs while working with the villagers. Her clear, pleasant voice lifted everyone’s spirits, making even the hardest work feel lighter.“Your voice is a gift, Lila,” her grandmother said. “It carries the soul of our village. Never stop singing.”
However, life changed when Lila’s family moved to the city for better opportunities. The tall buildings, busy streets, and unfamiliar faces overwhelmed her. At school, her classmates teased her for her rural accent, calling her “the farm girl”. Embarrassed and hurt, Lila became withdrawn. She stopped singing; she was afraid her voice would invite more ridicule (嘲笑).
One afternoon, after a particularly unkind comment from a classmate, Lila ran to a nearby park. The beautiful lake and trees reminded her of home. Sitting by the lake, she thought of her grandmother and the songs they used to sing. Hesitantly, she began singing one of her favorite folk tunes. Her voice started low but grew louder, filling the park with its beauty and emotion.
When she finished, she heard clapping. Turning around, she saw a kind woman smiling warmly. “It was beautiful,” the woman said. “Your voice has so much depth and emotion. Where did you learn to sing like that?” Lila replied with a flushed (脸红的) face, “It’s just a song from my village.” The woman’s eyes lit up with excitement. “You have a rare talent. Your voice tells a story. Would you like to sing with me?”
Lila hesitated, but the woman’s kind expression and genuine interest moved her. They sang together, their voices mixing harmoniously. Later, Lila learned that the woman was a music professor at a local university. That afternoon felt like a dream, and Lila found herself smiling for the first time in weeks. Before leaving, the woman said, “Practice, embrace (拥抱) your uniqueness, and let your voice shine. I’m looking forward to hearing you sing again.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Inspired by the professor’s words, Lila started practicing every day, determined to improve her singing skills.
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The next week, the same professor came to Lila’s school for the talent selection event.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:_________________________________________________________________
2.视角:第_________________人称视角
3.时空线:乡村(莉拉和奶奶生活,与村民一起劳作时唱民歌,奶奶肯定其天赋)→ 城市(莉拉随家人搬迁,因口音被同学嘲笑,变得沉默,不再唱歌)→ 城市公园(莉拉受同学恶意评论后跑到公园,触景生情唱起民歌)→ 城市公园(莉拉唱歌后被音乐教授称赞,得知教授身份,接受教授鼓励)→(续写)_____________(莉拉受教授鼓励后开始每天练习唱歌)→(续写)_______________(教授来到学校进行才艺选拔)
4.文章线索
“莉拉的歌声”对情节发展有何作用?它如何成为连接“乡村记忆”与“城市成长”的关键纽带?
莉拉从“乡村时的自信歌唱”到“城市后的沉默退缩”再到“公园重拾歌声”的情感变化,与音乐教授“偶然聆听”到“主动邀请”再到“给予鼓励”的行为有何内在关联?二者如何共同凸显“珍视天赋、接纳自我”的主题?
“同学嘲笑莉拉的乡村口音”“莉拉停止唱歌”这两个细节有何深层意义?它们如何为后续“教授发现天赋、莉拉重拾自信”的反转做铺垫?
故事的核心冲突是什么?“天赋压抑与天赋唤醒”这条线索是如何逐步推进并实现反转的?
5. 情节线:
莉拉在乡村与奶奶生活,热爱唱传统民歌,奶奶肯定其天赋→ 莉拉随家人搬到城市,因乡村口音被同学嘲笑→ 莉拉感到尴尬受伤,变得沉默,停止唱歌→ 莉拉遭同学恶意评论后跑到公园,触景生情唱起民歌→ 音乐教授听到歌声称赞莉拉,邀请她一起唱歌,莉拉得知其教授身份→ 教授鼓励莉拉练习、接纳独特性,莉拉重拾笑容→(续写)____________________________→(续写)_____________________________
6. 情感线:
莉拉:乡村时的自信愉悦→ 初到城市的迷茫不适→ 遭嘲笑后的尴尬受伤→ 沉默退缩的压抑→ 公园唱歌时的犹豫试探→ 被教授称赞后的羞涩感动→ 接受鼓励后的重拾希望→(续写练习时的坚定执着)→(续写面对选拔时的紧张与勇敢);
奶奶:对莉拉的慈爱与肯定→ (隐含)莉拉心中的精神支撑;
同学:对莉拉的偏见与刻薄;
教授:聆听时的欣赏→ 交流时的真诚→ 鼓励时的恳切
7. 文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8. 句式示例
宾语从句:
非谓语动词:
倒装句:
同位语:
状语从句:
夸张:
排比:
9. 主题归类:
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Inspired by the professor’s words, Lila started practicing every day, determined to improve her singing skills.
