内容正文:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Little Notes
Once again, I headed out to look for a job. Although I wasn’t very confident about the interview, I still held my head high, trying to stay hopeful under the morning sun. Before leaving, I made sure to stick a note on the fridge that read, “Son, finish your breakfast and have a good day.” Then I walked out of the door.
This quiet tradition came from my father. I still remember how, before every trip, he would leave a note on my desk: “I’ll come back with gifts for you.” When I stayed up late studying, I would open my pencil box and find another note inside: “Go to bed and have a good dream.” During summer camp, I would find a little note in my pocket that said, “Take care of yourself.” Those small pieces of paper were my first understanding of love — a gentle way of reminding me that someone always cared.
Years later, when my own son Jack was old enough to read, I continued the tradition. I left little notes throughout his life: “You are smarter than you think” in his math book, “Son, my little sun” on his bedroom door, and “Good luck at soccer” inside his shoe. He never said anything about them, but he became a happy, brave, and kind boy. That was enough for me.
Then came the hardest winter of my life. My company cut our pay, and people began whispering about who might lose their jobs. I worked every day with a heavy heart, always anxious, but in the end, I was still told to leave. It was a huge shock — but things got even harder. My husband lost his job too and had to move to another city to find work. I didn’t have time to feel sad. I needed to find a new job quickly to support our family.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted.
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The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角
第______人称视角
3.时空线
清晨家中(“我”再次外出找工作,虽不自信仍保持希望,出门前给儿子Jack留便签提醒吃早餐)--- 回忆中(“我”的父亲在“我”成长中留便签的经历:出行前、熬夜学习时、夏令营时,便签让“我”感受到爱)--- 多年后家中(“我”延续传统,在Jack的书本、房门、鞋子里留便签鼓励他,Jack成长为优秀男孩)--- 近期家中与职场(“我”遭遇人生寒冬:公司降薪、失业,丈夫也失业并前往外地找工作,“我”急需新工作养家)---(续写)_______________________(“我”找工作未果疲惫归家,发现惊喜)---(续写)________________(“我”看到儿子留的便签,感受温暖与力量)
4.文章线索
(1)“留便签”这一传统对情节发展有何作用?它为何能成为连接三代人情感的纽带?
(2)父亲给“我”留便签与“我”给Jack留便签,在内容与意义上有何异同?这种传承体现了什么?
(3)“我”失业、丈夫外出找工作的困境与“留便签”的温暖形成怎样的对比?这一对比如何凸显主题?
(4)故事的核心冲突是什么?“困境中的坚守与爱的回馈”这条线索是如何逐步推进的?
5.情节线
“我”清晨外出找工作,出门前给儿子Jack留便签--- 回忆父亲在“我”成长中留便签传递爱的经历--- 多年后“我”延续便签传统,用便签鼓励Jack,Jack成长为快乐勇敢的男孩--- “我”遭遇职场危机:降薪后失业,丈夫也失业并赴外地找工作--- “我”迫切寻找新工作养家,多次尝试未果---(续写)__________________________________________ ---(续写)_________________________________________
6.情感线
“我”:找工作时的不自信与强装乐观→ 回忆父亲便签时的温暖→ 给Jack留便签时的慈爱→ 遭遇失业等困境时的焦虑与沉重→ 找工作未果后的疲惫与失落→ _________________(看到儿子便签时的惊喜与感动)→ _________________(重拾希望后的坚定与温暖)
Jack:收到便签时的默默接纳→ 成长中的自信勇敢→ 目睹母亲困境后的心疼→ _________________(用便签回馈母亲时的真诚与懂事)
父亲:对“我”的牵挂与疼爱→ 用便签传递关怀时的细腻→ _________________(爱的传统的开创者,影响后代)
丈夫:失业后的无奈→ 为家庭奔波的责任→ _________________(虽不在身边仍为家庭努力的牵挂)
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
非谓语动词:
倒装句:
同位语:
状语从句:
夸张:
排比:
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted.
请思考以下问题,梳理第一段情节思路:
衔接句 1—— 对“归家场景”提问:“我”归家时家中氛围如何?Jack有何异常表现?是否有具体的事物(如饭菜、物品)让“我”感到意外?
