内容正文:
突破9:感谢信
语料储备
【句式建模】
1.篇首——开篇明义
我写这封信是为了表达我诚挚的谢意,感谢你支持我渡过难关。
I ’m writing this letter to express my heartfelt thanks for your support that guided me through the difficulties.
2.篇中——描述帮助
①是你在关键时刻的帮助才使我渡过了难关。
It was your timely help at that crucial moment that guided me through the difficulties.
②要不是你的付出,我不会取得这样显著的进步。
But for/Without your devotion, I couldn ’t have achieved such remarkable progress.
③不可否认的是,你的见解、鼓励和耐心产生了重大的影响。
There is no denying that your insight, encouragement and patience have made a huge difference.
3.篇尾——再次感谢
为了回报你的善意,我诚挚地邀请你这个夏天来中国。
In return for your kindness, I ’d like to extend my sincere invitation for you to travel to China this summer.
【话题词汇】
常用词汇
话题示例
相关表达
(1)gratitude(感恩)
(2)guidance/instruction(指导)
(3)difficulty/barrier(困难)
(4)kindness/devotion(善良;付出)
(5)generous(慷慨的)
(6)make a huge difference(有重大影响)
(7)in return for(回报)
(8)be grateful to sb. for sth./be appreciative of (感恩)
(9)give sb. a hand (帮助)
假定你是李华,刚从新西兰的 Williams College 游学归来。请你代表中国交换生给该校校长Mr Declan 写封信。内容包括:1.感谢接待;2.谈谈收获;3.邀请来访。
(1)热情招待enthusiastic reception
(2)在我的学术旅程中开启充满活力的篇章open a dynamic chapter of my academic journey
(3)发人深省的讲座和深入的讨论thought-provoking lectures and in-depth discussions
(4)增强我们的综合知识enhance our comprehensive knowledge
(5)在我的学习上取得巨大进步make great progress in my study
假定你是李华,外教 Miss Smith 给你们班提供了一门演讲技巧和基本舞台技巧的课程,Miss Smith的课程帮助你们班在学校英语戏剧节上大获成功。请你就此事给她写一封感谢信,内容包括:1.表达感谢;2.回顾外教的帮助;3.总结同学们的收获。
(1)关于公众演讲和舞台表现力的独到见解your insightful lessons on public speaking and stage presence
(2)克服怯场的策略the strategy to overcome stage fright
(3)塑造我们的技巧,增强我们的信心shape our skills and boost our confidence
(4)在公开演讲中培养新的自信心develop a newfound self-assurance in public speaking
(5)获得更清晰、更有影响力的表达能力gain the ability to express themselves with greater clarity and impact
重温真题
(2019·浙江6月高考)
假定你是李华,经常帮助你学习英语的朋友Alex即将返回自己的国家。请给他写一封邮件,内容包括:
1.表示感谢;
2.回顾Alex对你的帮助;
3.临别祝愿。
注意:写作词数应为80左右。
Dear Alex,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【审题与构思】
本次写作任务是感谢信——感谢朋友帮助自己学习英语。本文写作需把握以下三点:
1.理解交际目的,根据双方身份把握好语气;
2.主体部分重在回顾自己接受帮助的过程,需点出具体收获;
3.首尾需言简意赅,清晰明确。
内容结构方面,可将信件分为三段。
第一段
道明来信目的。本题中,李华向熟悉的朋友表示感谢,无需自我介绍,应开门见山地表达感谢
第二段
回忆交流情景,简述困难及收获。应点明感谢的缘由,告知对方自己在其帮助下克服了哪些困难,取得哪些进步或成就。可提及对方在帮助自己的过程中所展现的耐心、智慧、幽默等人格特质,或提一件令自己印象深刻的事情,使表达更有人情味
第三段
结束信件。再次表示感谢,并作美好祝愿
【经典范文】
Dear Alex,
As you prepare to return to your home country, I want to take a moment to express my heartfelt gratitude for all the support and assistance you ’ve provided me in learning English.
Reflecting on our time together, I am filled with appreciation for the countless hours you spent helping me understand complex grammar rules and expanding my vocabulary.Your encouragement has been a driving force that has kept me motivated.Your patience, guidance, and friendship have been invaluable in my journey to improving my language skills.
As you embark on this new chapter, I wish you all the best for a bright and successful future.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【学生习作】
Dear Alex,
Hearing that you will go back to your home country, I am sincerely writing to express my gratitude to you.
Without your selfless help, I couldn ’t have secured such a consequence in English.I was weak in English in the past, what even caused a bad reputation on my daily life.So frustrated was I at that time.After you discovered this situation, not only did you point out my flaws but you gave me much help, which really helped overcome the difficulties.
Wish you good luck in the following days and we can meet again one day.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
教师点评
[得分]10分
优点:1.要点齐全,内容完整;
2.语言恰当平实,基本完成写作任务。
缺点:1.拼写及语法失误较多;
2.词汇、句式缺少亮点;
3.对困难及收获的介绍过于笼统,给读者印象不深。
【修改与升级】
Dear Alex,
Knowing that you will return to your home country soon, I ’m writing to express my heartfelt thanks to you.
Without your selfless help, I couldn ’t have secured such progress.Weak in English and lacking confidence, I was frustrated back then.With your keen observation and timely help, not only did you point out my shortcomings, but also you provided me with abundant advice, which equipped me with courage to overcome the difficulties.Again, I owe you a thousand thanks for the great favor.
I wish you every success in the following days and that we could meet again soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
教师点评
[得分]14分
优点:1.要点齐全,内容完整,结构合理;
2.文章回顾了在Alex的帮助下,自己由沮丧到重获信心的过程,使感谢水到渠成;
3.恰当地使用了with结构、倒装句等,为文章增色。
实战演练
假定你是李华,在美国做交换生时,寄宿家庭房东Alex给予你悉心照料和真诚鼓励,并经常辅导你功课。你现已回国,请给他写一封电子邮件,内容包括:
1.表示感谢;
2.回顾帮助;
3.邀请来中国游玩。
注意:1.词数80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Alex,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? I am writing to express my heartfelt gratitude for the love and care I received from your family when staying in America as an exchange student.
The three months I spent in your home was truly unforgettable because of your compassionate company and affectionate attendance.I will never forget the thoughtful regard you paid to my daily life, from diet to accommodation, making me feel at home and relieving my homesickness.Also, I will never forget the time you spent helping with my study, especially the language practice, which had my spoken English significantly improved.
Time passing, friendship remains.I will keep this precious experience in mind.On behalf of my family, I earnestly welcome you to visit China and I am expecting that day to meet you again.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
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