内容正文:
突破6:咨询信
语料储备
【句式建模】
1.篇首——开篇明义
①我是李华, 一名在新西兰学习的中国学生。我写信是想询问一些关于旅行的信息。
I am Li Hua, a Chinese student studying in New Zealand.I am writing to inquire about some information regarding/concerning travel.
②我想知道您是否可以给我提供一些有关学生暑假课程的信息。
I wonder whether/if you could provide me with some relevant information concerning the summer course for students.
2.篇中——询问细节
①由于一份有说服力的申请书十分重要,您能否指导我如何写作呢?
Since a convincing application is of vital importance, could you give me some direction on how to write it?
②另外,如果您能详细地分享您的志愿者经历,我将十分感激,这将使我更加熟悉此类工作。
What ’s more, I would appreciate it if you could share your volunteer experience with me in detail, which will help me become more familiar with this kind of work.
③第三,有什么我应该特别注意的吗?
Thirdly, is there anything I should pay special attention to?
3.篇尾——希望采纳
谢谢你, 如能及时回复我将不胜感激。
Thank you and your prompt reply will be highly appreciated.
【话题词汇】
常用词汇
话题示例
相关表达
(1)inquire/inquiry(咨询)
(2)assist/assistance(帮助)
(3)details(细节)
(4)arrange/arrangement
(安排)
(5)process(过程)
(6)guide/guidance(指
导)
(7)options available for(可用的选择)
(8)clarify sth. for sb.(澄清)
(9)be involved in(涉及)
(10)pay attention to(注意)
假定你是李华,你给已经是大学一年级学生的笔友Chris写信,请对方给你提一些建议。信的内容如下:1.询问Chris大学生活的状况;2.询问Chris当初根据什么选择的专业;3.自己希望选择的专业及原因。
(1)适应大学生活adapt to the university life
(2)你的宿舍是什么样的?What ’s your dormitory like?
(3)是什么吸引你选择现在的专业?What has drawn you to your present major?
(4)有潜力的就业前景the promising employment prospect
(5)热爱have a great passion for
假如你是李华,得知英国牛津大学面向海外高中生举办暑假夏令营。请你写一封英文信,咨询相关情况,内容包括:1.活动安排及费用;2.住宿情况;3.索取报名表及相关资料。
(1)关注活动安排concern about the activity arrangement
(2)活动的具体时间the specific time of the activity
(3)核心讲座和社交活动core lectures and social activities
(4)对住宿条件感到好奇be curious about the residential condition
(5)提供住宿provide accommodation for sb.
(6)给我寄来申请表send me the application forms
重温真题
(2021·全国甲卷)
假定你是李华。你校计划举办介绍中国传统文化的主题班会,并在英文网站展示。请你写一封邮件给外国朋友Chris,向他了解哪些中国传统文化更吸引外国友人。邮件内容包括:
1.阐明写信事由;
2.征求建议;
3.表示感谢。
注意:写作词数应为80个左右。
Dear Chris,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【审题与构思】
本文为一篇咨询信——向外国朋友询问意见。本文写作需把握以下几点:
1.要开门见山地阐明事由,同时包括学校活动和网站展示两个信息点;
2.可适当提及主题班会的内容和形式,以方便外国朋友给出具体建议。
内容结构方面,可将信件分为三段。
第一段
简述活动主题
第二段
可直接征求建议;或列举有代表性的传统文化主题,既可以是饮食、艺术,也可以是礼仪等方面。同时,可就英文网站展示的形式、语言风格请教对方
第三段
表示对Chris建议的重视,期待收到回信
【经典范文】
Dear Chris,
My school is planning to hold themed class meetings about traditional Chinese culture and will post some of the meetings on an English website.I am writing to ask you for some help.
Can you let me know which of the following options you and people around you would enjoy most? One is classical poetry of the Tang and Song dynasties, a precious cultural heritage of China, through which you may have an in-depth understanding about China ’s history.Also on the list is calligraphy, the essence of Chinese culture, which has developed into high-level art form apart from satisfying the need of daily writing.Other options under consideration include festivals and architecture, both of which can well represent Chinese culture.
Thank you for your time.Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【学生习作】
Dear Chris,
Haven ’t seen you for years.A theme class meeting about introducing traditional Chinese culture will be held by our school, which will be displayed on the English website.Taking charge of it, I ’m writing to ask you to do me a favor.
With a super selection is displayed, I wonder which traditional Chinese culture is more likely to stand out from others to interest your classmates and friends most.Frankly, it ’s difficult for you do a questionnaire, but every advice is precious for me.
I would appreciate it if you could give me a hand.Look forward to your early reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
教师点评
[得分]9分
优点:1.要点齐全,表达连贯;
2.语言恰当,较好地达到了交际的目的。
缺点:1.首段与主体段落相比,显得头重脚轻;
2.活动介绍略显单薄,没有具体展开,traditional Chinese culture这个话题非常大;
3.主题班会的表达应该是“A themed class meeting”。
【修改与升级】
Dear Chris,
Currently, our school is aiming to spread traditional Chinese culture by conducting a themed class meeting, which will be displayed on an English website.Therefore, I ’m writing to ask for a favor.
Given your familiarity with diverse cultures, I am eager for your suggestions on which topics of Chinese culture might captivate the interest of international friends.What about traditional festivals with their rich customs and stories, the ancient art of Chinese calligraphy, or the philosophical depth of Confucianism and Taoism?We are also considering including aspects of Chinese cuisine, traditional medicine, and martial arts, which are often a source of curiosity for many.
I ’d appreciate it if you could share your valuable advice.Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
教师点评
[得分]14分
优点:1.要点齐全,内容完整,语言恰当,很好地实现了交际目的;
2.文章结构合理,主次分明。首段开门见山,介绍活动。第二段列举了备选主题,并就网站语言风格向Chris请教;
3.详略得当、内容充实,并恰当地使用了定语从句、分词等高分表达,锦上添花。
实战演练
假定你是李华, 打算今年暑假去美国旅游。请你给Travel America国际旅行社写一封电子邮件进行咨询, 内容如下:
1.请其推荐合适的旅游路线;
2.请其告知相关的旅游费用。
注意:1.词数80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Sir or Madam,
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Sir/Madam,
I ’m planning to travel to the USA in the coming July.Therefore, I ’m writing to inquire about travel routes of your agency.
I intend to stay in America for about 10 days, during which I hope to have a look at some unique natural scenery and have a taste of local customs.So, could you please recommend some suitable travel routes? Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could provide me with an estimate of the travel costs associated with these routes, including accommodation, transportation, and any entrance fees to attractions.
A reply at your earliest convenience is highly appreciated.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
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