___________________________________________________________________________衔接句 2—— 对“情感变化”提问:“我”看到意外景象时,疲惫与失落会有怎样的转变?会联想到什么过往经历(如自己给Jack留便签的场景)?
___________________________________________________________________________过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的“便签与感悟”做铺垫:
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第二段提示句:The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.
请思考以下问题,梳理第二段情节思路:
衔接句 1—— 对“便签内容”提问:便签上Jack会写什么?是否会呼应“我”之前给留的便签风格(如鼓励、关怀)?是否会提及“我”的困境,传递支持?
___________________________________________________________________________衔接句 2—— 对“感悟升华”提问:“我”读完便签后会有怎样的深刻感悟?会如何回应Jack的这份心意?这一经历对“便签传统”的意义有何提升?
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三、段落构思
第一段:That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted.
请按“归家状态→ 意外发现→ 细节观察→ 情感触动”的逻辑,梳理第一段写作思路:
思路:→①“我”拖着疲惫的身体回家,身心俱疲,连开灯的力气都快没有,对家庭的责任让“我”倍感压力→②走进厨房想倒杯水时,发现餐桌上放着一盘温热的饭菜,旁边摆着一个新鲜的苹果,苹果上贴着一张小便签→③“我”愣住了,这是“我”每天给Jack留便签的位置,此刻却换成了Jack的笔迹,瞬间想起Jack平时默默接纳便签的模样→④疲惫感消散大半,心中涌起一丝暖意,拿起苹果和便签准备阅读
第一段续写:
That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted.
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第二段:The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.
请按“阅读便签→ 回忆关联→ 情感共鸣→ 感悟升华”的逻辑,梳理第二段写作思路:
思路:→①“我”咬了口苹果,甜意蔓延,展开便签,看到Jack稚嫩的字迹写着鼓励与关怀的话语,呼应“我”平时的鼓励风格→②回忆起自己给Jack留便签的种种场景,意识到Jack一直默默记在心里,如今用同样的方式回馈自己→③“我”眼眶发热,感受到爱的传承与力量,之前的焦虑与失落被温暖取代→④“我”找到Jack,给了他一个拥抱,更加坚定了面对困境的信心,明白便签不仅是关怀,更是家庭的精神支撑
第二段续写:
The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.
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参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色:
“我”:内心坚韧、情感细腻的母亲与女儿。传承父亲 “留便签” 的爱的传统,用便签滋养儿子成长;遭遇失业、丈夫外出务工的困境时,仍坚守责任,最终在儿子的便签中重拾力量,是爱的传递者与坚守者。
Jack:沉默懂事、懂得感恩的儿子。长期接纳母亲的便签鼓励,成长为快乐勇敢的男孩;目睹母亲困境后,用母亲传递爱的方式回馈关怀,是爱的承接者与回馈者。
父亲:温柔深沉、善于表达爱的长辈。用 “出行留赠礼承诺”“熬夜留安睡提醒” 等便签陪伴 “我” 成长,开创了家庭 “便签传爱” 的传统,是爱的源头与开创者。
丈夫:有家庭责任感的丈夫与父亲。失业后为养家远赴外地找工作,虽缺席日常陪伴,但用行动承担责任,是家庭的隐形支撑。
2. 视角第___一___人称视角
3. 时空线
清晨家中(“我” 再次外出找工作,虽不自信仍保持希望,出门前给儿子 Jack 留便签提醒吃早餐)--- 回忆中(“我” 的父亲在 “我” 成长中留便签的经历:出行前、熬夜学习时、夏令营时,便签让 “我” 感受到爱)--- 多年后家中(“我” 延续传统,在 Jack 的书本、房门、鞋子里留便签鼓励他,Jack 成长为优秀男孩)--- 近期家中与职场(“我” 遭遇人生寒冬:公司降薪、失业,丈夫也失业并前往外地找工作,“我” 急需新工作养家)---(续写)傍晚家中(“我” 找工作未果疲惫归家,发现餐桌上的温热饭菜、苹果与儿子的便签)---(续写)家中(“我” 读便签感受温暖,与儿子相拥,重拾面对困境的勇气)
4. 文章线索
(1) 作用:“留便签” 是贯穿全文的核心线索,串联起父亲与 “我”、“我” 与 Jack 的三代人情感,推动情节从 “我传爱” 向 “儿子回馈爱” 发展;原因:便签虽小,却承载着具体的关怀与鼓励,是 “不善言辞的爱” 的具象化表达,这种温柔的提醒能跨越时间,让家庭成员清晰感受到被牵挂,自然成为连接三代人的情感纽带。