请思考以下问题,梳理第一段情节思路:
衔接句1——对“练习过程”提问:莉拉会选择在哪里练习?练习时会遇到什么困难(比如担心被同学听到、技巧生疏等)?她会如何克服这些困难?是否会想起奶奶或教授的话来激励自己?
衔接句2——对“细节补充”提问:莉拉练习的内容是什么?是乡村民歌还是会尝试新的曲目?练习时她的神态、动作有何变化(比如从紧张到放松、从小声到大声)?是否有其他人注意到她的练习?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的“才艺选拔”做铺垫?
第二段提示句:The next week, the same professor came to Lila’s school for the talent selection event.
请思考以下问题,梳理第二段情节思路:
衔接句1——对“莉拉的反应”提问:看到教授时,莉拉会有怎样的表情和心理活动?是紧张、兴奋还是犹豫?同学的态度会发生变化吗?他们会如何看待莉拉参加选拔?
衔接句2——对“选拔过程与结果”提问:莉拉会选择唱什么歌曲参赛?演唱时的表现如何?教授会有怎样的反应?选拔结果如何?这件事会给莉拉的生活带来什么改变?如何呼应“接纳自我、绽放天赋”的主题?
主题:每个人都有独特的天赋,外界的偏见与嘲笑无法掩盖天赋的光芒;他人的善意鼓励能成为唤醒天赋的力量,而自我接纳与坚持练习则是让天赋绽放的关键,最终能赢得他人的认可。
三、段落构思
第一段:Inspired by the professor’s words, Lila started practicing every day, determined to improve her singing skills.
请按“练习地点选择→ 练习中的困难与克服→ 练习中的心理支撑→ 练习效果”的逻辑,梳理第一段写作思路:
思路:①莉拉选择学校无人的天台或公园的僻静角落练习,避开同学的视线;②练习初期,她因久未唱歌技巧生疏,声音也不敢放大,担心被嘲笑,但想起教授“拥抱独特性”的鼓励和奶奶的叮嘱,便逐渐放开声音;③她主要练习熟悉的乡村民歌,也会尝试教授提及的基础发声技巧,每天放学后都会坚持练习;④一段时间后,她的歌声更稳定,眼神也重新变得自信,偶尔会不自觉地在走路时哼起调子。
第一段续写:
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请按“看到教授的反应→ 报名与同学态度→ 演唱过程→ 结果与影响”的逻辑,梳理第二段写作思路:
思路:①莉拉看到教授时又惊又喜,紧张得手心冒汗,教授对她点头微笑,给了她勇气;②起初莉拉犹豫是否报名,同学看到她的举动议论纷纷,有同学仍带着偏见, but 也有同学好奇;③莉拉最终报名,选择唱那首在公园唱的乡村民歌,演唱时闭上眼睛,将乡村记忆和情感融入歌声,歌声清亮动人;④教授听得十分投入,结束后带头鼓掌,宣布莉拉入选;同学纷纷对她刮目相看,莉拉终于敢于在众人面前接纳自己的独特性,重拾歌唱的快乐。
第二段续写:
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
莉拉(Lila):从小和奶奶在乡村长大,拥有清澈动听的嗓音,热爱传统民歌,搬到城市后因口音遭嘲笑而变得沉默寡言,内心渴望表达;奶奶(Grandmother):莉拉的精神支柱,肯定莉拉的歌唱天赋,教导她珍视自己的声音;城市同学:对莉拉的乡村背景和口音抱有偏见,以嘲笑的方式对待她;音乐教授(Music Professor):善良且有眼光,发现莉拉的歌唱天赋,给予她鼓励和指引。
2.视角:第三人称视角(以莉拉的经历和心理变化为主要叙事线索)
3.时空线:
乡村(莉拉和奶奶生活,与村民一起劳作时唱民歌,奶奶肯定其天赋)→ 城市(莉拉随家人搬迁,因口音被同学嘲笑,变得沉默,不再唱歌)→ 城市公园(莉拉受同学恶意评论后跑到公园,触景生情唱起民歌)→ 城市公园(莉拉唱歌后被音乐教授称赞,得知教授身份,接受教授鼓励)→(续写)莉拉家中/城市某处(莉拉受教授鼓励后开始每天练习唱歌)→(续写)莉拉的学校(教授来到学校进行才艺选拔)