(2) 相同点:内容均聚焦 “关怀与鼓励”,都以简洁的文字传递温暖;意义均是用含蓄的方式表达爱,滋养对方成长。不同点:父亲给 “我” 的便签更侧重 “生活照料”(如安睡、保重身体),“我” 给 Jack 的便签更侧重 “成长激励”(如肯定智商、鼓励比赛)。体现:爱的传承不是简单复刻,而是结合对方需求调整表达形式,核心的 “温暖与关怀” 始终不变。(3)对比:“失业、丈夫远行” 的现实困境充满焦虑与沉重,“留便签” 的细节则满含温暖与希望,二者形成 “冰冷现实” 与 “温暖亲情” 的强烈对比;凸显主题:这种对比让 “爱” 的力量更凸显 —— 即便生活遭遇寒冬,家庭传承的爱也能成为抵御困境的底气,深化 “爱能跨越困境” 的主题。
(3) 核心冲突:“我” 面对 “失业 + 丈夫缺位” 的生存困境与 “坚守家庭责任、传递爱的初心” 之间的矛盾;推进线索:从 “我延续便签传统,用爱滋养儿子”→“遭遇双重失业困境,陷入焦虑”→“多次找工作未果,身心俱疲”→“儿子用便签回馈爱,给予支撑”→“我重拾勇气,坚守家庭”,围绕 “困境中的坚守与爱的回馈” 层层推进,展现爱的双向流动。
5. 情节线
“我” 清晨外出找工作,出门前给儿子 Jack 留便签 --- 回忆父亲在 “我” 成长中留便签传递爱的经历 --- 多年后 “我” 延续便签传统,用便签鼓励 Jack,Jack 成长为快乐勇敢的男孩 --- “我” 遭遇职场危机:降薪后失业,丈夫也失业并赴外地找工作 --- “我” 迫切寻找新工作养家,多次尝试未果 ---(续写)“我” 疲惫归家,发现 Jack 准备的温热饭菜、苹果与贴在苹果上的便签,瞬间被触动 ---(续写)“我” 读便签感受到儿子的鼓励与心疼,与 Jack 相拥,在爱的支撑下重拾面对困境的信心。
6. 情感线
“我”:找工作时的不自信与强装乐观→ 回忆父亲便签时的温暖→ 给 Jack 留便签时的慈爱→ 遭遇失业等困境时的焦虑与沉重→ 找工作未果后的疲惫与失落→ 看到儿子便签时的惊喜与暖流涌动(看到儿子便签时的惊喜与感动)→ 重拾希望后的坚定与对爱的深刻领悟(重拾希望后的坚定与温暖)
Jack:收到便签时的默默接纳→ 成长中的自信勇敢→ 目睹母亲困境后的心疼→ 用便签与饭菜悄悄回馈时的真诚懂事(用便签回馈母亲时的真诚与懂事)
父亲:对 “我” 的牵挂与疼爱→ 用便签传递关怀时的细腻→ 以隐性方式影响 “我” 育儿观念的深远(爱的传统的开创者,影响后代)
丈夫:失业后的无奈→ 为家庭奔波的责任→ 虽缺席但让 “我” 更懂坚守的动力(虽不在身边仍为家庭努力的牵挂)
7. 文章大意概括
中文:
“我” 从父亲那里传承了 “留便签” 的爱的传统 —— 父亲在 “我” 成长中,用出行前、熬夜时、夏令营的便签传递牵挂。多年后,“我” 将这份爱延续给儿子 Jack,在他的书本、房门、球鞋里留满鼓励的便签,Jack 也成长为快乐勇敢的男孩。然而 “我” 遭遇人生寒冬:公司裁员失业,丈夫也失业后远赴外地找工作。“我” 每日奔波找工作却屡屡碰壁。一天傍晚,疲惫归家的 “我” 发现餐桌上摆着 Jack 准备的温热饭菜,一个苹果上贴着 Jack 的便签。读着儿子呼应 “我” 风格的鼓励话语,“我” 深受触动,与 Jack 相拥。这份爱的回馈让 “我” 明白,便签里的爱不仅是单向传递,更是能抵御困境的双向支撑。
英文:
I inherited the tradition of leaving little notes from my father—he had accompanied my growth with notes: promising gifts before trips, reminding me to sleep when I stayed up late, and telling me to take care during summer camp. Years later, I passed this love on to my son Jack, leaving encouraging notes in his math book, on his bedroom door, and inside his soccer shoes. Jack grew into a happy, brave boy. However, I faced a tough winter: I was laid off after a salary cut, and my husband also lost his job and had to go to another city for work. I ran around looking for a new job every day but in vain. One evening, I came home exhausted and was surprised to see warm meals on the table, with a fresh apple and a note from Jack. Reading his encouraging words that echoed my style, I was deeply touched and hugged him. This feedback of love made me realize that the love in the notes is not just one-way, but a mutual support that can withstand difficulties.
8. 句式示例
宾语从句: I still remember how, before every trip, he would leave a note on my desk: “I’ll come back with gifts for you.”
非谓语动词: Before leaving, I made sure to stick a note on the fridge that read, “Son, finish your breakfast and have a good day.”
倒装句: Not only did those small notes carry love, but they also became a spiritual support for our family.
同位语: I left little notes throughout his life: “You are smarter than you think” in his math book, a note boosting his confidence.
状语从句: When I stayed up late studying, I would open my pencil box and find another note inside.
夸张: The weight of unemployment and family responsibility felt like a mountain pressing on my shoulders.
排比: Those notes were in my pencil box when I studied late, in my pocket during summer camp, and on my desk before trips.
9. 主题归类
爱的传承与回馈(家庭中的爱通过 “便签” 等具象方式代代传递,接收者的回馈让爱形成闭环,更具力量);
困境中的坚守(亲情是困境中最坚实的支撑,让人们在挫折中重拾勇气);
沉默的爱(最深刻的爱往往无需华丽言辞,简洁的提醒与陪伴便能滋养心灵);
责任与担当(家庭成员间的责任与爱相互交织,共同抵御生活的风雨)。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted.
请思考以下问题,梳理第一段情节思路:衔接句 1—— 对 “归家场景” 提问:“我” 归家时家中氛围如何?Jack 有何异常表现?是否有具体的事物(如饭菜、物品)让 “我” 感到意外?家中没有开灯,只有厨房透出微弱的暖光,氛围安静却温馨。Jack 从客厅沙发上站起来,手里攥着遥控器,眼神带着一丝紧张与期待,不像往常一样立刻喊 “妈妈”,而是悄悄看着 “我” 的反应。餐桌上摆着两盘温热的炒青菜和一碗番茄蛋汤,都是 “我” 平时爱吃的,旁边放着一个擦得锃亮的苹果,苹果蒂上别着一张折叠的小便签,正是 “我” 常用的那种浅粉色便签纸。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情感变化” 提问:“我” 看到意外景象时,疲惫与失落会有怎样的转变?会联想到什么过往经历(如自己给 Jack 留便签的场景)?“我” 的疲惫仿佛被厨房的暖光融化了大半,原本沉重的脚步变得轻快,眼眶微微发热。看着苹果上的便签,瞬间联想到每天清晨 “我” 在冰箱、Jack 的书本上贴便签的场景 —— 那时 Jack 总是默默收下,从不说什么,“我” 曾担心他是否在意,此刻才明白他早已将这份方式记在心里。失落感被一股突如其来的暖意取代,手指不自觉地伸向那张便签。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “便签与感悟” 做铺垫:第一段通过描写 “温热饭菜、苹果、便签” 的具体场景,展现了 Jack 的用心与对 “我” 的关怀,让 “我” 的情感从 “疲惫失落” 转向 “温暖触动”,为第二段 “读便签” 的情感爆发做了情绪铺垫;同时 “浅粉色便签纸”“苹果载体” 等细节呼应 “我” 平时传爱的方式,为后续 “感悟爱的传承” 提供了事实依据,让主题升华更自然。
第二段提示句:The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.