4. 文章线索
“莉拉的歌声” 对情节发展的作用及纽带意义
答:情节作用:是贯穿全文的核心线索,推动情节起伏 —— 乡村时的歌声是幸福生活的标志;城市中停止歌唱是困境的体现;公园重拾歌声是转折的开端;后续练习与选拔的歌声是成长的落点,串联起 “幸福 — 困境 — 转折 — 成长” 的完整情节。
纽带意义:歌声承载乡村记忆(与奶奶、村民的温情、传统民歌的底蕴),城市中歌声的 “沉寂” 与 “复苏” 对应莉拉的心理变化,公园歌声偶遇教授则搭建起乡村天赋与城市发展的桥梁,让乡村记忆中的天赋在城市中获得认可与成长。
2. 情感变化与教授行为的关联及主题凸显
答:内在关联:莉拉的情感变化是教授行为的 “诱因” 与 “结果”—— 她的沉默退缩凸显天赋压抑的困境,公园歌声的情感张力吸引教授;教授的主动邀请打破她的封闭,鼓励则推动她从 “试探” 走向 “坚定”,形成 “困境呈现 — 外力唤醒 — 自我突破” 的互动逻辑。
主题凸显:莉拉从 “藏起天赋” 到 “拥抱天赋” 的转变,与教授 “发现天赋 — 守护天赋” 的行为形成呼应,共同说明 “天赋需接纳,外界善意可助力自我认同”,凸显 “珍视天赋、接纳自我” 的核心。
3. 细节的深层意义及铺垫作用
答:深层意义:“同学嘲笑口音” 揭示城市环境对乡村特质的偏见,是莉拉压抑天赋的直接诱因;“停止唱歌” 是她自我保护的选择,也暗示天赋未被真正磨灭(只是暂时隐藏),体现 “外界压力与内在热爱” 的矛盾。
铺垫作用:两个细节强化了莉拉的 “困境感”,让 “教授发现天赋” 的转折更具冲击力 —— 沉默越久,重拾歌声的勇气越可贵;嘲笑越尖锐,教授的认可越能凸显 “独特性的价值”,为后续自信反转积累情感张力。
4. 核心冲突及线索推进与反转
答:核心冲突:莉拉的 “天赋本能” 与 “外界偏见 + 自我压抑” 的矛盾(即 “天赋压抑与天赋唤醒” 的冲突)。
线索推进与反转:
铺垫:乡村天赋显现(奶奶肯定)→ 城市偏见出现(同学嘲笑)→ 天赋压抑(停止唱歌),冲突逐步积累;
转折:公园触景生情唱歌(天赋本能流露)→ 教授偶然聆听并鼓励(外力唤醒);
反转:莉拉主动练习(自我唤醒)→ 学校选拔演唱(天赋绽放),从 “被动压抑” 到 “主动展现”,冲突彻底解决。
5. 情节线:
莉拉在乡村与奶奶生活,热爱唱传统民歌,奶奶肯定其天赋→ 莉拉随家人搬到城市,因乡村口音被同学嘲笑→ 莉拉感到尴尬受伤,变得沉默,停止唱歌→ 莉拉遭同学恶意评论后跑到公园,触景生情唱起民歌→ 音乐教授听到歌声称赞莉拉,邀请她一起唱歌,莉拉得知其教授身份→ 教授鼓励莉拉练习、接纳独特性,莉拉重拾笑容→(续写)莉拉受教授鼓励,开始每天练习唱歌,决心提升技巧→(续写)教授来到莉拉学校进行才艺选拔
6. 情感线:
莉拉:乡村时的自信愉悦→ 初到城市的迷茫不适→ 遭嘲笑后的尴尬受伤→ 沉默退缩的压抑→ 公园唱歌时的犹豫试探→ 被教授称赞后的羞涩感动→ 接受鼓励后的重拾希望→(续写练习时的坚定执着)→(续写面对选拔时的紧张与勇敢);
奶奶:对莉拉的慈爱与肯定→ (隐含)莉拉心中的精神支撑;
同学:对莉拉的偏见与刻薄;
教授:聆听时的欣赏→ 交流时的真诚→ 鼓励时的恳切
7. 文章大意概括
中文:
莉拉从小和奶奶在乡村长大,热爱唱传统民歌,她的歌声深受村民喜爱,奶奶也肯定她的天赋并叮嘱她不要停止歌唱。后来,莉拉随家人搬到城市寻求更好的发展,但城市的陌生环境和同学对她乡村口音的嘲笑,让她感到尴尬受伤,变得沉默寡言,不再敢唱歌。一天,因同学的恶意评论,莉拉跑到附近公园,触景生情唱起了乡村民歌,歌声被一位音乐教授听到并得到称赞。教授邀请莉拉一起唱歌,还告知她自己的身份,鼓励她练习并接纳自己的独特性,莉拉多年来第一次露出了笑容。
英文:
Lila grew up with her grandmother in the countryside. She loved singing traditional folk songs while working with the villagers, and her clear and pleasant voice was loved by everyone. Her grandmother affirmed her talent and told her never to stop singing. Later, Lila moved to the city with her family for better opportunities. However, the unfamiliar environment and the ridicule from her classmates about her rural accent made her embarrassed and hurt. She became withdrawn and stopped singing. One day, after being teased by a classmate, Lila ran to a nearby park and couldn't help singing a folk song. Her voice was heard by a music professor, who praised her and invited her to sing together. The professor told Lila her identity and encouraged her to practice and embrace her uniqueness, which made Lila smile for the first time in weeks.
8. 句式示例
宾语从句:Her grandmother said that her voice carried the soul of the village.(奶奶说她的歌声承载着村庄的灵魂。)
非谓语动词:Embarrassed and hurt, Lila became withdrawn.(既尴尬又受伤,莉拉变得沉默寡言。)
倒装句:Never had Lila felt so encouraged since she moved to the city.(搬到城市后,莉拉从未感到如此受鼓舞。)
同位语:“Your voice is a gift, Lila,” her grandmother said.(“莉拉,你的声音是一份礼物,”奶奶说。)
状语从句:When she finished singing, she heard clapping from behind.(当她唱完时,听到身后传来鼓掌声。)
夸张:Her voice was so beautiful that it seemed to make the flowers in the park bloom more brightly.(她的歌声如此动听,仿佛让公园里的花都开得更鲜艳了。)
排比:She sang for the villagers, she sang for her grandmother, and she sang for the soul of the village.(她为村民歌唱,为奶奶歌唱,也为村庄的灵魂歌唱。)
9. 主题归类:
本文围绕“天赋的坚守与唤醒”和“自我接纳”展开,以莉拉的歌声为线索,串联起乡村的美好记忆与城市的成长困境,凸显了“每个人的独特性都是宝贵的天赋,即使遭遇挫折,只要勇于接纳自我、坚持热爱,终会被看见”的主题,同时展现了他人的善意鼓励对个人成长的重要作用。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Inspired by the professor’s words, Lila started practicing every day, determined to improve her singing skills.