请思考以下问题,梳理第二段情节思路:衔接句 1—— 对 “便签内容” 提问:便签上 Jack 会写什么?是否会呼应 “我” 之前给留的便签风格(如鼓励、关怀)?是否会提及 “我” 的困境,传递支持?便签上是 Jack 稚嫩却工整的字迹:“妈妈,我今天跟奶奶学做了汤,你多喝点补力气。你之前说‘我比自己想的更聪明’,我觉得妈妈比自己想的更厉害 —— 找工作的事别着急,我会好好吃饭,等你和爸爸回来。爱你的 Jack”。内容完全呼应 “我” 的鼓励风格,还特意引用 “我” 对他说过的话,含蓄提及 “找工作” 的困境,传递 “我陪你等” 的支持。
衔接句 2—— 对 “感悟升华” 提问:“我” 读完便签后会有怎样的深刻感悟?会如何回应 Jack 的这份心意?这一经历对 “便签传统” 的意义有何提升?“我” 读完便签后眼泪掉落在便签纸上,突然明白 “留便签” 的意义从来不是单向的付出,而是让爱渗透在生活细节里,成为家人间的 “心灵密码”。“我” 走过去抱住 Jack,在他耳边说 “汤很好喝,便签比苹果还甜”。这一经历让 “便签传统” 从 “长辈对晚辈的滋养” 升级为 “家人间双向的支撑”,成为家庭抵御困境的精神纽带。
主题:
家庭中的爱无需豪言壮语,简洁的细节与传承的方式便能传递温暖;爱的本质是双向流动,付出的爱会以另一种形式回馈,成为困境中的力量;最好的家庭教育是爱的传承 —— 大人用温柔滋养孩子,孩子便会用同样的温柔守护大人。
三、段落构思
第一段:That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted.
请按 “归家状态→ 意外发现→ 细节观察→ 情感触动” 的逻辑,梳理第一段写作思路:思路:→①“我” 拖着疲惫的身体回家,身心俱疲,连开灯的力气都快没有,对家庭的责任让 “我” 倍感压力→②走进厨房想倒杯水时,发现餐桌上放着一盘温热的饭菜,旁边摆着一个新鲜的苹果,苹果上贴着一张小便签→③“我” 愣住了,这是 “我” 每天给 Jack 留便签的位置,此刻却换成了 Jack 的笔迹,瞬间想起 Jack 平时默默接纳便签的模样→④疲惫感消散大半,心中涌起一丝暖意,拿起苹果和便签准备阅读
第一段续写:That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted. My legs felt heavy as I pushed open the door, and I even had no strength to turn on the main light. Suddenly, a soft glow from the kitchen caught my eye. I walked over and saw two warm dishes and a bowl of soup on the table—my favorite ones. Beside them was a shiny apple with a pink note stuck on it, the same kind I used for Jack. Jack stood at the door, rubbing his hands nervously. "I learned to cook with grandma's video call," he mumbled. Looking at the note, memories of me sticking notes for him flooded in. My exhaustion faded, and I reached for the note gently.
第二段:The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.
请按 “阅读便签→ 回忆关联→ 情感共鸣→ 感悟升华” 的逻辑,梳理第二段写作思路:思路:→①“我” 咬了口苹果,甜意蔓延,展开便签,看到 Jack 稚嫩的字迹写着鼓励与关怀的话语,呼应 “我” 平时的鼓励风格→②回忆起自己给 Jack 留便签的种种场景,意识到 Jack 一直默默记在心里,如今用同样的方式回馈自己→③“我” 眼眶发热,感受到爱的传承与力量,之前的焦虑与失落被温暖取代→④“我” 找到 Jack,给了他一个拥抱,更加坚定了面对困境的信心,明白便签不仅是关怀,更是家庭的精神支撑
第二段续写:The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note. Unfolding it, I saw Jack's neat handwriting: "Mom, you always say I'm brave. You're braver—those interviews are just small tests. I'll wait for you to find a good job, and dad to come back. The soup is warm, drink it quickly!" Tears welled up. I remembered leaving similar notes in his schoolbag before. I walked to Jack and hugged him tightly. "Thank you, my little man," I whispered. At that moment, I knew the little notes had tied our hearts together. No matter how hard life was, this love would give me the courage to keep going.
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