请思考以下问题,梳理第一段情节思路:
衔接句1——对“练习过程”提问:莉拉会选择在哪里练习?练习时会遇到什么困难(比如担心被同学听到、技巧生疏等)?她会如何克服这些困难?是否会想起奶奶或教授的话来激励自己?
练习地点:选择兼具 “私密性” 与 “情感联结” 的场景 —— 学校放学后的空音乐教室(有基础设备,且避开同学)、公园湖边(触发重拾歌声的记忆点,环境安静)。
遇到的困难:①技巧生疏(久未歌唱导致音准波动、气息不稳);②心理障碍(担心被同学撞见嘲笑,开口时声音发颤);③缺乏方法(不知如何提升,仅靠重复演唱)。
克服方式:①借助 “精神支撑”—— 哼唱时摩挲奶奶送的旧手帕,默念奶奶 “歌声藏着村庄灵魂” 的叮嘱,或回忆教授 “拥抱独特性” 的鼓励;②分阶段突破 —— 先在无人时段小声练习,逐渐放大音量,对着湖面或镜子调整状态;③主动优化 —— 将教授提及的 “呼吸技巧” 融入演唱,反复打磨乡村民歌的情感表达。
衔接句2——对“细节补充”提问:莉拉练习的内容是什么?是乡村民歌还是会尝试新的曲目?练习时她的神态、动作有何变化(比如从紧张到放松、从小声到大声)?是否有其他人注意到她的练习?
练习内容:以乡村民歌为核心(坚守天赋底色),穿插教授推荐的简单发声练习曲(提升技巧),后期会尝试给民歌加入轻微的城市音乐元素(体现城乡融合的成长)。
神态与动作变化:初期低头攥手、眼神躲闪,唱到熟悉的乡村歌词时会不自觉微笑;中期抬头挺胸,手指轻轻打节拍,声音从 “气音” 变为 “清亮”;后期闭眼投入,身体随旋律轻微晃动,结束后会主动复盘调整。
他人关注:前期无人察觉,后期一次在音乐教室练习时,被路过的班长偶然听到,班长虽未上前,但眼神从 “好奇” 变为 “认可”,为后续同学态度转变埋下伏笔。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的“才艺选拔”做铺垫?
第一段通过 “持续练习” 夯实莉拉的 “天赋基础” 与 “心理底气”—— 技巧提升让她具备参赛能力,心理从 “害怕被看见” 到 “敢于展现” 的转变让她有勇气报名选拔;班长的偶然关注则为第二段同学态度的转变做铺垫,使 “选拔时的认可” 更合理。
第二段提示句:The next week, the same professor came to Lila’s school for the talent selection event.
请思考以下问题,梳理第二段情节思路:
衔接句1——对“莉拉的反应”提问:看到教授时,莉拉会有怎样的表情和心理活动?是紧张、兴奋还是犹豫?同学的态度会发生变化吗?他们会如何看待莉拉参加选拔?
莉拉的反应:看到教授时瞳孔微缩,先是紧张得攥紧衣角(担心表现不好),随即因教授的微笑点头而放松,眼神中透出 “被认可的兴奋”,主动走上前轻声问候,坚定了报名的决心。
同学的态度:初期仍有少数人小声议论 “农场女孩还敢报名”,但班长主动说 “我听过她唱歌,很好听”,带动部分同学好奇观望;看到莉拉报名后,议论声逐渐转为 “期待” 或 “观望”,打破了此前的单一嘲笑态度。
衔接句2——对“选拔过程与结果”提问:莉拉会选择唱什么歌曲参赛?演唱时的表现如何?教授会有怎样的反应?选拔结果如何?这件事会给莉拉的生活带来什么改变?如何呼应“接纳自我、绽放天赋”的主题?
演唱选择与表现:选唱公园时唱的那首乡村民歌(呼应转折节点,承载情感记忆),演唱时先轻声起调,逐渐放大音量,唱到 “村庄的炊烟” 等歌词时眼含温情,结尾以清亮的尾音收束,全程投入且自信。
教授反应与结果:教授闭眼聆听,手指轻轻打节拍,结束后率先站起鼓掌,点评时强调 “她的歌声有故事,有独特的灵魂”,当场宣布她入选校级才艺展演。
生活改变与主题呼应:同学纷纷围上来称赞,此前嘲笑她的同学主动道歉;莉拉不再隐藏口音,甚至会在班级活动中唱乡村民歌,将 “独特性” 变为 “个人标签”;呼应主题 —— 天赋无需迎合他人,接纳并坚守自我,才能让天赋真正绽放。
主题:每个人都有独特的天赋,外界的偏见与嘲笑无法掩盖天赋的光芒;他人的善意鼓励能成为唤醒天赋的力量,而自我接纳与坚持练习则是让天赋绽放的关键,最终能赢得他人的认可。
三、段落构思
第一段:Inspired by the professor’s words, Lila started practicing every day, determined to improve her singing skills.
请按“练习地点选择→ 练习中的困难与克服→ 练习中的心理支撑→ 练习效果”的逻辑,梳理第一段写作思路:
思路:①莉拉选择学校无人的天台或公园的僻静角落练习,避开同学的视线;②练习初期,她因久未唱歌技巧生疏,声音也不敢放大,担心被嘲笑,但想起教授“拥抱独特性”的鼓励和奶奶的叮嘱,便逐渐放开声音;③她主要练习熟悉的乡村民歌,也会尝试教授提及的基础发声技巧,每天放学后都会坚持练习;④一段时间后,她的歌声更稳定,眼神也重新变得自信,偶尔会不自觉地在走路时哼起调子。
第一段续写:Inspired by the professor’s words, Lila started practicing every day, determined to improve her singing skills. She chose the quiet rooftop of her apartment building after school, where no one would disturb her. At first, her voice was still shaky and she hesitated to sing loudly, fearing mockery. But whenever she wanted to give up, she remembered the professor’s warm smile and her grandmother’s words about her voice carrying the village’s soul. She practiced her favorite folk songs repeatedly and even tried the breathing techniques the professor mentioned. Day by day, her voice became more stable and powerful. One evening, she caught herself humming a tune while walking, and a small, confident smile crept onto her face.
第二段:The next week, the same professor came to Lila’s school for the talent selection event.
请按“看到教授的反应→ 报名与同学态度→ 演唱过程→ 结果与影响”的逻辑,梳理第二段写作思路:
思路:①莉拉看到教授时又惊又喜,紧张得手心冒汗,教授对她点头微笑,给了她勇气;②起初莉拉犹豫是否报名,同学看到她的举动议论纷纷,有同学仍带着偏见, but 也有同学好奇;③莉拉最终报名,选择唱那首在公园唱的乡村民歌,演唱时闭上眼睛,将乡村记忆和情感融入歌声,歌声清亮动人;④教授听得十分投入,结束后带头鼓掌,宣布莉拉入选;同学纷纷对她刮目相看,莉拉终于敢于在众人面前接纳自己的独特性,重拾歌唱的快乐。
第二段续写:The next week, the same professor came to Lila’s school for the talent selection event. Lila’s heart raced when she saw the professor, who gave her a reassuring nod. At first, she hesitated to sign up, remembering her classmates’ past ridicule. But with the professor’s encouragement in mind, she walked to the registration desk. When her turn came, she closed her eyes and sang the folk song from her village. Her clear voice filled the hall, carrying all her memories of home. When she finished, the hall was quiet for a second before erupting in applause. The professor stood up, clapping loudly. “You’re truly talented,” she said. Her classmates looked at her in surprise and admiration. Lila beamed—she had finally embraced her voice and shone brightly.
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